Reviews by Sunshine-Sue
Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella finds out she's pregnant, but Edward wants nothing to do with it...it doesn't fit his plans! She moves on...Will time make Edward want to be in their lives before the baby is born? Will they find their way back to each other - AH/lemons later  NC-17 RATING FOR VOILENCE IN LATER CHAPTERS.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 56874 Read Count: 61051
[Report This] Published: 22 Feb 2010 Updated: 04 Apr 2010
Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 27 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

well that was interesting

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Date: 27 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Goodbye to You

well edward's an asshole isn't he? too bad he hasn't got a beating yet....

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Date: 27 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Glimpses of Insanity

epov was good but i am glad to hear this one will be better as abpov only. eddie is scared, plain and simple. been there done that and some days i would have loved to be the guy and have the choice to walk away too bad real life doesn't work like that. when you make your bed you gotta lay in it! glad my man was and still is better than eddie, he has stayed though it all, 18 years this november. teen pregancy and all the rest of the bullshit life throws at you. i got me a keeper!

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Date: 27 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - Pregnancy Hormones: Hot and Horny!

so hot! i love me some jasper! yummy.... and it serve edward right bella is a free woman now and it was his choice.

are you gonna move your other stories here to coffee? i would love to read them

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Date: 27 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Images of Perfection

wow he is tupid isn't he? i mean seriously! he is gonna rag on her for being a bit stressed! she should have hit him again.

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Date: 27 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Arguements and Explanations

i will take a look through me 'read' stories and compare them to yours then i'll let you know on the recs.

bella good job on making him work for it. bastard can't just come in say sorry and get you 2 back. he is such a dumbass!

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - You've been Served

damn strait she is making a mistake! jasper is hot and ready to be used! as long as she lets him know it is just casual she should keep going, he is just a 'friend; and she needs one right now.

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Manholes and Baby Steps

i really don't have a story for you. we have just always 'been us' can't imagine my life without him and he feels the same. shit happens but we have never let it pull us apart. i know i'm lame! my kids tell me all the time.

i think eddie should set up a nursary for the baby. he always wanted bella, it is the baby he needs to prove he wants.

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - Friends

glad jasper was cool with the 'friends' thing. b needs all of the friends she can get.

i knew eddie would make a nusrary for baby. the kiss on the tummy was so sweet my teeth hurt! glad to see eddie is pulling his head out of his ass, but obviously he is still a dick, thanks to the look into the future from the prologe

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Engagement Party

wow psyco jessica

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - One Flew over the CooCoo Nest

so she really is a psyco! not just acting that way. wonder how she'll weasel her way back into edward's life to get us back to the prologe? poor bella really has to worry now...

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Small Gestures

awww... i remember once for christmas hubbie gave me a bottle of massge oil with a note saying as long as there was oil in the bottle he would massage me whenever i wanted. silly man has not clued in that the bottle hasn't been emptied in 18 years! heehee man i'm sneaky!

glad to see e and b are working in the right direction.

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - Nightmares

ok so we have made it to the prologe. wow you had me confused i had to check i was on the right chapter. i thought i missed one and missed a big time jump! very nicely done.

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - Moving Forward

well i am glad that they are still moving forward and all is good right now. the class was too funny! welcome to motherhood mofo! not so easy is it?!?... sorry

looks like crazy jess is still out there waiting for the right time to strike!

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Stalking Tendencies

can you say çreepy!' boys and girls?

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - A Mother's Nightmare

well doesn't everyone feel stupid for not believeing bella? jess is fucked up! but at least in her instability she seems to care for the baby and should take care of her and keep her safe. now we just need to see if they find bella in time to save her. and what about other babies will there be permanent damage?

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - Carnage

of corse bella will make it, a couch couldn't keep you safe if she didn't! lol

i think it is time for the boys to go hunting and just happen to have to use ''self defence' on jessica's ass. it is all to keep the family safe.

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - Dark Passenger

so happy the boys have delt with jess, permanently, but how are they gonna explain eddie showing up with the baby and jess disapearing? i wonder what you have up your sleeve....

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 - Stay with Me

yay happily ever after here we come!

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Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 - Epilogue

i love that you still gave them a big family.

thank you for writting! i hope to read more of your work soon!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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AU/AH OOC Bad girl Bella Swan takes on a challenging bet to turn Edward, resident golden boy, to the dark side. Can one bet turn into a life time of love? Lemons and adult situations. Better Summary inside. Collab w/Luvrofink and Chartwilightmom


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 64046 Read Count: 38007
[Report This] Published: 22 Feb 2010 Updated: 13 Apr 2010
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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Good Boy Edward: This Is Where the War Begins

well looks like eddie needs to get laid and maybe he would be happier. bella sounds hot! can't blame the boy for panting after her.

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: The Bad Girl Bella: The Stakes are High

oh boy she put her bike up? good thing he likes her.

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: The Good Boy Edward: I Dub Thee Sir Prudeward

aww poor baby, if you don't like the name you shouldn't act the part. but don't worry bad ass bella will lead you off of the straight and narrow into the wilderness.

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: The Bad Girl Bella: Men Are Too Easy

now i wonder why eddie was so nervous...? and i wonder if that was his first kiss?

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: The Good Boy Edward: Minions to the Army

boy edward is in trouble

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter Six: The Bad Girl Bella: The First Fall Is The Hardest

wow looks like things may not be going quite how b wanted. she seems a little too effected by that kiss...

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: The Good Boy Edward: Redo and Make It Up

wow not bad for a second kiss

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: The Bad Girl Bella: Making Waves

i wish my daddy would buy me that car. i wonder how bella will get home after school? maybe gentlemanly eddie will offer her a 'ride'...

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: The Good Boy Edward: A Little Birdie Told Me So

god he is just too cute!

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: The Bad Girl Bella: Put On Your Dancing

yeah that was a date! so sweet.

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: The Good Boy Edward: I Like The Way You Ride

wow bella can sure plan a date too. so cute how the dates they each planned are so different but still so right for both of them.

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: The Bad Girl Bella: Smoke and Mirrors

they are too cute! and bella finally got to hit one of the girls

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter Thirteen: The Good Boy Edward: Every Little Thing She Does Is Magic

that was hot! i think that it really speaks to bella's true motives that she is willing to give up lola to end the bet. eddie should see how big that is.

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: The Bad Girl Bella: How Sweet He Is

aww eddie is so sweet. and it is too cute that he is the one who is nervous about sex.

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: The Good Boy Edward: Down, Down Baby, Down By the Rollercoaster

hot. i think eddie is a natural.

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: The Bad Girl Bella: There Are No Words

look at them growing together, helping the other to blossom.

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: The Good Boy Edward: Welcome to My World

well now riding lessons and a BJ sounds like a good night

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Date: 15 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: The Bad Girl Bella: I Wanna Love Ya

wow!

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Date: 16 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: The Good Boy Edward: Please, Please, Please, Let Me Get What I Want

well eddie has been deflowered and has now become a sex fanatic. yay for bella!

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Date: 16 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: The Bad Girl Bella: Sweet Rewards

wow she got his name?!? most tattoo artists around here refuse to do names unless it's you mom or your kids. love fades tatts are forever.

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Date: 16 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: The Good Boy Edward: Branded Duo

oh boy the 'gift' i wonder what it is? still no answer on what b's tatt is...

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Date: 16 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: The Bad Girl Bella: A Punch In The Gut

wow this charlie seems like a pretty awesome dad, even with the illegal stuff he has going on the side. bella gets to go to europe but what will happen betweenb and e? what did he think of the book? what will bella think when she finds out alice gave it to him even after the breakup?

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Date: 16 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: The Good Boy Edward: I'd Wish It All Away

yay jasper eddie needed to be smacked down for what he did. both of the tatts sound so perfect.

loved the line'i just want her close to me now' such an awwww moment.

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Date: 16 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: The Bad Girl Bella: WTF!

yay the talk is next. time to wrk this shit out

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Date: 16 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: The Good Boy Edward: I'll Take What I Can Get

and the healing begins...

Edward's Clan by Greenaway Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1470]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

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**WARNING - THIS STORY CONTAINS VIOLENCE, SEXUAL MATERIAL, OFFENSIVE LANGUAGE AND OTHER CONTENT THAT MAY DISTURB SOME PEOPLE. YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED.**

Edward Cullen is the leader of The Clan, a fierce and deadly group of assassins for hire and he knows nothing besides violence and blood. When he meets Bella, he begins to imagine that there might be more for him out there.

A dark journey of love, power and death.


All Human, Cannon Pairings and TEAM EDWARD

Please be warned, this story gets pretty graphic later on.

 

A special thank you to evilangel813 for the awesome banner.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read (Geddy)
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 234131 Read Count: 195559
[Report This] Published: 23 Feb 2010 Updated: 11 Jun 2012
Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: First Impressions are Forever

wow jake 'was'an asshole! glad b has 'the clan to protct her now.

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Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Mothers, Fathers and Everything in Between

it is so weird to see esme as something so opposite from her usual 'best mom ever'

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Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Becoming Whole Again

wow looks like they both felt the sudden pull toward eachother.

*editing note* right before eddie and daddy c walk into the room you have e saying "just fuck up, alright?" my guess is you wanted it to read "just shut the fuck up, alright?" not sure if you want to change it or not, but i get how hard it can be to edit your own work, you know what it should say and sometimes just see that, or you think it so fast your fingers can't quite keep up.

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Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Introducing The Demon

wow you are vigilant with the warnings! i am expecting... i don't even know what i 'm expecting.

love the inner monologue the eddie boy has going on. too funny.

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Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Have You Seen My Innocence?

wow that poor girl! i can not wait to see what eddie is gonna do to jake. it sure won't be enough!

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Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 6: The Demon Comes Out to Play

wow eddie was sick and twisted in a scary but awesome way! now daddy c? man what an asshole, to do that to your baby? i have no words...

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Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Pixies, Porsches and Promises

awwww... eddie is in love!

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Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Fathers and Sons

well that was intence. i wonder what bella is thinking of all of this?

heehee with bella's room destroyed looks like eddie has the perfect reason to move her into his room...

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Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 9: My List

awww so cute i knew they would end up in eddie's room.

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Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 10: What Is Normal Anyway?

my heart aches for eddie, he never had a chance! daddy c fucked him over good, luckily bella is here to start the heart again. the pillow fight was awesome, especially emmy pouting because he couldn't play too.

Summary: Past Featured Story

ADC,fanfic

 

Bella is a family attorney & Edward seeks her help. Friendship abounds, maybe more? AH OOC Rated M b/c they are adults & will do adult things! Canon Couples


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 91018 Read Count: 27772
[Report This] Published: 23 Feb 2010 Updated: 21 Dec 2010
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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1, Bella

well we gotta boost the self esteem!

i wonder who ethan is? the son of an ex?

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2, Edward & Ethan

oh poor ethan! poor eddie! la-la has to help them.

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3, Friends

i think miss la-la is falling for acertain little red-headed man. good thing his bub is a keeper too.

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4, Duckies

that was a pretty perfect day!

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5, Mr. Whitlock, Rose, & Esme

so sad that sometimes it takes knowing the end is near before we can start to enjoy the ride.

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6, More Forks, Some Roses, & Dancing

bella is slowly allowing her heart to open she just still doesn't believe eddie will want her.

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7, Songs & Smooches

so glad that i may be helping you outta your shell, i really am enjoying this story. plus in my books your ballsy! i don't think i could write a fic let alone post it. *hides in the corner*

this chapter made me feel like smacking them both and telling them to stop trying to deny this and just accept it and be happy.

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8, Wishes & Surprises

your rant made me smile, you go girl!

this chapter made me sad for bella and the fact that she won't allow herself to open up (too bad for her she already has) and sad for eddie that she won't try for him and ethan and bella herself.

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9, Forks, Birthdays, & More Songs

bella bella bella! how is it you are smart enough to be a lawyer but too dumb to see eddie waving his love in your face? the man is so blantantly in love with you! and he wants his birthday kkiss....

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10, Walls, Tears, & Words

poor eddie, his momma is gone. i do not know what i would do without my mommy.

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11, Beauty & The Beast

poor bella she is just not allowing herself to see what is right there and she is jumping right into the bad with no thought of the joy she could have.

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12, Lyrical Flowers

so sweet! and i think he may have finally gotten her to believe. no to find out what happened....

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Date: 15 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13, Cause & Effect

eddie gave her his son. now she just has to wait for him to wake up....

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Date: 16 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14, Thoughts

i really enjoyed reading the entries, a perfect way to show what was happening durring his coma and recovery.

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Date: 16 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15, Peepholes

they found their spark and the fire has beun to burn again. so happy! and now we have a date. i wonder where eddie is planning to take her?

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Date: 16 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16, Happily Ever Now

aww he wanted her for years. he was crushing on her just as long, or maybe longer than she was crushing on him. life is funny how it works sometimes.

but i gotta agree with bella i do not think i would ever change anything in my life because it brought me right to this point, my daughter and son who drive me crazy almost daily but who even at 15 and 13 still give me a kiss goodnight and a sweet 'i love you mom', my hubbie of so long it feels like he has always been a part of me, my crazy in-laws, my mommy  i would not trade any of them in for a chance at 'what if..?' wow talk about sappy!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 16 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17, Forever & The Rest of Forever

i love how you ended it with a montoge(?) of snapshots of their lives. i gotta admit there were a few tears when ethan told her to just let go. very beautifully written.

thank you for sharing your story!

suzie :)

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Date: 16 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18, FfP Outtake, No More Sadness

angels there is no better way to describe a mother's thoughts on their child. sometimes we need our angels to show us the sadness is no longer needed and that love is the important thing.

suzie:)

PEOPLE LIKE US by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3989]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward Cullan is the hottest movie star. Bella Swan is an art grad, in Italy for the summer. Their worlds collide in the most unlikely way.  He unlocks what she has hidden for so long - a dark side...


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Horror, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Mystery, One-Shot, Parody/Crackfic, Poetry, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, Finished, Twilight - Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 81 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1339257 Read Count: 995727
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2011
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Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

hee hee she called him 'sparky'

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Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

wonder what e is gonna think about waking up in only his boxers but with b on the pull out? is he gonna stand and look her over too while she sleeps?

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Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

wow things are starting to heat up.

side note not sure what it is but there is a lot of blank space beween the last line in the chapter and the review section.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

body shots sound like fun! one of the  things i missed out on, i guess. :(

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

well i can see the fireworks now! man they are gonna explode when he tells her and they start to play

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

wow she is gonna pass out with that! then she is gonna wake up and enjoy the lovin' from dom sparky! lucky girl

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

that was kinda mean on edward's part get her all hot and bothered and then send her to bed! the morning after should be fun, a few rules and lots of play time! that's if they make it outta bed first.

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

looks like it is gonna be a lomg road for these two! bella is very unsure of giving up contol completely and of course she is not used to giiving in to another person in all ways. edward seems to be doing a good job of walking her through it all though.

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

well edward seemed to be doing good at keeping her out of trouble at the end there and look how well it turned out for them. as a newbie he needs to help keep her in a state of mind that willonly bring praise and be easy for her to stay in sub mode. that way she will build her confidence and be more willing to submit freely.

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

payback's a bitch eh? maybe bella will learn for next time.

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

glad to see that they are melding well together.

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Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

oooo the girls are gonna get it!!!

will you show both of them getting their punishment or just bella?

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Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

so glad that all is well, at least for a little while...

kinda excited that you did choose to write the alice - jasper out take

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

i think that you are doing wonderfully on your story so you should be proud! remember that you are giving us, the reader, a gift everytime you post a chapter. you do not have to write for us but you do, so thank you. do not get upset at the flames, if people do not like your story they can stop reading it.use the constructive criticism as a tool to learn and grow as a writer but do not let the nay-sayers get you down!

again thank you for having the courage to post for my enjoyment!

BTW great chapter. :)

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

wonder what all alice is up to? and how bella is going to take everyone hating on her truck and apartment.

Semper Fidelis by angela4148 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 106]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Bella has a great life but she's missing something...Will the new Marine in town be that something? Will she be able to handle the life that a Marine leads or will it all be too much?

fs

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 93026 Read Count: 23379
[Report This] Published: 25 Feb 2010 Updated: 25 Feb 2010
Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 29 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prelude

that is so sad. i am so happy that i am lucky enough to fall asleep next to my hubbie every night. prayers that we ALL get to tell our honnies we love them today.

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Date: 29 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Ch 1 Happy Alone

ooo... sweet talker is gonna get lucky...

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Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Ch 2 California Waiting

i wonder what had eddie running from NC? something to do with a redheaded slut?

i wonder what bella was doing in jasper and em's room? my bet her and rose went home with the boys and passed out.

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Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Ch 3 Red Morning Light

oh my god! you're a marine wife did that 'if you go commando your shit falls out the bottom' thing really happen? that would have been too funny, especially for a big bad marine surrounded by big bad marines! heehee



Author's Response:

yes, that really happened... however he did that shit on purpose.  I will not name him but he was a bit of a clown and during PT he let it all hang out to get a laugh... he's actually a really great guy with a pervy, weird sense of humor!!!!

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Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Ch 4 Holy Roller Novocaine

poor bella she is so screwed! but hey i wouldn't mind stepping in for her, edward and jasper fighting for my affections..... swoon.

then again b is definately on to something with the threesome thing - everybody gets what they want ...



Author's Response:

I have a threesome one shot written for this fic... its completely seperate from the story and is a "what if" bella left the club with jasper and edward the night she met edward... it's all smut and kinda funny... it's on FF.net

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Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Ch 5 Genius

love bob , but i love the real thing more! i am sure that bella will too.

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Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Ch 6 Molly's Chamber

i am so glad i don't have to worry about condoms anymore! that shit always sucked.

feel bed for jasper, but he will find his girl in the end, right? you can't leave jasper high and dry.



Author's Response:

*giggles* ppl worry about Jasper so much... I love Jacksper too much to leave him lonely :o)

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Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Ch 7 True Love Way

heehee they couldn't even make it through dinner

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Ch 8 On Call

i could not even imagine! going about your normal life and boom! the axe falls and your world is flipped into fear, lonliness, and uncertainty. off to kiss my hubbie and whisper that i love him. (he's sleeping)then it's bed for me too.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Ch 9 Ragoo

wow thank you for sharing your story. again i do not think i could do it. but your heart loves who it loves...

now what the fuck did that phone call mean?  vic cheated and got preggers, but the baby is now here and not his eddies so no worries? what's b gonna do?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Ch 10 Four Kicks

well yes it would have been hot, even hotter if you could have found a way for them to be in those little pt shorts!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Ch 11 Crawl

fucking stuborn assed people! time is running out...