Reviews by grilzhea
The Perfect Wife by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3541]
Summary: Past Featured Story

After Renee and Phil die in a car accident on Bella’s 17th birthday. She is sent to live with her father, Charlie and brother, James in Forks WA after being separated for 10 years with no contact. Charlie dabbles in training and placement of the “perfect” wife for exclusive clientele. Bella quickly learns that she’s going that she’s going to get more than a high school education. She's going to be educated with a purpose.
I don’t own Twilight

 

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 244105 Read Count: 1625246
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 Jan 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 45

I love the way Edward is now but I'm scared for what Carlise is up to!

Summary: Past Featured Story

sos

 

Bella and the gang are the popular rich kids of Forks high, new teacher Mr. Cullen starts, B wants him right away. What starts out as a passionate affair ends up as a cataylyst for the obsession of a dangerous drug lord to take action. Lemons.

Be warned- this is not your average teacher/student story

Now completed- Thanks to all my readers and reviewers.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: G8or Favor8s Read
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 88667 Read Count: 55121
[Report This] Published: 30 Jan 2010 Updated: 04 Mar 2010
Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 13 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26-Epilogue

Great story I couldn't stop reading it

Author's Response:

Thank you so much- glad you enjoyed it :)

PEOPLE LIKE US by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3989]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward Cullan is the hottest movie star. Bella Swan is an art grad, in Italy for the summer. Their worlds collide in the most unlikely way.  He unlocks what she has hidden for so long - a dark side...


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Horror, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Mystery, One-Shot, Parody/Crackfic, Poetry, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, Finished, Twilight - Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 81 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1339257 Read Count: 995727
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2011
Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 20 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55

This story just gets better and better.

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Bella's James and Tayna's brother are the same person...and Esme wasn't mad at Bella she liked the jester she was crying cause of how thoughtful it was right? Please update soon

Author's Response:

clever girl :)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 07 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

Wow I'm not sure what to say..Edward was a dick. Weather its his right or not to act that way that was horrible to do to her

Author's Response:

now I going to throw a spanner in the works here and play devil's advocate - he was a dick but she had a choice and he told her that he was going to push her and he kept asking her if she was okay with it.  Bella has her say next week, make no mistake.

Thanks for your review and your comments.

xoxo

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 22 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

I'm glad that Edward realized how he acted at the party and told Bella that he was sorry

Author's Response:

thank you for your review 

:)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 24 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

I wonder how he is going to react to pics

Author's Response:

thanks for the review - update saturday - check out the outtake in the meantime

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 45

Im glad that Bella was able to finally get everything out when she talked to Charlie. Now they can start the healing process, however long it might take.-I cant wait for the Christmas chapter!

Author's Response:

thank you so much

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 17 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

Every chapter it gets better and better...I can't believe Billy what a bastered

Author's Response:

thank you for your review xoxo

 

PEOPLE LIKE US – OUTTAKE # 6

OUTTAKE – CONVERSATION BETWEEN JASPER AND ALICE

“Guys, I’ve got to go – Jazz please give this some serious thought and Alice, you need to stop being so fucking stubborn. I love you, Squirt!”

Edward almost crushed her in a hug. He slapped Jasper on the shoulder as he ran out the door.

 

“So… you talk about the size of my schlong?”  Jasper said.

Alice looked up at him with mounting excitement, “Well, it’s quite impressive…” she said huskily.

Jasper smiled at her.  “Can we talk? I mean really talk; I’ve missed you Tink…”

Alice smiled through her tears. “I’ve missed you too Jazzy….”

Jasper looked uncomfortable for a moment and it bothered Alice.  She was used to Jasper Whitlock being decisive and in control.  Seeing him looking ill at ease was new.  There had been many disagreements in the Whitlock/Cullen home since Alice had moved in with Jasper two year before.

She had never lived alone, besides when she had gone to college and even then, she had attended Berkley, so that she was close to her family and Jasper.

Although over the years, they had learned to deal with Jasper’s travelling for work and Alice’s part time job as Edward’s PA which had taken her away from time to time, through everything, including Alice’s training as a submissive, their lines of communication had always been open and honest.

Alice had grown up in a house hold that was opinionated and not scared of voicing their points of view.  Esme and Carlisle had encouraged their children to have their own opinions and to share them.  They had also taught them to stick to their guns.

This was one of the many things that had attracted Jasper to Alice in the first place.  Although she was much younger than him when they met; he had always found Alice to be interesting to talk to and inevitably to argue with.  She was a spirited and enthusiastic young woman, with a warmth and energy that seemed to draw him in from the first moment.

Jasper on the other hand had grown up in a large family with two parents that had stuck together over the years because there was no other alternative for either one of them.  They were hardened by life, worn down by reality and for a reason that Jasper had never been able to fathom; they had decided to have three children of which Jasper was the youngest.  Eventually Jasper’s father had strayed and a few years later, when Jasper was about twelve, he had suddenly come back to the trailer park where they lived with three small children in tow!

He had told Jasper’s mother that they were his dead sister’s kids, but after awhile he had confessed that they were his.  Jasper felt sorry for the three youngest children and when he had begun to make money from modeling and small acting jobs, he had made a decision to see that they would have an opportunity to further their education, go to college and make a proper life for themselves.  Although none of the children were really close or affectionate with each other, Jasper had stuck to his word and the three younger children had gone on to college.

Jasper couldn’t believe that Ricky, the youngest of his stepsiblings had taken advantage of Jasper’s generosity the way that he had!  Jasper had never asked for any compensation or payment for the money that he had given to his siblings or parents over the years; the only stipulation he had for continuing to support his mother and father was that the house that he had purchased for them remain in his mother’s name.  Jasper was not close to his father and the distance had only grown when the man had abandoned his young family, leaving his wife to work three jobs to feed and clothe their three children.

Jasper had always thought that he would never find anyone to settle down with.  He didn’t ever want the life that his parents had; tired, sad, disillusioned and settling for something because there was no time or money for dreams of something or someone else.  Someone better.

So the first step that Jasper had taken at the age of sixteen was to have himself emancipated.  He had tried to live in Los Angeles and he had hated every moment of it but as he begun earning good money, he decided to take classes at the local community college.  The first one was on finances.  Jasper wanted to know how to look after his money and how to make it grow.

He trusted few people and although people liked his quiet charm and whit; Jasper had a way of standing to one side and observing people that he found made him a good judge of character.  Jasper had come to rely on that instinct over the years.

It was an instinct that he could no longer rely on.  He had never thought for a million years that his younger brother would ever turn out to be the low life, perverted bastard that he was!  Every time Jasper thought of what Ricky had done, how Richard had betrayed his own brother by lusting, perving, salivating over his Alice!  His Alice!  Jasper wanted to kill Rick with a cold fury that he had never felt before.

How he had touched her, fucking forced himself on her when Jasper had been careless enough to leave her alone with him… FUCK!

Alice gasped as Jasper jumped to his feet.  His face was a cold, furious mask.

“Jasper please!  If you want to talk to me, then you need to calm the fuck down!  I can’t reach you when you are like this!  If you are angry with me then just say so and let’s get it out there!  If you think that I did anything to encourage your brother…” Alice cringed away as Jasper was suddenly in front of her with his hand clasped over her lips.

Never – NEVER, EVER call that fucking piece of low down shit my brother!  I will kill him if I ever see him anywhere near you again!”  Jasper spat out as he held her.

Alice whimpered and she closed her eyes.  “Jazzy, you are scaring me…” 

This wild man wasn’t her Jasper…

Alice felt the tears running down her cheeks and over Jasper’s fingers.

Suddenly she was free.

Alice pushed a fist into her mouth to keep the sobs as quiet as she could.  Her whole body was trembling.

“Alice… sweet Jesus, I’m sorry… I didn’t mean to scare you… Ali…”  Jasper choked out as he sat crouched clear across the room from where Alice sat.

Alice could see the anguish clearly on Jasper’s face and she felt even worse than she had in the past few days.

This was all her fault!

“Come to me…”  Alice said, but Jasper just shook his head.

Alice slid off the sofa onto her knees and she crawled slowly across to where Jasper had slumped down against the wall.

Jasper could feel the intensity of Alice’s gaze as he watched her moving slowly towards him.

“Ali…” he said in a half pleading, half warning.

“No.  You’ve spoken and now it is my turn…” Alice said when she was inches away from his face.

Her eyes searched his intensely.  The remorse and sorrow that Alice saw gave her the courage to move closer until her lips met his.

Jasper’s head jerked backwards, but with nowhere to go, he hit the wall.

He cursed and rubbed his head.

Alice grinned at him, “Maybe that’ll knock some sense into your thick skull!”  She quipped as she arranged herself between his outstretched legs; her thighs straddled his open ones so that he could feel her heated core through her jeans.

Jasper shut his eyes tightly and moaned as he tried to adjust himself.  Alice giggled and winked at him.

“We can get to that later, but first let’s please resolve this ‘thing’ once and for all!”  She said with determination.

“Gladly, Darlin’.”

“Okay, I’m going first.  I need to tell you why I didn’t tell you about… what was happening in the first place, but you cannot freak out on me!  Do you promise?”

Jasper could see how anxious Alice was and once again he was filled with remorse at his earlier behavior.

“I promise.”

Alice took a deep breath, “I know that this might sound crazy to you, but when it happened the first time; I tried to just shrug it off.  I thought that perhaps I had imagined it or misread his signals in some way.  The next time it happened, your… well your father was in the room.  He, Rick grabbed my ass as I walked passed him.  I turned around as saw them looking at each other and Rick just winked at me and they burst out laughing… Jasper… you promised…” Alice broke off as she watched Jasper’s eyes become dark and wild again.

Jasper felt as if he was ready to explode!  That no good, low fucking, good for nothing… BASTARD!  I. will. Kill. Him.

Jasper felt Alice’s tiny hand stroking his cheek and he refocused on her anxious face.

He kissed her quickly, “I’m okay, Ali, I promise.  I won’t freak out on you again.”

Alice nodded slowly, “He apologized to me later – your father, I mean.  The next day he told me that he had too much to drink and that he had made Rick promise never to touch me again.  He begged me not to tell you and then he said that… some girls just have an ‘air’ about them…”

SON OF A BITCH!

Jasper opened his mouth to speak but Alice put her fingers over his lips.

She continued. “I know better than that, Jazz!  I know better!  I was raised to know better than that!  With all their bullshitting and nonsense, my brothers have never, ever treated any woman including me with anything than the utmost respect.  You have never treated me like a whore, but at that moment, I felt dirty.  And I felt like a two bit whore, who didn’t deserve anything better.  Rick kept touching me, stupid little insignificant ‘slip-ups’.  Every time he was around me, sometimes you were in the next room or you had your back to us… He would graze my breasts by pushing past me in a doorway, or he would rub himself against me if he were standing behind us…” Alice shuddered in revulsion and Jasper couldn’t take it any longer.

His arms wrapped Alice in a vice like grip. “Never, never, never…” He said over and over again against her neck as he pulled her closer.

“Jazz…”

“No – it’s my turn now… never, ever again, Mary Alice Cullen.  Promise me that you will never let anyone ever make you feel like that again.  Especially not me!  God, Ali, I love you so much!  Just the thought of another man touching you… Fuck!  It’s too much to even contemplate!  Do you know how I felt when I found out that Rick was… forcing himself on you?  When we forced Bella to tell us and we did force her – she didn’t have a choice really, I wanted to fucking kill someone there and then!  As you know, I sat up all night just thinking about what could have happened to you!  And about how I was going to take care of you this time!  I couldn’t help you last time, Darlin’.  I wasn’t able to stop that animal putting his hands on you… but I was going to make sure that Rick never ever touched you again.”

Alice brushed the tears of Jaspers cheeks.

“I love you so fucking much, Mary Alice Cullen-Whitlock.  You own me mind, body and soul.  If I lost you, my life would be so empty… please forgive me for hurting you and dragging this shit out.  Please, please don’t ever put me through this again, Tink, my heart can’t stand it.”  Jasper whispered as they held each other’s faces and gazed with longing into each other’s eyes.

“I love you, Cowboy; you are my everything… my lover, my best friend, my Dom, my love.  I am sorry too.  No more secrets.”

Their kiss was a relief.  For the first time in almost two weeks, their lips were soft and forgiving.  Lips touched, brushed, nibbled.  Tongues dueled and teased.  Eventually they couldn’t take it any longer and Jasper held Alice to him as he tipped her onto the floor and loomed over her, his knees pushing her thighs apart.

Alice panted into his mouth.  “Can I get my clothes back?”

Jasper smiled against her lips, “yeah, especially the underwear…”

Alice giggled, “can I get my car back?”

Jasper shook his head, “sorry, you will be driven around for a while…”

Alice groaned, “but I can see my Bestie?”

Jasper rocked back on his knees as he looked at the bright twinkle in Alice’s eyes. “Mary Alice…” He said with narrowed eyes.

Fuck! He is so sexy when he does that… now I need to change my panties! Damn Cowboy!

“Hmmm… take me upstairs Jazz… I’ve missed you…” Alice uttered the magic words.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

An hour later, Alice lay sprawled across Jasper’s bare chest.  Her eyes were closed but she was humming as Jasper played with her hair.

“Alice?”

“Yeah?”

“Supervised visits only…”  Jasper kissed her forehead.

“I know – but that’s only for now…” Alice smiled to herself.

She wondered what Kate, Bella and Rosalie were doing on Saturday after the therapy session?  She had heard that Gap was having a sale….

Everything was right with the world after all.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

I hope that you liked it!

Love

Michele

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 13 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 77: Chapter 77

I know you said lets get real, but it really sucks. He better not do anything that will hurt Bella. He is skating very thin ice. I'm sure Irena will tell some one what happened and it will get back to Bella.

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 24 Oct 2011 Title: Chapter 78: Chapter 78

I'm so glad everything worked out. Bella was so strong. I'm glad for her. I'm also glad Edward got his head out of his rear end. Hopefully having Bella and the kids around will help him out.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it

Summary:

ANOTT

Banner for A Night on the Town

Bella and Edward both left Seattle, and each other, four years ago without ever telling the other how they felt. They haven't spoken since. Now that Edward has moved back, will he finally have the courage to find her and tell her he still loves her after all these years?

Special thanks to my girl Emma (Moonlit-Wishes) for my amazing banners.  If you haven't seen her stuff yet, head over fast. It's great!


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5108 Read Count: 584
[Report This] Published: 25 Feb 2010 Updated: 25 Feb 2010
Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Welcome Home

That was a good and lemony story...I loved it!

Author's Response:

Yay! I'm so glad you liked it. Honestly, it's not the best thing I've written, but it's not bad for having knocked it out in about a day. Thanks for taking the time to review, it always means a lot when people tell me what they think!

Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward is tortured by Mike Newton's thoughts about Valentine's Day. He decides to mess with him a little by inviting him and Jessica on a date with himself and Bella. Hilarity ensues. Set after Breaking Dawn. Human Mike and Jessica and Vamp Edward and Bella.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Crackfic
Characters: Bella/Edward, Other Misc Char or Pairings
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3493 Read Count: 1221
[Report This] Published: 26 Feb 2010 Updated: 26 Feb 2010
Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was awesome!!!

First & Ten by Nolebucgrl Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 828]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella Swan is an aspiring sports writer and her first big assignment is to interview the league's biggest, not to mention hottest, quarterback.  Will Edward Cullen school her in the rules of the game or will she teach him a thing or two?  Rated NC-17 for language, lemons.  An entry in The Sport of Love contest.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Challenges:
Series: LeslieWhitlock's faves - not updated in 2012, Finished, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Kuu Faves, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, Bella's Must Reads!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 351776 Read Count: 189018
[Report This] Published: 06 Apr 2010 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44 Super Bowl XLVI

they should go for the threepeet and have Bella tell him he's goiing to be a dad

Author's Response:

HAHAH that would be quite a thing to hit a guy with after a SB :)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 14 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 Illegal Contact

I love Alice...she always gets what she wants

Author's Response:

She sure does!  She was awesome this chapter I thought!

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 Touchdown

they are so hot and cute

Author's Response:

:) Thank you!  I think so too.  I like how they can be sweet and sexy at the same time :)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 26 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 Two Point Conversion

Alice is a riot...yey he loves her

Author's Response:

She is a lot of fun!  Edward's definitely gone over Bella :)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 Huddle Up

I normally don't like the same thing in both pov but I think I would like it in his

Author's Response:

Hahah good thing because everyone seems to want it :) 

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 25 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 Airing It Out

Steelers all the way

Author's Response:

Good luck! ;)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 31 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 The Game Winning Drive

I knew you had to be a steeler fan with the way/you wrote about the game with them...awesome chapter...love Rose spilling the wine

Author's Response:

Hehe actually I'm a Tampa Bay fan, but they got their coach from my coaching staff so I cheer him on :)  Glad you liked it!  Rose was definitely shining in this chapter :)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 31 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

My family and I want to move to Tampa...we love it there...we have friends that live in Land O Lakes

Author's Response:

Excellent!  I love it here too and Land O Lakes is not far at all :)  Come on down!

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 Forward Progress

Awesome again...I'm glad he fired Victoria

Author's Response:

Haha thank you!  Firing her was a lot of fun :)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 Defensive Pass Interference

I hope he either just leaves or Bella kicks his ass!!

Author's Response:

Both are definite options! ;)

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

 

Rebel Bella has been shipped around the U.S. for years to different foster homes after being placed in Child Protective Services. What will happen when she is placed with uptight Edward and his family?  Adult language/Violence/Lemons

fs


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Misstoria's Stories to Read
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 134043 Read Count: 42788
[Report This] Published: 07 Jul 2010 Updated: 05 Jul 2011
Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 16 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Incidents

Wow I just started reading this from the "People Like Us" rec, and couldn't stop reading...great story...I guess Edward has to tell her what's wrong now.....please update soon

Author's Response:

thank you for taking a chance with my story.  i'm glad you're enjoying it!  more on edward next chapter.  thanks so much for reading and reviewing!!  ;)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 24 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Confession

I didn't guess the brain tumor, but I figured out the epilepsy. My mother in law had it. She actually went into status epileticus. It actually took a week of her being sedated for her to stop. Very scary stuff.

Author's Response:

seizures are very scary.  i agree.  even in a controlled situation like a hospital they can be frightening.  i hope your mother is doing well.  thanks so much for reading and reviewing!! ;)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 07 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Regret

Wow, he really has had a hard time...I'm glad your not going to bee killing him off

Author's Response:

nope, no killing of edward in this story, but he definitely has had a hard time.  he's not in for the best ride, either, but hang in there.  thanks so much for reading and reviewing!!  ;)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed
Date: 29 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Emotions

I'm so glad that they are together again...I hope Edward is going to be ok

Author's Response:

lots in store for this crew!  thanks for the review!! ;)

Reviewer: grilzhea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 26: Fallout

Wow!! Thank God she killed James. Now the rest of his fam just needs taken out.

Author's Response:

i completely agree.  more info on the others next chapter.  more to come soon.  thanks for reading and reviewing!! ;)