[Report This]Date: 24 May 2010 2:44 AM Title: Chapter 7
deuxième lecture...
je ne trouve pas ça horrible à lire surtout quand on sait que l'histoire va s'améliorer.
Date: 24 May 2010 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 10
I am really liking this story a lot. I love the Edward and Bella story, even moreso now that they've admitted their feelings for each other.
Date: 24 May 2010 12:03 AM Title: Chapter 10
Mistake: At the very end of chapter 10 it says 'Chapter 10' and then below that it says 'Seth's POV'. That should be at the top of the chapter.
Sorry! I'm not trying to be rude or annoying but it's just a habit of mine. I know everyone makes mistakes (me included) but it bothers me to no end when I see them. Sometimes I'm a bit more oblivious to my own but I try not to be because I don't want to sound like a hyprocrite.
Author's Response:
never feel like you cant tell me when something is wrong it went in right but the site has on ocassion had its glitches i preveiwed it and everything was right then the system messed with it. i have fixed it again so all is good thank you for letting me know there was a problem if you had not it would not have been fixed, so thank you again! michele
[Report This]Date: 23 May 2010 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 10
OH MY GOD! James! I know it has to be James! I am glad that Bella came out of the darkness, but i hope that Bella and Edward are alright when they get to the farm. I have a bad feeling that James is going to take Bella from Edward. Please post again soon, I am on the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter.
Date: 23 May 2010 11:35 PM Title: Chapter 10
I can't wait to see what happens next but all these POV's are killing me. There is so much going on, it's exciting and nerve recking at the same time
Date: 23 May 2010 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 10
hmmm who made the decision.
Date: 23 May 2010 10:53 PM Title: Chapter 10
Great Chapter
Date: 23 May 2010 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 10
Poor Seth, being rejected by your parents because something happened to you, that you couldn't control.
Date: 22 May 2010 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 9
I really like where you went with this. I have to say I only want to hear from Bella and Edward everyone else, don't really think we need their POV. K I have no ides what he's going to do but let this be a lesson learned that o matter what the situation he is never to break his word to her. Also was it James that killed Bree's dad or did he change her?
Date: 22 May 2010 11:33 AM Title: Chapter 9
I am just now finding your story. It is excellent. Loving all the twists and turns. I am especially intrigued with how Bree is going to figure in ... and when Bella is waking up.
Date: 22 May 2010 10:25 AM Title: Chapter 9
once again it's very sad... But I really like it!!! Bella is still a child in her emotional development, obviously looking for a comfort zone for exploring the world. How old is she again? The part with the clothing made me smile, although it was painful. Please update again, it is very well written.
Author's Response:
yes she is emotionally behind since she was taken when she was eight and was found when she was 18, thank you for reading it! michele
Date: 22 May 2010 7:18 AM Title: Chapter 4
damage control wow great plot
[Report This]Date: 22 May 2010 5:08 AM Title: Chapter 9
O.M.G. this story is A-Freakin-Mazing!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! i am glad you like it! thanks for reading it, michele
Date: 22 May 2010 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 9
Nice stuff! Poor Bella! You have to love Edward - guilty with Bella, screamed at by Alice, and you haver to figure Charlie won't be thrilled! Lovin' it all!
[Report This]Date: 22 May 2010 2:41 AM Title: Chapter 9
So it seems James is still alive and he is the one that is with Bree. I wish the best for her. It was sweet that Charlie was checking up on her. He has a big heart. Well It seems that Jacob just might have a chance with Stella. seems she is quite wise and knows more about how to inter react and to what is going on. bella give edward a shot. but bella is learing so much. she has to be like a kid in so many ways relearning. be patient edward
love it
[Report This]Date: 22 May 2010 1:52 AM Title: Chapter 9
Another great chapter, poor Bella. I wonder what Edward does to fix this
:)
Date: 22 May 2010 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 9
Oh how sad. Poor Bella. Damn Edward for breaking every ounce of trust that Bella had in him. I hope he can some how fix what he did. Please post again soon. Great chapter as always.
Date: 22 May 2010 1:37 AM Title: Chapter 9
Whats not to like? The story is wonderful.
Date: 22 May 2010 12:12 AM Title: Chapter 9
Poor Bella, so sad. So...paranoid? Is that the word I'm looking for? And as for Edward...idiot. But we love him anyway.
Author's Response:
paranoid works well, and we do love edward even when he is an idiot! thanks for reading michele
Date: 22 May 2010 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 9
I love, love, love this story!!
Author's Response:
thank you for read it, i love to hear when people like it! thanks again michele
Date: 22 May 2010 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 9
Just wanted to say that I am really enjoying your story so far.
Author's Response:
thank you for reading it, i really do appreciate it. michele
Date: 21 May 2010 11:32 AM Title: Chapter 8
Great Chapter
Date: 18 May 2010 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 8
Wonderful chapter! You bring a lot of detail into the experiences that Bella is both having and feeling now. Kudos on that! Bella's confusion and fear of being abandoned are both heartbreaking and profoundly deep.
Author's Response:
i am sorry it took so long to respond to your reveiw i was trying to get the new chapter up. your reveiw definitaly pushed me to get it there. it feels good to know people like and appreciate my hard work. thank you so much for reading it! michele
Date: 18 May 2010 2:34 PM Title: Chapter 8
loveing the story
Date: 18 May 2010 2:34 PM Title: Chapter 8
loveing the story
[Report This]Date: 18 May 2010 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 8
Man that is alot. I am glad bella seems to be getting more answers. it is good for her. stella seems to be getting on with her life. she seems to be happy with her master and the girls. i hope things get worked out between stella and jacob. i am looking forward to the next chapter
love it
Date: 18 May 2010 2:58 AM Title: Chapter 8
Good chapter. Poor Edward and Bella this is not going to be easy.
Date: 18 May 2010 1:56 AM Title: Chapter 8
This story is so heartbreakingly sad but written very well. You have such a good way of making the reader almost understand what it would like to behave that way and why. Hope you update some more soon
Author's Response:
sorry it took so long to resp;ond to your review. thank you for giving my story a shot, it's people like you that spurr me on to be a better writer, i hope you enjoy the new chapter as much as the last rest, michele
Date: 18 May 2010 1:51 AM Title: Chapter 8
Bree is becoming a newborn vamp, Jacob and Stella are an "item", and the rogue vamps are heading towards Forks...thats alot of info for one chapter. Can't wait for the next update.
[Report This]Date: 17 May 2010 10:32 PM Title: Chapter 8
brilliant chapter - I am truly addicted to this story! I loved the way you have developed your characters. Great job
Date: 17 May 2010 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 8
Great chapter. I am a little worried about Charlie what with James, Victoria and who i am guessing is Laurent? I sure hope that they do not go after him to get to the wolves. I am also worried about Bella. I sure hope that she can someday find that she can be normal like everyone else. I love how Edward is so patient and loving with her. Please update soon.
Date: 15 May 2010 8:10 PM Title: Chapter 7
aww, that's so sad!! But still, a really good story. Please continue writing this story
Date: 14 May 2010 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 7
i am really liking the direction you are going next up friendly visit with Stella see how she is doing i like that Jake imprinted on her so she has someone too worried on who bree found great chapter
Date: 14 May 2010 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 6
baby steps is the best wonder how Stella is doing
Date: 14 May 2010 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 5
Hope she is happy good chapter
Date: 14 May 2010 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 3
its good i like it
Date: 14 May 2010 4:56 PM Title: Chapter 2
wow so tense good chapter
Date: 14 May 2010 4:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow so sad but while its different from what i am used to reading from you its not bad
Date: 10 May 2010 8:51 PM Title: Chapter 7
great chapter! :) Can't wait to see more
Date: 10 May 2010 12:25 PM Title: Chapter 7
Great job! You've taken the steriotypical relationship between Jacob and Edward and flipped it on its ear. Nice one! I'm particularly fond of getting inside everyone's heads.
Date: 09 May 2010 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 7
Great Chapter
Date: 09 May 2010 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 7
I'm sure I missed it, but how old was Bella when she was abducted?
Author's Response:
bella was 8 and she was gone for 10 yrs so now she is 18 and edwards just finished high school a couple of weeks before the girls were found. i hope this helps and always feel free to ask any questions! thanks for reading michele
[Report This]Date: 09 May 2010 5:59 AM Title: Chapter 7
man they have along way to go.
i thought for a minute that jacob had imprinted on bella. uhoh i thought he imprinted on bella. thank god it was stella.she needs someone to love her. they all got dealt an incredible hand. they all have a heavy task in front of them. poor bella you have to be very careful with the actions and words. it seems as if she is still a child re-learning everythign from scratch. love it
[Report This]Date: 09 May 2010 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 7
Sorry I keep saying this, but I love your story! I have no other way to describe it besides one of my favorites!
Date: 09 May 2010 12:07 AM Title: Chapter 7
jake and stella sitting in tree. LOL
Date: 08 May 2010 10:26 PM Title: Chapter 7
Good chapter. When do we find out for sure who Bree hooked up with and wouldn't they have checked her background before putting her back in that horrid situation?
Author's Response:
soon next chapter is about what charlie and the pack find so it will be after that one. as for a background check, abusers are very good at hiding it. so if it goes unreported it tends to stay that way. but no worries this is a very smart charlie and he will be paying a visit to bree's old home in his investigation.
Date: 08 May 2010 5:27 PM Title: Chapter 7
Thanks for the fast updates. Bella seems to be progressing rather well considering she was with Alistair for 10 years. Looking forward to seeing how Jacob interacts with Stella now that we know he has imprinted. Wonder what the Denali clan will think about this new revelation?
Date: 08 May 2010 4:56 PM Title: Chapter 7
That was such a great chapter. I wish Bella could understand that Edward loves her, but I guess that will take her awhile? Please update again soon.
Date: 08 May 2010 12:09 AM Title: Chapter 5
Great Chapter
Date: 07 May 2010 1:47 AM Title: Chapter 6
Wal-Mart is a scary place for us normal folks...I can only imagine the scarring that happened to Alice.
Date: 06 May 2010 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 6
awesome chapter! Lots of little baby steps! :) Can't wait to see more
Date: 06 May 2010 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 6
Oh i love this story! Please update soon!
Date: 06 May 2010 6:57 AM Title: Chapter 3
I am totally confused now. Bella refers to a bronze haired Master drinking from her, but it cannot be Edward. I there something wrong? What did I miss? Are there two Edwards, has he a split personality?
Secondly, I object a litttle to the fact that "normal" Edward aknowledges to be in love in such a hurried, flat way. If it is a life changing event like it is when vampires find their mates, there should have been more drama, more pathos, more description.
This said, I will continue reading this story.
I hope you will clarify things for me.
Author's Response:
HI! okay to clarify up to now, she thought the bronzed hair master was going to but he informed herr that the cullens and denaslis not drink from humans. so far in the story the only one who drank from her was her first master after he took her back from the hospital. as for the explanation to what happen when he first saw her its in chapter 7, he discusses it in a heart to heart with someone. so you get a lot of emotion explaination there. i dont want to say too much but i hope you like and please feel free to ask me anything if i can tell you i will. i know i've been keeping his feelings a little unknown but in chapter 7 its all about feeling. thanks michel
[Report This]Date: 06 May 2010 4:45 AM Title: Chapter 6
Man she has alot of re-training to do. you would think she would be okay with the girls but man does she listen to her master. poor alice so tramatized over her walmart expierence. i love the ice cream. something bella is excited about, love it. Should be interesting to see what happens when she is brought back tot he farm, or when she gets a new bed with linen. alot of first to look forward with her. Love the story
Date: 06 May 2010 4:12 AM Title: Chapter 6
I love Ben and jerry's too.
Date: 06 May 2010 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 6
The perfection in this chapter is in the details. How hard it is for Bella to be in public, her ABSOLUTE instense follow through on words and orders. You bring my head to a different place. You know it...the "what if" place. Kudos!
Author's Response:
thank you for your glowing reveiw, its reveiws like yours that gives me a great amount of pride in what i am doing. i appreciate every reveiw so always let me know how i am doing right or wrong. its the only way i will acheive to do better. thank you so much for reading it. michele
Date: 06 May 2010 3:02 AM Title: Chapter 6
Good chapter, poor Charlie that has to be devastating.
[Report This]Date: 06 May 2010 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 6
I really like that Edward is trying to bring her back one small step at a time .I hope Bella recovers soon but love the story
[Report This]Date: 06 May 2010 12:40 AM Title: Chapter 6
Nice story, can't stop reading.
Date: 05 May 2010 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 5
Wow, I can't wait to see what happens next. I wonder who the new Master is. Is it James or someone else? How will Edward show his affection for Bella without scaring her? Since she has never had any type of sexual contact with a man. Does she even know about those things? Since there was no schooling, did Alistar tutor her? Does she know how to read and do math and such things
Author's Response:
The only schooling she has had was in school until she was eight, then Stella when she came into the fold. She only has unexplain feeling right now but in chapter 7 we deal more with feelings, when edward takes her back to the house. They get to see a differant side of each other when they are totally alone.
Date: 04 May 2010 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 5
oh crap! Great chapter! Can't wait to see more ;)
Date: 03 May 2010 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 5
Liking it, a lot.
-k
Date: 03 May 2010 11:56 AM Title: Chapter 5
Well, I just caught up on your story...I love the way you are making the characters pop. We all go in thinking the characters a certain way, and you totally changed the playlist on them. I think there is so much you have yet to show us, and I can't wait to read and find out. Bree was jealous of Bella and Stella - Bella was jealous of Stella...thins is interesting. I hope you can keep it up - can't wait for your next update.
Author's Response:
thanks for your reveiw it really means a lot to me that people are enjoying it. i am trying to be very creating in my writing and avoiding the typical everyday stuff. i dont like to reuse other's stories, no matter how awesome they are. i want to respect those authors work not copy it. You have picked up on the one thing that i was not sure people were getting. jealousy happens when there are too many hens in the hen house...i hope you keep reading next chapter is already in the works so as soon as its ready i'll post i am not one to hold until a certain time. so dont be surprised if it updates daily or every other day. thanks again michele
Date: 03 May 2010 5:20 AM Title: Chapter 3
I hope this doesn't come out wrong. I liked your story but found it a litle difficult to read because I thought it was Edward that had the girls so now that we know it's now, I reall y LOVE it. It has a whole new twist now. Plus the fact that it's 'alistair' spices it up, because it's always James. Love it so far.
Author's Response:
it did not come out wrong at all. i know the storys you mean where edward is bad guy turned nice. here he was always the good guy he's just caught up in the mess just like everyone else that alistair created. Alistair's charachter alway bothered me, he was creepy and i was tired of james always being the baddie...dont get me wrong if james shows up here, he wont be nice...right now there is no plan to bring him in but that doesn't mean he wont. i am glad you stuck with me to see the truth. thanks for resding michele
Date: 03 May 2010 4:38 AM Title: Chapter 5
Wonderful chapter. The ins and outs of the human psyche are amazing.
[Report This]Date: 03 May 2010 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 5
I really love this story I can't wait to see how bella act around edward now that they are together and i wonder what will happen next .
[Report This]Date: 03 May 2010 2:56 AM Title: Chapter 5
Poor Bree. I wish there was something they could have done for her. her home life was worse than what she left.
I know Stella will be fine. I just hope she doesn't try to have sex with Eleazar. i know Carmen would not like that.
bella is very lucky with edward. i understand she knows he is her master but she doesn't know that she is his mate. do the girls realize what a mate means in their world? I love it
Author's Response:
i ran out of families to place her with but alteast i gave her someone to watch over her...dont worry stella knows that carmen and eleazar are mates and she does know what they are. bella doesn't since she never saw what stella and alistair were doing and she doesn't remember her parents very well so right know she doesn't know what it is to be mated but that comes up next chapter...lets see how edward explains that one!
Date: 03 May 2010 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 5
must be James. ugh poor bree
Date: 02 May 2010 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 4
Edeward's going to have his hands full! Should be fascinating though!!!
Date: 02 May 2010 9:29 PM Title: Chapter 4
Edward can be my master anyday ;)
[Report This]Date: 02 May 2010 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 4
this is gonna take awhile, you can't undo years of programming like that in a few days.....
[Report This]Date: 01 May 2010 6:35 PM Title: Chapter 4
OMG love the story.
i am glad allistair is gone. I like the fact that charlie knows about the wolves and th ecold ones. that was great the way thta played out. I love he told him that one of his kind did this to bella and one of his kind will be fixing her.
love it can't wait for the next chapter
Date: 01 May 2010 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 4
Go Charlie and the Pack. At least charlie understands that it will be a long time to fix B.
Date: 01 May 2010 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 4
great chapter! I love that Charlie knows everything.. makes things much easier :)
Date: 29 Apr 2010 9:44 PM Title: Chapter 3
awesome story so far! Keep writing...can't wait to see more :)
Date: 28 Apr 2010 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 3
Great chapter, and your "puzzle pieces" are all falling into place nicely. And may I say congratulations! This is the first story I've read in ages where Tanya isn't a b!*^#@! Not that she's my favorite or anything, it just shows imagination and originality on your part. Nice cliffhanger (treehanger?) too!
Date: 28 Apr 2010 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 3
Pretty good so far. I'm following the storyline, it's got my attention! Poor Bella!!!
[Report This]Date: 28 Apr 2010 2:23 PM Title: Chapter 3
j'adore, l'histoire est géniale!
Date: 28 Apr 2010 9:05 AM Title: Chapter 3
Interesting story...keep going
[Report This]Date: 28 Apr 2010 4:47 AM Title: Chapter 3
Okay so I just started this story today. It is very interesting and I can't wait to read the next chapter.
love it
Date: 28 Apr 2010 4:14 AM Title: Chapter 3
hmm so not james.....interesting.
[Report This]Date: 28 Apr 2010 1:34 AM Title: Chapter 3
Alistair, what a great use for that strange vampire!! Love your story!!
Date: 28 Apr 2010 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 3
I have really enjoyed the first 3 chapters. Looking forward to more.
[Report This]Date: 28 Apr 2010 12:18 AM Title: Chapter 3
how dangerous is Allistair???? as bad as James???
Date: 27 Apr 2010 11:23 PM Title: Chapter 3
Cool story, I like the story line so far.
[Report This]Date: 27 Apr 2010 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 3
loved it can't wait to see what happens next update when you can thanks....
Date: 27 Apr 2010 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 3
great chapter