Date: 01 Oct 2018 10:01 AM Title: Epilogue
Great story. Wish you would write more stories
Author's Response:
Thank you for youe review of my story. I've not written in a few years as I became a full itme care giver to my husband. He just passed away and once Things calm down and get back to a simi-normal I plan on writing as it's a huge passion of mine.
Date: 01 Oct 2018 10:01 AM Title: Epilogue
Great story. Wish you would write more stories
Date: 26 Jul 2016 11:54 PM Title: Epilogue
OMGosh!!!!!! Awesome ending. I have truly enjoyed reading your story. Thank you for sharing with us.
Date: 26 Jul 2016 2:44 AM Title: Chapter 19
They each have one now
Date: 26 Jul 2016 2:31 AM Title: Chapter 18
I figured she would get pregnant when I read that she and Carlisle spent that one night just the two of them.
Date: 26 Jul 2016 2:16 AM Title: Chapter 17
Glad she and Rose worked things out. Wow, what an anniversary.
Date: 26 Jul 2016 1:10 AM Title: Chapter 16
I was surprised that Jasper used nipple clamps on her since she is breastfeeding.
Date: 26 Jul 2016 12:55 AM Title: Chapter 15
I hope that was not the 1st time she had sex after having the baby. For Carlisle to just take her that hard would have been wrong if it was her 1st time after the baby. I also think he was a little harsh for it being their 1st time back in the playroom after being outside for so long and also right after having the baby.
Date: 26 Jul 2016 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 14
So glad everything went good. I feel for people who have long labors. My longest labor was my 1st child. It was from 1st contraction to delivery was 4 hours. My next was 2 hours. My last was 2 and a half hours. My last 2 children were all natural, no epidural.
Date: 25 Jul 2016 11:04 PM Title: Chapter 13
It's time!!!!!! It's time!!!!!!! Glad she apologized to Alice
Date: 25 Jul 2016 10:47 PM Title: Chapter 12
See she can still take care of her men.
Date: 25 Jul 2016 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 11
I think maybe Bella needs a spanking from her Masters.
Date: 25 Jul 2016 4:43 PM Title: Chapter 10
Glad things seem to have worked out for Alice. I love me some sexy swing. They are lots of fun.
Date: 25 Jul 2016 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 9
Bella and this baby is going to be so spoiled.
Date: 25 Jul 2016 3:03 PM Title: Chapter 8
Some how I knew that James was Alice's Dom after her being hurt. Is there anyway that maybe Alice will join Bella, Jasper and Carlisle?
Date: 25 Jul 2016 2:25 PM Title: Chapter 7
Glad her dr, Alice is aware of their lifestyle. I wish I could get my husband to try some wax play on me.
Date: 25 Jul 2016 2:08 PM Title: Chapter 6
They finally both had her at the same time.
Date: 25 Jul 2016 3:29 AM Title: Chapter 5
I can't believe they did not ask her if she was on birth control.
Date: 25 Jul 2016 2:46 AM Title: Chapter 4
She did good article the party and no one seemed to recognize them.
Date: 25 Jul 2016 2:10 AM Title: Out Take
She handled that very well.
Date: 24 Jul 2016 11:04 PM Title: Chapter 3
Again,poor Bella. I hope the boys take good care of her.
Date: 24 Jul 2016 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 2
Poor Bella. At least her guys are there for her
Date: 24 Jul 2016 6:10 PM Title: Chapter 1
Merry Christmas!!!!! What a gift. Their family is very open minded.
Date: 14 May 2016 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 1
three people that love each other fully! great plot! even if maybe the scene are too fast....
Date: 15 Jun 2015 4:37 AM Title: Chapter 2
I have enjoyed reading so far! :)
Date: 18 Jul 2014 11:32 AM Title: Chapter 8
Loved it! Poor Alice!
Author's Response:
Thank you
HUGS
Date: 18 Jul 2014 11:20 AM Title: Chapter 7
Loved it!
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Thank you
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Date: 18 Jul 2014 11:10 AM Title: Chapter 6
Loved it!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much
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Date: 18 Jul 2014 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 5
Loved it!
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Thank you so much
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Date: 18 Jul 2014 10:37 AM Title: Chapter 4
Loved it!
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Thank you
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Date: 18 Jul 2014 6:56 AM Title: Out Take
Loved it!
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Thank you
HUGS
Date: 18 Jul 2014 6:40 AM Title: Chapter 3
Loved it!
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Thank you
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Date: 18 Jul 2014 6:02 AM Title: Chapter 2
Loved it! Poor Bella!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much
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Date: 18 Jul 2014 5:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
Loved it!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading and enjoying my story.
Hugs
Date: 14 Oct 2013 10:53 AM Title: Chapter 1
I had to stop reading - the abuse of grammar and punctuation, particularly commas, gave me an aneurysm.
You clearly need a better editor.
Author's Response:
You have the right to think as you feel.... it's no skin off my back if you didn't like how it was edited.
HUGS
Date: 10 Jan 2013 7:03 PM Title: Epilogue
Love the story!! :) It was a great story and I love to read the whole thing :)
Date: 03 Jan 2013 5:01 PM Title: Epilogue
Wow, what a way to end! That was your hottest lemon by far, lol. I think the epilogue deserves an epilogue all of it's own to continue in the playroom, but then I can be just a tad greedy, bwahahahaha!! I'm so glad that everything has turned out for them, they've had their ups and downs but they've found their way through with the help of their family and friends. I've really enjoyed this story, thank you for sharing it.
Jane x
Date: 03 Jan 2013 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 19
Awww, another girl and so tiny but perfect and healthy and that's what matters. I'm so glad that both Jasper and Carlisle get to experience the joy of their own child. Little Jasmyne's going to be a fab big sister. Will the permanent morning sickness put Bella off having more and what about the wedding or commitment ceremony? I'm off to find out.
Jane x
Date: 03 Jan 2013 3:54 PM Title: Chapter 18
Awww, another baby. It looks as though these three are going to be super fertile and double bagging will be the only answer, lol. The baby has to be Carlisle's, I know he'll love it no matter what but he'd be so gutted to have to wait even longer to have a biological child.
Jane x
Date: 03 Jan 2013 2:35 PM Title: Chapter 17
That was hot! *phew* All anniversaries should be celebrated that way, lol. I'm really glad that Rose and Bella have developed a friendship. I'm glad that she's come to terms with the fact that it doesn't matter how or who you love but that you do love and that it's returned.
Jane x
Date: 03 Jan 2013 4:19 AM Title: Chapter 16
God, when can I go round for dinner? Lol. Bella should take comfort in her weekend of play not being the disaster she feels it is. She realised what had made her slip and now Carlisle knows they can do something about it. It''s bound to take time to re-adjust after being away from it for so long and, of course, everything else that's happened.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jan 2013 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 15
Hmmm, I hope Bella's sorted out her birth control or else there might be another little baby on the way soon. It's quite the juggling act they have going on and I think Bella just lost herself in the moment, she has so many roles now it's going to take a bit more time to compartmentalise each one.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jan 2013 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 14
Awww, baby Jasmyne. The next one's going to Carlisle's then, lol, we'll let her get over this one first. The labour wasn't that bad apart from the frustrating part when the contractions stopped, Bella must have given a massive push for her to pop out so quickly, lol. I'm glad she arrived safely and Bella's alright. Mums get treated well in the US, in the UK after the baby's been bathed, Mum's delivered the afterbirth and baby's had a go at latching on then it's Mums turn for the slow walk to have a bath. It's quite the puzzle, after parting with an 8lb baby, to work out how to get into a bath without any help, lol. Wouldn't have missed it for the world.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jan 2013 6:29 PM Title: Chapter 13
Even though it's exciting that the baby's on it's way I feel sorry for Bella being in labour on her birthday. My daughter was born 2 days after my birthday, I wasn't in labour on my birthday and thank God for that because I wouldn't wish a birthday full of pain on anyone. Will they share the same birthday or not? I hope they don't. This will sound really selfish but as a parent you give up so much and it's nice to have a day for yourself and not to have to share.
Jane x
Date: 02 Jan 2013 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 12
Although Bella's all hormonal and moody I do think she's behaving like a petulant child throwing a tantrum because she can't have her own way, her age is really beginning to show. She really should be able to reconcile in her mind the fact that not having sex for a few weeks means her daughter has a better chance of being born when she's full term with, fingers crossed, no health problems. Nothing is more important than that. The guys will survive, they might have to wait even longer after the birth as Bella might not feel like having sex for quite a few weeks, lol.
Jane x
Author's Response:
I was 22 when I was acting like this, it made people think I was younger than I was and that I wasn't old enough to be having a baby.
Hugs
Date: 02 Jan 2013 2:25 PM Title: Chapter 11
I know Bella's frustrated and hormonal but can't she rationalise the fact that she has to slow down to make sure she has a healthy baby at all? It could be worse she could be on permanent bed rest and only allowed up for an hour a day. The sooner it's time for the baby to arrive the better, lol.
Jane x
Author's Response:
First I want to say sorry I didn't respond sooner I didn't get the notifications that you had left reviews. I know TWCS is having problems and I guess that is one of their problems, with that said, I will say.... OK Bella is acting like I did with my second pregnancy. I didn't like the fact my doctor made me quit working and stay at home all because I was dialating and not having contractions, for me I know most of that was because of all the snow and ice on the ground and I walked every where. I still didn't handle it correctly and took it out on everyone around me.
HUGS
Date: 01 Jan 2013 7:19 PM Title: Chapter 10
Lol, didn't the Senator and Alice have a lot in common. *raises eyebrow* Carlisle and Jasper know their Doms. The swing is proving popular, lol, I wouldn't mind a go myself. *grins*
Happy New year.
Jane x
Author's Response:
I for one would love a swing, but I guess you have to have a sex life to have a need for one. Cancer took that and playing away from me. When you belong to a club and get to watch other Dom's with their subs you learn a lot about them and add in a friendship you start to understand them.
Happy New Year
Date: 31 Dec 2012 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 9
kidnapped, lol, in the nicest possible way or course. It's definitely exhausting being spoiled with shopping, it always seems like a good idea until you're entering the fiftieth shop of that day, lol. I love how close the whole family is and how loved they make Bella feel. Is Alice going to be ready for another Dom so soon? It could take her a while to get over what happened to her never mind to actually submit to a Dom again. A lot of trust will need to be built up between them.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Only time will tell when Alice is ready, but you will get to read that hehe.
HUGS
Date: 31 Dec 2012 1:36 PM Title: Chapter 8
I can understand why Alice would not want to report James for what he's done given his position in the police. I would be scared as well. At the end of the day she has to do what's right for her but James will do this again to someone else and he'll carry on until someone says enough and either reports him or kills him. I'm so glad she felt secure enough in her friendship with Bella to ask her for help and Im sure the guys will help her too.
Jane x
Author's Response:
It's a very tough postion Alice is in.
HUGS
Date: 31 Dec 2012 1:10 PM Title: Chapter 7
Mmmm, the wax play was really yummy. I love how Bella's so horny and she makes no excuses for it. Is it the pregnancy? I know I was like that when I was pregnant, lol. I'm so glad they've found Alice to be her doctor, someone involved in the lifestyle will be much more understanding.
My ratings are based on everything really, punctuation, spelling, grammar, plot, how the story flows. Overall you have a really good story that flows well and makes me want to carry on reading, which I personally feel is a major hurdle overcome. Now I might sound as though I'm contradicting myself because although your story does flow, sometimes it feels rushed and a bit choppy (does that make sense?) Sometimes grammar and punctuation are incorrect and your tenses can become muddled but it doesn't detract from your story. I hope this helps and please know that I don't wish to offend you, you're still a better author than me for actually posting your work and putting yourself out there and there's probably half a dozen punctuation and grammatical errors in this review, lol.
Jane x
Author's Response:
You have not offended me. I know I'm not perfect. tenses are my weakest point.
HUGS
Date: 31 Dec 2012 12:16 PM Title: Chapter 6
You know some people could get jealous. Bella goes from being a virgin to having two guys at the same time and some hot sex. Is it me that's jealous? Lol, what do you think? *pouts*
Jane x
Author's Response:
I would give anything to have these two men blushes and runs and hides.
HUGS
Date: 31 Dec 2012 12:00 PM Title: Chapter 5
No surprise there then, I am wondering which one is the Dad though, lol. I'm glad that they didn't get mad at Bella realising that they should have talked about birth control and what Bella was using, right at the beginning. Will the pregnancy cause problems for Bella at school, is she going to miss a lot of school as the baby will probably be due right at the beginning of the school year?
Jane x
Author's Response:
you will have to see what goes down.
HUGS
Date: 31 Dec 2012 11:39 AM Title: Chapter 4
I think Bella's showing amazing control to say that she's only just been introduced to the scene. How she managed not to orgasm with that bullet inside her all night, I have no idea, lol. Finally, it's clicked with her about her period and possibly being pregnant.
Jane x
Author's Response:
It's been so long since I've written this that I can't tell you what I was thinking or why I had her do certian things. I can say that I can hold off orgasms and cum on command.
HUGS
Date: 31 Dec 2012 11:19 AM Title: Out Take
If Bella's not pregnant by the time she gets to that clinic it will be a flaming miracle. I know she's got her mind still on the loss of her parents but she really needs to her head together on this one, unless it's a subconscious action so that she'll no longer be alone in the world. Of course you could be completely leading me up the garden path, lol, I hope you are. I think Bella's idea of being shown all the toys in the playroom was a good one and I'm a little surprised that, knowing how Bella had no experience whatsoever, the guys didn't do this in the first place or at least explain what they were using on her once they started to play.
Jane x
Author's Response:
They didn't want to scare here and for some people who have no exerience it would scare them.
HUGS
Date: 31 Dec 2012 10:54 AM Title: Chapter 3
Poor Bella, she's grief stricken and feeling alone, she's just drifting in her own life and needs something to anchor her. Will Jasper and Carlisle be her salvation or will all of this now be too soon after her parents death? Time will tell I suppose.
Jane x
Author's Response:
Time will tell how everything goes.
HUGS
Date: 31 Dec 2012 3:33 AM Title: Chapter 2
Well I wasn't expecting that to happen. Poor Bella, even though they wouldn't have approved of her relationship with the guys they were still her parents and she loved them. I can't believe that Bella wasn't down at the clinic after their first weekend together. Is she going to be pregnant already when she finally gets there?
Jane x
Author's Response:
I'm not sure why I decided to have Bella's parents die, but it felt like the right thing to do.
HUGS
Date: 31 Dec 2012 3:00 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow, a lot went on in this chapter, your story really moves fast. I was surprised by Bella being so forward at the beginning but she was a girl on a mission to keep her college place. I think she's probably done that anyway without the sexual favours, they just came as a major bonus, lol. Another surprise is Jasper and Carlisle's family being so open and accepting of their new poly relationship, well all but Rose. *rolls eyes* I get the feeling that Bella's parents will be disowning her in the not too distant future so it's good that she'll have her surrogate family. It saddens me that parents do that to their children, nothing on this earth could make me disown my daughter.
Jane x
Author's Response:
When this was first written it was a one shot for a contest and everyone asked me to continue it.
HUGS
Date: 13 Dec 2012 8:39 PM Title: Epilogue
This was a fun story to read. I'm a little sad it's over but I liked how it ended.
Thank you for the great story.
Author's Response:
Saddly all stories have to end. I'm glad you unjoyed reading it I had fun writing it.
Hugs
Date: 13 Dec 2012 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
I am so sorry!! I lost my dad to that monster of the worst kind!
Author's Response:
Yup that moster has now taken both my parents. And shockingly my hubby has survived lung cancer next month will be 12 years.
HUGS
Date: 13 Dec 2012 6:59 AM Title: Epilogue
Missed you so much!!
Author's Response:
Thank you for missing me. I'm back. RL took a turn for the worst. Mom got sick with cancer and it took her real fast.
HUGS
Date: 13 Dec 2012 3:07 AM Title: Epilogue
yummy end. Thank you for writing and sharing.
Author's Response:
It was a yummy ending and I felt the right way to end this story.
HUGS
Date: 13 Dec 2012 2:34 AM Title: Epilogue
loved the chpater looking forward to more
Author's Response:
Saddly that was the end for this story.
HUGS
Date: 24 Jul 2012 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 19
looking forard to the last chapter !
Author's Response:
Thank you so much and I'll do my best and not make you wait to long.
Hugs
Date: 24 Jul 2012 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 2
Hi, i don't usually review but i have to say .... i got hook on your story ... i love the way you write ... keep up the good work and thank you for helping me escape my reality ....
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your kind words. I'll keep writing.
Hugs
Date: 24 Jul 2012 4:22 PM Title: Chapter 19
AWW so sweet. love those boys
Author's Response:
Yes you've got to love the boys.
Hugs
Date: 24 Jul 2012 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 18
can't wait for more
Author's Response:
Thank you so much and here is the next chapter.
Hugs
Date: 15 Jul 2012 2:33 AM Title: Chapter 18
looking forward to more
Author's Response:
Thank you so much and I'll do my best to have it up soon.
Hugs
Date: 15 Jul 2012 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 18
Lovely chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much and I'm hoping to have the next chapter done soon.
Hugs
Date: 14 Jul 2012 11:00 PM Title: Chapter 18
sweet chapter. Yea on Pregos
Author's Response:
Thank you my dear for sticking with me.... Yup we'll meet the new addtion soon.
Hugs
Date: 14 Jul 2012 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 18
So glad to saee you update this story.... I just love it.
Catherine
Author's Response:
I feel bad that it's been so long.... Chapter 19 should be done mid week if everything goes well.
Hugs
Date: 02 Jul 2012 1:50 PM Title: Chapter 12
Can Bella spell BRAT? Lord she's just not getting the big picture of what it would be like if the baby came too soon and was hospitalized or god forbid died. Then she'd really hate Alice. She's a smart girl I'm sure she'll at some point she'll get some sense from somewhere.
Author's Response:
yes we can say for sure Bella was a brat I did the same when the same thing happened to me in real life.
HUGS
Date: 01 Jul 2012 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 4
Pregger???...
Date: 01 Jul 2012 2:58 PM Title: Out Take
Movin on, I'm excited for their ménage trios. A play party, perhaps?
Date: 01 Jul 2012 2:35 PM Title: Chapter 3
;-)
Author's Response:
Thank you.
Hugs
Date: 01 Jul 2012 2:22 PM Title: Chapter 2
;-))
Im enjoying this story and am glad to read your finding your reward in writing it versus our, your appreciative readers, words.
Thanks for writing.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading.
Hugs
Date: 23 Jan 2012 2:17 AM Title: Chapter 17
Glad to have you and the story back. Bella needed to tell us about the year, about her feelings all through it, especially the recent ones. I think it worked perfectly and you gave it a perfect ending.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much... After struggling with this chapter for over a month I dreamed as I wrote it. It's funny once I started typing the morning after the dream it all made sense and just flowed together.
Hugs
Date: 21 Jan 2012 6:49 PM Title: Chapter 17
excellent chapter. Would rather wait for a chapter then get a wishy washy one. Love ya hun
Author's Response:
That statement made me feel good. I see Carlisle pov for Christmas and New Years we shall have some fun times.
Hugs
Date: 21 Jan 2012 3:50 PM Title: Chapter 17
looking forward to the next chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you so much and hopefully the next chapter won't be as long of a wait.
Hugs
Date: 09 Nov 2011 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 2
I am 100% absolutely in love with this story!!! Thank you
Author's Response:
Thank you and I'm working on the next chapter.
Hugs
Date: 09 Nov 2011 7:20 AM Title: Chapter 16
poor bella, shes always so hard on herself. it was both her and carlisle's fault that they messed up. but its alright, the first time back is gonna be a doozy. she got her punishment and took it .
i love this story.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much and in the next chapter we will be listing to their little chat closing the weekend out.Then we will have a slight time jump.
Hugs
Date: 06 Nov 2011 12:51 AM Title: Chapter 16
glad carlisle and jazz figured out some of what went wrong one first day. She does seem to have some self esteem issues.
Author's Response:
Yup and all this will be addressed. soon.
Hugs
Date: 05 Nov 2011 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 16
It's human to make mistakes, Bella hasn't made too many that upset her as this one did. It's not being easy for her but she is dealing with it. But it's not only her task, the guys need to help her too, and they will, no doubt.
Author's Response:
Your right and we will see what happens when they have their little chat.
Hugs
Date: 04 Nov 2011 6:58 PM Title: Chapter 16
Missed your stories so much. Are you back!
Author's Response:
Yes I'm back writing but with having to do the ranch chores it's a little slower.
Hugs
Date: 04 Nov 2011 6:19 PM Title: Chapter 16
loved the chapter looking forward to the next one
Author's Response:
Thank you and hopefully it won't be such along wait.
Hugs
Date: 20 Oct 2011 7:24 AM Title: Chapter 1
Hello...
I have just found this story so I haven't read it yet, but I read your note. I agree with you totally. You keep on doing just what you are doing. You write for yourself. There are a lot of us out here that like what you do and how you do it. And any jackass that is so uncuth, crass and rude can just go to hell. If they don't like it, they have choice, let them move on! Time? It'll take what it takes. I can wait and savor it all the more when I get it. I appreciate your efforts and the sweat it takes to accomplished putting yourself and your stories out there for my pleasure and enjoyment. Thank you. Sending this love note of, I hope, encouragement and you will soldier on.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your kind words. I hope you enjoy my twisted tale.
Hugs
Date: 04 Oct 2011 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 15
Yeah I was so excited to see an update! I'm so happy that your husband and has had his surgery. Thoughts are with you!
Wonderful chapter - I so want to be in the playroom with them :D
Thanks so much!!
Author's Response:
I think many of us want to be in the playroom with them... next up Jaspers time with Bella.
Hugs
Date: 04 Oct 2011 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 15
WOW, that was deep!
Author's Response:
Thank you and I acheived my goal.
Hugs
Date: 04 Oct 2011 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 15
great update, poor carlise with his jealousy
Author's Response:
Thank you and I think in that most people in a poly would still feel some jealousy.
Hugs