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The Perfect Wife by rmcrms5 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3541]
Summary: Past Featured Story

After Renee and Phil die in a car accident on Bella’s 17th birthday. She is sent to live with her father, Charlie and brother, James in Forks WA after being separated for 10 years with no contact. Charlie dabbles in training and placement of the “perfect” wife for exclusive clientele. Bella quickly learns that she’s going that she’s going to get more than a high school education. She's going to be educated with a purpose.
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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, Finished, Themslovebug90's read stories, My Favorite Stories, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiMaf, Read & Enjoyed
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 244105 Read Count: 1625310
[Report This] Published: 23 Jan 2010 Updated: 07 Oct 2010
Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 03 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19

Ok, way to go Jasper. Let me say, I´m a sucker for the angst, and the hurt, or the drama, but I endure some things, but, sorry, tough this idea of yours is interesting and is a good novel, I couldn´t endure read any more than the first two chapters, so I started out on the 13th again and tought I could catch up, but seeing something Bella tought about James´restraint when Edward mentioned he could rape her, I wonder if he already did. I really don´t want to read the details, but I don´t know if James raped Bella, how will Edward react in the future, so i´m asking.


And thus far, I just want to kick Edward´s ass, and Carlisle, and about Charlie and James, I better don´t go there... If I were Bella, I would run as far as I could in spite of not having anywere to go. I supose she has a friend, someone. I would figure it out on the run. Altough, I guess the story would end up there. Take care.

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 27 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 50

Wow! Hey, I don´t want to be mean, i know life gets this shitty for some people, but this is too much. I mean, seriously, if it is Carlisle in there I don´t think she will get it better and I don´t think that Edward can get to her fast enough. Serously, this is so horrible, why make the poor woman suffer even more? She is tougher than anybody gaves her credit for; someone else would have already turned into a lunatic, a corpse, and she still hangs on. Altough she could have tried to run or scream, or tell someone, deny he was his cousin in school or something. But, well, everyone shuts out in times of crisis.

I know you promised a happy ending, but I am sorry, I can´t see how, not right know, everything gets worst, and worst for her.

I really hope Carlisle and his party of fucked-up followers get their punishment, or die, or just disappear. They are really, really insane; beyond insane. The word doen´t need them.

I really hope this gets better soon, otherwise, well this just would be so tragic and depressing.

Take care

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 02 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

Wow! I don´t know. It was so angtsy and, honestly, horrible, all that happened that the end of the monster, was so abrupt and, well, easy, it let me speechless. AKtough, after all, they deserved easy.

Maybe not. I don´t know what will happen; Edward will allow Bella leave? Will she actually leave him? Will she come back? I don´t even know what I want. Toygh Edward is Edward, I don´t know if I want them together after all.

Anyway, I will be there by the end. I hope it is kind of cheery since, well, all this let me a little down. A lot. But hope is all worth it. Poor girl will need a lifetime of therapy.

Take care.

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 14 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 53: Chapter 53

Well, to me two years would be very little after all the horrible things she went trough;  but that´s me. Since the beggining (beggining being for me chapter 14, since I couldn´t stomach the first chapters) felt that Edward would have to let her go in the end if he really loved her. About her love for him, I wasn´t sure either, since it bloomed in pretty awful circumstances. It seems that after all, after the whirlwind of ordeals, the therapies and the tries to move on, they were actually in love, unless it is another Edward with tousled hair and a crooked smile.

About you  publishing this story, I don´t know.  I mean, everyone is diferent; there are awful, unthinkable, unspeakable things beeing done and endured out there that we don´t know about or even bring ourselves to beging to fathom, that reading it could bring diferent outcomes to each reader. It depends on the confidence, assurance and knowledge of each one , that make you stay put, even when you read about these upsetting things

For me, well, is not something I would like to read many times. Don´t get me wrong; it is great that people can be strong enough to survive this kind of thing and be happy. It is somewhat educational to realize that we are really lucky and blessed to be spared such an awful tragedy, to know that life can change abruptly and that these things and even worst things, happen. Altough, I am not really eager on torturing myself by  re.reading things that could affect my sensibilities if I am not in a suitable state of mind. I swaer I mean no ofense; to write this things, to tell this story and the way of telling it, well,it also  requires a great amount of strenght and ability.

Take care.

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 28 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Epilogue

Well, I really liked it, despite the angst, and the tears, and honestly, sometimes it made me so depressedI just wanted to give up, but in the end everything turned out well.

Bella was strong enough to get away from there and even change them, help them. I wish I was that strong; I was only reading this and moping around about all the horrible things they endure. imagine if it had benn myself (shudders and crosses fingers asking God to never let for that to happen to her).

I made it to the end. Yay me.

This story has a really original plot, tough angtsy to the extreme, is really well written and obviously you never get bored and are always expecting for the next thing to happen. 

I really admire you for writting this, I could never accomplish this amount of heartfelt story, nor this strory line. 

Take care

 

Summary: Past Featured Story

sos

 

Bella and the gang are the popular rich kids of Forks high, new teacher Mr. Cullen starts, B wants him right away. What starts out as a passionate affair ends up as a cataylyst for the obsession of a dangerous drug lord to take action. Lemons.

Be warned- this is not your average teacher/student story

Now completed- Thanks to all my readers and reviewers.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: G8or Favor8s Read
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 88667 Read Count: 55121
[Report This] Published: 30 Jan 2010 Updated: 04 Mar 2010
Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 20 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Oh God! I´m deoressed. Don´t get me wrong, it´s a really good story. It´s good that not everything is lemmons, and fluff, and rainbows, but it is sad. It will take much and long for her to be OK; for everyone, actually. But that´s life, sometimes shit happens, and some shit is shitter tan other.

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 20 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

I´m sad again, poor Bella, she didn´t even realized it herself, I would have blacked out for good at the knowledge. Must be horrible. And you are right, the coke thing is going to be harder than be willing to leave it; above all things the poor woman had to endure the bastard had to make her and addict. Hope to see what punishment you´ve got to this Demetri character.



Author's Response:

I know it well get better soon I promise- Updating today.

Thank you so much for all your reviews

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 20 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Well, what is going on in that blonde head of Rosalie´s, I wonder. Poor Bella, hope that in a couple of months, maybe years (story time), those things take people diferent ways and time frames to sort out, but that eventually, and with help and support, Bella can move on.



Author's Response:

Thank you for all your wonderful reviews, Rose is being a total bitch but you will see her reasons in the next chapter.

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 24 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Wow, that sucks. I mean, what happened to them. You just never know when your life can change for the better or the worst like you never imagined. All they´ve got is try and move on an get over it, be strong and live. Not everyone is strong enough for that; just hope they are.

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 24 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

Wow! I am glad she is so strong, serously. I really got a crack of what Edward thinks, that he has always been far to easy when Bella was concern, so true. Now I just really wanna know what they are doing with that horrible Demetri;hope something that suits him. And...  Good lemon :D

Take care 



Author's Response:

He knows Bella has him by the short and curlies and he wouldnt have it any other way lol

Thank you so much for your review

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 27 Feb 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

Wow, Bella is really strong, I´m also in awe of her. Now the trial is the only ordeal left and I´m hoping to read it. And I got teary with the Sprite scene; I´m a sucker for cute animals. Take care



Author's Response:

She is, I hate the Simpering Bella you see in so many books, I try to make mine a little more tolerable lol. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 02 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

I´m still in awe at Bella´s strenght. I´m glad Demetri was found gilty, but with all the drug charges I guess he had and murders and I don´t know what else being a Drug lord and all, I doubt he would have walked away unless the justice would have been that crappy. About the legal part and terms about the chapter, I can´t tell you anything cause I have no clue at all; Law has never been my fort. Anyway, as you say is fiction, we all know that, so, no worries there. All in all, tough I enjoyed SOS, I´m really looking forward to know how it ends; epilogues have always apealed to me. Tough I´ll need to find other stories to read. Take care

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 02 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

Wow, that was tough. I figured that Edward did drugs some time and that sometihing worst happened because of it, but Ben really is poor.spirited; didn´t see Angela coming there. I don´t know where he ended up, tough I´ve got my suspicions, surely and sadly he look foorward to it. I´ll be sure to be here on wenesday to see how this ends. Take care

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 06 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26-Epilogue

Bu! I´m crying, it´s over, but happy. They deserve it, after all the crap. Thanks for your writing. Good luck!



Author's Response:

I'm glad you were happy with how their story ended.

Thansk you so much for reading and reviewing.

 

Chelle x

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

 

 

One Bet. One Week. No Rules.

Bella bets Edward that after a week of some raw sexcapades he won’t want to stop. He bets her otherwise.

A slightly tongue in cheek smutathon and my first fan-fic.

 


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Twilight - Read, G8or Favor8s Read, To Read
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 137672 Read Count: 315846
[Report This] Published: 09 Feb 2010 Updated: 13 Sep 2010
Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24- Never Think

Ok, I am all for her aknowledging she is fucked up, he is fucked up, the whole Fork´s population is fucked up ten times to tomorrow, but hell, please don´t go all New Moon on me, I can´t take it, I could barely take it once. It made me bawl with crying.

I know life is tough and things are easier said than done , but why don ´t people ever talk? Seriously, couldn´t it be something along the lines of "I love you but I need to get out of here. Nothing happened with James but I need to go. We´ll be stronger if we go trough this, you can visit, I can visit..." Whatever. But why does people have to think they know what´s better for their loved ones and take decisions for them without consulting them and then go and lie and manipulate the situation to make them think that that is the best thing for all. Jesus, I am upset.

I mean, this story is great. It was all sexy, deviant fun and all. Sexy Edward and Bella going dirty on each othe,r who wouldn´t love it, right? An I know they were disturbed since the beginning and that the drama and angst was bound to happen like all in life, but hell, when it happens , let´s face it, nobody likes it.

Hope they can sort it out, seriously, ´cause I had the feeling they were like this long lost souls that just found after almost a lifetime of being almost biting their noses without really looking at each other, and that finally they found someone who understood and can realy on, but now it doesn´t seem that easy. I´m sad.

Take care

Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 13 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25- Echo

Ok, here (sigh). I know, I know people complicate their life without needed be, inevitable and unconciously. I know; I do it myself like everyone else. But seriously, we have to learn that not everyone is lucky enough to screw things up really badly and having someone else fixing them for you. It happens really rarely. 

So, I think they both messed it up, but I am kind of madder at Bella ´cause she knew they both had relationship problems and she goes and ruins Edward´s knew found will to try out one, with her own selfpitty and let´s be honest,  a little bit of recklesness. I know Edward isn´t going right about things either, but seriously, the girl said she was going, she didn´t say exactly where nor did she reach to no one in Forks afterwards,  and she also said that she pretty much betrayed him. What can be expected? If it wasn´t because someone else told Edward she was most asuredly lying, there would be nopossibility of E&B.

I mean, I know that sometimes you need to get away, cut all loose threads and start all over, but is it really necesary to hurt people in the process?

She is rich, if she wanted to dissapear she could have, wether he wanted her to or not. I think there was no need for the lying and heartbreak; but, well, what is a good fic without a little bit of drama? Or a lot... sometimes...

Anyway, I am looking forward to see how they fix their problems. True, they needed to fix themselves first and then try something together. I am glad Bella was able to make progress there; Edward not so much. 

I will be here for the next chappie, biting my nails and hoping for the best. They are still young, so I think that they have a good chance to fix themselves with propper assistance and will. So, I am hoping.

Take care

A Perfect Love by Robicorn Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 791]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Dr Edward Cullen is a twenty-six year old single dad who is sexually frustrated until he meets his sister Alice's college roommate Bella Swan. Sparks fly over Thanksgiving weekend. Lemons. Collab with Robinated Cont of 1 shot for Ninapolitins DILF contest

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Lady Luciole's Favorites TwiHu, Stories I've Already read, Brooklyn - to read, luv2write finished reads, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 113225 Read Count: 106344
[Report This] Published: 16 Apr 2010 Updated: 16 Oct 2010
Reviewer: Marinitalita Signed
Date: 28 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Well, this perfect Love doesn´t seem so perfect right now. Is Jake marry? What are bellás issues, since she prefers to casually be with a guy compromised than with a hot, sweet, availlable guy? And this Kate girl, what the hell? LOL

Tough let´s face it, the sex and sexy flashbacks are so steamy...

I´l keep reading

Take care