Reviews by bouncy72
Summary: Past Featured Story

 am Edward Cullen and I have a deadly secret: I am a hit man. My new target: Isabella Newton. With the help of my friends, we plan the crime of the century. What the hell am I going to do when she becomes more than my target and becomes my life?


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's completed & recommended read stories, To Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125711 Read Count: 41876
[Report This] Published: 16 Feb 2010 Updated: 22 Dec 2010
Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 16 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Dismal World

Wow, Edward's showing a softer side than I thought he had. He's taking such good care of Bella. He really ought to tell her though, cos that shit is just going to come back & bite him in the ass.
Hmm I wonder if Emmett & Alice would actually ever turn on him, I think Alice might, but not sure about Emmett. Well if Alice tells Bella what they wanted to do to her, Bella can tell Jasper, so that will come back & bite Alice's butt.
I kinda think Mike deserves to be tortured & killed (lol, although liquidizing his dick & making him drink it seems quite excessive)
Thanks for the chapter ladies, it was very good.   :)

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 09 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Dark Abyss

"your glass is always half full when you look at others . . . why is it half empty when you look at yourself?" - this really stood out to me. Arg the end is FREAKY...hope we find out soon what happens...
Thanks for the chapter :)

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 30 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Torture

Yikes sorry ladies had to skip the torture bit.Glad Mike is dead, & Bella didn't run screaming from Edward, though I think there's going to be big repercussions from this.
Thanks for the chapter.

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 17 May 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Reality Check

I loved this passage..

*My heart was broken. It wasn't a clean break—nothing ever broke evenly—and hearts, I just learned, broke in jagged pieces and jabbed you repeatedly to remind you of how badly you were broken inside.*

Gosh it was heartbreaking to watch Edward fall apart like this. I hope Bella at least talks to him at the funeral.

Thanks for the chapter ♥

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 11 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Killer Sentiments

Goodness I feel like crying. Poor Edward. I can't see how this is going to work, Bella's never going to be able to live with that & Alice is freaking harsh...I can't believe she would kill Jasper  if she need to *siffles & gives a small sigh*
Thanks for the chapter ladies!

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 03 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 18: Deadly Silent

Eek. I can't see a way out of this. He needs to get rid of Jacob, I don't trust him as far as I can throw him.
I liked how worried Eward was about Bella being in hospital, I love when that side of him shows.
Alice knows to much too. Argg, the suspense is killing me...

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 03 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 19: Blazing Suns

Awww I LOVED this chapter (*grin* I'm a total fluff hoor)
Lol, I should be totally creeped out by his stalking, but it's kinda cool. I'm so glad she sort of understood where he was coming from when he told her about his past. Loved the picnic & how he couldn't even do the "man thing" & grill the chicken for it. I'm very impressed with him for turning down sex, that has to be a first. Thanks for the chapter!

Love at 1st Bite by AgoodWITCH Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 64]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward is instantly drawn to the new girl, Bella Swan. From their first meeting he is overtaken by a desire for her body as well as her blood. After a week in Denali he returns to Forks and visits the object of his obsession. What happens in her room that night will change both of their lives forever. First chapter was written for the "In the Dark" Contest.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Wanna read
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 50865 Read Count: 17353
[Report This] Published: 18 Feb 2010 Updated: 03 Jan 2017
Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Rash Actions

lol, I'll tranfer my reviews over, try & get the count up a bit...

Hey got the rec for this from Jasper's naughty girls blog. I really enjoyed that. Thank you!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for trying to bump up my numbers!

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 2: She's a Survivor

Wow, good imagination. Bella allergic to the blood & her hiding in the cuboard. Glad the draw between Edward & Bella is so strong :)
thanks for the chapter!

Author's Response:

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Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Hard Good-byes

Thanks again for chapter. It would be incredibly hard seeing your parents worried about you & not being able to comfort them. I liked the others in the family interracting with her. :)

Author's Response:

Thanks again!

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 06 Apr 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Outside Intrusions

Oh dear, that's not good...They're going to get into trouble aren't they?!

Thanks for the chapter :)



Author's Response:

Trouble yes...but it will be interesting! Hopefully not how you expect it to play out!  Glad you enjoyed the chapter~

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 17 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Missteps

Oh my goodness, what a way to end a chapter.
I was surprised Bella drained a human, but I'm glad she died just before Bella took her.. Edward is such a sweetheart, he's so supportive.
I'm dying to know the relation between Bella body reactions & the Volturi.
Thanks for the chapter :)

Summary:

After a bad break-up, Rose and Alice take Bella out to find her someone to have a little “fun” with so they head to La Push, a local college hangout, where she meets a certain 17 year-old looking guy with green eyes and sex hair. OOC. First chapter written for the NaughtyHeels Anonymous One-Shot Contest.

 

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Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: None
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 38182 Read Count: 23676
[Report This] Published: 18 Feb 2010 Updated: 02 Jun 2010
Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 06 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Serious Talks Ahead

Oh thank goodness Esme was cool with it, once she got over the shock. Edward is such a sweetie. I do hope they are going to be ok. 19 is so young to become a dad.

Thanks for the chapter :)

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 06 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Where the Boys Are

Wow, no I didn't see her pregnancy coming. That was alot of info for one chapter :)

I liked the introduction of Jasper & Emmett & the beginning of Em & Rosalies relationship.

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 03 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 2: The Light of Day

Aww *grin* I loved it. Glad she's not afraid to be with a younger man. I really loved his POV too. thanks for the read :)

Oh & I love the pictures at the end of the chapter :)        Bella's ring is awesome *chuckle*

Summary: Past Featured Story

It's You've Got Mail meets Pillow Talk meets...eh, you get the picture. It's the usual ABG yuks and lemons. Playerward v. Straightlacedella. Love/Hate/Love/Banter/Sex. RATED NC-17 COS WHY ELSE DO YOU READ FIC, HONESTLY? AH, CANON PAIRINGS


Categories: Twilight, All Human
Characters: None
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's faves - not updated in 2012
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 174770 Read Count: 64145
[Report This] Published: 25 Feb 2010 Updated: 15 Sep 2010
Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24

Lol, I love Alice & Rose. That version of because you "boned" me, was HILARIOUS!!!
Wow...SO glad Carlisle was nice & that Edward didn't freak out hearing that Bella actually had found him. I cried a wee bit in the letter Carlisle sent. Gosh Edwards grandparents were evil.
I loved how things got slightly akward when Bella brought up having babies & how they were able to move on from the akwardness, disguss it & even joke about it....man these two have come a LONG way!
"And while I didn't win the race or even get to run in the first place, I can't help but feel like I've won something on a much grander scale. I helped Edward through something I doubt he ever would've attempted alone, and best of all, by the looks of things, he'll come out of this happier for it.
No bigger win than that." Loved this final passage, so so sweet, I'm feeling all sappy.
Thanks for another lovely chapter bb ♥

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward Cullen has survived for years drinking the blood of the dregs of society.  He longs for something different, the blood of an innocent.  Enter Bella Swan.  Will desire for her overrule desire for her blood or will he take both?  All EPOV.  Starts darker, quickly turns humorous.  Language, lemons and some violence.

My awesome banner was made by ambrosia over at Twificpics.com.  Go check them out!

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, J's Read and Loved Stories, Bella's Must Reads!
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 204849 Read Count: 50129
[Report This] Published: 26 Feb 2010 Updated: 02 Jun 2012
Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Lol, You do realise you are the 1st & probably one of the only Darkward stories I read. (I'm the biggest wussperv ever, seriously) But I just can't NOT find out what happens next...*chuckle*
I like that although he battled against it, He actually let Bella live(?)..uh continue to exist.
Hey I am NOT a Jacob fan, but I did feel a wee bit sorry for him in this, I wonder if Bella is going to feel guilty when she realises what she's done.
(Lol I did enjoy Edward Hotwiring & stealing the Lexus)
*Groan* another cliffy :P
Thanks for the chapter, looking forward to the next!

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Lol, yeah Jacob surely is a cockblocker! I thought this chapter was quite humourous, Bella thinking he gave her an STD *giggle*
Edward being COMPLETELY clueless to what she's actually feeling...there's going to be some problems there I think. Good on Bella for not wanting to kill people, but Edwards going to be a bit out of ideas to feed her I think. Thanks for the chapter hon!

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Oh my goodness, I think I'm discovering a sadistic sense of humour in myself :)
This chapter was hilarious. Poor Edward REALLY needs a release *giggle*. Lol, his first Vampire headache. His confution over Angel (being an Angel). I never got caught up in the whole Buffy craze (funnily enough, I DIDN'T ACTUALLY LIKE VAMPIRES, lol, I guess I didn't realise in a few years I would LOVE them *grin*)
I didn't know the series was by Joss Wheldon either...I LOVE him, I might have to go to the video club & rent them out.
I cracked up laughing when Edward got cock blocked by Jacob AGAIN, *chuckles*. When he kicked him after Bella left I was laughing in ernest.
Listening to the show it DOES sound a bit ridiculous but I LOVED Edwards internal thoughts, he was fucking hysterical.
Oooo interesting place to leave it. thank you for the chapter!

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

EXCELLENT chapter!
I killed myself laughing, Edwards thoughts are bloody brilliant...*chuckle* poor guy
I felt a bit guilty because I really enjoyed him taking Jacob apart while having a conversation with the corpse. And then disposing of bits of him everywhere. *grin*
I had another giggle when he bought the clothes & you find out he's rich, because he stole the car earlier, so that just makes him a hot,bad(funny) vampire.
I loved Angela, I hope he remembers to send her flowers. He's so wicked dazzling her (hot, wicked *grin*)
Oh my goodness brilliant idea to put the blood on his lips, that was really hot when she attacked him.
Thanks for the great chapter ♥

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hey bb don't worry about leaving author replies to me on here. I'm pretty much just copying my reviews from FF over to here. Keeps your review count up.

If I ever miss a review on here I'll still review on FF. I do use FF alot more than here atm, which could always change with the stories being pulled :(

Thanks for this chapter, which was the begining of my addiction to a taste of innocence ;)   My first Darkward experience.

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 24 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I do feel sorry for Edward, gosh you can't help but love the boy, and he is going out of his way to do as Bella wants.
"And then there was the fact that I actually enjoyed her in a purely nonsexual way. Okay, sex was never far from my mind when it came to Bella" - Lol, he's so cute, and I LOVE his thoughts, they ALWAYS seem to have me giggling away :)
I laughed at him teasing her "because it's fun" & I cracked up at Bella slamming the keybourd through the screen. It'll be interesting to see how this date with Angela goes *grin*
Thanks for another awesome chapter :)

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 13 May 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Just me reposting

 

"I ended up with a contrary newborn vampire who refused to do anything normal." *giggle* & that is why she's perfect for him, hehehe.

I loved when he thought of turning Angela & having a Harem, but figured Bella would get Angela & they'd both cockblock him :)

"But no, she had to try to change me. Why did women always try that bullshit?" - Lol & why do men always resist us...I mean we do know best!

"Jesus Christ, I needed a drink. Sadly that was not an option" - *giggle* it's kinda funny how he DOESN'T mean alcohol here. Girl you have me cracking up at this, truely!

"Had I turned her at her wrong fucking time of the month and she'd be like this always?" - I wonder...lol, can you imagine if that happened, hehehehe.

"Ha. I knew her like the back of my own hand" - Lol, I give him 2 minutes.

Brilliant chapter as always bb. What a way to leave us hanging though *groan*

Thanks for the good read hon ♥



Author's Response:

I'm becoming pretty good at cliffies...I would hate me if I wasn't the one writing it!  Love that you put up with me!

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 13 May 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

"Fuck, this was one battle in which I'd willingly surrender." *squeak* - oh my goodness this whole passage is to fricking hot!

"I could actually fucking feel my eyes rolling back" - lol it sounds like that doesn't happen often. *giggle* You have no idea how much I love this guy...I'd even be a non vegetarian vampire for him *gasps & shakes head to get some common sense back*

Oo *gulp* the "almost" lemon was so so hot.
"I could see the spot on her neck where I'd taken her and made it so. It was a perfect bite mark, nearly invisible to the human eye, but I could see and so could any other vampire that we encountered in our endless lifetimes. They would know she belonged to me" I love how you brought this in, with the bite scar implications, that she was his. It's a really good idea. Also how you kept the theme a wee bit & it wasn't just some throw away comment.
"She was turning me into a woman but I didn't give a fuck. She was mine, just as she was always meant to be! Our hands remained pressed on her neck and I was wrong; this was the hottest fucking thing ever. The two of us touching the spot that made us forever one together." - so sweet, love it.
Lol I just KNEW they were going to get cockblocked, I knew it. LMAO...poor Edward.
& then Bella wants to just TALK. HEHEHEHE. Poor boy :(

Wow Rose was a bit of a bitch ey. Glad Edward stood up to her for Bella.

"I want you," she responded and I nearly fucking came from hearing her say that alone. "But…" Oh mother of fuck, what now?" - poor Edward (I LOVE that internal voice, hehe)

"Her witch voodoo electricity did not need to be distracting me now" - ah Edward, you're a tresure hon *grin*

Thanks for another stunning chapter hon...u rock ♥



Author's Response:

Responded to you indepth on FF so I'll just say thanks for reposting comments here and I adore you!

Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 13 May 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Lol, I love how he's so paranoid of becoming "a chick" & Bella finding out about this. *grin*

"But I resisted, boys and girls" WOW, is he feeling alright? He's so CUTE.

"like that time I fucked the preacher's daughter on the second floor of the church during mass. I didn't see what the fucking problem was; she kept yelling "Oh God" - I packed out laughing at this, that's so dodgy.

I loved him walking out of the shower & she was sitting on his bed. Call me cruel, but I'm loving that she doesn't want Edward to go on this date, but she does, but she really doesn't :) *grin* of course it doesn't help that Edward gets all devious, sneaky & sexy

"I could hear my dick start to whimper beneath the towel. If I wasn't careful he would probably detach from my body and just attack her." *snorts with laughter* Ahhh the mental image that comes with that... hahaha

"I was torn between wanting to laugh at her or cuddle her." lol, he so is getting soft, he was thinking of CUDDLING her.

I liked how she made him promise not to kiss Angela, and then as an afterthought, told him not to kill her either.

I AM glad he's taking Angela out now, shame poor girl, she's so dazed at this whole thing, so I'm glad he's being a gentleman with her too. (*chuckle* even if her sweet thank you's are driving him crazy)

"I saw the look of wonder on Angela's face." Oh she's so sweet. I kinda feel abit bad for her now...

Oh damn it..Bella's SO gonna make him pay for that kiss, but I'm so glad he did. Ang needed that.

Oh! hehehe he has a plan...

I fricking love this story...going over to the thread now...woo hoo

Thanks bb, you always make me smile & laugh & cringe, lol.



Author's Response:

You're the best, leaving me comments here and there!  I hope you like the thread, I was blown away when Starla made me one!

Summary:

This is a TNGUS side-shot for the Haiti relief charity drive. It's the first chapter of TNGUS in EPOV. Rated M for dirty, naughty thoughts.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: LeslieWhitlock's faves - not updated in 2012
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2392 Read Count: 1452
[Report This] Published: 06 Mar 2010 Updated: 06 Mar 2010
Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 22 Mar 2010 Title: Chapter 1: TNGUSPOV: Chapter One and a Half

LOL, loved it. I always love TNGUS POV & it was awesome seeing his first impression of Bella. Gosh I'd forgotton about her covering her eyes & walking into the wall. *giggle*
Thanks for the outtake ♥

Summary:

Who doesn’t love a cowboy? Rosalie Hale that’s who. So when her friends suggest a weekend get away to a rodeo she is less than enthused. As a born and raised city girl the dirt, the smell, and the animals are just not her thing. Until she meets him and learns not all cowboys are an eight second ride.

Written for the Sport of Love Challenge

 


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Emmett/Rose
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5786 Read Count: 385
[Report This] Published: 02 Apr 2010 Updated: 02 Apr 2010
Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 19 May 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Lol, The introduction had me laughing. So did not think they were disgussing shoes at the start. Marcus & Felix were great. Felix's flambouyancy & Marcus's quiet caring (*grin* & sneaky salesmanship)

I LOVED your Jasper & Edward. Jasper wasn't the stereotypical cowboy. (He was the least of the 3 of them) He wasn't a silent, sensitive sort, he fully blurted things out, regardless of appropriateness,or before thinking

“You don’t say things like that,” she scolded and then turned to Rosalie. “He is right, though.”

“How come you can say things like that?” Jasper asked.

“Because I’m her friend.”

“So am I!”

“I’m her best friend.”

“So am I.”

“I’m a girl!”

“So am-” Jasper stopped while everyone laughed at him.

& his comment that the only thing he rides is of the two legged variety (SO un-canon I LOVE it)

I loved Edwards country background. How he was the sorce of info abbout all the events & names & I think that one of my fav lines from the fic was...

“I still can’t believe under all that GQ he’s a country boy,” Rosalie commented.

I giggled at the thought of him & Em riding sheep when the were little. That would have been TO cute! And loved the idea that He fit into BOTH worlds, he wasn't just the city executive!

Loved how Alice dealt with Jasper, giving back better than he gave.

And LOVED Em & Rosalies interactions. SO sexy & hot  AND he last's more than 8 seconds *grin* ...what more could a girl want?!

Hon that was a fantastic fic, thanks for sharing!!!

 



Author's Response:

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it and Jasper. He seriously had me cracking up as well while I was writing. I don't think we get to see the fun side of Jasper very often

First & Ten by Nolebucgrl Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 828]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Bella Swan is an aspiring sports writer and her first big assignment is to interview the league's biggest, not to mention hottest, quarterback.  Will Edward Cullen school her in the rules of the game or will she teach him a thing or two?  Rated NC-17 for language, lemons.  An entry in The Sport of Love contest.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Challenges:
Series: LeslieWhitlock's faves - not updated in 2012, Finished, My all time favorites, Drive's Stories to read that are Completed and Not completed, Amberina's Completed Favs List, G8or Favor8s Read, Kuu Faves, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, Bella's Must Reads!, My favs past present and future
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 351776 Read Count: 189000
[Report This] Published: 06 Apr 2010 Updated: 05 Sep 2012
Reviewer: bouncy72 Signed
Date: 13 May 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Dr. Cullen must have heard the drool falling at my feet because he looked up and smiled when he saw me

Argg his eyes that pin her are KILLING me...literally & I swear if his towel falls open a bit more I'm gonna bloody jump through the screen, push Bella in a locker & pull the towel right off... oh dear, I seem to have lost control of my fingers at the moment. but they are directly linked to my thoughts so...

I'm really lost with all the football talk...Rugby makes WAY more sense :P *grin* (although I have to say I'm never the biggest sports fan)

"He’d take out his own mother before he’d let anyone hit me."  - wow nice thing to be proud of ...meh.. testosterone driven males *rolls eyes*

"Another two inches and he’d be showing me the most coveted cock in the country.  I willed the towel to continue moving." .. *squeak* cover him, cover him *body starts twitching spasmodically*

Lol. I couldn't break away from that lemon if you paid me. I swear my stomach was in knots & my body was all tensed up.

It did cross my mind that they didn't use protection or even ask if the other was clean & then I got to the end & nearly laughed my ass off. What a unexpected twist. You're brilliant bb :)

R u going to expand this after the contest?

 



Author's Response:

Hey, a lineman's job is to protect his QB at all costs.  If Mama McCarty was bearing down on Edward with intent to harm, Em would have to step in!

Rugby makes no sense to me but I haven't tried to figure it out either.  I don't want my men all bloody tho. hehe

Glad you enjoyed the lemon!  It was fun to let loose on that one. 

I got you with the twist!  Woot!  So happy!  I had little hints but few people figured it out.  Yeah, it would have been bad had they not known one another.

I am going to expand, need to start writing it since it's almost time!  Thanks for another awesome review my dear!