[Report This]Date: 28 Feb 2020 3:31 AM Title: Chapter 32
:) loved this story
Date: 15 Nov 2017 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 32
Not your typical mob story! It's obvious you aren't American, but I enjoy trying to figure out what the different words and phrases mean! Thank you! I really enjoyed this story!
Date: 24 Jul 2017 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 32
I'm glad you came back and finished your story.
Date: 24 Jul 2017 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 31
Well this chapter was interesting.
[Report This]Date: 14 Jul 2017 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 32
Great job for your first mafia story.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I never thought anyone would still ne reading it after my long absence.
Date: 14 Jul 2017 5:55 AM Title: Chapter 32
Enjoyed your story.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I write because I enjoy it, but it spurs me on to keep writing, when people read and enjoy them.
Date: 14 Jul 2017 5:32 AM Title: Chapter 26
How can Carlisle overlook how this family treats their wives? It's awful
Date: 14 Jul 2017 5:18 AM Title: Chapter 25
Well Esme really brainwash Carlisle while she was alive. Very sad.
Hoping that things get resolved before Rose is required to marry Royce,but with as angry as Carlisle is at the moment, that may not be possible.
Date: 14 Jul 2017 3:08 AM Title: Chapter 10
If Felix was shot, and Bella is the newly discovered relative, is she now going to be next in line for Aro???
I keep laughing at her one-liners.
Date: 14 Jul 2017 2:30 AM Title: Chapter 4
This isn't good. I guess she doesn't know that you can't really run away from the mob. However, maybe she can????
Date: 14 Jul 2017 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 3
I feel so bad for Bella. She's lonely & needs a friend.
[Report This]Date: 23 Jun 2017 6:07 AM Title: Chapter 32
Thanks for sticking with it & finishing it.
Author's Response:
Thanks for been patient with me and not abandoning the story.
Date: 21 Jun 2017 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 32
Thanks for writing and sharing
Author's Response:
That is so nice!! I've never recieved or seen a Thank you like that before.
Date: 21 Jun 2017 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 32
Thank you for finishing this story...a happy ending for Edward and Bella.
If you decide to do another, I miss the one you started where Bella left Edward to tour Europe and do volunteer work. When she returned, he had already moved on (even though they'd been together for 7-9 years and she was only gone 6 months). I guess you removed it, since it's no longer here. I'd love to see it finished.
You get very good numbers in reviews for this site. Look around...many multi-chapter stories only get 2-3 per chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I have been really lucky with people reading and reviewing my stories. I have only ever posted on this site. What holds me back is every day details, such as, going to school, college, university. It's all different from what I've been used to in England. It makes it harder to write about something you have had no experience of. I think that is what happened with the story you spoke of, I did take it down. I tried to put too many facts in (from the internet) and the story itself got bogged down and lost. Thanks again for reading and reviewing. Knowing people are reading my stories and seem to be enjoying them, gives me the encouragment to continue.
[Report This]Date: 20 Jun 2017 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 32
Good reading‘
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Date: 20 Jun 2017 4:58 AM Title: Chapter 31
Buh Bye Sleeze Balls. Can't wait for Carliisle to go too
[Report This]Date: 19 Jun 2017 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 31
Love your story can't wait to read more .
Date: 19 Jun 2017 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 26
I get the last bit.... plausible deniability.
Date: 19 Jun 2017 2:24 AM Title: Chapter 31
Glad to see you back and hope all is well
Author's Response:
Thank you, everythings back on track now. Thank you for reviewing.
Date: 19 Jun 2017 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 31
Glad Rose got out of the marriage.
Date: 18 Jun 2017 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 31
Thanks for the update, as I have missed this story and look forward to seeing how things end for our E&B and others.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing.
[Report This]Date: 18 Jun 2017 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 31
I'll read it. I like this story.
Author's Response:
I'm glad your enjoying it.
Date: 22 Nov 2016 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 30
I figured the Kings were behind the explosion.
Date: 22 Nov 2016 4:43 AM Title: Chapter 29
Did Edward plan this or did someone else?
Date: 22 Nov 2016 4:38 AM Title: Chapter 28
Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 22 Nov 2016 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 27
I am glad they had a normal cookout and had fun. Hope Alice and the baby are ok.
Date: 22 Nov 2016 4:01 AM Title: Chapter 26
What is Carlisle's problem? Does the Kings have something on Carlisle?
Date: 22 Nov 2016 3:48 AM Title: Chapter 25
OMGosh!!!!!!!!! What in the world is going to happen now?
Date: 22 Nov 2016 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 24
Bella a day her mumbling. Lol. I hope Edward can save Rose.
Date: 22 Nov 2016 2:57 AM Title: Chapter 23
So glad that Rose confided in Bella. Hopefully Edward and Bella can keep rose from being married to Royce. Glad Edward stood up for Jasper and for Alice.
Date: 22 Nov 2016 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 22
Glad the wedding went off without any miss happens
Date: 22 Nov 2016 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 21
So glad that they talked things out love that Bella is standing up for Alice.
Date: 22 Nov 2016 12:48 AM Title: Chapter 20
Glad Jasper came to talk to Bella. Boy Esme is a real bitch. I can't believe that Edward reacted like that.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 11:12 PM Title: Chapter 19
I am glad that Bella was nice to Alice. Glad Bella is still voicing her opinion. Hope she doesn't lose that after marrying Edward.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 18
I am glad that Rose stood up for Bella and more or less called her mom out. Esme's attitude kind of surprises me.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 8:58 PM Title: Chapter 17
I am proud of Edward. He proved himself to Bella. I think Aro and his mename caused the wreck. Could the guy who helped Bella up be on Aro's payroll?
Date: 21 Nov 2016 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 16
Was Aro behind all of this?
Date: 21 Nov 2016 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 15
Edward is getting what he wants
Date: 21 Nov 2016 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 14
Around is crazy. He and Carlos scare me.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 13
Poor Bella.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 12
What is the deal with Aro? Why would he hurt his own granddaughter?
Date: 21 Nov 2016 7:21 PM Title: Chapter 11
Ok Jasper definitely didn't love Maria so why was he engaged to her. That is just wrong. Edward needs to go after Bella and explain his feelings for her.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 10
Wow, who shot Flex? Maybe Alec before Alec was killed. I was a little worried that Felixmight hurt Bella. I worry about Aro hurting her too.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 6:45 PM Title: Chapter 9
I love Bella and her mouth for putting Edward or anybody in their place. Lol
Date: 21 Nov 2016 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 8
Edward said what he did to hurt Bella and hopefully TRY to convince himself. He is starting to have feelings for her. You are doing an awesome job with this story.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 7
Wow, that was an interesting family dinner.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 6
I am loving this Bella and her mouth. Lol!!!!
Date: 21 Nov 2016 4:46 PM Title: Chapter 5
Jasper and and Edward are brothers. What is James's connection? Who is Jasper's fiancee?
Date: 21 Nov 2016 4:25 PM Title: Chapter 4
Ok. I thought Alec worked for Edward so this is a little different turn than I thought. Can't wait to read more.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 4:12 PM Title: Chapter 3
Does Alec work for Edward?
Date: 21 Nov 2016 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 2
I feel sorry for Joe.
Date: 21 Nov 2016 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
Sounds very interesting. Can't wait to read more.
Date: 18 Nov 2016 6:04 AM Title: Chapter 30
Carlisle is unbelivable!
Date: 16 Nov 2016 7:03 PM Title: Chapter 30
Can't blame Rose for wanting to run. Doubt she would have gotten far though. Bet she is being watched by the scumballs. Carlisle really needs to die. What a dick
[Report This]Date: 15 Nov 2016 10:59 AM Title: Chapter 29
Love your story can't wait to read more! Hurry Hurry lol!
Date: 13 Nov 2016 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 29
Can't wait to see how their plans play out
[Report This]Date: 09 Nov 2016 11:17 AM Title: Chapter 29
He gave himself an alibi.
Date: 09 Nov 2016 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 29
Poor Tim. Sucks having to be a pawn to get rid of Carlisle and his psycho "friends"
Date: 09 Nov 2016 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 28
Wow Edward is a good actor. ROFL for her kneeing him.
Date: 08 Nov 2016 7:55 AM Title: Chapter 29
Omg. so thrilling.
[Report This]Date: 08 Nov 2016 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 25
Those three better not feel any blame for Esme's death.
[Report This]Date: 08 Nov 2016 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 23
Maybe she better enjoy it while she can because I don't think it's going to be all sunshine when she returns.
[Report This]Date: 07 Nov 2016 4:51 PM Title: Chapter 5
I'm enjoying this but I'm itching to fix the errors.
[Report This]Date: 07 Nov 2016 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 28
Love your story can't wait to read more ! And we like long chapters so No Problem with that!lol
[Report This]Date: 31 Oct 2016 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 27
Thanks for the updates!!
[Report This]Date: 28 Oct 2016 6:08 AM Title: Chapter 27
I love your story and can't wait to read more! But I has to ask you had Bella graduate from college in the beginning and then when she went to the strip joint you had her underage? How old is she? Just curious ! Anyway great story so far .
Date: 26 Oct 2016 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 27
Carlisle is a jerk! I hope he pulls his head out.
Date: 25 Oct 2016 1:57 AM Title: Chapter 27
I can understand Rose's point. Carlisle is such a dick so yeah he prob wont care.
[Report This]Date: 14 Sep 2016 2:57 PM Title: Chapter 26
Ding dong the kings will be dead!!
Date: 13 Sep 2016 9:21 PM Title: Chapter 26
How can any father want his daughter to marry that?
Date: 13 Sep 2016 6:10 AM Title: Chapter 26
Royce is a pig but Carlisle is really much worse!
Date: 13 Sep 2016 12:05 AM Title: Chapter 26
The king family is nasty and what is up with daddy Cullen
Date: 12 Sep 2016 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 26
Sounds like Carlisle needs to be taken out with the trash, just like the Kings.
Date: 29 Aug 2016 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 25
Bitchme got what was coming to her. Too bad they didn't record the entire conversation with her before B threw her out. Carlisle is a right prick. Hope he either dies or gets some sense knocked into him and soon
[Report This]Date: 29 Aug 2016 8:39 AM Title: Chapter 25
Ding dong the witch is dead!!! Now i'm sensing an uprising!! Carlisle has a death wish.
Date: 29 Aug 2016 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 25
Well families have bad times but this is bad because the old hag took her nasty to the grave. They defened themselves as we all know..
Date: 29 Aug 2016 1:29 AM Title: Chapter 25
Oh crap that was awesome
Date: 28 Aug 2016 2:54 PM Title: Chapter 25
Ding dong the witch is dead.....but now the bastard is born.
Date: 28 Aug 2016 1:11 AM Title: Chapter 25
I feel Bella is inappropriate at times with her temper. She overreacted banning Esme from her son's house and contact with grandchidren. They say you catch more flies with honey than vinegar. Bella has gained a powerful enemy.
Date: 27 Aug 2016 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 25
Okay so apparently reason will not work with Carlisle either as he has apparently been completely by Esme. Rose really should tell everyone why Esme was told to leave, because she basically said she hated her own children, Rose and Jasper, Rose overhearing her cruel comments and also flat out telling Bella that she would be getting her out of Edwards life by any means possible! I totally agree with Bella, the woman obviously had mental health issues which should have been treated, it is Carlisle's own fault he did not get her help as she obviously was not all THERE and she basically ended up killing herself. The woman was crazy enough that I would not put it past her to purposely kill herself in hopes of separating Edward(her only child she loved) from Bella! Looking forward to the next chapter to see what chaos ensues!!! Happy Writing!!!
Date: 24 Aug 2016 1:05 PM Title: Chapter 24
Perhaps a new regime is looming on the horizon. Something must be going on. I can't believe Carlisle would want that for his daughter. Does Esme have something to gain from this? Curiouser snd curiouser.
[Report This]Date: 24 Aug 2016 9:56 AM Title: Chapter 24
Way to speak the truth bella!!
Date: 24 Aug 2016 1:34 AM Title: Chapter 24
Glad they had a good vacation. Carlisle's thinking is def warped.
Date: 24 Aug 2016 12:54 AM Title: Chapter 24
Poor rose!!! I do hope that Edward can save his sister by talking some sense into his dad! Pretty sure that Esme is too far gone to have sense work on her! Looking forward to your next update!!!
Date: 23 Aug 2016 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 23
Go Edward stand up to the crazy women
[Report This]Date: 21 Aug 2016 11:42 PM Title: Chapter 22
Good chapter. Can't wait for the next!
Date: 21 Aug 2016 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 23
I am sooooo glad that Edward is defending Alice now too!!!! As for Aro, EWWWWW!!!!! Poor Bella, I agree with her that he is QUITE CREEPY! Just saying! Also, I am really looking forward "ESME THE MANIPULATIVE WITCH" being knocked down a few dozen pegs. It looks as though Edward and Rose have joined Jasper in FINALLY seeing her for the schemeing and manipulative woman she is, who cares more about how things "look" and what her so called "friends, acquaintances, "FAMILY", business associates, etc." think rather than whether or not her chidren are HAPPY. She doesn't seem to care AT ALL if they are happy or not!!! I'm glad Edward listened to Bella and not only noticed how happy Alice makes Jasper, but commented on it as well. Totally got to say that Esme's comment about Jasper being "OFF HIS MEDS" was a REALLY LOW BLOW and not very MOTHERLY at all!!!! I definately do not see her winning any "MOTHER OF THE YEAR" awards and I am REALLY starting to think that she herself needs to begin taking meds ASAP as it appears that she is "NOT AT ALL RATIONAL"!!! Unfortunately it is her children, daughter-in-law, Alice, and Emment who are the victims of her being COMPLETELY INSUFFERABLE!!! POOR, POOR THINGS! and Happy Writing!!! As always, I'm REALLY looking forward to the next update!!! SEE YA LATER!!!
Date: 21 Aug 2016 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 23
Well well, wonder what crap Bitchme will try to pull while they are gone. It would to be a given she will try something to undermine Bella.
Date: 21 Aug 2016 1:54 PM Title: Chapter 23
Poor Rose... And Alice too. Glad E and B told off Bitchme.
Date: 20 Aug 2016 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 22
I'm kind of wondering if Bitchme will find a way to retaliate. Will Jasper start to appreciate Bella as he realizes she genuinely likes & befriends Alice? So glad Edward explained that he does love her. Can't wait for more updates.
[Report This]Date: 20 Aug 2016 12:34 AM Title: Chapter 22
Esme seems to be a little to relaxed. I don't trust her.
Date: 19 Aug 2016 10:28 PM Title: Chapter 22
Yay, they finally got married. Glad she told Esme off and also that she told Edward how she feels. Hope they have a HEA.