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Alice has had a vision that the new girl at Forks High will change the Cullens' lives.  But Rosalie's sharp eyes catch evidence of abuse on Bella Swan, and she vows to find out just what's going on with the quiet girl.  Eventually she and Edward hatch a plan to keep Bella safe, which might endanger the close-knit ties of the Cullen family.  Possessive Edward and Big Sister Rosalie. Banner by the amazing JavaMasta!


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: I Whitlock's read , Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, My Favorite Stories, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 49 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 319577 Read Count: 124870
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2011 Updated: 02 Apr 2014
Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 12 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

i really hope charlie doesn't do anything stupid. great job!

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 11 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

why do i get the feeling this won't stop charlie from doing something crazy? great job!

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Banner by the talented: SoapyMayhem FanFiction

Bella at age thirteen is left with nothing more than a fake ID, and two year old twin half siblings to care for.  She makes due knowing it is up to her to give them a good life and education, she was never given.  Working as a cleaner at the university five years later, she meets Professor Masen a man who believes all women are out to hurt, or destroy him.  Can an uneducated Bella teach him something?  What will happen when Bella is another woman who has hid the truth from him? 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Mystery, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, To Read , Misstoria's Stories to Read, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read & Enjoyed, Read
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 325411 Read Count: 263191
[Report This] Published: 12 Jan 2012 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Balls and Bitches

Is it Sue?! I can't wait for Edward to give her the business! great job with the chapter.

 



Author's Response:

Well we knew that you all would have some sharp feelings about the behavior of Alice, Rose, and Siobhan.  We were excited to see that a few of you mentioned the seemingly difference in Esme and her attitude.   Have faith in Jasper and Emmett, they will be having words with their wives.  As for Siobhan, I think she has worn out her welcome around the table completely.  So what did you all think of Charlotte?  She will be important in the coming story.  A lot of you are guessing that the witch in the next chapter will be Sue Swan, but I assure you that it is not her.  There is a lot of super exciting chapters coming soon.  We want to tell you all just how much you reading and reviewing our story means to us.  This is the first story for either of us, that is getting this kind of attention.  It is completely amazing to us that we are averaging over 100 reviews per chapter.  We want to be very clear in saying that each and every review you have left for us mean so very much to us.  Thank you for taking time to not only read our story, but to also leave us your thoughts.   not Sue not yet anyway!!!  Thanks, Nikky (&Kasi)

Teaser for Chapter 14: Subject to changes, during Beta Process.

She looks perplexed. “Edward, aren’t you expected to be at the college; I mean, I thought you have classes today?”

I chuckle.  “Yes I do, but I got this morning off.  I am using some of my vacation time.  I would like to take you to see Charlotte today.  She is the one that sells the girl stuff; remember I told you I would take you to see her?  She was sitting on my right at the ball.”  Bella nods her head at my explanation, but I see she is biting her lip again.  I know she is worried, so I do my best to reassure her.  “I will be there with you. I am not going to leave you, I promise.”  Bella nods again as we begin walking to the bus stop.  We take the bus and arrive at Charlotte’s store a little after half past nine.  Charlotte had texted me earlier and asked that we enter through the back entrance.  She was going to leave it open for us, as she had the front locked up so that no unexpected customers arrived.  I hold onto Bella’s hand as we walk thought the door. 

Charlotte sees us as soon as we enter; she smiles and makes her way toward us.  “Edward, Isabella; come on in.  I already have a bunch of stuff laid out for you.  I have done this for a few years, so I am pretty good at guessing sizes.”  I rub Bella’s hand and smile at Charlotte’s obvious excitement.  “Isabella, I am so sorry, sometimes my mouth runs away with me.  It’s very nice to meet you.  My name is Charlotte, but you can call me Chas; all my friends do.”  Charlotte gives Bella a big smile, but keeps her distance from Bella for now.

“It is nice to meet you. I am Isabella, but you can call me Bella.”  I squeeze Bella’s hand, trying hard not to jump for joy.  This is the first time that she has openly asked someone, apart from me, to call her Bella. 

Charlotte smiles at her.  “Well, I was thinking that this stuff would be perfect for you.”  I look at the collection of bras and panties that Charlotte has picked out.  They are mostly plain white ones.  There are some with lace, but none them are overly sexy like the stuff that was in Alice’s bag.  I am both relieved and somewhat disappointed about that.  “Come with me, Bella, so I can take your measurements to ensure that we will have the correct size.” 

Bella looks at me and I nod my head at her.  “Bella…” I clasp her face between my hands.  “Baby, I’ll be right here. I will not leave you.” Bella whispers a low thank you, and strokes my hand before giving it a squeeze at the end.  I watch as she walks away with Charlotte.  

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 12 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: A Cowboy, a Princess, and a Butterfly

LMAO poor Edward. That shit is just too funny. Great job!

 



Author's Response:

Many of you are wondering what he deal is with Edward and the talk of his lost son.  In chapter 5 there was a dream sequence that told a lot of what happened that fateful day when Edward found out Tanya was using him, to get his money.  She was not pregnant like she had told him, the problem is the night before they had unprotected sex, and she actually did give birth to his child.  Esme found out about it, but hid it from Edward trying to protect him.  Tanya and Edward junior later died in a fire.  There will be more to come on that, but it seems to be getting a lot of questions.  Now for Alice...She is clearly a not nice person in this fic, and to some she will partially redeem herself, but for some there is no redemption, her words and actions are far worse than any you have seen from Edward.  Siobhan is for the majority out of the picture, so she is of no major worry.  Uncle Harry is a very mean man, and there will be more to come about him.  We love our Aro he is one of the kindest and most loving men and we are proud to have written an Aro who is not only out of character, but also so very loveable.   Bella has come to trust Edward, and it shows.  A lot of you keep asking if she will sleep in the step-moms room, or if Edward will talk her into it...the answer to that is no.  The next few chapters have so much going on in them, I am sure that you will all have favorite parts.  We love hearing what your thoughts are so keep asking questions and we will answer what we can without ruining the plot. 

Thanks for Reading and Reviewing
Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 15 teaser...Subject to changes during BETA process...

It’s Saturday, and we are into the countdown to Thanksgiving.   Alice has called me numerous times, and left well over a hundred text messages and voice mails.  I have dealt with each and every one of them the same way. Without reading or listen to them, I just hit delete.

Esme found out during one of my talks with Carlisle about the stunt Alice pulled.  At first, I thought she would take Alice’s side, but was stunned when I found her on the phone giving Alice a piece of her mind.  Jasper has also said that he and Alice are talking, but not back to normal yet.  Jasper is really pissed at her.

Yesterday, Esme called me, and to my surprise, she asked me if I would still come over for Thanksgiving dinner.  She told me that she would understand if I did not want to come.  She said it was my choice, and she would still make my dinner if I wanted and bring it over to my home or Midnight Sun.  Not once did she try and force my hand.  After much thought, I said that I will be there.  I do enjoy spending time with the guys, even more so in the last few weeks.  I know they all were hoping for me to come, and I know I owe them a lot. I told them that I will join them and stay, as long as Alice and Rose keep their mouths shut. Esme, Carlisle, Emmett, and Jasper, have promised to keep them under control.

Things with Bella are still going really well. Too well, in fact.  She…fuck! Every time I see her, I want to hold her close.  It’s no longer just me having dirty thoughts about her, a lot of dirty thoughts about her, which I still am, but I also want to hug her, lie with her, make love to her, and that is really fucking scary for me, for lots of reasons.  I am worried, because I wonder if she could even cope in that type of a relationship. I have been a pussy about it, because I haven’t had the guts to ask Peter or Jasper what they think.  I know it’s because I am afraid they may say she couldn’t handle it, or I am not good enough for her.  I already know that I am not, but one can always hope for his own redemption.

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 18 Feb 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Making Amends

I really like this story. that being said I would be pissed if someone treated me like that, and feel she forgave him way to easily. I can't wait or Edward to make amends.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.
This story is not always easy to write, just as parts are not easy to read.  Edward does not know yet of course, but it is very true Isabella cannot read nor write.  She has never attended school.  Bella was never allowed to be a child, or experience a normal childhood, in any way, shape, or form.  Bella has nothing more than a glorified slave all of her life since her birth mother passed away.  We don’t want to give away more of her story than that, but feel free to keep asking your questions and we will continue to answer what we can.  Edward does have a long road yet to travel, and part of that is to get him-self healed enough so that he can love someone and trust someone.  Edward’s view is very tainted and with great reason, there is much more to learn about him.  He will continue to improve, but he will have his moments.  Keep in mind as of right now, Isabella has not lied to him, but she has withheld very important information.  She doesn’t correct him on her age, because she fears his reaction. 
Kasi (&Nikky)

Here is the teaser for chapter 7…Subject to change during BETA process as always.

I have written out everything, when I look at my watch seeing that it’s ten after ten.  I know that being on time is something she is normally good at.  I rub my face, fuck maybe she changed her mind about the job, or she just lied to me just like every other fucking woman I’ve ever known.

Or maybe you scared her, and she said yes to the job thinking that you wouldn’t let her leave the room unless she agreed.

Knock. Knock.

Thank god, she is here finally.  “Come in Isabella,” I say to the closed door.  The door opens, but it’s Taylor who is standing there. 

I frown at him.  “Hello, I see you beat me here,” he says smiling at me.  I wave at him to come in, but I am still frowning.  “I take it I am not who you’re waiting for?”

I shake my head.  “I was expecting someone, but I don’t think she is coming.”  I sigh, and throw my pen on the desk.

“Small pale girl, brown hair, looks a little lost?” I look at him, and nod my head.  “I think she is standing outside,” he says motioning his thumb toward the door.  I move toward the door, and Taylor stops me.  “Here, take this; it’s really coming down out there.”  He offers me his umbrella and chuckles as I take it and head out of the office.

I head to the front, and see Isabella standing outside in front of the window in the rain.  I open the door.  “Isabella,” I call to her standing in the door way, she turns and looks at me. I wave at her to come in.  “How long have you been standing outside, and why didn’t you come in the restaurant when you got here?”

She walks up to me, clearly worrying I am mad by the look on her face.  “I thought that…you said to meet you outside.  Didn’t you, never mind, I am so sorry…sorry.”

Looking at her, I see that she’s drenched to the skin.  The jacket she is wearing is paper thin, and clearly very old and well used.  I know that she been outside a long time.  I close my eyes, pinching the bridge of my nose.  “I am sorry I meant for you to come in, if I was not out here.”  She walks through the door; I know that she needs to get out of her wet clothes.

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 12 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Where Do We Go From Here?

I loved it!  So glad it worked out. Looking forward to the next chapter!

 



Author's Response:

Thanks again and again for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  As the story comes closer to an end, it seems we have a lot of questions or comments that are geared toward answers already given in the story.  So we decided to give a little background to clear up the misconceptions and questions. 

Edward Masen: Father is dead, mother is bi-polar and left him in the care of Esme and Carlisle.  Mother is alive, but whereabouts are unknown.  Edward met ‘Tanya’ in college, they had a short affair and she left, after being caught in trying to get money from him.  Edward then shut down and treated all women as if they were not worth his time.  He refused to date or trust any women and he instead only was with a select few at Aro’s club, where he paid for sex.  Edward owns the restaurant where his parents used to take him to eat at, before his father died and his mother went off the deep end.  Edward is also one of the youngest English professors at UW. 

Bella Swan: Bella was born the child of single mother Renee Higbottom.  Renee met Charlie during one of his planned scams to get money.  Renee was very rich, as were her single father.  Charlie ended up impregnating Renee, but he was already married to Sue Clearwater.  Renee paid off Charlie and Sue to leave her and her child alone, but then subsequently died of breast cancer when Bella was three.  Renee’s father fought for custody, but grand-parents rights are not acknowledged in the state of Washington, therefore after Renee’s death the state went in search of Charlie Swan.  Once he was found Bella was placed in his and Sue’s care.  After Bella went to live with Charlie and Sue, she was treated iek a slave and was never allowed even normal things such as schooling, food, new clothes, and every other basic thing as parents we give our children without second thought.  Bella grew up starved for affection, so once she got to take care of the twins she gave all that affection she has been starving for to them.  Her love of the twins is unconditional as is their love for her.

I hope this helps answer a few questions and clears up a few things.  I’m not sure why, but we have several who think Sue is Bella’s real mother, and that is not the case at all. 

Thank you again so much for all the wonderful heartfelt reviews you all leave for us.  It is amazing to us that we have managed to instill such a deep devotion in our readers to our characters, and we are blown away by just how much emotion our readers feel for our characters.  I know that the character names belong to Stephenie Meyer, but these characters and the way they are in this story are in fact ours, she owns the names and appearance descriptions, but the attitude and demeanor and words are all ours.  Thanks, Kasi (& Nikky)

TEASER Chapter 28: Subject to changes during beta process.
I am so proud of Seth and Leah this past month has not been easy on them, but they have held their heads up high and got on with it.  There has been some name calling at school.  Now I know kids can be cruel but the things that they are saying, is coming from older mouths first.  Things no parent should be saying in front of their children.  Bella and I have addressed the school regarding the problems, but we’ve been brushed off like nothing is going on.  Mrs. Crown the principle said that people will talk.  She went on to point out that I was after all, Seth and Leah’s father, and I was shaking up with their big sister.  The way she said it, implied that Bella and I were doing something wrong.  After her rather rude little speech I called Caius and explained the whole thing to him.  To say that he was angry is putting it mildly.  He went as far as taking the principle in front of the school board, and she was put on a written warning.  Not only is her job and tenure in jeopardy, but her career as a whole is.  Since we have proof that she knowing let kids and adults harass the kids, she was warned that a lawsuit would be filed if the behavior continued.  Her biggest mistake was she was aware what the twin have been though these past five months, yet did nothing to help stop the harassment.

Caius informed me of another school that had room for more students.  It was little school that only had a little over one hundred students.  It went from kinder-garden to fifth grade and each class had mix of around fifteen children per classroom.  It was a private school, and ranked in the top ten of all schools in the state of Washington’s education program.  There was a sister school that managed the grades sixth through twelfth, also ranked in the top ten.   Both schools are quite prestigious and expensive, but cost is of no matter.  There are a few nice things the school is located close to where Esme and Carlisle live, but that also causes us transportation issues for to and from school.  Both Bella and I have talked about this and we all talked about it in family therapy.  Seth and Leah asked to just finish out this year of school where they are before deciding.  We agreed that this was the right choice for right now.

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 12 May 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Confessions

Whoa I am so happy that went well!  Great job! I can't wait to hear what exactly is up with Sue tho!

 



Author's Response:

WOW...the responses are so awesome that Nikky and I are both giddy.  There haven’t been many questions asked in the first 60 reviews, so I am going to answer a few non questions I noticed.  Bella was never kidnapped by Sue and Charlie.  Charlie Swan is Bella’s biological father, and Bella was sent to live with him after her mother died of cancer.  Aro honestly never knew of Bella’s real age, he had suspicions that she was not raised correctly and was acting younger than the 18 he thought her to be, because of the inept social skills.  Zafrina did not know either, but again had those same social skill thoughts that her son had.  We in no way were bashing DCFS or DHS or any other social workers, by saying that the kids would be taken by the state.  If anyone had turned Sue in for abandoning the kids the almost 6 years ago now she has been gone, the kids would have become wards of the state, because at 13 no state official or judge would have deemed Bella capable of fully caring for 2 yr old twins alone.  Just want to say that we both believe that it takes a special kind of person to be a social worker, and we both give those of you who are in the field of social work a round of applause because the things you have to see and or deal with can’t always be fun.  I have to say that the wonderful response to this story is more than either Nikky or myself could have hoped for, and we owe that all to you the readers.  THANK YOU!  If there is any questions or discussions you would like to have or read about past discussions, feel free to join us at TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction on Facebook.  Kasi (& Nikky)

Teaser for Chapter 19: The Legal Side of Things.  Subjected to changes during beta process.

I dropped Bella of at Seth and Leah’s school. Before leaving her, I told her I would pick her up from the college when she got off.  It was so fucking hard to leave her; I just wanted to stay with her forever.  I knew the minute she was away from me, my old doubts would come back.  I knew that I had to talk with Jasper about her upbringing.  It’s that thought that makes me leave, even though I want to wait with her, take them home and stay with them. I am really at a loss for what I should do.  What can I do?  What do I do?  How do I help her?  How can someone so pure and good, come from people so evil?  The questions are killing me, but I know one thing for certain: if that bitch doesn’t stay the fuck away on her own, I will make her.  That sorry excuse of a parent will never get her hands on my Bella, Seth, or Leah again.  I will protect them with my very last breath, and deplete every cent I have, if need be.

I sit at my piano and just start playing.  I let the music guide me, keeping Bella in my thoughts as a play.  I let out all the feelings I have been denying myself. I haven’t been at it long before I find myself playing ‘Angel Eyes’ by The Jeff Healey Band, and I begin to sing along with my playing.

Girl, you're looking, fine tonight,

and every guy has got you in his sights.

What you're doing, with a clown like me,

is surely one of life's little, mysteries

 

So tonight I'll ask the stars above,

"How did I ever win your love?"

What did I do?

What did I say,

to turn your angel eyes my way?

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 28 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: A Sketching Surprise

It's Tanya! Right!!!!???? Please Tell ME!!!!! Great job! I am in suspense!



Author's Response:

Thanks again for the outstanding and wonderful reviews!  We are so excited and happy to have you all on board with us for this journey and we sure hope that you all continue to love and praise the story the way that you do.  I know that you all learned some rather interesting pieces of information in the puzzle we call His Cimmerian View.  I bet a lot of you have more questions than you are asking.  But to answer a few of the questions that don’t take away from future story line here you go.  Yes it is possible that Tanya and Sue are the one in the same, but do remember that Tanya Denali was positively identified by dental records.  Some are asking if Sue could be Edward’s long lost mother... I guess that is a thought, but the age thing would be difficult to swallow.   Sue could very well be masquerading as Bella and trying to get her hands on the money that has been left to her both from her mother’s Estate and her grandfather’s.  Wow more of you seem to be worried about who might have their hand on Edward’s shoulder than much else, so I will relive you of that stress, it is in fact Carlisle.  Between this chapter and the BPOV on EHCV we have had many question how Harry/James could have gotten into Bella’s apartment after Aro did all the security measures, and I assure you that his ability to get into the apartment will be answered, just have faith in us, and you will see.  Lots of new things will come out in the next chapter as well and unfortunately you are all going to hate us, because it will be ending in a cliffhanger as well.  In the next chapter we will get to see Edward come face to face with Harry though... insert evil laugh... but at least I am showing you the teaser from that meeting!  I am excited about the ending of the story; however we will not update any faster than we currently are.  I am working on chapter 28 and Nikky is on chapter 29.  At this rate we are going to be pushing to keep up with the schedule of posting each week.  No I am not saying we will not post, but I am saying we will at this point be sticking to the every Thursday posting.   If you haven’t yet, go check out Enduring His Cimmerian View... the Bella POV chapter is posted.  We will not be adding any chapters to EHCV, until we have the main story cracked out of HCV.  Thank you for being some of the best readers and reviewers out there and for loving this story we are sharing with you all.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Chapter 26 teaser...subject to changes during Beta process.
All of it; I mean, this mother fucker broke Seth’s arm.  I close my eyes, and when I open them again, I see nothing but him. Without even thinking about what I’m doing; I hit the fucker as hard as I can.  I just keep hitting him until I feel someone pull me back. With the rage still blinding me, I knock whoever it is off of me and hit Harry again. 

Suddenly, I feel a lot more people dragging me back. I feel a sting on my face, and I look around to see Aro shaking his head.  Garrett has his arms wrapped around my waist, Felix is holding my left arm, and Emmett is on my right; I have no clue when he got here. Standing right in front of me is Jane. 

“Jane, I don’t think you needed to slap him,” Aro says as he walks over to us.  That fucking bitch slapped me! 

“He was out of it, and it brought him back didn’t it?  Besides that, I get to do the beating up around here,” she huffs, walking away from me to bend down and look at Harry.  I look down as well, noticing that I knocked the fucker out. I can’t help but grin about it.  “Wipe that look off your face! You broke some of his ribs and his nose; that’s my job, Assward!”  Jane jumps up and walks over to her bag. She brings out some jars and sets them in a line on the desk.

“Eh...what the hell is in those jars?” Emmett asks as he gives me a look to ask if I’m alright.  I nod and the three of them release me.



Author's Response:

Thanks again for the outstanding and wonderful reviews!  We are so excited and happy to have you all on board with us for this journey and we sure hope that you all continue to love and praise the story the way that you do.  I know that you all learned some rather interesting pieces of information in the puzzle we call His Cimmerian View.  I bet a lot of you have more questions than you are asking.  But to answer a few of the questions that don’t take away from future story line here you go.  Yes it is possible that Tanya and Sue are the one in the same, but do remember that Tanya Denali was positively identified by dental records.  Some are asking if Sue could be Edward’s long lost mother... I guess that is a thought, but the age thing would be difficult to swallow.   Sue could very well be masquerading as Bella and trying to get her hands on the money that has been left to her both from her mother’s Estate and her grandfather’s.  Wow more of you seem to be worried about who might have their hand on Edward’s shoulder than much else, so I will relive you of that stress, it is in fact Carlisle.  Between this chapter and the BPOV on EHCV we have had many question how Harry/James could have gotten into Bella’s apartment after Aro did all the security measures, and I assure you that his ability to get into the apartment will be answered, just have faith in us, and you will see.  Lots of new things will come out in the next chapter as well and unfortunately you are all going to hate us, because it will be ending in a cliffhanger as well.  In the next chapter we will get to see Edward come face to face with Harry though... insert evil laugh... but at least I am showing you the teaser from that meeting!  I am excited about the ending of the story; however we will not update any faster than we currently are.  I am working on chapter 28 and Nikky is on chapter 29.  At this rate we are going to be pushing to keep up with the schedule of posting each week.  No I am not saying we will not post, but I am saying we will at this point be sticking to the every Thursday posting.   If you haven’t yet, go check out Enduring His Cimmerian View... the Bella POV chapter is posted.  We will not be adding any chapters to EHCV, until we have the main story cracked out of HCV.  Thank you for being some of the best readers and reviewers out there and for loving this story we are sharing with you all.  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Chapter 26 teaser...subject to changes during Beta process.
All of it; I mean, this mother fucker broke Seth’s arm.  I close my eyes, and when I open them again, I see nothing but him. Without even thinking about what I’m doing; I hit the fucker as hard as I can.  I just keep hitting him until I feel someone pull me back. With the rage still blinding me, I knock whoever it is off of me and hit Harry again. 

Suddenly, I feel a lot more people dragging me back. I feel a sting on my face, and I look around to see Aro shaking his head.  Garrett has his arms wrapped around my waist, Felix is holding my left arm, and Emmett is on my right; I have no clue when he got here. Standing right in front of me is Jane. 

“Jane, I don’t think you needed to slap him,” Aro says as he walks over to us.  That fucking bitch slapped me! 

“He was out of it, and it brought him back didn’t it?  Besides that, I get to do the beating up around here,” she huffs, walking away from me to bend down and look at Harry.  I look down as well, noticing that I knocked the fucker out. I can’t help but grin about it.  “Wipe that look off your face! You broke some of his ribs and his nose; that’s my job, Assward!”  Jane jumps up and walks over to her bag. She brings out some jars and sets them in a line on the desk.

“Eh...what the hell is in those jars?” Emmett asks as he gives me a look to ask if I’m alright.  I nod and the three of them release me.

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 12 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Doctor, Mall, and Names

Oh he is really making up for being a jerk to her now. So sweet. Great Job.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  There have been a few questions regarding Edward and why he is so tainted by women.  More of his back story is coming out, but between having a mother who was mentally ill, who subsequently abandoned him.  The one girl he gave his heart to was only using him for money.  One girl pretends to be his friend to gain access to his friend and for all accounts adoptive brother.  And don’t forget the person he looked to as a mother figure who lied to him and hid the truth of things from him.  When you put all of those things together, it is hard to trust and believe that there is honesty and truth in caring from a female.  I know lots of women who think men are worms because of this or that, which happened, so it should not be so hard to understand how Edward may have this view of women.  Next we have had an overabundance of questions regarding when Edward will find out Bella’s true age.  That will happen, but first we need to build a little more of their friendship together.   I know that many of you are not happy of his time going to Aro’s, but I assure that those times are coming to a close.  It is important we felt in the story and as the story goes to show how he is dealing with his own reactions to Bella.  There will not be any more explicit scenes from the club, however your knowledge of him going will not stop until he stops… AND WE PROMISE he stops going.  This is a rather slow burn, but for this to be realistic, in any way, shape, or form it needs to be.  With that said we will not drag it out either.  You will continue to learn more about Edward and Bella, as well as a few of the other characters, but it is all going with the storyline.  There are some great chapters coming up, and for all of you who still have some hate or anger for Edward, I am sure that you soon will find that hate or anger directed in another place. 

Kasi (& Nikky)

Chapter 10 Teaser…  Subject to changes during Beta Process.

Carlisle, Jasper, Emmett, and I, all meet up on Saturday for a workout and lunch. The topic moved to Bella, and Emmett was not happy that he was the only one that had not met her yet.  I, well we, explained that she did not like close contact with people and might say things out of the norm.  Of course, this all fell on deaf ears, because his only response was him promising to be on his best behavior. Now, we all love Emmett - most people do - but he is a large hulk of a man.  Emmett is six foot six and must be tipping the scales at close to three hundred pounds.  His biceps are the size of my thighs. He also has a quick mouth, and often says things without thinking. We tried to tell him this, but he didn’t get it.  We all knew that he would end up trying to hug her, or that she would end up saying something and then he would joke about it, but either way, she would end up hurt.  I just couldn’t allow that to happen, not even by one of my best friends.  He pouted the rest of the time we were together, even after Jasper and Carlisle both said she could not meet him yet.  I was a bit worried at the end of lunch when Emmett looked as if he was hatching an evil plan.

I look at my watch, seeing that it’s almost nine-thirty, and I know that Bella is about to walk in.  I have set up the table with some of the supplies I need to help teach her, including alphabet cards.  Since she can already recognize some letters, I know teaching her the alphabet should be pretty simple.  I know the best thing for me to do, is to start at the beginning.  This means that the alphabet song we all loved as a kid, is first. I look to the door as it opens, and see Bella walking in.  She glances at me, and I can see in her eyes that she looks both excited and apprehensive.  I am sure she is a bit nervous about today, so I smile at her. We already decided that we would do an hour and a half on Tuesday mornings, and an hour and a half on Thursday afternoons.

“Bella, hang up your jacket and come over to the table.”  She nods her head and does what I ask. “We will begin with the alphabet.  There are twenty-six letters in the English alphabet; twenty-one are consonants, and five are vowels. I will show both the capital and lower case letters.  Are you ready?” She nods her head before putting her glasses on. She has them sitting at the edge of her nose, which will make her look over the top of them rather than through them. I push them back to sit on her nose correctly. “No looking over them, Bella,” I say, giving her a smile. 

 

 

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 26 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Trash Talking Turkey Day

Wow poor Edward! I'm glad Bella finally stood up to someone! Great job!

 



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Nikky and I are both just so blown away by the response our story is garnering.  Thanks to the many recommends and pimping we have been getting.  Thanks for the response of our fans that make and send us banners and poems and mostly the kind words of love that give us the drive to keep HCV going strong. 
There have been a lot of you all asking for the Bella point of view, and you are going to get it.  The next chapter will have a lot of things going on and we hope you love it.  The age reveal will be in chapter 17, along with a first kiss, the kids going off to camp, Edward and Bella together and meeting up with Sally...those are a few things you have to look forward to.  We started a group on Facebook, you’re all invited to join.  TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction. 
Now to the nitty gritty... 
We both wondered how many of you would ask if Edward’s son was really dead or not, and if Tanya was dead or not.  We want to be clear that Tanya Denali and the child she gave birth to are in fact deceased; they died in the fire.  
We want to point out that Edward is not a Dom.  He role-played and dabbled with the girls at the club, because it was his way of maintaining full control.   He has no desire to tie Bella up and spank her, he is not looking at her as his next submissive or slave.  Just want to be perfectly clear, he is not into the BDSM lifestyle, he is just a man who was seating his needs at a club the only way he saw fit to do so and protect his heart and soul. 

Thank you again for all of the story love and wonderful things you say.  You really have no idea what your words and kindness mean to us.  Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)


Chapter 17 teaser...subject to changes during Beta process.
Right now, we’re back at Bella’s apartment getting Seth and Leah’s stuff ready for their trip.

“Okay, Seth, you have everything from your list in your bag, right?”  I watch as he nods his head, and chuckle to myself since Bella had just checked over the list and the bag with him herself.  “Leah, do you have everything from your list in your bag, too?”

“Yes, Bella. Edward and I just went through the list twice.”  I turn my head to hide my chuckle. 

“Okay. Well, we have to be at the church in forty minutes, and since Edward is taking us, we have time to double check.”

“Baby, Leah and Seth have everything they need. How about you go pack your bag now, and feed Jake?  I will help Leah and Seth take their backpacks down to the car.”

“Okay, I will hurry,” she says, leaving to go to her box.

I can tell that Bella is trying to put on a strong front for them, but I know this is killing her to let them go on this trip. It will be good for them, though, and good for her, too.  I have planned out this weekend so that she gets a chance to be a twenty-four year old for a change.  After we have everything packed and ready, we head out.

I drive them to the church, seeing a bus and a bunch of children.  I also see Sally there, and I frown as I pull into a parking space.  “Sally works in the Sunday school. She’s the main reason they are going.  She is taking her cell with her, and said that I could call her anytime.  She is also going to have them call me before bed, and when they get up in the morning.  You can stay here if you want. You don’t need to come with me. I won’t tell her who you are.” I turn to look at her, and smirk because she answered my internal question.

I shake my head.  “No, I am fine, Baby. Thank you.” 

The night of the break in, I explained to Bella that I went by a different name at Aro’s, and the girls I was with, had never seen my face because they were blindfolded.  I was very glad that she just nodded her head, and didn’t ask any other questions.  I hate the fact that I’ve been with them.  I don’t want my sins to show in her eyes when I look at her each time I remember that she saw me there.  When the time comes, and she finds out what I did and what happens there with me and the girls, I hope and pray to God that I don’t lose her friendship.

We get out of the car and start walking over. As we do, Sally waves, making her way over to us.  Her eyes hit me for only a few seconds before she looks back at Bella.

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 04 May 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Weekend Revelations!

Um. So she's 19 she has already shown that age is just a number by stepping up and telling the truth. YOLO lol great job on the chapter

 



Author's Response:

Hello our faithful readers and reviewers!  We were expecting a bit of a lashing from some of you, and we have gotten a few but nothing like I expected.  Please let me remind you all now first and foremost that we are both happy ever after kind of gals.  Little refresher is needed about ages, and a few other things, since there were a few questions.  Edward is 28 and will soon be turning 29.  Bella just turned 11 when the twins were born, Sue left when Bella was 13, and Bella has been working for the university for over 5 years.  Bella just turned 19 in chapter 8.  Edward is 9 and 1/2 years older than Bella.  Before Sue left, she obtained a fake ID for Bella that said Bella was 18.  Therefore everyone surrounding the apartment building assumed she was of legal age.  Sue needed everyone to think Bella was 18, and she was sure to scare tactic that into Bella.  All these years, Bella has continued to maintain the age Sue said she had to say she was, in fear of not being able to stay with the twins.  Now for Bree Tanner and James...Bree Tanner was the female student from Edward’s Summer school course he taught.  In the summer for the past several years, Edward has been helping his good friend Marcus by teaching the kids who struggle to pass, or are so far behind they may not graduate high school.  Bree Tanner was the hoodie wearing shy and quiet girl from chapters 1 and 2.  Bree lives in Forks and attends high school at Forks High.  James Hunter is a Math teacher and the truancy officer for the Forks school district.  We don’t want to give too much away, but if you think back to the earlier chapters, when Edward had to take a break from his panic attacks, he was clear to tell Marcus his concerns about Bree being abused.  Bella is naive about many things, but she has grown a lot in the past few chapters.  We want to be clear that Bella feels as if she lied to Edward, she started trusting him a long time ago and when she started trusting him she feels she should have told him then.  Edward doesn’t feel betrayed by the lie, but he is more of in shock by the lie.  When he thought he was almost 5 years older than Bella he was concerned with the age difference, mainly because of how innocent she is.  Now that that almost five is almost ten, he is confused.  The next chapter will have you cheering Edward on, and hating his guts too.  We don’t want to give too much away, but I will say this, we are both excited at the prospect of the reviews after the next chapter posts.  Thanks as always for reading and reviewing this story, you all have no idea how much your words mean to us.  Thank you, Kasi (& Nikky)

 

Teaser for Chapter 18: Confessions  (As always subject to changes in the Beta process.)

Leaving Bella’s place, I get in my car and drive.  I don’t even slow down when the speedometer hits one-hundred-thirty miles per hour; I just keep driving.  I am racing to get away from the fear and the rage that is inside of me. I still feel so angry; how the fuck did I not see that she was only nineteen?!  I mean, she looks so young; I am so fucking pissed at myself.  She is still a baby, and the fact that she is only nineteen, doesn’t keep me from wanting her.  I want her, and I need to be with her.  I want her in every way, which is so fucked up. I shouldn’t want to be with a nineteen year old girl.

 

She was thirteen when Sue left her to look after Seth and Leah.  She was so fucking young, and she ended up in Aro’s club at thirteen!  Fuck, if he would have said yes to her…if she was in the pictures I had to choose from…I would have picked her…I know I would have… fuck! I could have really hurt her.  I am really fucking sick! Thank God he said no! Fuck, the dip shit pimp that said yes...shit! I’m sure she would…fuck I don’t even want to finish that thought.

 

“FUCK!” I scream out and I do an illegal U-turn at eighty miles per hour.  I decide I need to see Aro. If I find out that fucker knew her real age, I am going to add that motherfucker to my shit list.  I am going to hurt him so fucking much, and anyone who tries to stop me, too.

 

 

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 22 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: First Times

oh god! How can rose be such a bitch?! What the hell were  sue and harry into?! I want it to be next thursday already! Great job!



Author's Response:

Well after this chapter how will we ever get better?  I hope that you trust me when I say, it will!  Many of you want Aro to get his hands on Uncle Harry before the police do.  I will not say who gets to Uncle Harry first; because well that would just ruin the surprise, but I will say this... his capture is already written, so feel free to speculate.  There are some seriously some great chapters coming up, but Nikky says I need to warn you all that some of them are rather drama and angst filled.  There also may or may not be a few cliffhangers in the near future, oh heck who am I kidding the next two chapters are rather cliffy in nature.  The next chapter has a big surprise within and MOST of you may be very shocked.  Nikky, Jess, and a few others who have already read the chapter during BETA processing seem to think that the next chapter may generate a lot more reviews.  We may even get some from people who have not reviewed before now, because it is quite a twist.   There is your warning.  Nikky and I have been called diabolical for the plot twist that is coming, so we sure hope you all like it.  I will say this out of all the readers and reviewers we have, only one time has someone guessed a good portion of the plot and got it right.  We of course didn’t tell them, because well then they would know it would ruin the story telling process.   We had a few question about Sienna’s ability to place a phone call since she is deaf.  Deaf people can make phone calls using a Telecommunication Device for the Deaf (TDD).  Special telephone services have been developed to carry the TDD functionality even further. In certain countries there are systems in place so that a deaf person can communicate with a hearing person on an ordinary voice phone using a human relay operator. There are also "carry-over" services, enabling people who can hear but cannot speak ("hearing carry-over," a.k.a. "HCO"), or people who cannot hear but are able to speak ("voice carry-over," a.k.a. "VCO") to use the telephone.  Couple of questions came about Charlotte’s nick-name of Chas, in our story Charlotte was the youngest raised by her father among her several brothers and she was quite the tomboy growing up.  Char is a girlie name and therefore her brothers tagged her with Chas, because it is manlier.  Thanks for reading and reviewing our story, we are proud of it, and are grateful to our loyal readers.  If you have more questions or want to discuss some of the story line, feel free to join the group on Facebook you can find us by searching for: TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT FanFiction.  Kasi (&Nikky)

PS….Enduring His Cimmerian View is now POSTED... Please go read and review.

Chapter 25 Teaser:
“Pajama day is when you stay in your pajamas all day and eat lots of bad stuff, watch movies, and play games all day long.”  Seth and Leah nod their heads at me and Bella gives me a small half nod with her smile.  “Okay then, pajama day it is in our house.  I just need to make a few phone calls. Why don’t you all get your robes and slippers on, and I’ll meet you for breakfast as soon as I am done.”  Seth and Leah hug me before walking out of the bathroom to get their slippers and robes.

After they leave the room, I look to see Bella biting her lip, and I know she’s worrying about something.  “I’m sorry that she wet the bed. She’s never done that before.”

I walk to Bella, wrapping my arms around her. “Baby, its okay. She’s upset, and her body is reacting to that, so don’t worry about it.” I kiss her head and push her hair out of her face.  I hiss as I see the large bruises that go all the way up one side of her face.  “Baby, how are you feeling? Are you in pain?”

She shrugs her shoulders and tries to give me a smile.  “I’m not sure. I...”  She stops and rubs her head.  “I feel like I failed them.  He hurt Seth, and I should’ve been able to protect him better.  I’m upset that it was Uncle Harry that broke into our apartment the other time.  I don’t understand why he did that, or what he was looking for.  How could he do that to Seth and Leah?  I mean, I know that he doesn’t really like me much, but they’re his sister’s children.  I thought he would love them.” 

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 05 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: A Shocking Situation

Loving this! I knew it had to be something like this. I hope Edward gets to beat the shit out of Paul too! Great job I can't wait for next thursday!



Author's Response:

Well hello to our faithful readers and reviewers.  It is hard to believe that this story will be coming to a close in just about five to seven more weeks.  Yeah chapter 27 posts next week, 28 is written and off to the start of the beta’s (yes more than one) process.  I am working on 29 and Nikky is kicking behind on her part of 30.  After 30 is written there will be either 2 to 5 more chapters.  Jess2002 threw a monkey wrench into chapter 29 for us, and I was actually shocked she asked for the thing she asked for.  I will not leak the info on what she said we needed to do, but man alive it does give a nice twist.  (LIKE WE NEED MORE?) twists that is...LOL.  Okay so you got quite a bit of the mystery settled on the real Tanya Denali.  I never lied to you , when I assured you all that Tanya Denali was in fact dead and buried.  I also stated many times that the toddler found in the burnt house with Tanya Denali was in fact the child she gave birth to.  Neither of those statements was untrue.  I never said that he was in fact Edward’s, just that he was in fact Tanya’s.  You will get to hear more about good old Uncle Harry again, but trust me when I say that he will be quit forthcoming on the information.  Jane has incredible ways to make assholes talk.  Many of you want to see Jane get her hands on Sue, and well I will not say if that happens or not, you will have to wait and see.  Sue and her bullshit are not yet complete and I will say this, she makes an appearance in more than one chapter upcoming.  She is quite sly, like a fox.  We are both so excited to see what you are all thinking.  I know that this was a lot to take in with the double identities.  I want to assure you all that everything written so far was all part of the original plan, chapter 29 will be the first deviation from our starting outline.  We hope that you all continue to enjoy and read and review this story, because it is nice to hear how much you like, love, or hate parts of it.  We are amazed that we have written a story that is garnering so much emotion from our readers.  Thank you for all you say in your reviews, they really mean the world to us!  Kasi (&Nikky)   

 

Teaser for chapter 27: Subject to changes during final beta process

I look at Bella and Alice sitting there on the floor.  Alice is in front of Bella holding her arms while Bella is shaking and crying.  I walk toward them, both seeming to have missed Emmett and me coming in the room.

“He’s going to hate me... they are all going to hate me. What should I do?  This is so big. I... I didn’t know. I swear I didn’t know.  Why…why would she lie about that?  I did everything they ever asked.  I never questioned them. She could have told me. I would’ve still loved them, I do still love them.  Why?  I... it’s not fair, Alice.” Bella’s hand goes to her hair, and she begins to grip and pull at it. 

“Bella, please calm down.  I’m not sure I fully understand what you’re talking about, but Edward loves you very much, and he knows you; he will trust you, I’m sure...”

As I move forward, Alice stops talking and turns to me. This makes Bella look up at me, too.  She looks broken and scared.

“Bella Baby,” I say, holding my arms out to her. Instead of coming to me like I’d hoped, she shakes her head.

“You’re going to hate me, but I swear I didn’t know.  I thought that... I thought I was the best for them. I didn’t know really. I swear didn’t know.   If I had, I would’ve looked for you, I swear.  Mom and Harry couldn’t have done or said anything that would’ve stopped me from finding you.  If I knew, I would have made sure that they were where they belonged.  I would have been punished, but I would have taken it happily knowing that they were safe and loved.  I am so sorry.” I look at her, seeing her hurting, and I hurt too because she is still putting herself last.  “Your son, Edw...” She cuts off mid-sentence and begins to wail.

Wisp by judo_lin Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 871]
Summary: Past Featured Story

wisp

 

Edward wins more than he bargained for at what was supposed to be a friendly poker game. AH.


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 63 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 304154 Read Count: 221078
[Report This] Published: 06 Jun 2012 Updated: 23 Nov 2014
Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 17 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

This story is amazing!



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 22 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Yay now she has a way to communicate, right?



Author's Response:

That's the hope! Thanks for the review.

Summary:

Bella the teen mom. Edward the sexy olderman. How do they meet and can they have more? Lets stalk them and see...

Very little angst and as sweet as i can write!

 

thanks to christagbanners for the banner!


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Completed Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, luv2write finished reads
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 35295 Read Count: 95389
[Report This] Published: 01 Nov 2012 Updated: 15 Nov 2012
Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

boys bake... lol great job i can't wait for more!

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 04 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

can't wait for more this is getting really really good!

 

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 01 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Where is liam's dad so i can kick his ass! lol sorry i know it's just a story still i feel so bad for bella. I can't not wait to read more.

 

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 03 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

i thought edward was like 30. hmmm. Doesn't matter had sex. lol great job can't wait for more.

Reviewer: pindrop Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

what a jerk! I really hate jake. I was really hoping edward was going to kick his ass, but i know he is way to classy for that. love this can't wait for more!

Summary:

 

Banner by: DeeBelle1

 

 

 

SUMMARY: Edward Swan needs a new sitter for his son Charlie. Miss Tanya at the rodeo promises to rustle up someone—and send them his way. At his ranch, he is busy trying to get things done, when in walks the long sexy legs of—Doc Cullen's daughter? Now what will he do? AH/M


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories I've read, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 18732 Read Count: 7570
[Report This] Published: 13 Mar 2013 Updated: 13 Mar 2013
Reviewer: pindrop Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

awesome. gotta love cowboyward.