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Summary: Past Featured Story

 

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Bella at age thirteen is left with nothing more than a fake ID, and two year old twin half siblings to care for.  She makes due knowing it is up to her to give them a good life and education, she was never given.  Working as a cleaner at the university five years later, she meets Professor Masen a man who believes all women are out to hurt, or destroy him.  Can an uneducated Bella teach him something?  What will happen when Bella is another woman who has hid the truth from him? 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Mystery, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My all time favorites, Themslovebug90's read stories, Stories Read by CNYBella, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, To Read , Misstoria's Stories to Read, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Read & Enjoyed, Read
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 325411 Read Count: 263192
[Report This] Published: 12 Jan 2012 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: First Sight

Je lis avec Google Translate. French.  J'ai lu avec mon IPad et je ne pouvais laisser de message avec le IPad.  Je le fais ce matin...

 

IL y a une chosae que je ne comprends pas... qu'est-ce "Edna"? qu'est-ce que ce mot veut dire?  IL n'est pas traduit en français.

 

 



Author's Response:

Edna est un surnom qui a marqué Zafrina Edward avec. Nous sommes heureux que vous soyez capable de lire notre histoire en utilisant Google Translator, il est également m'aider à répondre à voscommentaires. Je vous remercie beaucoup. Kasi (& Nikky)

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 18 May 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Confessions

oups...

 

wow!



Author's Response:

Thanks...SO MUCH!

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 17 May 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: The Legal Side of Things

wow, j'adore!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  Each week I read the reviews for like the first 3-4 hours to see what kind of questions you all want answers to, and this time there are hardly any questions at all. 

So I thought we could touch base on some comments.  We have gotten a lot of Great chapter, sad ending, but it was needed...stuff (and it was needed).  ‘Edward had to allow the pain to flow out instead if keeping it locked inside of him.’

We have had a few diabolical people suggest that Edward would maybe recognize Sue and Charlie Swan, or Harry Clearwater.  ‘This is an interesting theory.’

A lot of you would love to lynch Sue.  ‘But first she has to make an appearance.’ 

Some of you have noted that you for see Gina as being a problem.  ‘Ummm…YEAH!’

A few have wondered if Tanya and little Edward are in fact dead and buried.  ‘In the graves in Port Angeles are in fact the bodies of Tanya Denali, and her son known to all as Edward Anthony Masen Jr.’

The comments people have made on the complexity of our characters though is what I want to touch on the most.  The fact that we have made the characters so out of character in most cases is what I am enjoying so much.  I personally love Alice in the books, I think she is WAY underplayed in the movies.  I love Alice she is one of my favorite characters, but to make her this unlikeable character is hard, yet I think it really gives so much to this storyline.  Alice will learn some very valuable lessons in this story and that old saying a leopard can’t change his spots, does not apply to Ali-cats. 

I like Rose and if I (Kasi) had to compare myself to a character from Twilight that I am most like it would be her.  I am not a royal bi*ch, but I am pretty outspoken and tend to say exactly what is on my mind, and that is how I see Rose in the books and movies.  The Rose in this story though goes above and beyond the snippy, and stuck in her ways bitchy Rose from the books or movies.  Our Rose is a downright spoiled rotten mean girl, who will never grow up because she wants to remain that rich girl who has everyone surrounding themselves in her light to better their standings.  Edward could have married the high class daughter of some billionaire tycoon, and Rose would have issue unless she bowed down to Rose. 

Jasper in this story is one of the most in character, characters we have.  Very smart and laid back, goes with the flow and yet is always there to help calm matters that need attention. 

Emmett, God I love Emmett.  He is so fun loving and wild, but he is so very smart and he can step up and show it when the time is called on him to do so.  You will be seeing a lot more of this intellectual and loving Emmett as the story progresses. 

I hope that you have enjoyed this little insight we have shared with you this week.  Feel free to join us on Facebook, where there are tons of discussions and theories shared daily.  Just search for TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction and it will pop up.  Thanks everyone for making us feel so great, we are proud to bring this story to you and so happy you are enjoying it.  Thanks for reading and reviewing, Kasi (& Nikky).

 

Chapter 20: Snow Storms Teaser...Subject to changes during beta process.

Emmett has filed papers with the court, getting Bella temporary custody for Seth and Leah.  Angela, Ben’s wife, who is a social worker, is making case notes on Bella’s behalf.  She is also talking to each of the kids, and doing a home study to make sure that they are having all of their needs met. 

It was not an easy task to get Bella to agree to all of this, but when Emmett explained that if her stepmom came back, she could take Seth and Leah and Bella might never see them again. He also explained that because Bella was now of age, she could keep it from happening by letting us help her.

I didn’t like scaring her, but it worked.  She thinks that if her mother gets them, she would not allow her to see them anymore.  She is afraid that Sue would then leave them with someone else, and they would end up getting hurt.  She said she would rather be there for them to keep them safe, so she finally agreed to sign the proper paperwork.  We all told her there was no way that she would lose the kids. 

Angela sat her down and explained to her that with her support system, it would be in Seth and Leah’s best interest to become their legal guardian.  It took us all a while to convince her that, since she was now a legal adult, and she had been taking such great care of them, that the court would be on her side.  Carlisle, Rev. Weber, Jasper, Peter, Marcus, Samantha - who is another worker at Jasper and Peter’s office, Chas, Esme, Aro, Zafrina, and myself, were finally able to convince her.  So far, quite a few people from the church and Sunday school program have written out statements, all in Bella’s favor.  Aro and Zafrina have documented files that they have kept; all of which have been copied and sent to Emmett.  Aro has documentation of all of the work she has done over the years.  With Aro’s help, and Bella’s social security number, I have paid all of her back Social Security taxes, so she has documented earned income. Bella is also now a real employee of the college. She is no longer paid under the table. 

Because Bella has had no education, we have set up a verbal IQ test for her to take. Since she is so smart in mathematics alone, I know her scores will be quite high.  Once she can fully read, we are going to have her take the GED test and get her a diploma.  Angela said that because the kids are in school, her inability to read will not be held against her.  Angela was also quick to point out, that with the substantial support system that Bella has, DCFS would recommend that the children be placed with her at this point anyway. 

Emmett says that at this point, he is ninety-nine point nine percent certain that Bella will be granted full legal guardianship of Seth and Leah in court. Until the hearing, there is a temporary order of guardianship filed, and unless they take Bella to court, neither Sue nor Harry can come in and take the kids away from her.  The case has been booked for the second week in February, which gives us eight weeks to prepare.

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: A Cowboy, a Princess, and a Butterfly

Bella est innocente ou elle ne sait vraiment ce que c'est le chocolat?!  Je n'ai pas bien compris avec Google Translate?

 

Beau chapitre, j'adore.



Author's Response:

Bella ne savait pas qu'il s'agissait d'une partie du corps adulte de sexe masculin, elle ne l'appelait un coq, parce que Sally a appelé un coq. Elle savait ce cholcolate est, mais la forme du pénis en chocolat est ce que la jeta hors tension. Bien sûr, elle a vu un petit enfant de taille / bébé pénis de taille, mais elle n'a jamais vu un pénis adulte mans. J'espère que cette aide à réduire la confusion et que cela se traduit bien pour vous. Voici une copie de la réponse normale d'examen, j'ai envoyé ainsi que le teaser ...

Beaucoup d'entre vous se demandent ce qu'il est face à Edward et la conversation de son fils perdu. Dans le chapitre 5, il était une séquence de rêve qui a dit beaucoup de ce qui s'est passé ce jour fatidique où Edward découvert Tanya se sert de lui, pour récupérer son argent. Elle n'était pas enceinte, comme elle lui avait dit, le problème est la nuit avant d'avoir eu des rapports sexuels non protégés, et elle a effectivement fait donner naissance à son enfant.Esme a découvert à ce sujet, mais il cachait d'Edward tente de le protéger. Tanya et Edward Junior est décédé plus tard dans un incendie. Il y aura plus à venir à ce sujet, mais il semble avoir trouvé un tas de questions. Maintenant, pour Alice ... Elle est clairement une personne qui n'est pas agréable dans cette fic, et dans une certaine qu'elle va partiellement se racheter, mais pour certains, il n'ya pas de rédemption, ses paroles et ses actions sont bien pires que ceux que vous avez vu d'Edward. Siobhan est pour la majorité des de l'image, de sorte qu'elle n'a pas d'inquiétude majeure. Oncle Harry est un homme très moyenne, et il y aura plus à venir sur lui.Nous aimons notre Aro il est l'un des hommes les plus aimables et les plus affectueux et nous sommes fiers d'avoir écrit un Aro qui est non seulement hors de caractère, mais aussi tellement adorable.Bella en est venu à la confiance Edward, et il montre. Beaucoup d'entre vous continuent à demander si elle va dormir dans la salle de l'étape-mères, ou si Edward va lui parler dedans ... la réponse à cette question est non. Les prochains chapitres ont tellement de choses en eux, je suis sûr que vous aurez tous des pièces préférées. Nous aimons entendre ce que vos pensées sont donc gardez poser des questions et nous répondrons à ce que nous pouvons sans ruiner l'intrigue.
Merci pour la lecture et l'examen des
Kasi (& Nikky)
Chapitre 15 teaser ... Sous réserve de modifications pendant le processus de BETA ...
C'est samedi, et nous sommes dans le compte à rebours pour l'Action de grâces. Alice m'a appelé de nombreuses fois, et à gauche et plus d'une centaine de messages texte et des messages vocaux. J'ai eu affaire à tous et à chacun d'entre eux de la même manière. Sans la lecture ou de les écouter, je vient de frapper de suppression.
Esme a découvert lors d'une de mes entretiens avec Carlisle sur la cascade Alice tiré. Au début, je pensais qu'elle serait prendre le parti d'Alice, mais il a été stupéfait lorsque je l'ai trouvée sur le téléphone donnant Alice un morceau de son esprit. Jasper a également dit que lui et Alice sont de parler, mais pas encore revenue à la normale. Jasper est vraiment pissé sur elle.
Hier, Esme m'a appelé, et à ma grande surprise, elle m'a demandé si je serais encore venir pour le dîner de Thanksgiving. Elle m'a dit qu'elle comprendrait si je n'avais pas envie de venir. Elle a dit que c'était mon choix, et elle serait encore faire mon dîner si je voulais et l'amener à mon domicile ou Midnight Sun. Pas une seule fois at-elle essayer de me forcer la main. Après avoir beaucoup réfléchi, j'ai dit que je serai là. Je ne passer du temps avec les gars, encore plus dans les dernières semaines. Je sais qu'ils ont tous été en espérant pour moi de venir, et je sais que je leur dois beaucoup. Je leur ai dit que je vais les rejoindre et de rester, aussi longtemps que Alice et Rose se taire. Esme, Carlisle, Emmett et Jasper, ont promis de les garder sous contrôle.
Les choses avec Bella sont toujours en cours vraiment bien. Trop bien, en fait. Elle ... fuck! Chaque fois que je la vois, je veux tenir près d'elle. Il ne s'agit plus seulement moi d'avoir des pensées sales à son sujet, beaucoup de pensées sales autour d'elle, qui je le suis encore, mais je veux aussi embrasser son, couche avec elle, faire l'amour avec elle, et qui est vraiment putain effrayant pour moi,pour de nombreuses raisons. Je suis inquiet, parce que je me demande si elle pourrait même faire face à ce type de relation. J'ai été une chatte à ce sujet, car je n'ai pas eu le courage de demander à Pierre ou Jasper ce qu'ils pensent. Je sais que c'est parce que j'ai peur qu'ils peuvent dire qu'elle ne pouvait pas s'en occuper, ou je ne suis pas assez bon pour elle. Je sais déjà que je ne suis pas, mais on peut toujours espérer pour sa propre rédemption.

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 14 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: Good Luck Masen Family

Magnifique!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  I am very sorry for the lateness of getting this review reply to you.  I always write them out and Nikky sends them to everyone on FFN and I send them out to everyone on TWCS and Twilighted.  With the move, I am without internet, so needless to say we got a bit of a delay.  We are hoping that the delay will not cause an issue in the normal posting, however we may run late getting chapters 33, 34 and 35 posted.  This has put me behind by more than a week, so I hope you all are understanding in regards to the situation.  The reviews have been wonderful, and Nikky tells me that there haven’t been a lot of questions.  The next chapter will be loved and hated, but trust in the fact that Jane has a plan for Sue.  Thanks for being such loyal readers, we love and appreciate every wonderful review and comment you all leave us.  HUGS!  Kasi (&Nikky)

 

Teaser for 32 subject to changes during beta process

“What do you want Pet?” Sue sneers out.

Bella look at her, and I nod my head in encouragement.  “I want to know why?  Why you didn’t love them?”

Sue shakes her head.  “That’s easy, because they were meant to be mine and Charlie’s, but instead they had to come out being HIS.  Every time I looked at them, all I saw was that stupid fucker.”

Bella looks at her shaking her head.  “Well I was Charlie’s child and you didn’t love me.”

Sue laughs sarcastically, and she shows her teeth as she makes a face.  “NO, you are right about that.  I don’t love you, I never have and I never will.  I wanted something that was mine and Charlie’s, I deserved that.  What I didn’t deserve was for your whore of a mother to intentionally get pregnant to try and steal my man from me.”

I chuckle out loud at Sue’s delusional attitude, and Sue growls at me.

“There are only two people I love in this world that is Charlie and Harry and you took both away from me,” Sue says caustically as she turns her glare at Bella.

“I want to know what you were planning to do with Seth, and the baby that belonged to Tanya, what was your plans?”

Sue laughs at Bella’s question in her evil sarcastic way.  “You really want to know?  Well I’ll tell you,” she says with a now huge happy smile.

 

 

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 22 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: The Break In

WOW!



Author's Response:

Wow what else can Nikky or I say...once again the overwhelming response and the amount of story love we are receiving from so many people just makes us both feel so loved.  I know that this story may have a few minor flaws, but we have tried all along to keep them to a minimum.  So essentially thank you as always for reading and reviewing our story it makes us all giggly and excited to see all the reviews we are getting. 
We asked you who you thought it might be that broke into Bella and the twins apartment, and I must say we were a little surprised that a lot of you have it figured out.  With a wide range of evil or rude nasty characters, many of you said it was Uncle Harry...and you are right.  There will not be resolution for a bit when it comes to Uncle Harry, so if you want to figure out what he was looking for all I can suggest is watch for clues.  There are some very important and much asked for things coming soon. 
We have been asked many times for Edward to stop using Aro’s girls for his pleasure.  And where we understand why, we also knew it was very unrealistic for a man with so much anxiety, pressure, cynicism and tainted view to jump into a healthy relationship and give up the release and hidden pleasure he has surrounded himself in to get by for the past five plus years.  He has slowly been weaning himself from the place, and very soon he will open up and tell Bella why he went there.  We have been asked when you all get to know a lot more about Edward...well very soon actually, and by that I mean the next few chapters are chuck full of things from the past. 
We have been asked if Renee will come back...(A LOT ACTUALLY)...Renee was Bella’s biological mother, who died when Bella was only three years old.  At the age of three after her mother died, custody of Bella was given to Charlie Swan who was her biological father.  Charlie was married to Sue Swan, who is the mom she talks about leaving all the time.  Sue Swan is the person who left Bella to care for the twins.  Since this story is not alternate universe, neither, Charlie or Renee will be making any grand entrance, unless via a dream.  But don’t get too happy, because Sue Swan is still out there somewhere, and she has a few things to say.
We have been asked a lot if Alice, Rose, Siobhan, and Esme will make any redemption...Esme already has begun her turn around, and we think she is doing well.  Siobhan, well she wore out her welcome quite completely at the ball, at this point there is not a real plan to drag her back into the storyline.  Alice...well this is a hard one for me.  I actually normally always LOVE Alice, but this Alice is a tough nut to crack.  She is not going to bring in the roses and become a fan favorite anytime soon, but you will notice some changes.  As for Rose, well...I just can’t wait to hear your opinions of her...and I am sure you’ll have plenty next week.
Updating...we had planned all along to only update every other week on Thursdays.  However since posting the first chapter we have been on an every week posting schedule...and we have NO INTENTION of changing that at this time.  Nikky and I have a comfortable cushion, and the next chapter to post is with the beta now.  I got this weeks chapter back from the beta on Tuesday afternoon, so realistically we are posting around when they are ready.  Nikky is working on her part of chapter 26 right now, and I am working on 24 so we are not looking at any lapses in time.  We are both so excited you are choosing to come down this road with us. 
Where the next chapter has some major info and angst, we promise that chapter seventeen will make up for it.  Thanks again for always being so supportive and showing the story love HCV deserves.

Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 16 Teaser...subjected to changes during the BETA process...

Its Thanksgiving today, and I am on my way to pick up Bella and the kids.  Bella and I decided that, after dinner with my family, they would all stay the night at my house tonight.  I will run them home to get their things for the camping trip in the morning, and see them off to camp.  Bella will make sure that Jake has enough food, and then she is coming to spend the weekend with me.  I’m looking forward to this weekend, but I am worried about my growing feelings for her. I knock on the door before using my key to get in.  Bella gave me a spare key so I could let myself in. The new door has a double lock on it, and is reinforced with steel; no one is breaking this one down.

I walk in, seeing Leah in a black, knee-length dress with a cream ribbon around the waist, and black shoes.  Seth is wearing a pair of black pants and a cream colored button down shirt, with a black tie and shoes.

“Wow, look at you Leah! You’re very beautiful, and Seth, you look so handsome.” They both smile at me and look up as Bella walks in. She is in a cream colored dress, with a black ribbon around the waist. The dress goes to just above her knees; she looks fucking beautiful in it - so fucking beautiful.

“Wow, Bella! You look sensational...really beautiful.  Are we all ready to go?” I look her up and down, I am so glad she allowed me to buy us all new outfits for today. 

I got around her apprehension by telling her that I wanted to go to church with them this Sunday night.  We are attending the evening service after Seth and Leah return from camp.  Since I was buying something for myself, I wanted to get them something, as well.  As usual, getting Bella to let me buy Seth and Leah something, was easy, but her...not so much.  I was so fucking glad Seth and Leah helped me. I have on black pants and black shirt with a cream colored tie.  I push my fucking guilty feelings down and smile at the three of them.

“Yes, we’re all ready.” Bella picks up their bags, and I quickly take them from her.

“Let’s go,” I say as I usher us all out the door together.

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 26 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Trash Talking Turkey Day

wow!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Nikky and I are both just so blown away by the response our story is garnering.  Thanks to the many recommends and pimping we have been getting.  Thanks for the response of our fans that make and send us banners and poems and mostly the kind words of love that give us the drive to keep HCV going strong. 
There have been a lot of you all asking for the Bella point of view, and you are going to get it.  The next chapter will have a lot of things going on and we hope you love it.  The age reveal will be in chapter 17, along with a first kiss, the kids going off to camp, Edward and Bella together and meeting up with Sally...those are a few things you have to look forward to.  We started a group on Facebook, you’re all invited to join.  TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT Fan Fiction. 
Now to the nitty gritty... 
We both wondered how many of you would ask if Edward’s son was really dead or not, and if Tanya was dead or not.  We want to be clear that Tanya Denali and the child she gave birth to are in fact deceased; they died in the fire.  
We want to point out that Edward is not a Dom.  He role-played and dabbled with the girls at the club, because it was his way of maintaining full control.   He has no desire to tie Bella up and spank her, he is not looking at her as his next submissive or slave.  Just want to be perfectly clear, he is not into the BDSM lifestyle, he is just a man who was seating his needs at a club the only way he saw fit to do so and protect his heart and soul. 

Thank you again for all of the story love and wonderful things you say.  You really have no idea what your words and kindness mean to us.  Thanks, Kasi (&Nikky)


Chapter 17 teaser...subject to changes during Beta process.
Right now, we’re back at Bella’s apartment getting Seth and Leah’s stuff ready for their trip.

“Okay, Seth, you have everything from your list in your bag, right?”  I watch as he nods his head, and chuckle to myself since Bella had just checked over the list and the bag with him herself.  “Leah, do you have everything from your list in your bag, too?”

“Yes, Bella. Edward and I just went through the list twice.”  I turn my head to hide my chuckle. 

“Okay. Well, we have to be at the church in forty minutes, and since Edward is taking us, we have time to double check.”

“Baby, Leah and Seth have everything they need. How about you go pack your bag now, and feed Jake?  I will help Leah and Seth take their backpacks down to the car.”

“Okay, I will hurry,” she says, leaving to go to her box.

I can tell that Bella is trying to put on a strong front for them, but I know this is killing her to let them go on this trip. It will be good for them, though, and good for her, too.  I have planned out this weekend so that she gets a chance to be a twenty-four year old for a change.  After we have everything packed and ready, we head out.

I drive them to the church, seeing a bus and a bunch of children.  I also see Sally there, and I frown as I pull into a parking space.  “Sally works in the Sunday school. She’s the main reason they are going.  She is taking her cell with her, and said that I could call her anytime.  She is also going to have them call me before bed, and when they get up in the morning.  You can stay here if you want. You don’t need to come with me. I won’t tell her who you are.” I turn to look at her, and smirk because she answered my internal question.

I shake my head.  “No, I am fine, Baby. Thank you.” 

The night of the break in, I explained to Bella that I went by a different name at Aro’s, and the girls I was with, had never seen my face because they were blindfolded.  I was very glad that she just nodded her head, and didn’t ask any other questions.  I hate the fact that I’ve been with them.  I don’t want my sins to show in her eyes when I look at her each time I remember that she saw me there.  When the time comes, and she finds out what I did and what happens there with me and the girls, I hope and pray to God that I don’t lose her friendship.

We get out of the car and start walking over. As we do, Sally waves, making her way over to us.  Her eyes hit me for only a few seconds before she looks back at Bella.

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06 May 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Weekend Revelations!

wow! lol!



Author's Response:

Hello our faithful readers and reviewers!  We were expecting a bit of a lashing from some of you, and we have gotten a few but nothing like I expected.  Please let me remind you all now first and foremost that we are both happy ever after kind of gals.  Little refresher is needed about ages, and a few other things, since there were a few questions.  Edward is 28 and will soon be turning 29.  Bella just turned 11 when the twins were born, Sue left when Bella was 13, and Bella has been working for the university for over 5 years.  Bella just turned 19 in chapter 8.  Edward is 9 and 1/2 years older than Bella.  Before Sue left, she obtained a fake ID for Bella that said Bella was 18.  Therefore everyone surrounding the apartment building assumed she was of legal age.  Sue needed everyone to think Bella was 18, and she was sure to scare tactic that into Bella.  All these years, Bella has continued to maintain the age Sue said she had to say she was, in fear of not being able to stay with the twins.  Now for Bree Tanner and James...Bree Tanner was the female student from Edward’s Summer school course he taught.  In the summer for the past several years, Edward has been helping his good friend Marcus by teaching the kids who struggle to pass, or are so far behind they may not graduate high school.  Bree Tanner was the hoodie wearing shy and quiet girl from chapters 1 and 2.  Bree lives in Forks and attends high school at Forks High.  James Hunter is a Math teacher and the truancy officer for the Forks school district.  We don’t want to give too much away, but if you think back to the earlier chapters, when Edward had to take a break from his panic attacks, he was clear to tell Marcus his concerns about Bree being abused.  Bella is naive about many things, but she has grown a lot in the past few chapters.  We want to be clear that Bella feels as if she lied to Edward, she started trusting him a long time ago and when she started trusting him she feels she should have told him then.  Edward doesn’t feel betrayed by the lie, but he is more of in shock by the lie.  When he thought he was almost 5 years older than Bella he was concerned with the age difference, mainly because of how innocent she is.  Now that that almost five is almost ten, he is confused.  The next chapter will have you cheering Edward on, and hating his guts too.  We don’t want to give too much away, but I will say this, we are both excited at the prospect of the reviews after the next chapter posts.  Thanks as always for reading and reviewing this story, you all have no idea how much your words mean to us.  Thank you, Kasi (& Nikky)

 

Teaser for Chapter 18: Confessions  (As always subject to changes in the Beta process.)

Leaving Bella’s place, I get in my car and drive.  I don’t even slow down when the speedometer hits one-hundred-thirty miles per hour; I just keep driving.  I am racing to get away from the fear and the rage that is inside of me. I still feel so angry; how the fuck did I not see that she was only nineteen?!  I mean, she looks so young; I am so fucking pissed at myself.  She is still a baby, and the fact that she is only nineteen, doesn’t keep me from wanting her.  I want her, and I need to be with her.  I want her in every way, which is so fucked up. I shouldn’t want to be with a nineteen year old girl.

 

She was thirteen when Sue left her to look after Seth and Leah.  She was so fucking young, and she ended up in Aro’s club at thirteen!  Fuck, if he would have said yes to her…if she was in the pictures I had to choose from…I would have picked her…I know I would have… fuck! I could have really hurt her.  I am really fucking sick! Thank God he said no! Fuck, the dip shit pimp that said yes...shit! I’m sure she would…fuck I don’t even want to finish that thought.

 

“FUCK!” I scream out and I do an illegal U-turn at eighty miles per hour.  I decide I need to see Aro. If I find out that fucker knew her real age, I am going to add that motherfucker to my shit list.  I am going to hurt him so fucking much, and anyone who tries to stop me, too.

 

 

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 23 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: First Times

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Author's Response:

Well after this chapter how will we ever get better?  I hope that you trust me when I say, it will!  Many of you want Aro to get his hands on Uncle Harry before the police do.  I will not say who gets to Uncle Harry first; because well that would just ruin the surprise, but I will say this... his capture is already written, so feel free to speculate.  There are some seriously some great chapters coming up, but Nikky says I need to warn you all that some of them are rather drama and angst filled.  There also may or may not be a few cliffhangers in the near future, oh heck who am I kidding the next two chapters are rather cliffy in nature.  The next chapter has a big surprise within and MOST of you may be very shocked.  Nikky, Jess, and a few others who have already read the chapter during BETA processing seem to think that the next chapter may generate a lot more reviews.  We may even get some from people who have not reviewed before now, because it is quite a twist.   There is your warning.  Nikky and I have been called diabolical for the plot twist that is coming, so we sure hope you all like it.  I will say this out of all the readers and reviewers we have, only one time has someone guessed a good portion of the plot and got it right.  We of course didn’t tell them, because well then they would know it would ruin the story telling process.   We had a few question about Sienna’s ability to place a phone call since she is deaf.  Deaf people can make phone calls using a Telecommunication Device for the Deaf (TDD).  Special telephone services have been developed to carry the TDD functionality even further. In certain countries there are systems in place so that a deaf person can communicate with a hearing person on an ordinary voice phone using a human relay operator. There are also "carry-over" services, enabling people who can hear but cannot speak ("hearing carry-over," a.k.a. "HCO"), or people who cannot hear but are able to speak ("voice carry-over," a.k.a. "VCO") to use the telephone.  Couple of questions came about Charlotte’s nick-name of Chas, in our story Charlotte was the youngest raised by her father among her several brothers and she was quite the tomboy growing up.  Char is a girlie name and therefore her brothers tagged her with Chas, because it is manlier.  Thanks for reading and reviewing our story, we are proud of it, and are grateful to our loyal readers.  If you have more questions or want to discuss some of the story line, feel free to join the group on Facebook you can find us by searching for: TeamAllTwilight & AndTAT FanFiction.  Kasi (&Nikky)

PS….Enduring His Cimmerian View is now POSTED... Please go read and review.

Chapter 25 Teaser:
“Pajama day is when you stay in your pajamas all day and eat lots of bad stuff, watch movies, and play games all day long.”  Seth and Leah nod their heads at me and Bella gives me a small half nod with her smile.  “Okay then, pajama day it is in our house.  I just need to make a few phone calls. Why don’t you all get your robes and slippers on, and I’ll meet you for breakfast as soon as I am done.”  Seth and Leah hug me before walking out of the bathroom to get their slippers and robes.

After they leave the room, I look to see Bella biting her lip, and I know she’s worrying about something.  “I’m sorry that she wet the bed. She’s never done that before.”

I walk to Bella, wrapping my arms around her. “Baby, its okay. She’s upset, and her body is reacting to that, so don’t worry about it.” I kiss her head and push her hair out of her face.  I hiss as I see the large bruises that go all the way up one side of her face.  “Baby, how are you feeling? Are you in pain?”

She shrugs her shoulders and tries to give me a smile.  “I’m not sure. I...”  She stops and rubs her head.  “I feel like I failed them.  He hurt Seth, and I should’ve been able to protect him better.  I’m upset that it was Uncle Harry that broke into our apartment the other time.  I don’t understand why he did that, or what he was looking for.  How could he do that to Seth and Leah?  I mean, I know that he doesn’t really like me much, but they’re his sister’s children.  I thought he would love them.” 

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: A Sketching Surprise

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Author's Response:

Well hello to our faithful readers and reviewers.  It is hard to believe that this story will be coming to a close in just about five to seven more weeks.  Yeah chapter 27 posts next week, 28 is written and off to the start of the beta’s (yes more than one) process.  I am working on 29 and Nikky is kicking behind on her part of 30.  After 30 is written there will be either 2 to 5 more chapters.  Jess2002 threw a monkey wrench into chapter 29 for us, and I was actually shocked she asked for the thing she asked for.  I will not leak the info on what she said we needed to do, but man alive it does give a nice twist.  (LIKE WE NEED MORE?) twists that is...LOL.  Okay so you got quite a bit of the mystery settled on the real Tanya Denali.  I never lied to you , when I assured you all that Tanya Denali was in fact dead and buried.  I also stated many times that the toddler found in the burnt house with Tanya Denali was in fact the child she gave birth to.  Neither of those statements was untrue.  I never said that he was in fact Edward’s, just that he was in fact Tanya’s.  You will get to hear more about good old Uncle Harry again, but trust me when I say that he will be quit forthcoming on the information.  Jane has incredible ways to make assholes talk.  Many of you want to see Jane get her hands on Sue, and well I will not say if that happens or not, you will have to wait and see.  Sue and her bullshit are not yet complete and I will say this, she makes an appearance in more than one chapter upcoming.  She is quite sly, like a fox.  We are both so excited to see what you are all thinking.  I know that this was a lot to take in with the double identities.  I want to assure you all that everything written so far was all part of the original plan, chapter 29 will be the first deviation from our starting outline.  We hope that you all continue to enjoy and read and review this story, because it is nice to hear how much you like, love, or hate parts of it.  We are amazed that we have written a story that is garnering so much emotion from our readers.  Thank you for all you say in your reviews, they really mean the world to us!  Kasi (&Nikky)   

 

Teaser for chapter 27: Subject to changes during final beta process

I look at Bella and Alice sitting there on the floor.  Alice is in front of Bella holding her arms while Bella is shaking and crying.  I walk toward them, both seeming to have missed Emmett and me coming in the room.

“He’s going to hate me... they are all going to hate me. What should I do?  This is so big. I... I didn’t know. I swear I didn’t know.  Why…why would she lie about that?  I did everything they ever asked.  I never questioned them. She could have told me. I would’ve still loved them, I do still love them.  Why?  I... it’s not fair, Alice.” Bella’s hand goes to her hair, and she begins to grip and pull at it. 

“Bella, please calm down.  I’m not sure I fully understand what you’re talking about, but Edward loves you very much, and he knows you; he will trust you, I’m sure...”

As I move forward, Alice stops talking and turns to me. This makes Bella look up at me, too.  She looks broken and scared.

“Bella Baby,” I say, holding my arms out to her. Instead of coming to me like I’d hoped, she shakes her head.

“You’re going to hate me, but I swear I didn’t know.  I thought that... I thought I was the best for them. I didn’t know really. I swear didn’t know.   If I had, I would’ve looked for you, I swear.  Mom and Harry couldn’t have done or said anything that would’ve stopped me from finding you.  If I knew, I would have made sure that they were where they belonged.  I would have been punished, but I would have taken it happily knowing that they were safe and loved.  I am so sorry.” I look at her, seeing her hurting, and I hurt too because she is still putting herself last.  “Your son, Edw...” She cuts off mid-sentence and begins to wail.

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: A Shocking Situation

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Author's Response:

Well hello to our faithful readers and reviewers.  It is hard to believe that this story will be coming to a close in just about five to seven more weeks.  Yeah chapter 27 posts next week, 28 is written and off to the start of the beta’s (yes more than one) process.  I am working on 29 and Nikky is kicking behind on her part of 30.  After 30 is written there will be either 2 to 5 more chapters.  Jess2002 threw a monkey wrench into chapter 29 for us, and I was actually shocked she asked for the thing she asked for.  I will not leak the info on what she said we needed to do, but man alive it does give a nice twist.  (LIKE WE NEED MORE?) twists that is...LOL.  Okay so you got quite a bit of the mystery settled on the real Tanya Denali.  I never lied to you , when I assured you all that Tanya Denali was in fact dead and buried.  I also stated many times that the toddler found in the burnt house with Tanya Denali was in fact the child she gave birth to.  Neither of those statements was untrue.  I never said that he was in fact Edward’s, just that he was in fact Tanya’s.  You will get to hear more about good old Uncle Harry again, but trust me when I say that he will be quit forthcoming on the information.  Jane has incredible ways to make assholes talk.  Many of you want to see Jane get her hands on Sue, and well I will not say if that happens or not, you will have to wait and see.  Sue and her bullshit are not yet complete and I will say this, she makes an appearance in more than one chapter upcoming.  She is quite sly, like a fox.  We are both so excited to see what you are all thinking.  I know that this was a lot to take in with the double identities.  I want to assure you all that everything written so far was all part of the original plan, chapter 29 will be the first deviation from our starting outline.  We hope that you all continue to enjoy and read and review this story, because it is nice to hear how much you like, love, or hate parts of it.  We are amazed that we have written a story that is garnering so much emotion from our readers.  Thank you for all you say in your reviews, they really mean the world to us!  Kasi (&Nikky)   

 

Teaser for chapter 27: Subject to changes during final beta process

I look at Bella and Alice sitting there on the floor.  Alice is in front of Bella holding her arms while Bella is shaking and crying.  I walk toward them, both seeming to have missed Emmett and me coming in the room.

“He’s going to hate me... they are all going to hate me. What should I do?  This is so big. I... I didn’t know. I swear I didn’t know.  Why…why would she lie about that?  I did everything they ever asked.  I never questioned them. She could have told me. I would’ve still loved them, I do still love them.  Why?  I... it’s not fair, Alice.” Bella’s hand goes to her hair, and she begins to grip and pull at it. 

“Bella, please calm down.  I’m not sure I fully understand what you’re talking about, but Edward loves you very much, and he knows you; he will trust you, I’m sure...”

As I move forward, Alice stops talking and turns to me. This makes Bella look up at me, too.  She looks broken and scared.

“Bella Baby,” I say, holding my arms out to her. Instead of coming to me like I’d hoped, she shakes her head.

“You’re going to hate me, but I swear I didn’t know.  I thought that... I thought I was the best for them. I didn’t know really. I swear didn’t know.   If I had, I would’ve looked for you, I swear.  Mom and Harry couldn’t have done or said anything that would’ve stopped me from finding you.  If I knew, I would have made sure that they were where they belonged.  I would have been punished, but I would have taken it happily knowing that they were safe and loved.  I am so sorry.” I look at her, seeing her hurting, and I hurt too because she is still putting herself last.  “Your son, Edw...” She cuts off mid-sentence and begins to wail.

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 20 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Where Do We Go From Here?

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Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Don’t forget to go read the BPOV chapter posted under the title Enduring His Cimmerian View.  A lot of things have taken place over the past few chapters, and there is much more drama to come.  I know some of you are mad that we let Paul get away with her, but we were sure to not let him get too far.  And as for Sue, she sure is one sneaky problem, isn’t she?  Well we haven’t seen the end of her yet, and wait until the next chapter... insert evil laugh.  I will tell you this much there is lots of involvement from the fire department in the next chapter.  A lot of you want the kids names changed, it is like you can partially read our minds, you will be seeing a conversation about that in the next chapter.  Some are speculating about the Jess2002 induced surprise that is coming, but we have not hinted on it at all in either teaser, it will have to be a surprise.  Speaking of teasers, after Monday when Fictionators posts their teaser, I am guessing that the Facebook group will be on a posting frenzy, because well damn that Sue is making yet another appearance in that teaser, be sure to check it out.  There is so much going on in the story that even I am on the edge of my seat.  I loved reading the ideas people have posted for torturing Sue.  She is a piece of work, but writing her kind of crazy is seriously fun.  I want to say a special thanks to all of those posts we have been getting about hot and juicy the lemons are.  Nikky whole heartedly passes off the lemon writing to me... and I love writing them.   There will be a couple really great lemony scenes coming up yet in the book, I am currently writing a really great one for chapter 31.  Well not many questions for you all, so we will wrap this up.  See ya next week, Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 29 Teaser, subject to changes in full beta process...

Seth and Leah have just gone to sleep for the night.  I’m cleaning up the kitchen when Bella walks in.  “Hey, baby. I’m almost done.”

She gives me a little smile, but it’s strained. “I’m worried about Seth and Leah. They seemed quieter tonight than usual.”

I put down the dish towel and wrap my arms around her.  “We’ll be fine, baby. They’ll be fine.”  I hold her face and make her look me right in the eye.  “I will NEVER let her hurt any of you.  The three of you are my life now, and I love you all so much.” Bella nods her head and steps back, taking my hand in hers.  Her eyes travel down to my watch, and she trails her fingers across the band. 

“Baby, what’s wrong?”

She looks up at me and frowns.  “I was just thinking about my past.  There was this one time that I saw one of mo... her friends when I was at the park.”  Bella stops, and I know what’s coming, but I wait for her to say it.  “I had fallen down when a boy on his bike knocked into me.  Her friend... he gave me a muffin.”  Bella’s eyes meet mine, and I know what she’s trying to say, yet I give her the time I know she needs to gather her thoughts.  “I think that friend was you. I mean... was it you?” 

My hand moves to her face, and I caress her cheek as I nod my head.  “Yes, baby, it was me.  I am so sorry. I should’ve saved you that day.”

Bella shakes her head at me.  “I wanted you to save me. Even though I didn’t know you, I wanted to go home with you.  I wanted you to come back and take me with you.  At night, I used to dream about you, but I could never see your face – just the watch.  If you had saved me then though, Seth and Leah wouldn’t be here.  They are worth everything I went through and so much more.”

I pull her toward me, hugging her tightly.  “I still wish that I had saved you from her... from all of them.  I will not fail you or my children again.”

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 20 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: She Devil

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Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing His Cimmerian View.  Don’t forget to go read the BPOV chapter posted under the title Enduring His Cimmerian View.  A lot of things have taken place over the past few chapters, and there is much more drama to come.  I know some of you are mad that we let Paul get away with her, but we were sure to not let him get too far.  And as for Sue, she sure is one sneaky problem, isn’t she?  Well we haven’t seen the end of her yet, and wait until the next chapter... insert evil laugh.  I will tell you this much there is lots of involvement from the fire department in the next chapter.  A lot of you want the kids names changed, it is like you can partially read our minds, you will be seeing a conversation about that in the next chapter.  Some are speculating about the Jess2002 induced surprise that is coming, but we have not hinted on it at all in either teaser, it will have to be a surprise.  Speaking of teasers, after Monday when Fictionators posts their teaser, I am guessing that the Facebook group will be on a posting frenzy, because well damn that Sue is making yet another appearance in that teaser, be sure to check it out.  There is so much going on in the story that even I am on the edge of my seat.  I loved reading the ideas people have posted for torturing Sue.  She is a piece of work, but writing her kind of crazy is seriously fun.  I want to say a special thanks to all of those posts we have been getting about hot and juicy the lemons are.  Nikky whole heartedly passes off the lemon writing to me... and I love writing them.   There will be a couple really great lemony scenes coming up yet in the book, I am currently writing a really great one for chapter 31.  Well not many questions for you all, so we will wrap this up.  See ya next week, Kasi (&Nikky)

Chapter 29 Teaser, subject to changes in full beta process...

Seth and Leah have just gone to sleep for the night.  I’m cleaning up the kitchen when Bella walks in.  “Hey, baby. I’m almost done.”

She gives me a little smile, but it’s strained. “I’m worried about Seth and Leah. They seemed quieter tonight than usual.”

I put down the dish towel and wrap my arms around her.  “We’ll be fine, baby. They’ll be fine.”  I hold her face and make her look me right in the eye.  “I will NEVER let her hurt any of you.  The three of you are my life now, and I love you all so much.” Bella nods her head and steps back, taking my hand in hers.  Her eyes travel down to my watch, and she trails her fingers across the band. 

“Baby, what’s wrong?”

She looks up at me and frowns.  “I was just thinking about my past.  There was this one time that I saw one of mo... her friends when I was at the park.”  Bella stops, and I know what’s coming, but I wait for her to say it.  “I had fallen down when a boy on his bike knocked into me.  Her friend... he gave me a muffin.”  Bella’s eyes meet mine, and I know what she’s trying to say, yet I give her the time I know she needs to gather her thoughts.  “I think that friend was you. I mean... was it you?” 

My hand moves to her face, and I caress her cheek as I nod my head.  “Yes, baby, it was me.  I am so sorry. I should’ve saved you that day.”

Bella shakes her head at me.  “I wanted you to save me. Even though I didn’t know you, I wanted to go home with you.  I wanted you to come back and take me with you.  At night, I used to dream about you, but I could never see your face – just the watch.  If you had saved me then though, Seth and Leah wouldn’t be here.  They are worth everything I went through and so much more.”

I pull her toward me, hugging her tightly.  “I still wish that I had saved you from her... from all of them.  I will not fail you or my children again.”

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29: New Home, New School, New Start

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Author's Response:

Hello, thanks again for reading and reviewing this story.  Nikky and I put a lot of work into these chapters; as well do a large group of ladies who have become not only our sounding boards, but trusted members of our team.  I was shocked that the backlash on the pregnancy was not larger than it was.  I was very skeptical about making Bella pregnant and ironically Jess2002 (WHO HATES IT THAT EVERY STORY BELLA GETS KNOCKED UP) said it had to be done now, because (knowing our future plot line) it was the perfect fit.  So if you are one of the (so far) two negative reviews about the pregnancy we’ve gotten, please know that your reaction was shared at first.  After we thought it over it was easy to see that it however enhanced the love story between Edward and Bella.   The gender of the baby is picked, as well as the babies name.  The story is quickly approaching finalization, and with it I feel a sense of loss. 

There haven’t been many questions, but there have been several comments about things that are complete misunderstandings.  So I figured I would list some of the ones I remember off the top of my head.

Edward wants to marry Bella, but he hasn’t yet proposed. 
Edward has been looking for a ring, and trying to his best ability to find out where his mother’s jewelry is. 
Edward is very rich, and doesn’t have to work, but like most people who are rich a great portion of his funds is wrapped up in investments, so not always does he have access to super large amounts of money. 
Edward’s father was quite a pianist and left Edward a rather large inheritance, as well as before his mother left she made sure to leave him money in a trust. 
Elizabeth knew she was ill and left thinking Edward would be better raised by Esme and Carlisle. 
Alice is not a blood relative of the Cullen’s, or Masen’s. 
Jasper and Rosalie’s parents died and in the will they left guardianship of them to Carlisle and Esme. 
Sue and Harry’s parents are dead, harry murdered them.
Bella’s biological parents are dead. 
Rose was always allowed to act out and as if she was better than everyone else. 

The next chapter is one you won’t want to miss for sure.  Before you sit down to read it, you may want to get a cold drink (not promoting booze, but I needed some writing parts of it), a few tissues, and be sure to tell yourself at least four or five times before you start reading – “Kasi and Nikky are happily ever after writers...”
Thanks again for the story love, Kasi (&Nikky)

 

 

Chapter 30 Teaser, subject to changes during BETA process.

Seth and Leah have taken to home schooling well; both are extremely bright children. Lucy resigned from her temporary position at the school, and is now helping us teach them at home.  Between the five of us: Lucy, Esme, Zafrina, Bella, and myself, the twins are receiving an excellent education.  They’ve both been a little more edgy lately, and upset about what happened with Sue. It’s been causing both of them to have more nightmares than usual.  Samantha’s advice was simple: just keep helping them feel safe and secure in their home.  We’ve talked about it several times, and I think they now understand that the school did something wrong.  I also know that they believe we will keep them safe.  

Mrs. Crown has been fired over her behavior, as were four other staff members.  This led to the papers getting ahold of the full story of what happened at the school.  When the story first came out, all that had been said was that there had been an attempted abduction. Since then, though, someone had talked – my guess would be Mrs. Crown – and it’s been all over the local news and in the papers.

 Thankfully, Seth and Leah’s names have been kept out, but reporters did manage to get some of the story behind Sue, Charlie, and Harry.  They were also able to gather some information on Bella, like the fact that she raised her siblings from birth, but they did not focus on this.  They focused, instead, on how Bella had to have known that her Uncle and parents were hurting and killing people, and hid it instead of going to the authorities.  

They talked about how when she worked, she left the children unattended and neglected.  That one line hurt Bella the most, and I had a hard time trying to calm her down. Of course, it also upset Seth and Leah.  To say I was ranting and raving over the phone lines to just about anyone who would listen, was an understatement. I had to take several deep breaths and remind myself that I supposed to help reduce the stress, not add to it.  

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 26 Aug 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32: Getting the Answers

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Author's Response:

As things are winding to a close Nikky and I wanted to take this opportunity to say that we are very grateful for all of your reviews and the time you put into reading our story.  Our next plans are to work on the several POV’s that you have all asked for.  The Jane POV will for certain be the next POV chapter we post. 
As for the next story we plan to write, well Nikky has this uncanny ability to get a tiny idea and go freaking CRAZY with it and so now she has already hammered out a decent start on a new story...  AND what a story it will be... How about a story of a virginella who loves to dance, and an olderward who lives in the BDSM lifestyle – we know been done before right?  Yeah well knowing us... do you really think it won’t have a few twists?  Besides as wonderful as we write bad guys, you know you can’t wait to see what kind of crazy this will bring on.  This BDSM story will of course have SEX in it, but it will not be all about sex, nor will the next chapter of HCV. 
A couple people have mentioned that they hope the whole next chapter is not just full of a bunch of sex acts, and honestly HCV has never been about a bunch of sex acts.  Yes there have been some explicit scenes in the story, especially regarding Edward when he was attending the club, but this story has never needed sex to be readable... and our next story will be the same way.  We also have a stalker story on the burner, and the BDSM may turn into a really big drabble or one-shot.  Either way you’ll be seeing MUCH more from Nikky and me. 
I am also writing a story with Jess that will start posting fairly soon under the name JessAndTAT that will be called Bases Loaded. 
I don’t think that there are any loose ends yet to tie up, other than Rose, and you will learn more about her in the Epilogue.  If there is something else you want to know let us know right away and we will get it answered and or addressed in the Epilogue.
As always and again, thank you so very much for being such wonderful and loyal readers.
Kasi (&Nikky)

Teaser for Chapter 34: Subject to changes during Beta process.
I look at Bella who is sound asleep, in bed.  I smile pushing her hair from her face. I rented us a villa and we haven’t left the bedroom for longer than half hour all weekend. I know that things will change today.  She still has no clue about where we are.  I chuckle remembering the car ride here and how she looked around trying to work it out.  All she knows is that we are still in America.

My phone beeps I pick it up and read the text, seeing that my first surprise will be here in just over an hour.  I get out of bed head to the kitchen to make Bella breakfast in bed.  I play music as I fry her eggs and bacon, being really careful of my delicate parts, since I’m not exactly dressed.  Ha, the naked chef has nothing on me.  Once breakfast is ready I head back with a try and place it on the bedside table.

“Baby it’s time to get up,” I whisper in her ear. 

I watch her smile as she stretches and wakes up.  “Hmm, no – to tired.  Come back to bed and cuddle with me, or better yet help me wake up the good way – like you did around three this morning.”

I chuckle shaking my head at her, but stop to kiss her before speaking.  “As much as I would love to take you again baby, over and over – I can’t right now.  I have a surprise for you and you need to eat your breakfast and get washed before it arrives.  Because once it’s here I’ll be taking you out for the day and you will finally know where exactly we are at.”

She opens her eyes wide and smiles at me.  “You got me a surprise?”

Eleven by BoydBlog Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 10]
Summary:

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How could I have ever thought my perfect recall of her would be enough to sustain me in my pitiful existence? The memory was nothing—nothing compared to the living, breathing reality of my reason for existing.

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Warnings: This story includes difficult / sensitive subject matter that may include one or more of the following subjects: self-harm, vampirism, intercourse, character death.

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of Stephenie Meyer. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended. 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: One-Shot
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: Supernatural
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 8716 Read Count: 587
[Report This] Published: 14 Jan 2012 Updated: 14 Jan 2012
Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Eleven

J'ai lu sur ff, je mets le commentaire sur twcs!  

 

Original, j'ai bien aimé malgré la fin triste... surtout à cause de la fin triste qui est originale.



Author's Response:

I'm sorry, I can't read or speak French! Thank you for reading  :)

Love BB xx

Summary: Past Featured Story

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President Edward Cullen decides to pass a bill that will change life as Bella Swan knows it. A misplaced Jimmy Choo and a stupid publicity stunt will change the lives of Edward and Bella. Are either of them ready?

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Themslovebug90's read stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 50 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 130734 Read Count: 215885
[Report This] Published: 25 Jan 2012 Updated: 12 Aug 2012
Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Fly Jimmy Fly

départ canon!

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 How I Got Here

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Date: 24 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Explanations

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Date: 24 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 Trouble at Home

Je suis une jeune grand-maman maintenant... mais mes deux filles avaient de l'Épipen pour des allergies sévères.

Reviewer: fleur50 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 24 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 Emergency

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Date: 24 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Bargaining Chip

lol

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Date: 24 Apr 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Schedules

&%$*?&%$(*?)(*

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Date: 06 May 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 PJs and Ringing Phones

wow!

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Date: 06 May 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 Alternate Arrangements

Magnifique!

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Date: 06 May 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 Sisterly Conversations

Aïe!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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After guest hosting on a morning show, Isabella becomes the new co-cost for the show. Her husband James leaves her out of spite and jealousy and Bella swears off men to focus on her new career change. Edward Cullen was known for being a portentous, arrogant, SOB while running a branch of Masen Enterprises. After the death of his grandfather, Edward becomes the new CEO. His soul focus is on the expansion of the company, and to find out who has been stealing from and framing his grandfather. When Edward visits the morning show to defend the honor of his grandfather's legacy, he finds his self extremely attracted to the beautiful co-host Isabella. In the occurrence of unexpected events the pair cannot seem to stay away from each other. How long can they resist the inevitable? Reviews for this story on fanfic 1,672

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Nominated twice for Fic of the Week on the lemonade stand

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, To Read, The Inevitable, Shena's Storys to Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , Kit's Must Reads!
Chapters: 43 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 306607 Read Count: 206636
[Report This] Published: 31 May 2012 Updated: 04 Jun 2012
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Date: 18 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chaos

J'ai hâte de connaître Mac!

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Date: 18 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 19: A family affair

Magnifique!

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Date: 17 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 18: In My Blood

wow!

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Date: 17 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Just the two of Us

oups!

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Date: 17 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Meeting the Parents

lol

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Date: 17 Oct 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Damn Insecurities

wow

Summary:

Edward and Bella, kidnapped and forced to play out a sick man's fantasy where every decision has a consequence. Will Edward and Bella be able to admit their love after the trials they endure? ExB AxJ. Language,lemons, sexual violence,unconventional.

Thank you to JA Mash for the banner.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Angst, Drama, Erotica, Romance, Suspense/Thriller
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Drive's Stories to read that are Completed, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, Dumbi's Most Wanted
Chapters: 89 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 453698 Read Count: 923492
[Report This] Published: 02 Jun 2012 Updated: 29 Sep 2015
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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

wow, j'adore!

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

long et épais...Aïe, pauvre Bella...

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

;)

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Délicieusement tordue!

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

wow

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

au prochain chapitre, je veux lire la suite...

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

oups!

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

J'ai oublié de vous dire... Je lis avec Google Translate. French.

 

J'adore.  Votre fic est délicieusement tordue!

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

vos liens de fic m'intéresse, mais je n'ai pas trouvé...

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

?!!

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

:)

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Date: 12 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43

wow!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

wow

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

wow

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31

;)

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

wow!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

je suis chanceuse! la suite est là!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

wow!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

;)

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

;)

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Date: 07 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

lol

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Date: 08 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

wow



Author's Response:

I love that you're reading this! Thank you :)

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

ouf!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

;)

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Enfin, ils vont se voir.

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

Avez-vu lu "The Perfect Wife"?  Sinon, allez le lire, vous ne serez pas déçu...



Author's Response:

J'ai lu la Perfect Wife. J'ai fait comme elle. Je ne parle pas français.

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Auriez-vous la gentillesse de laisser un ou deux interlignes supplémentaires pour les prochains chapitres que vous publierez.  

 

Lorsque je demande la traduction de Google Translate, je retrouve votre chapitre avec 1 ou 2 paragraphes, c'est très difficile à lire.  

 

Ce n'est pas toujours comme ça, mais le problème se présente plus souvent avec twcs que ff.



Author's Response:

Je ne sais pas ce que vous me demandez de faire. Votre commentaire n'a pas à traduire. Je ne peux pas croire que vous lisez ceci sur google translator!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

merci à vos bêtas, elles me permettent de lire facilement avec Google Translate.

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

wow!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Pour la production de lait avant une grossesse... je sais que ça existe.  J'ai eu une amie qui a adopté et qui a été capable de produire du lait mais cela a été long et demande beaucoup d'effort.

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

En réponse à votre note du chapitre 19...

 

Mon mari m'a installé un traducteur sur mon portable et mon ipad qui me permet de lire facilement dans une autre langue.  Je n'ai qu'à cliquer et tout le chapitre est traduit en quelques secondes.  C'est plus rapide avec ff.  Plus long avec twcs.

 

La condition est d'avoir des chapitres sans faute de grammaire ou d'orthographe.   J'ai parfois un problème avec twcs:  lors de la traduction, le chapitre devient 1 à 3 paragraphes, c'est dur à lire. Et je ne peux pas ajouter des espaces entre les phrases.

 

Est-ce possible de mettre plus d'espaces entre chaque paragraphe.  J'ai essayé de prendre des mots différents pour expliquer.  Votre traducteur n'est pas aussi bon que le mien, lol.

 

Félicitations pour votre bonne fic, vous avez beaucoup d'imagination.

 

Je suis une jeune grand-maman, je demeure au Québec, Canada.

 

 

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

wow!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

James a besoin d'une bonne leçon...

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32

;)

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

wow!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

LOL LOL LOL

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39

oups!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

Youppi!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

wow!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

Je me demande ... quand ça va sortir... Alice est sûrement la soeur disparue de Edward!

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Date: 09 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

ouf!

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Date: 12 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

wow!

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Date: 20 Nov 2012 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44

wow!

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Date: 05 Dec 2012 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

C'est tellement mignon cette naïveté!

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Date: 20 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

Wow, j'adore!

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Date: 20 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

Magnifique!   La plus belle prise de virginité jamais lu!

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Date: 20 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

wow! quel beau chapitre.

 

merci, merci à votre beta qui me permet de lire facilement avec Google translate.

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Date: 20 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

Aïe!

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Date: 20 Aug 2013 Title: Involuntary Rapture

ok

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Date: 20 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

Vous avez une imagination tordue.... mais je suppose que moi aussi, j'aime vous lire, lol

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Date: 20 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51

:o)

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Date: 20 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

wow!

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Date: 20 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Superbe!

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54

:)

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55

:)

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56

:)

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57

lol

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58

Vous avez touvé de belles photos et de beaux vidéos.

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59

wow!

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60

wow!

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61

Yoooooooouppi!

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 62

wow!

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 63: The Second Elizabeth Part 1

quelle belle photo...

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 64: Second Elizabeth Ch 2

 :-)

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 65: Second Elizabeth Chapter 3

wow!

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 66: Second Elizabeth part 4

:-)

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 67: The Second Elizabeth Part 5

:o)

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Date: 21 Aug 2013 Title: Chapter 68: The Second Elizabeth Part 6

mais où trouvez-vous ces photos....