Reviews by smiley2204
Summary: Past Featured Story

The story begins six months after Edward left Bella in the forest, but unfortunately things have taken a darker turn than our beloved SM wrote. This is the tale of how Edward and Bella eventually find their way back to each other, although it is a difficult road traveled. There will not be any reference to the events in Eclipse or BD.

Rating: NC-17 is for lemons sometime down the road!

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Much love to changedbyEdward and JustBiteMePlease for my awesome banner!!!

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Love to drive's Stories to read set 2, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Brooklyn - to read
Chapters: 39 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 94477 Read Count: 29121
[Report This] Published: 19 Feb 2010 Updated: 11 Jul 2010
Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 28 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

nice chapter, but now I'm really curious to know what Edward is thinking...please go on soon!

It's You by Lost Twi Sisters Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 149]
Summary:

Bella and Edward meet on a cruise. Both are attracted to each to other.  We'll see what happens after some fun- loving on a cruise, when they encounter each other again.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Drama, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, Want to read
Chapters: 42 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 88437 Read Count: 41339
[Report This] Published: 16 Apr 2011 Updated: 26 Mar 2013
Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 21 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

hey,

I'm glad that they are kind of together now and I hope that their relationship will be good.



Author's Response:

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 17 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

Hey,

 

great that you wrote more! Finally they're married, I'm really happy but I don't think that the baby will wait so much longer :D

Summary: Past Featured Story

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My version of what happens after Bella saw Edward that first day of school. Could they get pass the secrets and build a relationship? 

This is my first attempt at writing a fan fiction. It started as a one shot but I got good reviews so I'm continuing the story. My vampire is a little different from Stephanie's. A little bite does not change a human into a vampire.

The beginning of the story follows the book closely but with lots of lemons then we hit a Fork in the road and all bets are off as Bella and the Cullens do all the things regular teenagers do.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Stories I've Already read
Chapters: 65 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 370659 Read Count: 101563
[Report This] Published: 08 May 2011 Updated: 30 Mar 2012
Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 03 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

hey,

wow, the chapter was wonderful. Especially the scene when Edward and Bella talked about eternity...I love it that he isn't against the possibility of changing her and that he isn't scared of losing her soul.

I hope the plan will work and Bella won't get hurt but I liked it that she hadn't to hurt Charlie.

I'm very curious to read the next chapter! ;-)



Author's Response:

Hello,

I hated the whole stomping on Charlie's heart scene so I decided to leave it out. 

Yeah, Edward knows Bella is his mate, if she's willing to join him, why say no?

I had to use Alice's visions. Why didn't she figure this out in the book? 

Posting new chapter soon.

Thanks, 

DC :)

 

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Wow, the chapter was so wonderful! Their first time was very special and I like the way Edward is seeing himself now and that he doesn't think at leaving her or other stupid things. He doesn't understimate her feelings and I'm curious if they will meet the nomads and what will happen.

Also the way you connected phrases of "Twilight" with "Breaking Dawn" and "Eclipse" was very good and I can't wait to read more!



Author's Response:

Thanks again for reviewing. Yes, I wanted to make both Edward and Bella stronger and more confident. Yeah, I like taking parts of all the books to get my point across. Just having fun. You won't see much of NM. I always skip through the part of the movie where there no Edward. :)

I have to bring James in, don't know how big a role he'll play yet. I don't want to cause too much angst for the lovebirds.

DC:)

 

 

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 25 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

now I'm a bit confused because I think the chapters aren't in the right order...maybe you can have a look and change it



Author's Response:

Originally, I posted 13 before 12 but I fixed that. I also switched things in my story a little. I wanted Charlie to meet Edward before their first date and I also wanted to get Jacob & Billy's meetings over with so I combined both of their scenes from the book into one. Trying to avoid the wolves as much as possible for now.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 04 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Hey

wow, it's great that you posted so soon and I like the chapter because Alice is so much more smarter than in the bood. I don't know either why she didn't see it then but in your version it's very logical.

I'm sure that Edward will be able to save Bella and I'm looking forward to read the next chapter ;-)



Author's Response:

Hi,

yes, SM didn't use Alice's visions for that scene. She had her reasons but I wanted Edward and his family to have a better chance of getting to her before James did too much damage.

Thanks for the review,

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 23 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

Hey,

 

wow, two wonderful chapters! Valentine's Day was so great and especially Edward's gifts were so wonderful. They really showed his love for Bella...it was so sweet and I'm really happy ;-)

I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed the Valentines chapters. It was their first Valentine's Day and we know how Edward looks for any oportunity to tell her how he feels and to lavish her with gifts so I wanted her to do the same. To make it just as special for him too.

Thanks for reviewing.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 13 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

Hey,

 

the idea with the diary is great and the hallucination was very interesting. Great chapter, all the memories were so nice and I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

We didn't get much details from the book about those months and what SM gave us was not working for my lovebirds so I had to be creative. I'll glad it came across OK. Although I'm not using most of NM, there are a few things I wanted to explore from that book. The hallucinations was one.

Thanks for reviewing.

DC :) 

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

Hey,

 

great chapter, I really liked it that they talked about the possibility of a pregnancy because if they plan on having a baby Edward will be hopefully more relaxed during the pregnancy. I'm curious if they want to have a baby after the wedding and I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

Hi,

Yes, that's my reason for wanting this information revealed before she gets pregnant. I want both of them to enjoy it when/if it happens.

Thanks for reviewing.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 17 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Hey,

 

wow, I didn't expect you to update so soon but this chapter was so wonderful! I'm so glad that Bella accepted Edward's proposal immediately I hated the long time of waiting in the book.

 

I'm very happy that you don't want to end the story so soon because it's one of my favorites and I hope to read more...it's good that they talked about the children aspect because I found it silly that they didn't realised it sooner in the book that woman are able to become pregnant by vampires...so I'm curious how your story will go on!



Author's Response:

Hi,

I didn't like the long wait either and when she finally accepted, it was more of a business proposition. I think my Edward deserved better than that. :)

I not sure if I'm doing the whole pregnancy drama so I wanted them to be safe until I decided. 

Glad you enjoyed the chapter.

Thanks, DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 29 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

Hey,

 

the last two chapters were great! I'm glad that Bella likes college and I'm happy that they want to try to have a baby, I hope that it'll work.

Please go on soon!



Author's Response:

Hi,

Everything will work out. Every necessary precaution will be taken to ensure Bella is safe. 

Thanks for reviewing.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 14 May 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

hey,

it's a nice, sexy version of Twilight, I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

yes, I plan to work through the first book. 

hanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 23 May 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Hey, I'm really curious how there relationship will change when Bella realizes that Edward is a vampire, I hope that they'll become really close ;-)

Great story!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing. Yes, that's the plan

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 26 May 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Hey, I liked Edward's POV very much, now I'm able to understand many things much better. You're story is very good and I'm glad that Edward decided to stay with Bella and that he wants a relationship now.

I hope you'll go on soon1



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you liked the chapter. I decided we had to hear from Edward so we could understand what's going on in his mind. It's hard thinking like a guy but I had fun with it. :-)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 02 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

hey,

wonderful chapter, they're so close now and I'm curious...what will happen when Bella discovers that Edward is a vampire? But I don't believe that it will change anything.

Hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

I think she loves him too much already, to let it bother her.

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 04 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

hey, it's nice that Bella is so happy and of course it doesn't matter to her that Edward is a vampire.

I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

I think they are perfect for each other. Both finding love when they least expected. 

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 27 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

Hey,

 

great chapter. I can totally understand Bella because I'm really looking forward to the weding too. I'm sure it will be wonderful!

Please go on soon!



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed the chapter,

yes, the wedding is going to be out of this world. I have a good chapter in the book to build on.

Thanks for sticking with the story and letting me know your thoughts and for the encouragement.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 19 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

hey,

the last chapters were very good, I liked the way their relationship changed and I hope that Saturday will be a wonderful day.

Hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. I'm glad you are enjoyed the chapters. From the book we could see that they were so into each other. I love exploring that. Letting the characters have fun. Hope you like the new chapter.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 29 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

hey,

thanks for your answers. I found it very funny because when I watch New Moon I skip all scenes without Edward too and I don't like the wolves either ;-)

It's good that you changed some things but I think chapter 13 is posted after chapter  10 as chapter 11 and then again at it's right place after chapter 12. Between chapter 10 and chapter 12 there's a part missing so maybe you could check this and I'm very curious to read the next chapter ;-)



Author's Response:

I think I fixed it. I'll print the whole story and read it on the train to make sure everything is in the right place. Thanks for catching. 

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 02 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

hey,

the chapter was very good like always ;-) It's so wonderful how you connect the scenes of the book in a different way. I like that Edward isn't so regretful after their first time, I hated this part in the book and now I'm very curious about the baseball match and the visitors.

I've also read chapter 11 but unfortunately I couldn't leave another review. It's good that you fixed it now and it was nice to read ;-)

I hope you'll go on so soon again!



Author's Response:

Thanks again for reading and reviewing. I know, in the book he went totally over board. I hope the don't have him that uptight in the movie. Bella already had self esteem problems and that's the last thing she needed.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 10 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Hey,

the chapters were very nice...It's so good that Edward promised to stay forever and the talk with Renée was good too. I hope Bella will be fine soon and Edward can speak with her about the transformation etc.

I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

Hi,

Thanks for the review.

Nonw that James and Victoria are out of the way, we could move on to the serious stuff. Transformation stories, timing and expectations. Surprise coming up.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 17 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Hey,

 

it's great that the Cullens take care of Bella and Charlie so well. I like that she's integrated in the family and even Rosalie isn't such a bitch than in the books.

 

The talk between Bella and Edward was great too because he accepted the fact that he would torture her if he left her and that she blongs to his world.

I love your writing style and I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

Hello,

We know how caring Esme is so it's only natural for her to want to take care of Bella and Charlie. 

Bella spends a lot of time at the Cullens. I want her to have fun there and I want her to have a good relationship with all of them. This is going to be her family. 

Since I'm not doing the whole disappearing act like in NM, I wanted to get that conversation out of the way. Let both of them know exactly where they stand with each other.

Thanks again for reviewing,

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 27 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

hey,

 

great chapter, I'm glad that Charlie and Renée were so positive about the wedding and I'm curious to know what will happen in Alaska.

I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. I want everyone on board for the wedding and their future. Hopefully it will be smooth sailing for them from now on.

Sorry for the late post. I'm putting up 2 chapters to make up for it. 

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 04 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

hey,

 

great chapters. I'm glad the trip to Alaska went so well and Laurent is a good guy. I was impressed about Rose's little speech and it was very helpful for Bella to understand Edward better.

 

I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review,

Yes, I'm eliminating all the obsticles in their way.

I know Edward should have had more faith in her and explain himself but we know he doesn't always think straight when it comes to Bella. Having Rose as the big sister came in handy here. Bella found out the reason Edward is being so protective and she didn't have to fight with him over it. 

DC :)

 

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

hey,

 

wonderful chapter, the birthday was so great! In the original I hated that it was destroyed by the paper cut but now I'm really happy. Bella is so much easier with her age, it's really great!



Author's Response:

Hi,

Thanks again for another great review. Edward had to reassure her about her importance in his life for her to get to that point, but now she has no doubts.

As you know I hate most of NM so there was no papercut. This way Edward stays and Jacob does not get to make a move on her. 

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 20 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

hey,

 

great chapter! the vacation was wonderful. The cabin was very beautiful and especially the massage was so sweet and hot.

I hope you'll go on soon!



Author's Response:

Hello agin,

 

Thanks for the review,

I liked the massage also. I've been thinking of it for a while but I couldn't think of a place for it until the ski trip. They all had fun. I even had fun remembering my ski trip. 

New two chapters uploaded. Enjoy

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 06 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

Hey,

great chapter, I'm sure the wedding will be wonderful and the suprise with the hotel was very sweet. I liked it!



Author's Response:

Hi,

I'm looking forward to the wedding too. I don't know what I'll do when the wedding is over.

I enjoyed writing their time at the hotel. Conecting like they usually do. Enjoying being together. That's why they are my lovebirds. LOL

Thanks for reviewing.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 10 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

hey,

 

great chapter, it was so peaceful and romantic too and I liked that the 6 had so much fun together! Now I'm really looking forward to the wedding!

Please go on soon!



Author's Response:

After all the planning for the wedding. They needed some down time. This sounded perfect.

Thanks for reviewing.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

Hey,

 

wow, the chapter was amazing! The wedding was so perfect and I'm so happy for Bella and Edward. I really liked it but now I'm looking forward to the honeymoon and of course the time afterwards.

Please go on soon!



Author's Response:

Hi,

Thanks for reviewing. I'm looking forward to the honeymoon too. I'm not sure about after because eventually I'll have to say goodbye to the lovebirds. The wedding night is posted. Honeymoon coming soon. Enjoy

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 17 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

Hey,

 

wow, this chapter was amazing! The wedding night was wonderful and the cottage is very beautiful. But most of all I liked the way you linked so many quotations from "Breaking Dawn" in this chapter, it was really good! Please go on soon!



Author's Response:

Hi,

Thanks for the wonderful feedback. I thought it was better to have the wedding night at the cottage instead. They both needed some alone time before their long trip to the island.

Honeymoon chapter posted. Enjoy.

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 22 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Hey,

 

wow, again a wonderful chapter! The honeymoon was so great, very romantic and full of emotions.

I'm glad they talked about the baby topic again and I liked the way you linked Kaure in this chapter to their problem. I hope they try to have a baby and that it will work. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!



Author's Response:

Hi,

Thanks again for reviewing. They both deserved a fantastic honeymoon after all the time they spend being physical in the story. 

I'm paving the way for them. This way, if she gets pregnant they have all the information on hand. No drama with a half starved Bella. Next chapter posted. Enjoy

Thanks,

DC :)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 12 Nov 2011 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43

Hey,

 

nice chapter, I'm really glad that they decided on having a baby and I hope that Bella will get pregnant soon and that everything will be fine.

Please go on soon!



Author's Response:

Hi,

Everything will turn out alright. They are making all the preperations. Sorry I forgot to post the last chapter to this site so as a bonus you have 2 chapters this week.

Enjoy

Summary:

Bella, a college student, has had a crush on her friend's brother for awhile. Watch and see what happens as Alice decides to set up a date between her friend and brother.

 

 


Categories: Twilight
Characters: None
Genre: Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 17394 Read Count: 2824
[Report This] Published: 08 Sep 2011 Updated: 26 Jan 2012
Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 19 Sep 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Hey,

 

great story! I just found it and it's wonderful. Edward and Bella are very cute together and they'll be the perfect couple.

Please go on soon!



Author's Response:

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Hey,

 

wonderful chapter, I'm so happy for them, they're so sweet together and it#s nice that they're getting so close!

Please go on soon!



Author's Response:

Summary: Past Featured Story

papi

 

Every political figure has their skeletons and this Senator just likes to play Daddy. Enter the call girl, a woman who gives men exactly what they want. "I would give him what he wanted and what he didn't even know he wanted; then, hook, line, sinker, he would be mine." Daddykink! Mature. ExB

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, G8or Favor8s Read, Stories I've Already read, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 215117 Read Count: 412097
[Report This] Published: 03 Jun 2012 Updated: 25 Aug 2012
Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 18 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

Hey,

 

I'm so glad that you continue this story here and I can't wait for more!

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 02 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

Hey,

 

airplane sex...nice ;-) I'm really curious about the next chapter!

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 09 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

Hey,

 

how great, he proposed to her and she said yes...I really liked it!

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 04 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

Hey,

 

great chapter, I really liked the scene! But it's really sad that this wonderful story will be over so soon, I really like it!

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 20 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

Hey,

 

how sweet...what a wonderful end although I'm also sad that it's nearly over now...

Summary:

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“The best love is the kind that awakens the soul and makes us reach for more, that plants a fire in our hearts and brings peace to our minds" - Nicholas Sparks. A reclusive artist and a musician embark on a journey in NYC, but with their own twist. ExB Mature Daddykink.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Dominance and submission
Series: Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, Brooklyn - to read, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 162463 Read Count: 135539
[Report This] Published: 22 Sep 2012 Updated: 15 Jun 2013
Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 12 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Hey,

great chapter! I liked that they're officially together now and they're a wonderful couple!

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 22 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hey,

 

great, a new story!! And it's really interesting and I'm sure he'll call her ;-)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Hey,

this was really suprising...but I liked the way they get together now and I can't wait for more!

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 17 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Hey,

I really liked the meeting with her friends, they were crazy but funny and really nice! Can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 29 Sep 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Hey,

I really liked their first date...the attraction between them is really strong and I can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 20 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Hey,

great chapter! Please go on soon!!

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 27 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Hey,

great chapter! I really liked Carmen and of course the scene with Edward and Isa...

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 03 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Hey,

wonderful chapter! The conection between them is unbelievable and the sex was really hot...

I'm also glad that Jake is her brother so that he's no rival ;-)

Reviewer: smiley2204 Signed
Date: 25 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Hey,

I liked that Eleazar and Emmett are so happy for Edward and I'm really curious about the brunch...it'll be really interesting!!