Reviews by jamster606
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Bella has grown from an orphaned sixteen year old raised by her older brother Emmett and his friends affectionately known as ‘her boys’, to an up and coming first year medical intern. When a day in the ER turns dangerous can her boys, now members of the best SWAT team in Chicago save her? Eventual Canon pairings. Rated 'NC-17' for strong language, lemons.

 

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Fics to Read, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Love to drive's Stories to read, Twilight - Read, Themslovebug90's read stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Kuu Faves, Completed Stories, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future , mamih's favorites, TBR
Chapters: 60 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 413119 Read Count: 752865
[Report This] Published: 14 Feb 2010 Updated: 16 Feb 2010
Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 15 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue/ Brotherly Manwhores

So I'm a little late to this story.  :)  I'm a 'completed only' reader, and was so looking forward to this story and all outtakes to be finished.  So here I am.  I was following this story on FF, but once I saw it only went to chapter 17, I figured I would help boost your reviews on the new site. 

I'm assuming the Prologue is set in the future a little, so I'm intrigued for that scene to play out. 

Love the Femme Docs!

Oh, Slutward.  You are one of my faves.  :)  And a SWAT officer on top of it?!?  *swoon*



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're enjoying it.  Thanks for coming here to boost the reviews and I really hope you like it!  It's  a bit of a monster, and I enjoy putting people on a rollercoaster ride, but hopefully you'll find it worth the effort!  Thanks for coming over and I hope you like what you read!

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 15 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Femme Docs and Self -conscious Sluts

Poor Emmett and his sad kitchen skills. 

Love Jasper and his all-knowing ways.  The dynamic with all the guys is still being fleshed out, but I am really enjoying how Bella does seem like a little sister to them

Love Bella's daydream. :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 15 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 3: The Day From Hell

Oooh, Bella in full-on doctor mode.  Glad that Andy is going to be okay.  He is a new character, so I don't have as much of a tie to him as the canon characters, but it was still hard to read about him being in a coma.  Love how even after he awakes from a coma, he has more insight into B&E's tap-dancing around eahc other than they do.

Looking forward to the fallout from the kiss.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Avoidance and Disappointment

Oh Slutward.  He tries to do the right thing and it still blows up in his face.  But that's what makes his redemption all the better, right? ;)

Poor Bella, the girl can't catch a break. 

I really like the interaction with all the guys.  They all know B&E belong together, but they will rip Edward a new one when he screws up.  Looking forward to more of Bella's boys . . . and maybe an Alice/Jasper meeting?  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Peeping Toms and Sage Advice

I thought I knew where you were going with Edward walking into Bella's apartment, but I never imagined he would walk back out!  Great music choices.

I'm not sure if it will be an ongoing story, but I liked Ethan's story.  Heartbreaking, but it shows that Bella truly is a doctor.  And a good one at that.  But it's not always saving lives, sometimes you have deliver bad news to good people.

I hope one of the boys will help screw Edward's head on straight.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Puppet Master J

Puppet Master J, indeed.  Thanks for the background on him and Alice.  I love all the canon couples, so seeing these little bits and pieces is always a nice bonus. 

I'm sensing a perfect storm is being setup for ladie's night - Bella gets the Alice makeover, and Edward and the boys decide on a night out.  Can't wait!!

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Femmes Night Out

So much in this chapter. 

I'm intrigued by this Trevor character - especially his job.  I am happy to see Edward get some competition, spur him into action.

How scary it would be to have a SWAT as a loved one.  Thank you for recognizing them as the heroes they are.

And finally, the sweetness at the end.  :)  Don't know what else to say.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Sleeping With An Angel

*sigh*  Edward is starting to realize his feelings for Bella - yay!  Now, if she will forgive him and own up to her own feelings.

Hee, hee, hee Blagojevich - no comments on his hair?? :)

As much as I may love me some Seeley Booth ala Bones, I have a bad feeling about this Trevor guy.  But seeing as this is only chapter 8 of 60, I'm thinking there is much more drama to come.  can't wait! :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 9: McDreamy, McSteamy, and McCreamy

My two thoughts for Trevor's job were doctor, or drug dealer.  :)  I was half right.  I have a bad feeling Bella is going to learn about cocky Attendings first-hand.  Listen to Dr. K! 

At least Edward has the assitance of basically everyone.  :)  I really enjoy all the different POVs.  It's great to hear from someone not directly involved.

 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Heart to Hearts and Really Bad Timing

Love how the boys plot out this date like a recon mission - hiding in shadows, ducking into alleys. :)

I can actually really get behind Bella in this situation.  She has this perception of Edward in her head from the past 7 years of experience.  It's going to take more than him declaring his feelings out of jealousy for her to believe him.  No one wants to here 'I love you' because you're on a date with someone else.  They want to hear it for all the reasons Bella described - because that person's heart is so full they have to say it to you. 

Good chapter.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Roommates and Baby Steps

So happy for Rosalie and Emmett!  And it creates the perfect opportunity for Alice to move in.  She needed to be included a little more, and being someone who had to move in with mom & dad after college, I totally understand her desire to get out.  It was the longest year of my life! :)

Edward is finally figuring it out - yay!

Rock Band tournaments - awesome!

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Be Careful What You Wish For

Aww, Edward has his dazzling smile back. :)

It was too bad the original date got scrapped, but it was great to see Edward at hospital waiting for her.  Plus, they got a quasi-date out of it anyway.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 17 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Perfection

I am really enjoying watching B&E's relationship unfold.  It's comfortable, but still has a spark to it.  What a great date for them at well.  And all leading up to a first real kiss.  By real I mean one that's not made in a time of stress/anger/emotional upheaval.  Love it!

 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 18 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 14: The Inner Sanctum

Love the pictures of them in his frame.  I think it is more realistic that he didn't see what was right in front of him. Most people don't.  ;)

Ugh, that Trevor guy just gives me chills all the time - just like Bella.  I'm thinking he has something to do with the prologue, but I'm really curious how it all ties together.  Your last A/N said we had a while yet for that scene to play out, so hopefully I'll get to read more tomorrow.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 18 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Bonding and Plotting

Yay!  They are defined as in a relationship!  Always an important clarificaton to make.  :)

I'm glad to see there is a plan for while the guys are in MN.  I'm still a little worried something is going to happen, but I have faith in you.

Love how Slutward is turning into Sweetward.  Hope he stays around for a while.  Especially since Trevor "the new boss" seems even more dangerous than first imagined.  Maybe I was onto something when I thought he was either a drug dealer or a doctor - perhaps he's both?  Both would explain a page in the middle of the night. 

The storyline is really starting to pick up.  I hate that I have to signoff for the night, but here's hoping that work will be slow tomorrow and I'll be able to squeeze a couple chaps in. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 18 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 16: New Heat and Old Flames

They are just so cute together.  The chapter may not have had a ton of action, but just seeing E&B together was nice. 

I'm hoping Jake won't be an issue.  As much as I am not a fan of Jacob as a romantic interest for Bella, I really like him as the friend he is supposed to be. 

So excited for next chap, and to learn more about the EAM playlist.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 19 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 17: The Unexpected

Love Alice's disdain over TGI Friday's.  It's just so her.

This was a fun chapter and then some added drama at the end.  Love the ring.  Thanks for the picture too.  I have always loved the meanings behind the Claddaugh.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Missing and Misunderstandings

Oh Bella.  You have such crappy timing.  I can understand her reactions though.  When all of her previous relationships ended with infidelity, and then she sees Slutward appear, she has a right to be heartbroken.  She was stupid leaving town alone, but she has a right to be hurt and angry. 

I'm assuming Edward's mother will return and that story will be fleshed out eventually.  I'm curious to see how that plays out. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Runaway Rollercoaster

They aren't going to be able to trust anyone other than themselves, soon.  I feel kind of bad for Tony, and he at least called up to Bella, but he's going to lose his son anyway from Trager's point of view. 

Very happy that Bella has her ring back, and so glad that Emmett explained everything to Bella.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 20 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Decoys and Deprecation

Great songs for those two!  I am curious about the songs for when Edward screws up.  :)

I like Melissa.  I hope we get to see more of her later in the story.  Not only for Jake's sake, but she seems like a strong woman to accept the risks she is taking being Bella's double. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Getting Reacquainted

I am liking Tanya right now.  I hope she is as honest as she seems, and comes back to Chicago somehow.  I like that Bella sees how similar their situations are, and how she could easily have ended up just like Tanya is now.

Edward says he has a big plan for Friday to make everything perfect - can't wait for it.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 21 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Truth Revealed

I really wasn't sure what to expect regarding Elizabeth when she was first introduced this chapter.  I do think she had a good explanation, but I also feel Edward caved a little too easily.  But, it makes sense since he was almost desperate to know why she left him. 

Love KoL - and a great use of one of their awesome songs!

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Empowering and Contentment

Gotta love Bella being able to handle a gun like a pro.  Annie Oakley, indeed.

Love that Bella is doing so much to get Tanya back to Chicago.  It will be really interesting to see how the living situations all shake out.

I loved Edward's realization of what a real relationship is about - the contentment.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 24: For The First Time

Finally, THE Friday.  You definitely did not disappoint.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Rearrangements and Rock Stars

So happy for Emmett and Rose.  And it helped clear up all the confusion with the living situation and provide the perfect place for Tanya. 

Rock Band was great! Thanks for the visuals of the costumes, they are awesome.

I'm definitely worries about Trager being MIA.  it's too easy for people to get lazy.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Moving Ahead and Protective Mama Bears

Go Esme! I am very happy that she stood up to Elizabeth.  It seemed that Edward was too accepting of her excuses.  She had a lot more to take responsibility for, and I am glad Esme forced her to do that.

I only feel worse for Tanya knowing she is now pregnant.  I could sort of see where Bella was coming from, but she seemed to overreact a little in my mind.  I like that everything is sorted out now, and it seems like E&B are okay with everything.  I just never know in this story.  :)

Can't wait for the Prologue chapter!

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Underneath It All

I was glad to see the extra information about Bella and her feelings regarding her parents' deaths.  It was interesting to know more about her background.

Why couldn't she have just read the bottom half of the newspaper?!?  :)  Can't wait for the next chapter. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 28: The Angel's Kiss

So I had to come back and review this chapter since I had to read the next chapter to make sure everything turned out okay.  :)

Great chapter!  Great drama but the cliffhanger just about gutted me. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Focus Fluctuations

Poor Bella.  I have a feeling she is going to be on almost as long a road of recovery as Edward.  I don't know if I could have continued reading if you had killed him off, so I am very pleased that it seems he'll be okay. 

I love that his heart rate is affected by Bella being around him. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 30: For The Love of Esme

I like this chapter with the background on Esme.  To see how she has transitioned into the role as mom for Edward is both heartbreaking and yet so sweet. 

I love Esme and Carlisle.  They seem so solid.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Warmth In the Darkness

Edward is finally back and awake.  I see a long road to recovery with him and Bella, but hopefully they will be able to help each other.

What a great smackdown between Bella and the bitchy nurse! :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Reaching Into the Darkness

Great moment with Carlisle and Edward at the end. 

I keep thinking 'poor Bella' when Edward is the one who got shot.  But I realize that although Edward may have been physically harmed, Bella's wounds go much deeper, and will take wuite some time to heal. 

I'm kind of curious if we are ever going to get resolution with Trevor Sellers.  I don't like that he got to slink away from all the drama.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 23 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Disturbed

Yay Bella.  Slowly, slowly, she will get there.  Love Emmett taking her to beat the crap out of the hanging bag.  Sometimes you do just need to take out all your frustrations on something tangible. 

Not sure what to make of the 3 cocky cops.  I'm a little concerned about the guys' reaction to their reaction to meeting Bella.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Equivalency

So glad to see things starting to look positive for our favorite couple.  Obviously, there are still many chapters, and much more recovery of for both, but this was a nice break in the heartache for E&B.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 56: The Eye of the Storm

Aww, baby Emmalie.  I love that name and the spelling for Emmett and Rosalie.  :)

So glad the trial is over, and the hospital was cleared!   I'm hoping the last paragraph is true that there are only good things to come in the future.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Crankward

I really hope something starts turning around for Tanya.  The poor thing just seems so beaten down.

I was so happy Bella was going to be able to ge back into her internship, but that was a rude awakening for her.  What a jerk!

Speaking of jerks, your A/N says Edward has his reasons so I'm off to find out what those are.  Poor Bella - what a crappy day all around.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Sympathetic Solitude

Go Emmett! Edward deserved to be read the riot act with how rude he was acting to Bella. 

Looks like Bella will find her way through peds with her new hero.  :)  Hopefully, she can help Charlotte smile some more.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 37: Home

Finally out of the hospital and able to get some 'release'  ;)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 38: Concerning Charlotte

I'm hoping to see more interaction with the rest of the group.  It's been very B&E focused lately - as it should have been after the attack. I look forward to seeing Bella shopping with Alice before Christmas. 

Poor little Charlotte.  I understand Bella needs to learn to keep a distance with her patients, but the poor thing is only 6.  So sad.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 25 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 39: Declarations

Great Christmas gifts for both B&E.  Love the ornaments and rings.  And the car!  lol

I'm so happy they are engaged.  It was fast but so right for them. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 25 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 40: The Name Game

Swamsen - love it! 

I'm hoping I didn't miss whatever Edward is thinking about at the end of this chapter, but I'm intrigued.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 25 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 41: A Happy New Year

Cullen!  I love it.  I never saw that coming, but it is so perfect for them. 

This was a hot chapter.  I want whatever Mama D put in their drinks. :)



Author's Response:

Don't we all...LOL!  Glad you enjoyed that.  I thought I was being so obvious.  I've been surprised how many people didn't guess it ahead of time.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 25 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 42: Outside The Bubble

So sad that there were so many repercussions after that day.  It makes sense, and each one seems very valid - but still sad.  I'm not looking forward to all that coming to a head. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 25 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 43: Enjoying the Dreams and Facing the Nightmares

That sounds like a perfect wedding for these two.  Can't wait to see it all, and hear more about her dress. 

And Bella is starting to face her ER fears - yay!

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 26 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 44: Surfacing From the Deep

The hits just keep on coming.  I'm glad you did the chapter with Emmett and Carlisle's POVs, or else this would have seemed like a lot.  Don't get me wrong, this is a lot to process, and it is so sad for Edward to be kicked off the SWAT team.  Poor Carlisle, having to deal with all these ridiculous lawsuits, too.  I'm keeping hope that things will work out in the end.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 26 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 45: A Raft In The Flood

Hee hee.  I love that Bella called Edward out on what he was keeping from her.  He should know that she would realize something was up. 

Very cool about the SWAT training center.  What a great way for Edward to stay connected, but safe, and he has the financial resources to do it.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 26 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 46: The World Spins Madly On

Definitely needed the tissues.  :) 

Very powerful chapter.  I have Fan Fiction to thank for introducing me to The Weepies.  I don't remember which story it was, but they used a different song o theirs that I loved, and downloaded several of their albums.  Great music, and so fitting for this scene.  Looking forward to the rest of the trip and hoping for some fun Emmett and Bella stories.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 26 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 47: A Missing Piece of the Bella & Emmett Puzzle

This was such a great chapter.  Seeing how Bella and Emmett were when they were little and a little bit more into their lives with their parents.

I'm hoping more of the SWAT guys will follow Emmett's lead, only because it would be so odd if Jasper or Andy stayed while everyone else left.  It wouldn't seem complete.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 26 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 48: Surprise, SURPRISE

Ah, this is going to be quick, since I have an idea whose voice she heard, but I'm really curious.

I am so happy with their decisions for life after her residency - babies, free clinics, training facilities.  It all seems to fit them so well. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 49: Justice Served and Champagne Consumed

I knew it was going to be him!  Finally, he is brought to justice!

I would have liked to see Rose ot Emmett go off of Royce, but I can't have it all.  ;)

The mirrors.  Don't think I need to say anything more than that.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 50: The Human Incubators

I like that you made Tanya a sympathetic character.  So often she is portrayed as the villain, and I never saw her as that big of a threat to E&B. I liked being able to understand more about her background

LOVE the Human Incubators.  Too cute.  Uh oh, Tanya.  As soon as you swear off men, a good one comes along.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 51: Fly Swatting Shirts and Citrus Flavored Showers

Love the shirts that Alice made.  Too funny!

PEN15 - hee hee



Author's Response:

LOL...you would not believe how many people didn't understand it...even after my A/N hint.  LOL!  My hubby's cousin's rents still haven't figured it out!  LOL

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Rock On

Great songs for all the groups.  I loved the encore for Mama D. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue/ Brotherly Manwhores

That is hilarious!  It seems so obvious when you see it written out like that.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 53: Pressure

Rose better not pop that baby out before Emmett gets home.  :)

I don't understand why Charlie teaching Bella how to shoot will be an issue, but I"m sure you will explain it all.  I should have known nothing is ever easy in this story. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Gearing Up and Getting Off

I think  I would have been more angry if I were Bella and my fiance comes barging through the door at night when I expected him to be gone one more night.  That would have scared the shit out of me too.  :)

Can't wait for the trial!

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 55: On The Hot Seat

Agh!  This just makes me hate slimy lawyers even more. :)  Yay for Bella for being able to tell her story, and explain why the lawsuits are ridiculous.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 57: Connecting the 'Future' Dots

So happy they got their plot of land to build their dream house. 

It is so true that you think you are so smart after you've been drinking.  :)  I was giggling as I read their conversation.  Too funny!

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 58: I'll Always Be Right There

Love Bella's dress.  So perfect for a beach wedding.  The picture of your daughter is adorable! 

I loved their vows, and that te judge announced their name change at the ceremony.  It's all official now.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 28 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 59: Everything

Loved the reception.  The songs were great for all the dances.

I can't believe this story is over.  I have enjoyed reading it so much!  I can't wait for the epilogue and the summer outtakes.  This was a very well-written, well-planned story.  It never seemed to get too over-the-top in the drama or fluff departments.  It had a good balance throughout.

I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 28 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 60: Epilogue: Fifteen Years Later

Thanks for the breakdown of each family at the end.  That's a lot of kids to keep straight.  :)

Great ending for this story.  I missed Carlisle and Esme in the epilogue, but this was a great way to wrap everything together and bring it to a close.

Awesome story!

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Summer Outtakes for the story Femme Docs and Kevlar Knights.  It all began the year her parent's died.  The boys took her to the beach that first summer trying to cheer her up.  It ended up being a yearly tradition for Bella and her boys.  Watch as their relationship matures and develops from one end of the pendulum swing to the other until they finally find equilibrium.  These outtakes also fill a few of the gaps between the wedding and the epilogue.  Come enjoy the angsty, hot, and volatile journey.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Twilight, Love to drive's Stories to read, Themslovebug90's read stories, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, My Favorite Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 69300 Read Count: 26418
[Report This] Published: 16 Feb 2010 Updated: 18 Feb 2010
Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 28 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 1: The First Summer, June 2002

I don't know why, but I found this outtake to be so sad.  Just thinking about Bella having lost her parents so recently, and still still struggling with what that means - new city, new school, no mom to take her shopping, etc.  I liked it, it was just very touching to read as she struggled to get back to herself.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 28 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 2: The Second Summer: June 2003

I seem to always feel bad for Bella, and not have a whole lot of sympathy for Edward.  Maybe because we are seeing the evolution of Slutward. :)

Although this was a tough chapter in terms of UST, I still thought the first chapter was more emotional.  I am looking forward to more summers with the sideways glances, cold showers, and sexual tension.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 3: The Third Summer: June 2004

Wow, I totally missed the Heidi connection.  It does explain her actions a little more. 

Ha ha, I love all of Bella's bikinis driving Edward crazy.  The girl just wants to enjoy the one week out of the year that she isn't studying, and it gets him all hot and bothered.  I like that they are starting to realize they have actual feelings for each other, not just attraction.  Even though we know it is still years before they act on it.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 4: The Fourth Summer: July 2005

Aw, they are getting so close. 

Love the boys having a 'chat' with Caleb, even if it's to force him to break up with Bella.

I'm so happy E&B are getting back to their friendship that had been missing the last summer.  Sexual tension will do that in a friendship.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 5: The Fifth Summer: June 2006

I love how E&B think they are being so cool, when it is obvious to everyone else.  The 'first-grade level flirting' as Emmett and Jasper so accurately observe. 

I'm with Emmett.  I just want to bang their head together in this chapter.  It made me so happy yet frustrated!  lol

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 6: The Sixth Summer: August 2007

I really like Andy in this chapter.  He was a fairly minor character, but it was great to see him call Bella out on her relationship, and be someone she could talk to about it. 

Another great picture of those two. 

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 7: The Seventh Summer, August 2008

Andy is awesome again! 

Love the guys giving Bella a movie night to get her out of her funk. 

I can just about imagine Edward coming home to Bella jumping around with a bottle of Jack singing angry country music.  lol.

Ugh, they were so close that night, too.  It looks like only one more summer until we are in FDKK.  Can't wait!

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 8: The Last Summer "Before": August 2009

Love how Alice is mentioned, but never able to be around so her and Jasper don't meet for a while.

AHHH - that's just cruel!  They were soooo close.  Oh well, at least we do know that it was a few very short months before everything changed, but what a great little tease in this chapter.  :)

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Two Years Later: First Anniversary

Love their tattoos.  I like that they'll have something always there even when they can't wear their rings. 

Gotta love the drunken remembering.  I am so glad they were able to remember that night.  It is too bad that they had so much to drink and could have started their relationship 3 months earlier, but I like how things worked out in the end

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 10: The First Summer of Parenthood

My heart just melted when I read about Edward dressing Hailey in a little dress with the headband.  Daddyward is so sweet.  :)

This was a great chapter in that it shows that kids do change your life.  You may miss out in things, but there are some rewards that can't be replaced.  Like seeing your baby turn toward your voice.

Reviewer: jamster606 Signed
Date: 29 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 11: The Last Summer With FDKK

Great ending!  Poor Emmett.  He's always going to be worrying about one of his girls.  :)  I liked that Emma and Kellan came full circle. 

Thanks for giving updates on everyone.  I like my stories to have all loose ends tied up.  :)

FDKK and these outtakes were such a great story.  I am really looking forward to reading some of your other stories in the future.  I have a couple other stories in my queue right now, but I'll be back to read and review.