Reviews by But I am a good shot
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A silent war came that changed everything. Humans are chosen at birth to be a vampires mate. What happens when Bella is given to the God of War on her 16th Birthday? Will she survive the darkness and her mate? Or will she beg for her own death.


Categories: Non-Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Jasper
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 69505 Read Count: 108585
[Report This] Published: 10 Feb 2010 Updated: 28 Oct 2011
Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 02 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I am really enjoying this story. I hope you will be updating soon.

PEOPLE LIKE US by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3989]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward Cullan is the hottest movie star. Bella Swan is an art grad, in Italy for the summer. Their worlds collide in the most unlikely way.  He unlocks what she has hidden for so long - a dark side...


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Horror, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Mystery, One-Shot, Parody/Crackfic, Poetry, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, Finished, Twilight - Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 81 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1339257 Read Count: 995729
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2011
Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed
Date: 16 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

I still love this story. I look forward to it every Friday. Keep up the good work!



Author's Response:

thank you - glad you are enjoying it

Summary:

 

Will geeky Edward ever be able to talk to his crush, star volleyball player Bella Swan?  Maybe his online friend can help...

AH one-shot written for the Sport of Love challenge.  Now expanded into a story.  :-)

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Categories: All Human, Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 175278 Read Count: 21016
[Report This] Published: 19 Apr 2010 Updated: 14 Sep 2011
Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed
Date: 30 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I just found this story and I love it. I can't wait to see what happens next.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  Glad you enjoy it :-)

The Greatest Gift by les16 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 231]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward Cullen has the plane ride of his life when a mysterious flight companion changes his life in the blink of an eye. Edward will need the help of his wife, Isabella, to right the wrongs of his past before it's too late.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance, Supernatural
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My All-Time Favorites, Finished, My all time favorites, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Completed Stories, Sparkledamnu's Must Reads, J's Read and Loved Stories, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 249172 Read Count: 36371
[Report This] Published: 30 Nov 2010 Updated: 05 Jun 2011
Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed
Date: 06 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I just found this story, and I am already hooked. It is really a well done story. Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

Hi there!

Thanks so much for reading and for giving my story a try. I know it's very different from most stories and I'm so happy you are enjoying it so far. I know it's been a bit bumpy, but there are some light, fluffy times just ahead. I also hope you can see the progress Edward has made. It might not be huge amounts, but it's a start. How are you enjoying Seth...I fall more and more in love with him every chapter! Emmett and Jasper are coming up and so is Nonna. I'm so excited to show you guys some more of the characters.

In case you don't know, The Greatest Gift has the greatest blog. It is full of lots of information...pictures, playlist, and I post teasers there every Monday. Check it out and be sure to sign up for TGG email alerts and to be a follower!

www(.)les16-thegreatestgift(.)blogspot(.)com

Thank you for taking the time to leave a review. The feedback means so much and I really love hearing from you! Next update will be Sunday. I'm excited to see what you all think of it! Be sure to let me know.

Hope to hear from you soon,

les16~

 

Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed
Date: 12 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I love this story. It has a very fresh approach to their story. I can't wait to read more. Any chance I can see the Seth outtake?



Author's Response:
Hi again~
 
Well, I hope you are feeling a little better about things as we go forward? I thought it was really important to show them reconnect with each other and rediscover the love that has always been there, especially for Edward. And, really, who doesn't like sweet, needy, intense Edward?
 
Next chapter we see the beginning of his day at work and get some information that will be important as we go forward. I do promise light for the next few chapters as Edward and Isabella spend some time just rediscovering each other. Edward has a lot of work to do, hard work, too, and it is coming. I know you are anxious to get to the other characters, and I do assure you...they aren't too far away. Just hang in there with me, okay!?
 
I've had a few comments about wishing the chapters were longer. I know a lot of you are used to the monsters of The Path We Choose (and really, I was INSANE to ever do that...lol...no matter how much I love you all!) but this story has a much different pace and feel to it. I just write and stop where it feels natural. I will tell you Chapters 9 and 10 are much longer than any of the previous ones, so you can look forward to that!
 
I will be posting on my regular days over the holidays...but only if you guys promise to keep reviewing! I have the chapters already written to post so I don't want to make you wait for them. My little gift to you all for being such fabulous supporters of me and my story!
 
Okay, now for your next peek into Seth...and a brief glimpse of Carlisle and Esme.
 
Enjoy~
 
~~~~OOO~~~~OOO~~~~
 
"Seth?" Gideon questioned as he approached.
 
Gideon couldn't help but frown at his most favorite pupil as he watched him. Seth was worried, that much was obvious, but Gideon had been around Seth for a long time now so he knew it was more than that.
 
"Look," Seth said simply.
 
Being angels allowed their kind to observe many things at one time. It was just one of the many benefits of being an otherworldly creature. Of course, it was kind of what they were known for, too.
 
Gideon glanced in the direction Seth indicated and he couldn't help but smile at the scene in front of him. As he watched Edward and Isabella discuss having dinner with Emmett and Rosalie, Gideon flushed with pride at the steps young Edward had already taken. Sure there was so much left to do and in all reality they hadn't even touched on the most difficult things yet, but progress was progress nonetheless.
 
"Seth, you should be..." Gideon began but then his attention was focused on what Seth was looking at.
 
"Good morning, Es," Carlisle Cullen told his wife affectionately as he entered a kitchen in a house only a few miles away from that of Edward and Isabella.
 
It might as well have been on the other side of the country considering the distance between the occupants of the two homes.
 
"Morning, dear," Esme Cullen answered her husband as she placed a mug of coffee on the table in front of him. She kissed his cheek and then walked back to the counter to get his plate of breakfast.
 
Ironically, she'd fixed the same meal as her beloved daughter-in-law.
 
Once she had placed Carlisle's plate on the table and had retrieved her own and a glass of orange juice, they sat in a companionable silence while they ate...as they had done every morning since they'd been married.
 
A few minutes passed before Esme said, "Edward should have gotten home last night. I hope he had a safe flight."
 
Esme, along with the two heavenly observers, watched as Carlisle sighed deeply and then allowed his mouth to form a tight line. It was always the same whenever Edward's name was brought up, and had been for too many years to count. By this time it was an unconscious reaction, but the action spoke louder than words.
 
"Carlisle," Esme said in a resigned voice. She should have known better than to expect a different reaction from him when she mentioned Edward, but he was their son and she loved him. She knew Carlisle did as well. She just wanted things to be different.
 
So much time had passed; so many things had been left unsaid by all of them. Grief, misunderstandings, anger...all had festered and grown, unchecked; until the family was in the disarray it was in now. At this point, blame or who said what first didn't even matter. Esme wanted it fixed, and she wanted it fixed now. Enough was by God enough.
 
"Carlisle William Cullen," Esme said in a sharp, fierce voice causing him to slosh hot coffee onto his hand. "You know, for someone who was treated as an afterthought by his father, you would think you would try to be different with your own children," she said and then stood to carry their dishes to the sink.
 
"I'm having lunch with Emmett today," Carlisle answered lamely.
 
Esme turned her green eyes, the same one's Edward had inherited from her sister, and let them smolder at her obstinate husband. "That is not the son I am referring to, and you damn well know it. If something had happened to Edward on his flight home yesterday, just think how you would feel. I've lived for twenty years with the regret of not reconciling with my sister and there is not a day that goes by that I am not pained by that fact. I'd hate for you to have to live with the same regret, Carlisle."
 
With that, she turned and left the room, leaving Carlisle to ponder what she said. His heart did truly ache for his son and for the distance between the two; he just didn't know how to fix it. He didn't even know where to start.
 
The two unseen observers looked toward each other, both with the same pained expressions on their faces.
 
"So much hurt," Seth said as his heart beat painfully in his chest. While this assignment was one he had wanted, in fact he'd wanted it more than any other; it did not come without its own personal, painful reminders. Seth's life before he began his new one as an angel had many similarities to Edward's. Not exactly of course, but enough that it made it easier for Seth to understand Edward than anyone else.
 
"Yes, but so much forgiveness and love and joy when all is said and done," Gideon said quietly. "You can do this Seth, you must. Not just for Edward, but for all of them."
 
With that he took his leave while Seth continued to watch over the family that had come to mean so much to him.
 
~~~~OOO~~~~OOO~~~~
 
Well? What did you think? Seth has his work cut out for him, that is for sure. I'll continue to give you glimpses of things I'm not showing in the chapters themselves and before too long we'll get to Seth's story, too. So, as long as you all like getting the little peeks, I'll keep writing them. I want the story to focus on Edward and Isabella, but there are things happening in the background that are important, too.
 
Let me know what you thought of this if you want, or let me know if you have any questions. Send me an email or a PM...I promise I'll answer.

If you didn't get the bonus scene for Chp 6, send me an email~ les_sh_16(@)yahoo(.)com

Or, find me on twitter...les_sh_16
 
See you Sunday with the next chapter. (Psst...for all you TPWC readers, the next outtake is done, watch your inbox for notification for when it posts!)
 
Hugs and Love,
Erin~ (les16)

Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed
Date: 11 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I still love this story. I like the progression he is going through and I love sassy Rose.



Author's Response:

Hi again!

Yay! We finally got the 'I Love You's!' I know that lots of you have been waiting on that to happen and I hope you all thought it was the right time. Our boy has done good, hasn't he? He's come such a long way already. Now, I know lots of you are worried about the upcoming talk with Carlisle, huh? I will tell you that Chapter 12...full of lots and lots of information and one part I've been assured will melt all of you! Chapter 13...it's gonna be a little rough, just warning you now. But then 14...my favorite...favorite one so far! So excited to get these next chapters to you guys. We're moving right along...but always keep in mind my promise...I am a HEA girl through and through. You've all shown so much faith in me, just keep hanging in there, okay?

Okay, an answer to a question quite a few of you have asked me. When Seth appears to Edward, no one can tell Edward is talking to Seth. Think of it this way, kind of like a movie that stops. When Edward and Seth talk, no matter for how long, time stops and then begins again when Seth leaves. No one knows any different and no one can tell any time has passed. I know it might be pushing the boundaries, but just go with me, okay? I mean we have an angel that curses and doesn't have wings...it's fiction!
 
Don't forget to sign up on the discussion board if you haven't already...and I know most of you haven't! We'll be posting lots of information on there and it's a place where you can ask me any questions you might have about TGG, TPWC...or anything else. Also, be sure to check out the story rec thread and leave your favorites there. I'm always looking for new things to read, and I'm sure lots of you are, too.
 
www(.)les16(.)proboards(.)com

Now, let's take a look at Marcus and Alec shall we...this one was loads of fun write!

Enjoy~

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TGG- Seth Bonus Scene #6~

 

"Alec, have you seen Edward?" Marcus asked without preamble...or knocking on the door to his office as he came barreling through.

 

Alec looked up from the report he was examining and shook his head. He had had his nose buried in reports all morning to begin preparing for the upcoming project Emmett and Isabella would be undertaking. He hadn't even realized Edward wasn't in the office yet.

 

Strange.

 

"Did you check with Isabella to see if she knew where he was?" Alec asked, figuring if anyone knew where he was, she would.

 

"She's not here either," Marcus said with a huff.

 

"What in the world is going on with him this week?" Alec asked his longtime friend.

 

Marcus shook his head. He had no clue, but damn if Edward hadn't turned into a completely different person in the span of just a few days.

 

He'd known Edward a long time, ever since they met when they were at Northwestern together. They were in the same business classes from almost the very beginning and though Edward always gave off a cold vibe and most people tried to give him a wide berth, Marcus found himself strangely drawn to him. Not in any weird kind of way, but there was something about Edward that he connected with from the very beginning.

 

Through study groups and group projects, Marcus and Edward became friends. Immediately it was obvious that having friends was not something Edward was used to. He was awkward and stilted, and more often than not, hours would pass and little would be said that didn't have to do with the subject they were studying. Edward hardly ever mentioned his family, though Marcus was well aware of who he was...everyone knew.

 

The Cullen name was well-known and respected in all of Chicago...hell probably all over the country. It would have been easy for Edward to use that notoriety to his advantage, but he didn't. Marcus had always admired his friend's natural instincts when it came to business matters and in his opinion, there wasn't a man...anywhere...that could hold a candle to him when it came to taking charge of a meeting.

 

Marcus knew better than anyone, besides Jasper, how much pressure William Cullen had placed on him. For anyone else, it would have been enough to bring them to their knees, but not Edward. The more William expected of him, the harder and longer Edward worked. By the time they had graduated from college and Edward was essentially William's second-in-command, Marcus had been offered a job at Cullen Publishing.

 

Over the years Marcus had seen a lot. He watched as Emmett and Edward passed each other in the hall or sat in the same meetings barely acknowledging the other. He watched Carlisle come and go, and more often than not, not bothering to even say hello to Edward. He watched Anna chip away at him, day after day. He watched Sophie try to put him back together again, only to fail.

 

He watched, with much hope, as Isabella entered the picture and knocked his staid and reserved friend...completely on his ass. He'd never seen Edward so...flustered as he was when he was around Isabella. Hell, Edward would only have to say her name, or hear her name from someone else before he turned into a tongue-tied adolescent. It would have been funny if Marcus didn't know how much his friend struggled, daily, with his feelings for her. He was totally outside of his element, Marcus knew, and at times it was almost painful to watch Edward try to accept the inevitable.

 

Over the years he watched as Edward continued to shut people out, even Isabella for the most part. There had been times when it seemed like he was going to turn a corner, only to pull back again. He'd seen it time and time again, but nothing like the past few days.

 

And for Edward to be late to the office...it was unheard of.

 

"Hell if I know," Marcus answered Alec.

 

"Do you know, on Wednesday, I actually saw him and Isabella getting off the elevator together, holding hands and he was laughing?" Alec asked, still totally stunned by that.

 

It wasn't that he begrudged Edward anything...it was just such a shock to see a different side of him.

 

"You don't think they...you know...stayed home...together?" Marcus asked. He had to admit the idea seemed totally preposterous...though for his friend's sake, he hoped that was exactly what it meant.

 

Alec chuckled and shook his head. "Man, how the hell do I know? He's been acting weirder than shit all week. Maybe Isabella has finally pulled the huge stick out of his ass."

 

Marcus couldn't help but laugh at the blunt assessment by Alec. Alec and Edward weren't as close as he and Edward were, but Marcus knew that Alec respected Edward immensely and he was just being...Alec.

 

Crass, blunt, and no filter whatsoever.

 

"Look, Marcus, you and I both know he's been a pretty miserable son of a bitch for a long time. If something has happened to change that, I'm all for it. I hope to hell it has, to be honest with you. I may act like a dick most of the time, but I adore Isabella and she's put up with way more of Edward's shit that anyone should be subjected to. If I was her, I would have kicked his ass to the curb a hell of a long time ago. But...Isabella isn't like that and any fool can see that she thinks he hung the moon and all that sappy shit. He's one lucky bastard she's stuck around this long and if he's finally woken the fuck up and realized that, then more power to the both of them, I say.  About damn time."

 

Marcus sat on the opposite side of the desk, his jaw hanging open. He finally managed to close his mouth and got an evil grin on his face and said, "Dude, you have a crush on Isabella, admit it."

 

"What the fuck ever," Alec said dismissively with a wave of his hand. "And if I did, can you blame me? The woman is drop dead, out of this world beautiful; she's the smartest person I know, smarter than Edward even. She's kind and sweet, and she can be feisty as hell when she needs to be, too. She's..." Alec stumbled as he tried to think of a word.

 

"Perfect," Marcus added quietly. He felt all the same things Alec did toward his friend's amazing wife. He didn't harbor any unrequited feelings or anything like that for her, though it would be easy to do. No, he respected both Edward and Isabella too much to ever go down that path, but he wasn't an idiot. Isabella Cullen was an extraordinary woman; there was no doubt about it.

 

"Perfect," Alec agreed in the same tone. "Edward is one lucky man to be married to someone like her. It's about fucking time he opened his eyes and appreciated that fact."

 

"Seth, my young friend, looks like you have some competition in the Isabella Marie Cullen fan club," Gideon said with a wicked chuckle and a twinkle in his ice blue eyes as they watched the two men discuss Seth's favorite human.

 

"Hmph," the angel answered while he stewed in an annoyed silence.

 

It was bad enough that he had to share her with Edward...though he was her husband and, if you wanted to get technical about it, it was Edward that was sharing her with him...but he decided not to dwell on that fact at all.

 

"Come now, Seth, Isabella is a wonderful person. It only makes sense that she would have that affect on everyone she meets," Gideon said patiently.

 

"If he hurts her again," Seth said and his heart seized at the thought of that.

 

"My friend, you know as well as I that he has never done so on purpose. Yes, he's caused her great sorrow, but look at how far they've come...together...already in just this short amount of time. Edward's love for her has never been in question, it has just been his way for such a long time to behave as he has. Edward has endured so much, Seth; you understand that better than anyone. Anger and bitterness has a way of turning even the best of men into someone they don't wish to be," he reminded with a pointed look.

 

Seth sighed deeply, grateful for the reminder, no matter how painful it was, to remember his own time as human when he suffered through many of the same emotions Edward had struggled with for so long.

 

"He has done well, hasn't he?" Seth said proudly.

 

"Exceptionally," Gideon agreed.

 

"The true tests for him are coming, my friend. Remember it is your job to guide him through. There is much at stake, never forget that," Gideon said sternly, though with love.

 

When Seth was left alone, he said softly, "Please, don't let me fail."


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What did y'all think? We'll be seeing more of Marcus and Alec as we go along and get into the nitty gritty of Emmett and Isabella's project. Now, a bit more business. I am still willing to give any of you that haven't gotten the other bonus scenes a copy of them. Instead of trying to get a PM...which FFn doesn't like if you include whole email addresses, let's try this. Email me at:
 
les_sh_16(@)yahoo(.)com
 
and then I will reply to the emails. If you've sent me a PM and haven't gotten a reply back, it's because you've disabled your PM's and I don't have a way to get in touch with you.
 
Okay, I hope you liked the bonus scene. Let me know what you think, I'd love to know!

Oh, I'll be making this announcement soon but I'll tell you all now. I've signed up to take part in the Fandom Against Domestic Violence fundraiser that will begin on Feb. 1st. I'm going to be submitting an outtake from TGG in which we will Seth as a human and how exactly he died and became an angel. I'm working on it now and I am so pleased to take part in such a worthy cause. There is a link to the FADV website on my blog and profile if you'd like more information!
 
Thanks as always for the amazing love and support you continue to give me. I'm blown away every week by it all!

See you Sunday!
 
Hugs and Love,
Erin~ (les16)

Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed
Date: 23 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

This is by far one of my favorite stories. I look forward to it every week. You were correct in the tear jerker warning, but it was so worth it. I am looking forward to next week already.

Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed
Date: 07 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I love this story more and more every week. It is so nice to see the progression of the characters. Keep up  the great work.

Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed
Date: 03 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

This story is so well done. I look forward to it every Sunday. I am so anxious for the next chapter, I am really curious to hear the rest of the story with Carlisle and Esme.

Reviewer: But I am a good shot Signed
Date: 10 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

This story continues to draw me in. It is so well written and I can't help but look forward to it every Sunday. I am so anxious to see where the rest of the story takes us.