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Diamond in the Rough by lmlx8 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4248]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella is coming from a bad marriage, and memories that haunt her. After recieving her Master's degree in Psychology, she begins to embrace her submissive nature. When she mets Edward she is drawn to his Dominating character. Can Edward help her to get over the pain from her past, and find peace at his feet.

 

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Drama, Humor, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 110 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 949046 Read Count: 1255055
[Report This] Published: 19 Jul 2010 Updated: 18 Sep 2014
Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 06 Jan 2012 Title: Chapter 81: Chapter 81

I've loved the story, but worry that he is becoming too controlling now. They neither want 24/7 yet he gives her hand signals like a trained poodle even when they are not in DS. I think if he keeps going he will "train" out of her everything he loved about her in the first place and end up with a yes/sir automaton with no personality of her own left, far moare damaging in its way than James brutality

Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 04 May 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

well now he's done it, I'd want to shove his contract where the sun don't shine. did he not think to talk to her about this first not spring it on her in a room full of almost strangers? I know he wants to keep her safe, but she has looked forward so much to her family coming and making this good for Leah, she already feels she is neglecting he family in favour of Edward and his. No Edward gets me a riled up as this one, he is so clueless sometimes, I've only ever written two revues, both to you, not even Fifty got me this worked up. A testament to your imagination and great writing I'm sure. Sometimes I could wring his neck or hit him over the head with the thick end of one of his canes, honestly.

Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 06 Jul 2012 Title: Chapter 95: Chapter 95

please don't let them have their usual when the family is there. Bella will have enough to think about and they have a right to her full attention, whereas Edward be at the front of her mind the whole time. I would hate for her to sigh and be humiliated in front of everyone too.

Summary:

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Dr. Edward Anthony Masen Cullen is a world renowned pediatric neurologist, he´s also a very sought after Dominant living in the Seattle area. What happens when the thrill of the playroom is no longer enough? What happens when he wants more than just a Friday through Sunday arrangement... Bella Swan a very young and very successful Corporate Attorney, who happens to be secretly crushing on her best friends older brother. It all starts with a dream, but after a very short, but failed marriage, Bella decides it´s time to give in to her submissive nature. With the help of her best friend and a blind date, can Bella finally find all the things her live is missing. ExB Rated for BDSM themes and lemony goodness. 

 

A very big thank you to the wonderful Kris Mkystich for my new banner!  Isn´t it sexy!!! Check her out in the December Drabble Wars!!  http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8769101/3/School-Of-Mischief

 

 

Winner of a Tomato Soup Award!

 

 

Nomimated for two Wordsmith Awards!

 

 

 

Voted Must Read Monday by Twi Girls Next Door

 

 

Winner of two Wordsmith Awards!

 

 

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, Bdsm stories only, Twilight - Read, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Can't wait for an update, Stories I've Already read, My Favorite Stories, Misstoria's Stories to Read, J's Read and Loved Stories, Fav BDSM Fics
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 312058 Read Count: 389620
[Report This] Published: 07 Nov 2010 Updated: 19 Aug 2016
Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 04 Oct 2013 Title: Chapter 1: PROLOGUE: BLIND DATING

I don't think she deserves punishment, she needed him all week and he only thought of himself, she is supposed to cater to everything he wants, what about her needs? I thought Doms were supposed to take care of their subs, he neglected her all week.

Summary: Past Featured Story

Banner by the wonderful and talented DeeBelle1.

Some so called friends invite Bella out for her birthday, and send her to a BDSM club as a prank. What happens when the owner of the club sees her? Will he be able to set aside his Dom nature? Will she ever believe she deserves to have her needs met? Will he be able to set aside his wants and desires to meet those needs, or will she find her true desire is to submit to him? AH/M


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Hurt/Comfort,, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Stories I've Already read, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, Read
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 204571 Read Count: 334686
[Report This] Published: 22 Jul 2013 Updated: 31 Dec 2013
Reviewer: breaksea Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30 Sep 2013 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I'm really enjoying this, wish I didn't have to wait a week for updates though. I think this is one of the best you have written.

Author's Response:

Many of you have already figured out that Renee is not quite motherly material. We were laughing and shocked by some of the stuff said about Renee’s pink hair.  Gotta love it.  We think you’ll like the next chapter, we get to see Renee and how she treats Bella, but we will also see how Edward gives Bella the ability to stop letting Renee walk all over her.  We think you will love it, we know we did.  A lot of you are worried about Jake and Charlie as well as Tanya ... with that being said we don’t want to give away anything much, but trust by the end of the story all things will be resolved.  I think you all will enjoy Edward’s protective ways of Bella, now that he knows she is his both casually and contractually.  We hope that you love the teaser, we had to share something juicy with you.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.  Nikky and Kasi~

TEASER:

“I couldn’t tell you for how many years we’ve been married. I know it’s been a few, but it still feels like yesterday.”

I roll my eyes at Renee’s performance, because that’s what she’s doing—performing for them.

“Mr. Cullen, when were you going to tell the world about your marriage to this woman?” one of the paparazzi yells out.

I shake my head at them. “Mrs. Dwyer is not my wife; she’s the mother of my girlfriend. Mrs. Dwyer was talking about her husband, Phil Dwyer, he plays baseball.”

Renee turns and glares at me. “They know who he is. He’s the best baseball player that has ever lived.”

I glance at the paparazzi seeing they’re all trying to figure out which team he plays for. The bright one of the bunch of course starts questioning me again. “Where is the new girlfriend, Mr. Cullen? Do we get to know her name?” I smile and look beside me to see that Bella has moved to stand almost behind me.

“She’s a little camera shy, and her name is Isabella Swan. However, we have to go, her mom and step-father have had a long flight, and it’s been a few months since they’ve had a chance to visit.  As you can imagine, they want to spend some time together, so please excuse us and have a nice day.” 

I start to walk away, but see Renee has failed to move. “Push this for a second, Beautiful,” I say before walking back and grabbing Renee’s arm lightly.  “Time to go.”

She huffs at me and I give her the look which managed to only shut her up for a whole two seconds. She really is obtuse. “Look, I need to do stuff like that with the paparazzi. I know you’re just a newcomer, but I’m famous because of who I’ve married.”

Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 14 Oct 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter: One

OK enough is enough, Renee needs to go to a psyc ward. I've enjoyed reading the reviews almost as much as the story, everyone is so hyped up over her. I do hope Bella has the brains to pick Edward and stop being a doormat. I also wish Edward would man up a bit more.

Author's Response:

Well a lot of you still want Renee to die a slow and painful death, but many of you are just glad she is gone.  Renee will be heard from again in future chapters, however we don’t want to give away too much by telling you how, when or why.  We think the next chapter will be the second most popular chapter to date when it posts.  Christmas and preparations for it, is a very fun time for Edward and Bella and will hopefully be well received by our readers. 
On a side note, please check out the wonderful little story that Nikky, Jess2002 and I are writing for Savannavansmutsmut.  It is called If I Die Young and it is posting under the author name: WeeJessAndTAT. 
Nikky and I would love to thank whoever the people were that nominated us in so many catagories for the Twi-Fic Awards.  We are nominated on four different stories: His Cimmerian View, Meeting Her Needs, Diamond Dolls Kitty Cave and Crabs And Cream.  We were also nominated in the veteran author section.  The link to vote can be found on our profile, and if you don’t vote for us, vote for someone.  There are some AMAZING writers, stories, banner makers and readers all nominated for awards. 
Be sure to check out our spook-tackular — Halloween 2013 One-Shot (This is our 3rd year in a row doing a one-shot for Halloween,) it is called: Crushes, Canines & Clowns. 
Can’t wait to see what you all think of the two stories listed above, and please go vote.   
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Nikky & Kasi~

 

Teaser: 

I lead her back to my car and we drive to another place where I can pick up the things that I need. I watch as Bella blushes and chuckles at the joke gifts the store has. I frown when I see that she has a bag, having bought something without showing me.

“What’s in the bag, Little Girl?” I ask trying to get the bag from her. But she’s quicker and hides it behind her back.

“It’s one of your Christmas gifts, Sir, and you can’t see it until Christmas morning.”

I chuckle shaking my head at her, knowing this will be fun for both of us in the long run.  “Oh, is that a fact, Little Girl? I could order you to show me, you know?”

Bella shakes her head at me. “Then your girl will tell tales to her Sir’s mom.”

My mouth drops open and I look at her, smiling internally, because she is willing to stroke the lion and play. “Is that so, Little Girl?”

Bella nods at me, but bites her lip.

“Well then, Little Girl, I may need to give you a spanking,” I say playfully to her.

“Your girl will take the spanking, Sir. Your girl really wants this present to be a surprise for her Sir.”

“Fair enough, let’s finish shopping.” I shake my head, watching her walk away from me. She looks over her shoulder and flicks her skirt a little showing her ass.  “Spanking it is then,” I say to myself before walking after her.

Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 28 Oct 2013 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I did enjoy this chapter, keep waiting for the other shoe to drop though, I am glad the Christmas show went without a hitch I was worried someone would upset it. I have to agree to some extent with Grand dame about the lifestyle, part of me thinks the doms are just feeding their egos, but can't help enjoying the illicitness of it either, bdsm fics are always so naughty and fun to read. What is it they say, men fantasise about stuff they would really love to do, women fantasise about stuff they wouldn't do in a million years.

Author's Response:

The overwhelming response to the chapters so far have far exceeded what Nikky and I thought this story would generate.  We are both very proud of this story and humbled by your responses.  In lieu of the ‘boycott’ at FFN everyone will be getting Meeting Her Needs in their inbox later today.  We hope that you all will still take the time to leave us your thoughts, especially since this coming chapter is super wonderful, (Well we think so anyway!)  Thanks for trusting in us, and no worries things are really shaping up at the end we’re working on that will leave you all satisfied—we hope.  Thanks for reading and reviewing, Nikky and Kasi~

TEASER:
I put on my tuxedo trying hard not to turn and watch Bella get dressed or look in the mirror.

“Edward ...” comes Bella’s voice as I tie my laces and answer her.

“Yes, Beautiful?”

“Two things, is it wrong to go to these balls ... things without under garments on, and could you zip me up, please?” I run through what Bella has said again and turn to her.

“Wh ...” I try to talk, but I’m unable to complete what I’m saying as I look at Bella, whose sheer beauty takes my breath away. The dress only adds to her natural beauty and I feel stupefied as I stare at my beautiful girl.

I look Bella up and down, taking in every part of her body. I slowly look her up, starting at her feet. My eyes trail up how the dress sits on her body like a second skin. I look at how it makes her already large breasts look fuller. I look at her neck that still displays my mark. My eyes go to her lips and I see that they are moving.

I close my eyes and shake my head. “Sorry, I spaced out there, can you say that again, Beautiful?”

Bella chuckles shaking her head at me. “You look really hot, like my own secret agent man. I was asking, because this dress shows every line, so I should I take off my panties, right? I couldn’t squeeze my bra into the bust area; the girls can hardly breathe as it is.”

I look back down her body and see that she's right, she has a panty line. “Remove your panties, Beautiful, no one will know,” I say. I watch intently as Bella wiggles out of her panties and comes over to me and turns around. My eyes trail down her body again and I start to kiss her back. I feel Bella shake and laugh and I look to her.

“I need you to zip me up. I mean, you can carry on doing that, but I think we’ll be late if you do.” I smile giving her one last kiss, open mouthed, at the base of her lovely neck, before pulling the zipper up. With the zipper up it makes the tight dress even more molded to her curves. It fits her like a glove, and I make a mental note to thank my mom.

“Come on, Beautiful, let’s get this over and done with so I can bring you back here and kiss you some more,” I say holding my arm out for her to take.

Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 18 Nov 2013 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

loved this Just one thing though apart from the old money it said at one point Edward was a self made billionaire where does his money come from and it's indicated many times that his family and he are not only rich but powerful I want them to completely squish her enemies and grind them into dust including Paul's father I want bad ass Edward to come out and James too

Author's Response:

Well Nikky and I both want to thank you for reading and reviewing.  All of the questions, compliments, anger (at the characters), love and kindness in the reviews is what keeps us going so strong.  SO, thank you, for reading, reviewing, sharing your stories and most of all for loving the characters—the characters who may not belong to us in name, but who we’ve taken and made into something completely different.  It is very cool to take a loved character, change them and make them different and still have people love them so much or fall in love with them all over again.   There were lots of reviews filled with questions about the newspapers and what Charlie told them.  First in regards to the newspapers, just like when Renee went all press goddess on them, the news already knows Edward.  Edward has made no secret of his lifestyle, how else would Charlie so easily have found out about Edward.  Therefore there was really nothing to put in the press, Charlie could try but it would not be front page news anyway.  Also if you remember right, Edward doesn’t really put a lot of stock into the media reports.  There are a lot of great things to come yet, so have patience and trust.  No stones will be left unturned.   Thanks again for reading and reviewing, Nikky and Kasi~

TEASER: Phil and I walk into Jenks’ office. I decided that I no longer want any of this shit spoken about at the club. Bella loves the club and I didn’t want any additional bad feelings in it for her.

“Jenks, Benjamin,” I say taking a seat; Phil nods at them.

“We’ve found the last of the girls and even another case that was not dropped.” I look at them and they hand me a picture of a girl I have actually met and I’m in shock. 

“They have DNA from a brutal attack and rape of her,” Jenks says as I look over the paperwork behind the picture.

“You’ve got to be kidding me?” I say and they both shake their heads.

“Now you really need to look at this,” Jenks says handing me another stack of paperwork.

I read the papers and frown. “How the hell did he make Chief of Police?” I ask rhetorically, not really asking anyone.

“I’m really not sure on that one, but he will lose his job with all of this.”

I sigh rubbing my face. “Make it happen,” I say and stand up, walking out the door.

“Edward?” Phil yells after me.

“Phil, just let me calm myself. I’m really close to losing all of my control. The more I find out about Charlie Swan, the angrier I become with him.”

Phil nods in understanding. “There’s a boxing ring a few blocks from here, how about we get padded up and go for a few rounds?”

I sigh and look at him, but I stop myself from speaking. I can see he’s clearly as angry as I am. “Sounds good, just watch my face,” I say and I hear him chuckle.

“Yeah, Bella will kick my ass if I hurt your pretty face. Do you think she’s ready for Saturday?”

I shrug my shoulders. “We’ll work together to get her ready, and then we’ll all be there for her on the other side. No matter what, I know she needs to do this, even if I hate the idea of it.”

Before I Die by britter18 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 422]
Summary:

 

Before Edward Cullen can become Don of The Cullen Family, he must do one thing first. Something he doesn't want to do but to become Don something he has wanted since he was young he will have to do it.

Bella Swan runs away from an abusive ex, and ends up seeing something she shouldn't. Edward Cullen offers her a choice what will her answer be?

Mafiaward/Bella

Thanks to Clo for the banner!

 

 

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Before I Die
Chapters: 43 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 319940 Read Count: 73710
[Report This] Published: 27 Sep 2020 Updated: 10 Sep 2023
Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 02 Nov 2023 Title: Chapter 43: Epilogue

What a horrible way to end it

Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 02 Nov 2023 Title: Chapter 43: Epilogue

What a horrible way to end it

Summary:

Trust & Obey

 

Bella is a twenty-two-year-old college graduate and submissive whose trust in the community has been broken by a cruel Dominant. Her best friend Rose is getting married and she is coerced into attending the two weeks of pre-wedding activities. 

 

Edward is a thirty-eight-year-old billionaire Dominant. Since his younger brother, by sixteen years, is getting married, he is opening his home at the Cullen compound to the bride’s maid of honor. 

 

What happens when he learns her name and he secretly knows it? Can Bella’s trust be restored? Will she ever be able to obey a Dominant again? B/E R/E HEA


Categories: Twilight
Characters: None
Genre: Erotica
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 105111 Read Count: 119267
[Report This] Published: 28 May 2021 Updated: 21 Jan 2022
Reviewer: breaksea Signed
Date: 27 Nov 2021 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter Twenty-six

Wow didn’t see that coming