Reviews by Sunshine-Sue
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What if Edward finally found his mate, but she had a troubled past and wanted to kill herself? Could he help her? This story has DARK Themes and Rape discussion.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 51 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 248279 Read Count: 76225
[Report This] Published: 15 Feb 2010 Updated: 14 Jun 2012
Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 13 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - Aftermath

yay for alice outing edward in his infinet dumb-assedness. and letting the family know what he wanted to do and what would have happened. bella was kinda creepy while getting stiched up. sounds like there was some blame thrown at bella durring her ordeal 2 years ago. somone made it her fault for tempting them. maybe the whippings were punishment for being a temptation and 'forcing'her attaker(s) to rape her and sin? pretty messed up way to fuck with the good christian girls mind - you made me sin - you upset god - you must suffer for your misdeeds - i am not at fault, you are...

then again i may just be reading too much into this...



Author's Response:

you aren't reading too much into it, but not totally correctly either.  But you're right there was a religious freak in her past that was NOT Biblical in his thoughts or actions and took it out on Bella.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 13 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 - Being Left Alone

poor belly bean! thinking she has to do this alone. poor eddie having to give in and let her go. heres to wishing the time passes quickly for them both.

as for the lemon i think it would fit to at least show their first time so we can come full circle for both of them. having them come together fully as one



Author's Response:

Bella is very worried and truthfully it's hard to say at this point if she would be more freaked telling Edward everything before the trial and dealing with his anger and everything or being on her own.  I do know this, their being apart is very important for them both, this will show them that they can't be apart and they need each other.

I agree with you on the lemons!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 - Mated

well it is about time! eddie handled the news a lot better than i thought he would. there was no major break down, no big temper tantrum. but him wanting to run to bella was a given, also very happy to see even he thought it was dumb that he didn't see the signs.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 - Being Away from Her

wow i can not believe how well edward is dealing with everything. he has his moments but he is doing his best to make it easier on bella. glad to see that he was able to connect with bella's friends so they could all work together to help her. can't wait for the reunion!



Author's Response:

Honestly he is falling apart but is soooo focused on helping Bella that's what's keeping him going and sane. I sooo wish i had an Edward!  then again maybe I shouldn't wish for a blood drinking stalker . . . I need to think about this.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 - Now that She's Home

poor bella! poor edward! she can't deal with everything and he can't do anything to help. once her story is out maybe there will be more chance to heal and help.



Author's Response:

Telling her story is the biggest step in her healing going forward.  I'm glad I wasn't Edward seeing and dealing with poor Bella coming back from that trial.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 27 May 2010 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32 - Into the Night

i really enjoyed how you had bella's story come out it is so the way she would have done it. skim over what happened and then have the others find the actual facts of the case. i think jasper is really spot on in his thinking towards bella. he has her so pegged you'd think he could read minds! edward is learning that his up hill battle is on a much steeper slope, and he is really gonna need everything in him to make the climb. but he knows it is all gonna be worth it.

sucks you are gonna change to updating every 2 weeks but that is the junkie reader in me talking. as a person with a real life too i totally get it. thanks for the heads up. happy writting! :)



Author's Response:

your review made me smile and I did a real fist pump!!  I love it when my readers get where I am going and are soooo in touch with the characters, which you obviously are.  Thank you!!!!  I'm fan girl gush right now!

thank you!

Summary:

These are the out takes of other Cullen's POV during the story,

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 18212 Read Count: 1986
[Report This] Published: 15 Feb 2010 Updated: 03 May 2010
Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 11 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Secret Family Meetings

heehee now eddie and belly are in trouble they have the whole cullen crew working on them.



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you're reading the ot, they add a nice dimension to the story, and yep!  all the Cullens are working on them now!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 12 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - Thoughts of a Suthern Gentleman

nice to see that the troops have gathered and are ready to fight for bella. i would love an OT in rose's pov



Author's Response:

you're the 2nd person i've had ask for RPOV.  I don't know.  I have none planned right now but maybe in the future.  I'll have to see.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 12 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - The Love of a Pixie

oh boy what is she gonna do now?



Author's Response:

lol, Bella's full of surprises, that's for sure!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 13 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - The Day the Earth Moved

so is she writting her book all those nights that edward watches her? it is nice to see the other side of thecoin here. especially since bella doesn't have her head up her butt, and isn't completely oblivious like acertain vamp we all know...

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 13 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - A Day with Bella and Emmett

i love me some emmy-bear!

Summary: Past Featured Story

 am Edward Cullen and I have a deadly secret: I am a hit man. My new target: Isabella Newton. With the help of my friends, we plan the crime of the century. What the hell am I going to do when she becomes more than my target and becomes my life?


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, To Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125711 Read Count: 41877
[Report This] Published: 16 Feb 2010 Updated: 22 Dec 2010
Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Devil in Disguise

staying away from the target would definately make it easier to do the job. looks like eddie is gonna have a tough road to walk with this one. i wonder what the gang is gonna think?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Death By . . .

wow eddie seems to have a big problem in staying away from our girl! but at least now alice will have some real time with bella so maybe she will see it too.

the game was seriously funny in a creepy these-people-really-kill-people kind of way. but seriously bunnies?!?!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Phantom Desire

well itlooks like alice has yet to be wowed and won over by our little bella. but eddie sure is in deep! i wonder how everything is gonna play out from here? is the fact of helping kids like them gonna play a huge part in this? it sure seems to be what will get her foot in the door with the group...

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Fallen Angel

well it looks like alice is on to eddie and his playing with fire. wonder what she'll think when she gets to meet bella? cause the whole group is gonna have to meet her and fall in love with her each in their own way. if not eddie is gonna have a hell of a time talking them outta this...

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

ok that was all kinds of fucked up! is it wrong that i liked it? heehee

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 May 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Sinful Pleasure

ok so jake is the contact/money man, alice is the future seer, em is the planner, and eddie is the exocutioner. they are a team that works together, cool.

wonder who the new hit is on...?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Angel of Death

i agree with edward was alice being true in her concern for bella or was it all a show? has our little bella added a freind to her list or just another person out to use her and then kill her?

and poor eddie at least he is realizing that he is feeling things for her and now he knows she feels something for him. oh boy what is he gonna do?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Passion and Fury

wow would have loved to see the street meeting through mike's eyes! i bet eddie's right he probably needed a change of pants after that. heehee.

now edward and bella what to do about those two? they are getting into some pretty deep shit and this is not gonna end well for either of them. i still don't get why eddie can't just call it off and run away with bella.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Soulful Brown Eyes

well i gotta say i loved the mental side road eddie took while talking to rose at the bar! that shit was too funny!

i wonder what happened to bella from last night to today that she completely did a 180 on what was going on with eddie. maybe it is just the guilt of cheating or maybe someone had a little chat with her...?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Visions of Duct Tape

well if bella gets the divorce or makes it known that she has changed the life insurance policy maybe jake and the others will tell eddie (and mike) the hit is off, because without the insurance mike can't pay...

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Shaken to the Core

well maybe bella has taken matters into her own hands and solved the mike problem. heehee wouldn't that be awesome! then they could be done with all of the hitman shit and try  to find a happily ever after, but alas that would make for a pretty short story, so my guess is the hea is still a ways away.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Quicksand

well bella took care of one side of the problem but not the most important side. mike needs to go! maybe jake too if he's gonna be an ass.  that was so sick and sweet and sad and joyfull all rolled into one!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Dismal World

well it is about time eddie maned up and realized he had to kill mike and make all of this shit just go away. i wonder howhe plans on keeping alice in the dark if he is planning it and not just going spur of the moment? and bella how will she take the news about eddie? what will she think? do?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Dark Abyss

so what the fuck?!? mike figures he can just off bella all by his lonesome?!? on what planet does that make any sense? he is a complete and total idiot! and he is one dead mother fucker! eddie is gonna kill him and enjoy every single second! now jake, hmmm, what can we say about jake? he is a greedy son of a bitch, that's for sure. but will he be ok with calling everything off? will he try to use bella against edward? will eddie have to take him out too? oh boy the questions! every chapter you guys answer one or two but leave me with like 5 new ones!

off to 15 to see edward kick mike's ass and probably make him beg like a little pussy bitch! heehee! kinda sad that i only have 2 more chapters and i am all caught up and having to wait for updates. :(

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Torture

well that was all kinds of fucked up, now wasn't it? but hey did anyone expect anything else from our little eddie-boy? glad to see mike got what was comming to him. heehee and bella! wow i so did not see her comming in and finishing the job! but hey the girl had her reasons for offing that bastard! but it looks like the cat is outta the bag and eddie is gonna have to tell bella everything sooner rather than later.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 23 May 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Reality Check

well shit eddie is just seriously fucked up right now! and em is right he needs to seriously get his shit together! boy is in a hobo, drunken oh poor me slump and sexy edward or not ain't no one gonna wanna get with that shit. he needs to pull himself up and deal with his shit. plus he still needs to go see jake and make the deal complete, dispite everything he needs to make sure bella is taken care of.

now a few problems/questions about this chapter...

1- eddie told em and alice to burn mike's body, how the fuck are they gonna explain that shit? and how does no one bring up the fact that the body is gone? or did em and a just get rid of the evidence? and if mike's body is still around how are they gonna explain the damage and cuts and burns?

2- how did carlilse and esme not hear the comotion down in the torture room? you guys made it sound like they lived upstairs. we had mike screaming probably for hours while eddie had his fun, bella freaking out, and eddie's little holy shit episode with both bella and then with alice and em. how they fuck did no one hear any of that shit?

3- if daddy c knows about the affair does anyone else or was it just because of how eddie acted when bella was there?

4- i get that bella had the insurance policy for her and now we find out there was a matching one for mike but why did she never bring it up before? and will the insurance company want a body? won't the missing body cause questions to come up that no one wants to deal with?

and damn it all to hell i am all caught up now and have to wait for updates! SHIT!!!this was getting seriously good and it seems that things are getting ready to start winding down.

wow this is one hell of a review/bitch fest i got going on here. hope real life treats you all good and good luck on the book release! hope to see an update soon.

Summary: Past Featured Story

Summary - Bella is kidnapped by a beautiful stranger that cannot kill her, but hates that a human can have power over him. Which road will he choose? When Jacob wants her, will that make his decision? Both men want to own Bella, however her heart only belongs to one. Which will have her in the end? Can Edward protect her from Jacob and his past, or will she eventually be consumed? 

 

 

 

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Vampires and Werewolves. OOC. Darkward. And every so often there shall be a sprinkle of the fluffy stuff. But mostly dark.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 122877 Read Count: 76213
[Report This] Published: 16 Feb 2010 Updated: 29 May 2011
Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 36: Oblivion

Looks like bella had to take care of buisness! Holy shit! Now she just needs to finish the change and wake up to the happily ev er after forever and ever

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Final Piece

Nice to see eddie and bella got a little alone time to reconnect. With everyone so tense and on guard this little coup will be a sinch!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Gratitude

well at least aro is allowing some contact between bella and hrt family. still unsure as to how long they have been at the castle for.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 31: Mute

so bella is a powerful shield and it would seem a weapon if pushed too hard. she is gonna be the key to them escaping. glad to hear that jake has not forced anything physical on bella, other than snuggle buddies in bed.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Beautiful Stranger

looks like miss bella's life is about to get exciting.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Trapped

so he took her and has her locked away. wonder how he is gonna react to her hitting him with the rock. his reaction tells me he knew what she was planning to do...

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Ultimatum

will we see the rest of the family? no way they would be ok with this.

bella is staying but what next?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Monster

looks like ed didn't like her answer. i wonder who he will use as an example to prove how monsterous he is?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 5: New Surroundings

So we have met carlisle and he is not the sweet doctor here! Who did ed bring to bella? And what is he gonna do with them?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Hopeless

Wow that was fucked up and ed ! To trick her like that!? Mean!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 22 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Inside the Mind of a Monster

So ed is split in 2 he wants to be with bella but he also wants to be the monster. I see change coming in his future..

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 24 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Magic Eight Ball

wonder what got eddie's panties in a bunch and made him pull bella out of her visit with alice? worried about something alice would say? or bella? and they shared a moment! ed liked it while in the moment but then as always got pissy and stomped off.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 24 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Leaping into the Rabbit Hole

wow bella that was pretty ballsy! b ut the gamble seems to have paid off so far.

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Date: 24 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Mr Nice Guy

so the wolves are bad too. and now jake is wanting bella and edie will have to fight tokeep her safe. i wonder whothe vamps working with the wolves are?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 24 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Cruelty & Kindness

that was cute how he was playing around with her. and he finally kissed her but obviously he got a little carried away with it. they are gonna have to take things slowly so he doesn't hurt her.

and we have now met eddie, human bella, jasper, human alice, carlisle, and rose. i wonder where em and esme are? will they be joining our little family too?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 24 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 12: Taking Control

a little bit of lost control! such a good thing at times! poor bella taking everything on her own shoulders.

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Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Kitchen Confessions

well that really took the fire outta both of them didn't it?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Bitter Heart

so that's what happened to carlisle. so sad. and i guess that means we won't be seeing esme in this fic. now the only one left of the original crew is em and you better not make him a bad guy!!! i wonder who was outside the window?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Peeping Tom

so is the spy rose? or is there another female vamp in the house? rose is bringing em home!!!!! yay!!!!

and eddie is not wanting to corrupt bella even though it would be best.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Manipulations

so rose has brung home a pet too. and jasper and bella have had a good talk even if jasper needed to trick her into it.and eddie has given in to the fact for now that they will eventually have sex.

oh and we seriously need to get carlisle lais it might help dislodge the pole up his ass! lol

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Killing the Corrupt

stillno clue on who the spy is.i don't really think it is rose but that only leave alice and bella and it can't be either of them. unless bella is blocking without knowing....

it should be interesting to see the final confrontation between jake and ed....

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Waffles

how long until bella finds out the truth about eddie's last girlfriend? from who? and did she even exist or is carlisle just fucking with bella?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Unleashing the Monster

Awww she has not only changed eddie and made him love she has changed the monster too. So sweet in a fucked up kinda way. Heehee wonder what jake is up to?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 25 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Doomed

i can see what carlisle is talking about that really would make having bella around that much worse. it seems that everybody is questioning what is so special about bella. and why she has made it through not only time with eddie but time with the monster as well.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Notes

holy shit bella is playing with fire. but it is good that she knows how to call up the monster quickly, that may come in handy

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 22: Trust

oh shit looks like bella is falling for jake's shit hook line and sinker. what will ed and the others do?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 23: Fighting the Monster Within

well they fought she ran away and he brought her back with love and understanding. bella really does have a mortality issue. it s all about i'm gonna die for her.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 24: To Touch a Psychic

i really do understand bella's point on this why is eddie being a dumbass? if she wants to change he should either help or let someone else do it.

who are they running from? will the boys get there in time to save them?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 25: Be Afraid of the Big Bad Wolf

wow bella ya think?!?!? why would it be a good idea to listen to the people you know and love and trust over a stranger? for having a cop for a dad she is way too gulible and nieve(?) so glad that everyone will have the chance to scream a great big i told ya so at her.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 26: The Truth Hurts

tanya? gotta have her pop up at some point right/ ans as the baddie heehee! wonder how they will get out of this? will rose and em come to save the day or will someonee else step up to be the hero of the day?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 27: The Punishment of Isabella Marie Swan - Part One

wow bella is really taking the punishment. eddie will have to change her when this is all done or she won't survive. funny to see carlisle all protective of her, it is because she reminds him of esme. still not sure how they are gonna get out of this. and what is up with eddie's eyes...?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 28: The Punishment of Isabella Marie Swan - Part Two

well they have been saved? i think? at least now the boys and alice are not tied up, that we know of. maybe this is the break the boys need to come back and kick some ass and save bella?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 29: New Home

so was the torture sesion all in their heads? or was bella passed out for 6 plus weeks? how is she ok? and what is eddie and the monster gonna do when they find jake and bella? will eddie get there in time?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 30: The Voluri

heehee surprise! it is bella. she is tougher than she looks and very powerful. how long have they been at the castle? how long has it been since the girls were taken? where the hell are rose and em?!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Isabella's Ball

can't believe aro brought her parents into this! time for bella's true gifts to come to light.

and was that em on the wall outside her window?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 26 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 34: Like a Moth to the Flame

Well the wheels have been set in motion. Eddie is gonna raise hell! Aro was warned but hey men can be stupid right?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 27 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 37: Saving Grace

and so begins the happily ever after! the cullen family were the only ones left to pick up the pieces and move towards forever, together.

congrats on finishing your story! sounds like it was a growing, learning and mostly good experience for you.

thank you for sharing your story

suzie :)

Seducing Revenge by ladyinblue6 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 64]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella isn't your regular government agent. She's a rogue agent, and she's killing everyone that ruined her life. What happens when she takes an FBI agent, Edward Cullen, hostage? Will her revenge still be burned into her mind? 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 47921 Read Count: 10912
[Report This] Published: 17 Feb 2010 Updated: 26 Apr 2010
Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

well at least she didn't have to have sex with grandpa!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

the path to happiness can be full of pain. pain it seems for everyone in bella's way.

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Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

2 birds one knife. and some new intel on what's been going on while bella has been away.

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Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

well now! will bella be making it to see aro at all? or will she be completely side tracked by eddie?

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Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

heehee have some fun before getting to work? sounds like a good night in the making! now does eddie know who she is? is he playing along with her or is he just thinking she is a beautiful woman that he wants to get to know better?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

oh bella! what did you do? and eddie seriously, overconfident much? you didn't even read bella's file? stu-pid!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

oh bella-boo it's ok eddie will love you and make it all better. pretty sure he won't want you to kill his daddy though so you guys will have to come up with something there....

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

how can eddie be so dumb? were there no warning lights flashing in his head at her killing someone? how did he not put this all together? time to go get aro.

*continuity issue* did you mean to have tyler c. mentioned here as the pilot? you used him in chapter 2 already ' "We've only lost one of our members, Tyler Crowley, to a mishap in Korea. At least he took a dozen foreign spies down with him."', not sure if you realized it or not.

 

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

well eddie did that answer any questions for you? or just bring up a whole lot more? time to go home and deal with james.

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Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

i wonder what eddie thinks of what aro and his dad did to bella and the others?

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Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

well now that was one hell of a dream! all of the kids are named after family members? jake, emmett, esme, you never mentioned the name of baby bump #4.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

bella wants a challenge and to not be seen as a weak girl. eddie is not gonna give her the challenge she wants but a whole new kind...

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Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

breakthrough! yay now all they have to do is un-jumble her feelings, kill james, and talk to daddy c.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

goodness honey you never tell the parents the whole story! unless your one of my kids then i expect full disclosure! heehee not that i get it.

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Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

well hell! that is one hell of a side effect to coffee! eddie better hang on tight it is gonna be a long night! is he man enough to keep up?

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Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

oh eddie you are breaking down her walls so fast her head is starting to spin!

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Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

oh bella! can you see this time he is trying to help you by pushing you away? it is just like when your mom asked you to choose....

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

how is she the big bad story and all fbi agents know about her but eddie didn't? is the story just about bella and not about where she came from and who she is?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

sick fucker!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

well hot damn miss bella could definately make a living off of dancing, if she could stop killing the guys in the audience! heehee! will eddie follow her and help her take down james?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

it was all in her head? wow mind over matter, pretty cool shit. so eddie showed up and shot james? right?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

well she has come back from the brink of death and has found eddie waiting for her.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23

looks like miss bella found more than just the contentment she was looking for and actually found happiness and joy. so glad she found her happily ever after!

thank you for sharing your story!

suzie :)

Summary:

Hockey is an emotional sport for the players and the fans. For TT25.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 34783 Read Count: 15816
[Report This] Published: 17 Feb 2010 Updated: 26 Apr 2010
Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

gotta agree here momma e cussing would make me giggle too!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

never read a story along these lines before, it looks like it will be good!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

oh i like this bella she can definately give as good as she gets. if not better!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

ithing is cool and i so see old fogies like my mom calling it that! as it is she told me she is gonna get my kids 'cd3 music players' for chirstmas. thank god i understand that means 'mp3 player' in mom speak! heehee

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

oh you gotta love passing out at a party!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

eddie got a little look at the goods and so did she!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

and so it begins...

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

whoo hooo! time to get lucky!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

ok so the issue has been solved. they are gonna give it a go and see where this takes them.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

happy little couple but they still have to deal with the regular bullshit.

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

uhoh does that mean the shit is about to hit the fan?

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

yeah dumb fuck you can't be a total asshole and not think she'll start to wonder what the hell is going on!

Reviewer: Sunshine-Sue Signed
Date: 07 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

wow that was so not a good talk! bella was acting out at 14! oh that's bad. and eddie is a jerk.