Reviews by Lunarchild21
Summary: Past Featured Story

Banner by the wonderful and talented DeeBelle1.

Some so called friends invite Bella out for her birthday, and send her to a BDSM club as a prank. What happens when the owner of the club sees her? Will he be able to set aside his Dom nature? Will she ever believe she deserves to have her needs met? Will he be able to set aside his wants and desires to meet those needs, or will she find her true desire is to submit to him? AH/M


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories I've Already read, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, Read
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 204571 Read Count: 334502
[Report This] Published: 22 Jul 2013 Updated: 31 Dec 2013
Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 16 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Awesome, now hopefully Leah will never try to go after Edward again. I'm glad that the judge was so considerate with Bella being pregnant & how appalled the judge & jury were when Bella told them about the backlash from the school after she reported it. Thank goodness Bella didn't have to talk about all that happened during the rape but at the same time everyone was able to see & hear it take place on the video; that can't have been easy to sit through. Thankfully Jacob & Paul have basically gotten life in prison. Charlie almost got off easy with 15 years but after the discovery of Harry's body it looks like he's going to get a hard sentence & Leah will be getting it too. ^_^

next chappy please. 



Author's Response:

We are so sorry for the lateness of this review reply.  I (Kasi) meant to do it the other day and honestly between the flu that has ravaged my home several times over the last month making another round, and trying to get ready for Christmas I forgot to do it.  Chapter 24 is almost ready to go to the beta.  Chapter 25 is not yet started, but we will do our very very best to make sure it is posted on time.  Most of the questions are answered in this chapter posting in less mere hours.  Sorry again for the delay in the review reply and teaser being sent out.  Nikky and I both wish you all the Happiest of Holiday Seasons for what or whom you celebrate.  There are only 2 chapters left to post and this story will be complete.  Kasi~

TEASER:  Seth has been in shock from finding all this out, but thankfully, Dr. Banner has been working with him through it all. The school has also been doing well at keeping the kids focused on what they are learning and not what’s going on in the news. Seth’s school life has really not had many distractions—regarding his personal life. Sue has been seeing him a lot more, but the relationship still seems to be strained for Seth.  Sue had gone along with Seth to one of his appointments with Dr. Banner. After talking briefly with Dr. Banner, he thought that Sue would benefit from seeing someone, too. Dr. Banner did say that he felt she should see another doctor so she had an unbiased person to speak with.

Seth has become very important to our whole family, so I set this up in order to help him. I know that he loves his mother, and so that he and his mom have a chance of building a healthy relationship, I wanted to do this for them both. He is still with us and Sue is living in an apartment close to where she now works here in Seattle.

Bella has finished college and is taking two years off before finishing the rest of her teaching degree. She will only have to do the required hands-on training as a teaching assistant. I’ve already looked into that, and she can easily fulfill her needed requirements at one of the local private schools.  

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 23 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Awwww that was so sweet!!!

HAAAAAAAAAAAAA a check endorsed by Minni Mouse how stupidly perfect that Renee never once examined the check. Also I can hardly believe that she had the never to not only go back to the hotel she was staying at with Elisare but to still be there when long enough to get served. How stupid. 

*sigh* that last part makes me think of what it's going to be like when my husband & I are able to have sex after the six week check up when I'm cleared for sex again after our baby is born. 



Author's Response:

Thank you all for reading and reviewing.  We love reading all of the nice things that you all have said.  Thank you again for everything.  Some of the biggest questions we had was these:
I thought Bella was having a girl? – Bella thought she was having a girl, but Edward thought boy.
Have Charlie and Leah been involved sexually? – No, Charlie is a real yuck, but he honestly thought Leah was his daughter.
How in the world did James get away with the things he did to Jake and Paul? – Money and having influential friends does a lot in any situation.  Besides this is fiction and there are not many if any people who did not want Paul and Jake to both get a tiny taste of the stuff they all to willingly dished out to others.
Is there an Epilogue after 25 or is 25 the epilogue? – The story is 25 chapters including the epilogue, so no more after 25.
Do you have more stories coming out since this is coming to a close? – We currently have a one-shot we did for Christmas that has an epilogue yet to post.  Then we have the one-shot we are writing for Moo AH, which we will post sometime in January.  We will be starting our new story that is sort of an ugly duckling Bella story, and for a change it will be in Bella’s POV and we’re excited by this prospect.  We also have an Escort story coming soon, and it will be fantastic.  We have another story we are doing for a fandom fights program, this time it is for domestic abuse—this will be a story written with jess2002 joining us.  We also will be posting a story to the facebook group page.  The two groups it will post at are: TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction and it will post at Secluded Wings.  Everyone’s welcome, we are an adult only, drama free environment. 
Is Phil going to end up with Sue? – No, but there is a bit of a story there yet to come for them both.
I think that wraps up the majority of the questions we have been asked.  I hope that you all like this teaser it is COMPLETELY unedited, because we haven’t even gotten 24 to the beta yet—speaking of which the last 2 chapters – 24 and 25, may have a few more mistakes than normal, since we are down 2 of our team because of the holidays.

Thanks again for reading and reviewing our story, Nikky and Kasi~

Teaser:  I hold Bella’s hand as we walk in with Adam into the doctor’s office.  We’ve both been worried about today, this is his first set of injections.  “You’re sure you’re okay to hold him?” Bella asks me again as she holds Adam close to her.

“Yes, I’m okay to be the mean parent today,” I say again with a little chuckle. “Beside you don’t like shots.  Since they scare you when you get them done on you, I know this is really going to be hard on you,” I say.  I remember that I had to hold Dean for his four month shots because Rose couldn’t even be in the same room when it was getting done, and Emmett was sick.

Bella frowns at me and I chuckle kissing her lips. “It will be fine, I promise.”

“But he’s only two months and still small.”

I pull her and our son to me and hold her close as I look down at my sleeping son.

“I know, believe me, I know.  Sweetheart if weren’t important for him to have these done we wouldn’t be here.”

Bella nods and lets out a sigh.

“I really can’t believe she’s breast feeding him in public,” a woman says loudly to the other woman sitting next to her. 

Both Bella and I turn to look at her and then to a young woman about Bella’s age who is breast feeding her baby.

“These teens today have no respect, whatsoever.  They act like whores, get pregnant and then plop their breasts out for everyone to see,” the woman sitting next to the woman who first spoke replies.

I look to Bella who’s looking at the young girl that is being spoken about so rudely.

“It’s girls like her that go out lead a guy on and then cry rape when it gets taken further than they wanted.  But just look at her showing all off all her goodies here in public.  Whatever do these stupid trampy girls thinks is going to happen?”

My mouth drops open at the woman’s cold words.

“Hold our son for a second,” Bella says passing AJ into my arms as she gets up.  At first I think she’s going to the restroom but instead she turns walking directly over to the two women.

“As you seem to make sure that your thoughts were spoken loud and clear enough to everyone that’s in the room, I thought I should make my thoughts clear.  First, neither of you have any right to judge that girl on anything she’s doing.  So what, she’s feeding her baby, it’s a baby who is clearly hungry and being cared for.  If you don’t like it, then don’t flipping look!”

My eyes open even wider hearing Bella use one of her clean swear words.  I start to get up to head over to her.

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed
Date: 03 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

This was a really nice story, I enjoyed reading this ^_^

Peaches by GeezerWench Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 10]
Summary:

New-kid-in-school Bella is on a delicate, yet highly dangerous, mission. A mission to break and seduce one of the members of the Cullen-Collective - those pretty, pale, (possibly extraterrestrial) rich kids at Forks High. Her target? The mysteriously silent, stone-faced, long-tall-and-lickable, Mr. Crankypants - AKA Jasper Hale. AU, language, adult situations. 1st Pl Best One Shot in the 2014 Non-Canon Awards!

Banner by loveinstar / kupat can be seen on Better in Texas Fiction


Categories: Twilight, Non-Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: Erotica, Humor, One-Shot, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 15331 Read Count: 1728
[Report This] Published: 29 Jul 2013 Updated: 29 Jul 2013
Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 15 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Peaches

Okay this was just down right fun to read. Also, the fruit molestation, never read that in a story, very creative. 



Author's Response:

Hello again! Nobody's ever molested fruit ... Somebody must have done that somewhere. LOL

 

Glad you enjoyed it. I had a good time writing this one. Then again, I think I'm hilarious. (sometimes)

Thank you for giving it a read and a review!

Summary:

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Banners by: Le Crepuscule

 

SUMMARY:  A twisted tale of a trio of people who all crave the other in many different ways and how they become an Eternal Trinity. AH/M


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Non-Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward/Garrett
Genre: Drama, Erotica, One-Shot, Romance, Slash
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 10128 Read Count: 8778
[Report This] Published: 23 Aug 2013 Updated: 23 Aug 2013
Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was a nice little story. A very enjoyable read ^_^

My Viking by she_viking Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 826]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Britain, 9th century:

Bella is captured by Vikings and brought with them to their homeland where her new fate awaits. Will she ever find happiness being a slave? Will it matter that she is given to Edvard, the chieftain of the village, to be his new bed thrall? 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Erotica, Historical, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 137880 Read Count: 272432
[Report This] Published: 14 Dec 2011 Updated: 26 Dec 2019
Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 20 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Wow, I really like this story. I hope you update again soon. Yeah I was figuring she would find out she was pregnant while her Viking was away. 

Hope he comes back soon before she can't hide it. 

Summary:

ttf

 

Edward Cullen and Bella Swan have been dating since her first year in his English class. Everything about their relationship has been hidden because of their age difference. 2 years later and they are still together while she is only 17. When Bella ends up pregnant Edward knows he has to confess about the baby being his but he knows he will lose everything when doing so. Can he really risk his job, his life and his girl?


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Happily Ever After
Series: Stories I've Already read
Chapters: 42 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 46648 Read Count: 36791
[Report This] Published: 06 Oct 2013 Updated: 21 Mar 2014
Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed
Date: 09 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

That was a lot smoother than I was expecting. Then again Charlie's in Chicago. 

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Date: 18 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Oh boy are they in for a surprise when they track the number & find Bella, her daughters & Edward. I wonder why Angela had the phone any ways. 

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed
Date: 17 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

That's harsh. 

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Date: 18 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

I know that feeling, the "oh crap I'm pregnant" feeling. It gets better though & you start to feel happy about it & go "wow, a baby." Especially if your significant other is there with you supporting you & sharing in the joy that the two of have made. 

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 29 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Well that was lovely and all but what is she going to do when her parents expect her home & she nowhere to be found. I wonder how well they can stay hidden till she's 18. 

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 03 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

I hope he goes in full on panick mode. That would be so hilarious, especially if Bella's water breaks in the middle of his freak out. ^_^

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed
Date: 11 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

I wonder how she's going to re-establish contact with her family. 

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed
Date: 28 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

Dun dun duuuuuuuuuuuuhhhhhhhh, & go to commercial. 

Well, they're there. Now what ?

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

Damn, that sucked. Too bad she's nursing, girl could use a drink & a pack of cigarettes. 

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed
Date: 13 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Insightful

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

Yes. 

Thats a pathetic story about her "sperm-donor". That's what I call mine; he was never there so that's his title. The man who is there, through thick or thin regardless of blood that is who the father is in my book. 

Summary:

A tattooed loner moves to a small town to appease his deceased mentor. He stumbles across a modest Isabella at church. He wants her but balks at the age difference, and there’s nothing respectable about him. Is she as proper as he thinks, or does she just hide things well?

 

smy

BANNER BY: DEEBELLE1


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Erotica, Friendship, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories I've read
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 9085 Read Count: 7390
[Report This] Published: 18 Oct 2013 Updated: 18 Oct 2013
Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Show Me Yours, and I’ll Show You Mine

Okay that was fun ^_^

Summary: Past Featured Story

mdd

Bella is a divorced English teacher, who doesn't know she has a vampire in her class.

"Please don't push me away, Bella. Isn't it my choice if I want to be with you? I'm not a child in the way I feel."

"I'm not the older woman who's going to spend a season educating a teenage boy so he can go off and remember me fondly. I'm looking for forever."

"How do you know I couldn't..."

" Because you're a boy, Edward, a beautiful, sweet, confused, boy! You've got your whole life ahead of you. This kind of thing doesn't work out."

fs


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories I've Already read
Chapters: 83 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 453800 Read Count: 80996
[Report This] Published: 18 Nov 2013 Updated: 30 May 2014
Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46 Tea for Two (Dozen)

Wow, lots happening in this chapter. I'm glad no one got good poisoning & that Sam got to invite her friend on a "very safe" outing. An't nothing bad happening around those vampires. She was safer there than at home. 

I wonder how Sam is going to react to her mom being a vampire someday? I wonder how Bella's going to bring it up? 

How many more chapters? Is Bella pregnant? Is Tyler going to be a problem or is he just mentioned & never sees Bella or Edward "Jr."?



Author's Response:

As to the number of chapters... I hate to say it, but this is only about halfway.  I mentioned before that I should have split it up into at least two stories.  All the other questions will be in the story, eventually, though sooner rather than later.  Thanks so much for reading and reviewing; I really do appreciate it.  

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Date: 13 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44 Motherhood

I hope you feel better soon & can get off your stomach. 

Im sad that Bella has to bid fair well to her Forks family, but that's the way things go. That's really awesome that Edward is going to be taking the girls to schools; he can keep an eye out for them & maybe find the stalker. Because this is a Twilight story I'm honestly wondering if the stalker is James Hunter. 



Author's Response:

I'm vertical!  Distancing herself from her family is giving her an idea how Edward has felt most of his life.  When I originally started the stalker storyline, it was an effort to show how inappropriate that kind of behavior was.  So many thought it was cute that Edward stalked Bella in the original.  If he were actually a human teenager, it might have been awkward.  But a man over a hundred years old, peeking in the window of a seventeen year-old girl?  No, not cute.  Part of me rages that so many want to forgive the sins of the Cullens, because they're "hot."  I'm not one of them.  In my writing, I have to give Edward a good reason for stalking her, and for his "slips."  Oops, sorry for the serious response.   

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Date: 25 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47 Friday the Thirteenth

Wow, that is some bad day. 

Im a bit worried how Sam will react when she hears all this. She's going yo hate her father (Mike) for even trying this. 

I wonder if Bella is going to walk away from this with full custody. 



Author's Response:

I've seen custody battles play out, and some parents are really good at keeping it from their kids.  But I imagine the kids aren't stupid, and they know if their parent is decent or not.

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Date: 05 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43 In-laws and Out-laws

Lovin' the sexy desractions but I wonder how her talk with Leah is going to go. She's going to smell Edward on Bella & she will probably smell him in her front lawn when he drops Bella off. 



Author's Response:

Heh, by now you know how accurate you were.  Thanks again for the review!

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Date: 22 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 First Date

That was a nice first date. I'm glad they didn't have sex right away, it would have made look & feel easy. 

I wonder what Edward's been doing all day. Imagine him having mixed feelings, glad Bella is doing okay in her life but upset because he wants to be the one she's with. 

Is she keeping the dog?

update please ^_^



Author's Response:

So many questions.  Don't worry, they all get answered in the story.  Thanks for the review, and the five rating.  

Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed
Date: 12 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52 Beauty and the Beast

That was an awesome performance. I'm glad Edward & Bella got to be in the play they did an amazing job but what happened to the everyone that they weren't there or ended up leaving?



Author's Response:

I always wondered what would happen if the stars of a play couldn't go on; who would fill in.  Sometimes there's an understudy for the key parts, but in a high school production, it would be a lot to ask of a student, to learn a whole part, but not plan on performing.  There are a few who do know all the parts, but they're usually behind the scenes, like Bella and Edward here.  The little choreographer could have played the beast, and Eric probably could have after helping Dylan practice his part, but none of them have vampire memory.  Thanks again for reviewing.

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Date: 17 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54 Aftermath

So that's who it was. Bella got a bad feeling from him the moment she met him. She was even careful not let Sam over if that guy was around or at least make sure she didn't spend the night. This is really going to kill the rest of the family when they find out who it was. They let that boy in to their home, they thought they could trust him & he stalked, terrorized, hurt & scared their daughter. I wonder what is going to happen next. 

Next chapter please. 



Author's Response:

You already know how the family responded, and the next chapter is up.  Bella didn't like Jace, but Cameron was behaving almost as bad, with his friend's influence.  It was Cameron who made Bella want to keep Sam home when he was home.  I've never had my mother's intuition warn me about someone.  But I've heard it plenty of times when the kids were too quiet.  Thanks again for reading, reviewing, and giving it such a strong rating.  

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Date: 06 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50 Reckoning

Damn that was a lot of issues worked through in just one afternoon. Yeah they really never should have gotten together in the first place. It's too bad they wasted so many years on each other (other than the year they made Sam. Sam was not a mistake). It sounds like Mike finally understands that there is no second chance at their marriage & if there was it would be nothing but a battle ground full of fighting & misery on both their parts; that is no place to raise a child, even one as old as Sam. At her age she should see a healthy relationship so she knows what to strive for in her own relationships. 

This should help Edward be more secure. 

Next chapter please. 



Author's Response:

Next chapter's up.  I have to think that Bella never really told Mike all of her issues with his mother, career, and goals.  As far as he was concerned, he was the one who decided to end the marriage, and she was the one waiting for reconciliation.  In his mind, she's just been waiting for him to get his act together.  She finally got to tell him, that it wasn't just the affairs making it wrong for them to be together.  She never would have said all that while they were married.  I just figured her doormat personality would have carried over to her marriage.  It took a nasty divorce to teach her to stand up for herself.  

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Date: 20 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39 Dinner

Well that was fun. Alice, always a trip. Well she finally got around to telling Mike & it was just what Bella thought it would be. He spoke loud, accused her of putting Sam on danger, put her down & called her disappointing, & then he even tried to get her back. She handled it well & even got to slap him finally; he pushed too far & Bella reached her end. Denise, ha that was funny when she called during sex. I can believe Bella actually answered the phone though in her defense she wasn't thinking & was on autopilot. Hilarious when Edward got on the phone & told her what she was interrupting. 

Next chapter please. 



Author's Response:

I know of divorced couples who have had issues just like those between Bella and Mike -- sadly.  When kids are involved, it can get even messier.  If not for Sam, Bella could put Mike completely out of her life and mind.  It's a tough line to walk, because the one she's fighting with is the other parent to Sam.  

Denise is fun.  She's usually the one catching Bella off guard, so it was fun to see Edward play her game and win.  Being a mind reader is almost cheating.  Thanks again for the kind reviews and the sweet rating.   

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Date: 09 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 Stormy Weather

Damn. So close, oh so very close. They almost had sex!!!!!! :'(

Well at least there's the promise of a date. 



Author's Response:

Soon.  Once those barriers are out of the way, these two just can't seem to stay apart.  

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Date: 20 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 Ladies Night

Good to know & so long as this story finishes I like ya. I hate it when I'm reading a story & it's good & I sitting on the edge of my seat I'm so into it, then it just stops. The writer gets stuck, forgets to update, doesn't feel the story anymore or just doesn't come back for what ever reason. I hate those. So please don't stop till the story is over I really really like this. 

 

Wow so Edward got caught sneaking in & out if Bella's house. Well it is Seattle, if it was Forks or some other small town with a lot of greenery every where he would have been fine. Also, HA that was awesome a few chapters ago when then were making out in the restroom all hot & heavy. Question: if they had not gotten interrupted would Edward have taken it further than just a making out & heavy petting? This is a NC-17 story & I'm wondering if there will be lemony goodness to come. I like how this Edward is persueing her & knocking her off her guard when ever possible. So awesome, so glad this Edward is not a prude. 

Looking forward to the next chapter ^_^



Author's Response:

Thanks for the encouraging review.  I was beginning to think this site only supported one or two line reviews.  This story is finished, and it's loooong.  If I quit posting, you know I died, my computer died, or something almost as serious happened -- so I hope I finish even more than you do!

Since this story is so long, it does take a while for it to heat up.  It earns it's rating -- ffnet thought it was too naughty for their site, and kicked it out, even after it earned 1500 reviews.  As to the restroom scene, I like to think if they hadn't been interrupted, Bella would have stopped him.  She's too much the responsible adult not to.  

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Date: 24 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 Snow Globe

Edward should get her through the door & sex her to the point she can't think of anything or even remember her own name. 

Looking forward to the next update. 



Author's Response:

Bella carries pepper spray.  I'll have the next chapter for Tuesday.  Thanks for the five rating.  

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Date: 26 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 Almost Falling

If Bella hadn't had to pick her daughter the phone never would have rang & they might of had sex. This Edward I'm noticing is a lot more ballzy & willing to chase & lay claim to what he wants. 

So I guess what's his face self-obsessed male teacher is responsible for Edward's car. 

I'm starting to wonder if that older brother that gives Sam the creeps is going to be a big part of the story. I hope not, that's kinda scary to think about, especially considering I have a daughter & I worry about her dealing with stuff like that when she's older & not always going to be in my line of sight. 

Really enjoying this story & looking forward to the next updates. 



Author's Response:

Edward has had 25 years to lament what he lost.  He's not willing to be passive where she's concerned.  He's still got all his secrets to keep, so it's hard for him to get through to her.  She's probably not going to be so easy to convince -- not as long as she thinks he's her 17 year-old student.  

You've got some good ideas on where this story is leading; I will get there.  

I worry about my daughter all the time; she's 17.  Fortunately she's not dating yet; she's got a lot of "amigos," but the two boyfriends she's had weren't serious.  But next year there's college...

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Date: 30 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 Memories

Yay, they danced.

Another date huh? Well with the kids around it will probably be more relaxed but I'm thinking something is going to go wrong again. Say, where are the other Cullens? I'm a bit amazed that Aluce isn't interfering but then again this is all from Bella's POV so she might be & as a reader I just don't know it. On that note, will there be a chapter or a section done in Edward's POV? Just curious. 

Next chapter please. 



Author's Response:

I do get into what the family's up to later.  As far as the Edward POV, I did write a bit of one, but never finished it.  I might add it at the end.  Thanks again for reading!

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Date: 03 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 Sistah

Oooooo I like how this plot has thickened. 

Poor Leah, now that I've heard her side I feel really bad for her. As for the whole breast feeding thing it doesn't matter if it's not all it's cracked up to be or not; for a woman who wants to nurse & can't? It's this unbelievable feeling of failure. I know, been there done that, I was unable to nurse my first born & it wasn't from lack of trying, she didn't like it. She liked the milk but my nipples were too big for mouth & my flow was too fast. I was so upset I had to pump that I dried up :(. 

Anywho, I wonder what Bella is going to do with this information. Hey next chapter is the "double date" huh? That should be fun. 

Oh question: so since Edward is his own guardian & there for legally able to take responsibility got his own actions it's okay to see him even though he's a student? I'm just asking cause I didnt think it would matter, he's still a student. At my high school such a relationship was not allowed even if the student was 18 they were still a student & there for off limits. 

Next chapter please. 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the reivew and the nice rating.  As a mom myself, I know that breastfeeding is a mixed bag of crazy challenges.  My son went for two months, before the Dr. decided my diet was giving him constipation and made me quit -- it wasn't the problem.  My daughter went seven months out of the planned year of nursing, then quit -- just decided she didn't want to anymore.  It feels like rejection and failure

As far as the emancipated minor legality... when I wrote this, seventeen was the legal age for Washington State.  The law says it's okay for them to be together.  But her job would definitely be at risk; I'm sure there's bound to be something in her contract that fobids anything with a student, no matter what the law says.  

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Date: 05 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 Second Chances

*sigh* Bella almost got laid, so close. I bet Eric would have been a great lover, pribably would have woken up Sam. Hehe

So Bella's starting to get it. That the Edward Cullen in her classroom, who's been after her & seducing her from the start of the semester is the same Edward Cullen who tried to get her attention in high school 25 years ago. That's a huge thing to realize. I wonder how she's going to react to him when she sees him again the class. "Until it is time for us," that is so sweet. He was trying to tell her back then that he was willing to wait for her & was going to wait, no matter how long that took. 

Please tell me that there will be mind-blowing, screaming, bed shacking Edward/Bella sex in this story?

Next chapter please. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the great rating and the detailed review.  

She's finally starting to get it.  I think somewhere in canon, Edward promised Bella that he would love her, even when she was old.  In this story, he is proving that, even though he never told her.  It's easy to love someone when they're young, fresh, and cute, but there are things that make it more problematic as you get older.  Some previous readers thought it was "gross" that she looked old, and he still looked young.  But I think it's more a sign of real love, rather than just physical attraction.  

And as to that physical attraction... when I originaly posted this story on ffnet, it was rated T for the first twenty-two chapters.  Then I changed it to M.  It was removed because a group of critics thought by chapter 26 it was too mature for the M rating -- and the site admin agreed.  Some people believe any sex is smut, and all smut must be NC-17.  I don't agree, but since it's not my site and I don't get to decide... I'm here now.  It's a little disconcerting that once something is given this rating, sex is expected.  This story takes a lot of time to warm up, but it does earn the rating.  

You can bet your bippy Eric would have been great.  I sure wish there was a PM feature here, so I could share my choice to play Eric, without ruining it for those who would rather use their imaginations.  

Next chapter should post on Friday, Fatal SQL error or not! 

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Date: 11 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 Moonlight

"Come home with me" ohhhhhhhh so seductive. I'm sure it won't but I so want them to have sex soon. 

Ahhh, the battle of the exes. My biological father didn't like the way my mom was raising me either. I don't think he had a problem how she raised my brothers but with me it seemed liked he always he a complaint. What ever, my mom paid him no mind & it's not like he was ever there any ways. He wasn't even in the same state as us & he rarely called or visited. Hope Mike doesn't completely screw up his relationship with Sam like my father did with me. 

Really enjoied this chapter looking forward to the next. 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the review, and the enthusiastic response to the non-romantic parts of the story.  It's important to me to keep it real with regards to Mike and Sam.  Dads and their little girls... I could write a whole book on that alone.  This is a whole side story on its own, and there's a lot of ups and downs ahead with Mike's connection here.  

This Edward still has to take baby steps where she's concerned, no matter how much they want to rush things.  Look up Anticipation, and you'll see these two in the next couple chapters.  Thanks so much for the review.s; it makes me smile til my face hurts to know new readers are enjoying what I've written.  

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Date: 12 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 One Perfect Night

Dry humping, very juvinial. Hope there is sex soon but that was a still a good prequel. So that's why she was divorced 4 years before Edward showed up, he only check up on her every so often. 

Hey question: are you going to do a vampire pregnancy in your story or no?

Next chappy please. 



Author's Response:

It's pretty obvious there's sex ahead.  But as to other spoilers... if there was a PM feature here, I'd share.  But as it is... there's still a lot of story to tell.  

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Date: 16 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 Rise and Shine

Poor Denise, didn't see that one coming. 

Wow, that was a fun morning. *sigh* I wonder what leads them to finally have sex? I know it's going to happen but at the rate of things it's as if it won't happen till the end of the story, sorry to wine. 



Author's Response:

Poor Denise...seeing this makes me smile.  Not because I've got it in for Denise, but because she's an OC, and she connects with readers.  One of the things I pride myself on, is being able to fold in original characters with canon, and they fit.  

When they have sex, I'm sure you'll be pleased with the timing.  Sorry it does seem to take its sweet time, but I have a lot planned for these two.  A little whine will go well with the cheese of chapter 25.  

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Date: 18 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 Date Night

That was awesome, though I was expecting a bj not a hand job. So cool, that was funny when he looked down, cursed Alice & then reached for the wipes. Oh the joy that could have been had if Bella had let Edward reciprocate. Maybe he would have laid her against the car, pulled one (or both) of Bella's legs over his shoulder(s) & eaten her out. I think there would of sex after that. Maybe.

I really wonder where this story is going to go. I have ideas of where it could go but I don't where you're taking it. 

Next chappy please. 



Author's Response:

It's a good thing you weren't reading this story when it was first posted.  I did my best to have an update every week, and this time of year I was unavailable.  You can relax and know it's finished, and it got exactly where it needed to go.  I guess you might consider chapter 26 a Christmas present--that's all I'm saying.  

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Date: 23 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 Firsts

YEEEESSSSSSS THEY HAD THE SSEEEXXXXX!!!!!!!!!!!!! Finally, I was getting really antsy. That was sooooo gggoooooooodddd. They took a bath, had amazing sex, washed each other in the shower, then had a 69 to completion before Bella fell asleep in Edward's arms. 

Please do that again soon. 



Author's Response:

This is the one I was waiting for.  I just knew you'd go crazy when this happened.  This Edward may be over a hundred years old, but he's got the libido of a seventeen year-old boy.  Deadly combination.  

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Date: 24 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 Sunday Schooling

Oh so much fun to be had waking up next to your lover for the first time. Such fond memories this brought back for me.

That was a lot of fun to read, thank you!

I wonder how Bella is going to explain her relationship with Edward to Sam. I'm sure Sam will be happy for Bella when she's told but I don't know how she'll react when she finds out Edward's age. That could be a touchie subject. Hope it goes well. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for your positive responses.  I think I mentioned the first time I posted this, that I incorporated some of R. Pats. goofyness into the story.  I've seen photos of him, acting crazy with his friends, and I wanted a little of that in the story.  This Edward has a bit more humor than canon.  I figured since he doesn't have to be a parent/protector figure to Bella, he could relax and have fun with her.  Since he doesn't have to worry about a honeymoon pregnancy, and  she won't let him worry about hurting her, they can have some fun together.  

Sam is a good kid, and I used my daughter as a model in some ways.  I ran some of the Sam scenes by her, and she let me know if I was off.  Some of her responses made it into the story.       

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Date: 27 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 Reality Check

Poor Bella spent most of the day worrying about life without Edward. Plus, while it's nice to know you look good & are attractive, the Jace was doing it was just creepy & uncomfortable. I loved that game they were playing when Edward first got there. Too bad it didn't go anywhere but that was a smart move to get work done. No condom no fun. 

I liked that he picked out what she wore for bed. Also with his help Bella got all her work done fast. 

So awesome that he went out & got condoms some time during the night so they could have sex before school. 

I wonder how Sam will react when she meets Edward. After all he's young & a student at her mon's school. That is going to be interesting. 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your enthusiastic comments.  This Edward needs to get over his tendency to pull away when he's unsure of himself.  Letting himself become fully involved is one of his issues, and it goes counter to his practices up to this point.  I've tried to show that this Bella isn't a scary old crone, despite her age.  She's still cute and takes good care of herself, and Jace and Cameron noticed.  

The lingere is a change in this Bella.  I like that there's this sexy woman behind the buttoned-up mom image everyone sees.  The condoms are my response to the canon, where no one, including the good doctor, bothered to find out if they were fertile before the ill-fated honeymoon.  

Up next:  Edward meets Sam.  

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Date: 29 Dec 2013 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 Distractions

Almost tune to meet. I hope Sam & Edward can find a happy medium & Bella/Edward can figure out how to explain their relationship. 



Author's Response:

Sam's a good kid.  

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Date: 02 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31 Mortal Concerns

You got the HBO series or the books "A Song of Ice and Fire"? I haven't read the books but I love the HBO series. Enjoy. 

That stalker thing is really creepy. Not only is it a young girl but it's lingerie in her size. That is just incredibly creepy. I can't imagine what would feel like & I hope I never do. I know there is only so much a parent can do to protect their child but when it comes to stalking it's particularly tricky. I've seen too many shows on stalking, it doesn't always end well. 

Im really glad that Sam is okay with Edward, I was worried how it might go. Thankfully she likes him so much she steals him to help with her homework. 



Author's Response:

I'm reading the books.  I watched the first season, but then we cancelled cable and I was left wondering about what happened.  

The stalker was hard to write.  In some ways it was my response to how the fans thought it was so cute that Edward stalked Bella in the books.  I didn't think it was cute.  It could be because I had a boyfriend who was possessive and controlling, then turned violent.  When he was my ex, he stalked me.  It wasn't cute.  I wonder, if Edward looked even half his actual age, would the fans have been charmed with his behavior?  

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Date: 16 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37 Engaged

Well that was fun with Eric. I feel bad for the guy, in his mind he's being out shown by a kid; which he's but Eric doesn't know that Edward is over hundred years old & doesn't need to. I'm glad Sam is so okay with Bella & Edward & excited that they are getting married. I hope it goes over well with Denise. 

Next chappy please



Author's Response:

Next chapter is up.  They've still got a few things to sort out, and the Cullens are coming.  Thanks so much for being so faithful.  

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Date: 30 Jan 2014 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42 Fitting In

Jasper is quite the flirt in this story. Is that his nature, is he just having fun with her or is something up?

Word is quickly spreading about Bella's up coming nuptials. The stares & gossips that will be had when the rest of the staff & the student body find out. 



Author's Response:

I don't see Jasper as flirting, so much as teasing her and trying to push her buttons.  He's had an extra 25 years to work on his control, but he's still dangerous--and wants her to know it.  I figure he's also picking up Edward's emotions concerning Bella, so he's getting a lot of love, lust, and hunger where she's concerned.  

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Date: 18 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45 School Daze

So that was fun. I'm glad the parents weren't calling to have Bella fired. 

Ha! Sam has a crush on Emmett. 

I wonder what had Sam screaming at the door. 



Author's Response:

I should have squashed that cliffhanger.  I think girls sort of gravitate to guys who remind them of the men who raised them.  Emmett has Charlie's dark hair, and Mike's athletic build.  Throw in enthusiasm and a sense of humor, and he's probably irresistable to her.    

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Date: 28 Feb 2014 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48 Better Safe

Informative. I'm a bit disapointed that Bella isn't pregnant but that might still come up later; I don't know what you're planning or how many chapters this story has. 

I love the Edward/Sam interactions, it makes a mother's heart melt when she sees the loves of her life getting along & have fun. I love watching my husband play with our girls. 

I hope they find the stocker, I had a thought that maybe he might be the same one that Bella set up her alarms for. Was he looking for Sam or her friend? It was a good thing that Sam was at Mike's that weekend. 

Next chapter please



Author's Response:

I've still got a lot of chapters ahead ... who knows what could happen.  I like that Sam and Edward get along.  Sam is special, and she genuinely cares about her parents being happy.  That could be because she's an only child, and never lacked for attention.  She can tell Edward makes her mom happy.  It's also good that Edward hasn't tried to take her dad's place, or become her disciplinarian.  I'm sure being able to read her mind sometimes helps a lot.  

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Date: 03 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49 One Last Try

Ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo, what's going to happen next?

Next chapter please.  



Author's Response:

Thanks again.  Next chapter is up!  

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Date: 13 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53 Reality

Oh god, next chapter please!!!!!



Author's Response:

Next chapter is up.  I really want to speed up my posting and get through this faster.  But real life is slowing me down.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

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Date: 23 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56 Sympathy for the Devil

Wow, so that was a lot. I completely forgot to consider Jase's mother. Everyone has a mother & his loves him unconditionally the way a mother should. I'm sorry for how Jace grew up & I'm sorry he & his mother have been though such pain but, I hope . . . . . I don't know what I hope. I hope that his mother does give Leah a call. She's been though so much she should have someone who can protect her. I'm glad that Esme is going to redo Kaylee's room; her room should be her sanctuary not her torment. A remodel of her room should hopefully help. 



Author's Response:

I still don't know why I went to the trouble of giving Jace a backstory and a loving mother.  Maybe it's because so many would have wanted him strung up for what he did.  Those same folks would have turned a blind eye to Edward's "slips," when he was a murderer.  I don't think anyone is all bad or all good, and if we can sympathize and understand Edward's motivations for killing, we sort of owe it to Jace to do the same.  Maybe it's a fairy-tale world, where there's an explanation for everything, and we can know the reasons why.  Nothing is ever really that simple.  A good editor would probably have cut it.  Thanks again for reading and commenting.  

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Date: 27 Mar 2014 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57 Checklist

Heeheeheeheeheeheeheeheeheeheehee

thats funny. I've seen cake penises with jiz icing between a pair cake tits but I've never seen a penis cake standing at attention. 

Im a bit disappointed that Sam didn't get to take Lupin with her to grandma Newton's house. I was looking forward to hearing about the chaos later. Oh well. 

I hope the bachelorette party goes well. I didn't have one. Didn't want one, plus I didn't trust the person who wanted to throw it any ways. 



Author's Response:

I've never seen a penis cake standing at attention, but I could imagine making one--I love to create interesting cakes.  What else would a cougar/art teacher create?  

Yeah, I figured Grandmother would find a way to ditch the dog.  It wouldn't do to have puppy poo on her rugs, or have it chew up one of her shoes.  

I didn't ask for a bachelorette party, but got one anyway.  It's not all that big a deal, but I'd imagine if someone knew how to plan, it could be more interesting.  Thanks again for the read and review!

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Date: 05 Apr 2014 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58 Bachelorette

Emmett=masterful. 

That was a lot of fun. At first I was wondering if it was Edward. 



Author's Response:

You must be an Emmett fan.  Funny, but I think he was one of the least favorite vamps, until the actor did a few other movies, and now he's become a fave.  I'm still trying to figure out why so many fans like the wolf Paul.      

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Date: 16 Apr 2014 Title: Chapter 63: Chapter 63 Wedding

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!

Im glad to know this isn't over yet. 

I loved the wedding & the garter toss was hilarious. I would love to see this happen but I would not want this to happen to me. 

Next chapter please. 



Author's Response:

I did the garter toss, and I just don't understand why.  It's not as if they're used to hold up the stockings anymore.  I could just picture how much Bella hates to be the center of attention, and that silly tradition.  

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Date: 17 Apr 2014 Title: Chapter 64: Chapter 64 Ill Received

I was such a lovely wedding. I'm glad no one else knows what's going on. Where's Edward? What happened in that room. I'm glad that Jacob & Billy hadn't left yet. Poor Billy is probably really itching to be able to change right about now. It's gonna be funny if he imprints on Sam. 



Author's Response:

One thing the vamps are good at, is hiding in plain sight.  If anyone sees that giant wolf on the deck, it could be a bit tricky to explain.  

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Date: 19 Apr 2014 Title: Chapter 65: Chapter 65 Time Limit

Well that was fun. We can get back to the fun now & wow so Edward has decided he does want to try for children or a child. I'm glad. See what happens. 



Author's Response:

In canon, so much of what Edward wanted was shoved aside for what Bella wanted.  He never allowed himself to ask for more than what she was willing to give.  Here, she cares about what he wants, and even if he doesn't think it's possible, she wants to at least try.  

Thanks for the review and the coffee!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Summary: Almost over the hill--in her own mind--Bella wants a family, so she chooses in vitro. Tainted by playboy father, Charlie's need to date barely legal girls, causes her to push away a younger Edward. AH/Rated M

Edited for content on FFN. Unedited will post on TWCS and FicPad.

Banner by: Beffers87

Birthday story for: Bobbi Wordsmith aka: AWayWithWords


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Friendship, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My favs past present and future
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 20562 Read Count: 56092
[Report This] Published: 03 Apr 2014 Updated: 13 Apr 2014
Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 May 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

This was a nice story. I like how Edward kept trying even after she said she was not interested & pregnant. It was sweet how he kept trying without seeming creepy or stalkerish. I also love how he told Charlie off & that he hit him for being a selfish self-right-prick. 

I liked how this was written, it flowed very well & made me want to read the whole thing rather than skip around. 

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Newly divorced Bella goes to Vegas for a work conference. On the advice of friends she lets her hair down and goes out for a night on the town. When she comes back from Vegas, she finds out that what happens in Vegas, doesn't always stay there.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Friendship, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories I've Already read, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 143753 Read Count: 135034
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2016 Updated: 04 Jun 2016
Reviewer: Lunarchild21 Signed
Date: 04 Feb 2017 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

I really do enjoy reading your stories. This one like most of your others was entertaining & sweet. Please keep writing. <3