Reviews by fanfictionalcolics
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Every political figure has their skeletons and this Senator just likes to play Daddy. Enter the call girl, a woman who gives men exactly what they want. "I would give him what he wanted and what he didn't even know he wanted; then, hook, line, sinker, he would be mine." Daddykink! Mature. ExB

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, G8or Favor8s Read, Stories I've Already read, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 215117 Read Count: 412147
[Report This] Published: 03 Jun 2012 Updated: 25 Aug 2012
Reviewer: fanfictionalcolics Signed
Date: 16 Jul 2014 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

Just a quick comment. Laurent is a man  so wouldn't say je Suis très heureuse mais je suis très heureux. Adjective change with the subject gender.

Secondly , while comment vas tu? Is perfectly correct when you don't know someone you use " vous" instead of "tu " , which is used for people you are closed to.

So Edward should have said : comment allez- vous? Like you put in the footer :)