I'm loving this whole story line, very unique.  Besides that it's really making me laugh.  I also love the fact that the grammer and spelling are correct for the most part as I find it very distracting to read when it isn't correct.  One question I do have is how in the hell do so many people write one story?  I understand collaboration but you all must have similar devious minds.  I look forward to reading the rest.  Last thought is that it is refreshing to not be begged for reviews.  I find it very disconcerting to find those little notes at the end promising sooner updates and/or teasers if you review that is one reason that I usually only read fiction that is complete.  I know authors need feeback but some get ridiculous.

You did a really good job displaying the emotions of both characters even though it was EPOV.   However, I do have a question about Edward insisting on her submissiveness in her room.  I thought in her room that idea was suspended as long as she was respectful, was there a reason you had them maintain the Dom/Sub dialogue or am I confused?   I do really like your style of writing.  It's good and you give your characters dimension and the sex is an integral part of the story and not just thrown in.  I look forward to your future posts.

What great imaginations you 2 have.  What great combinations of facts,ie. the garlic.  Even though the story line at present is very violent it fits somehow and is not grossing me out.  I'm glad you are making a dictionary of sorts but I think you should send it to every one who reviews or what the heck just post the damn thing in an additional chapter.  Some of us even though we read don't review ( LIKE MYSELF) simply because we never know exactly what to say without sounding trite - like I really like what you're writing and I do.  I wait sometimes anxiously for the next chapter.  So hurry up and write and then send it and also the "dictionary thingy".   PLEASE!!!!

Please don't get upset about the mean spirited reviews.  I've been reading this whole saga since the very beginning with the first"Storm".  Some people are just mean.  Personally the story in my humble opinion is very true to life especially with famiies that are multifaceted. Yes I like good grammar and proper spelling but if mistakes are made, which you make very few of, so what.  Sometimes I think that people that read fan fic feel they can really dish the shit because it is free and they forget about respect.  I'm sorry that I don't review more.  I just don't review much at all unless I really, really llike something or it moves me.  So take that as a compliment.   Also I usually only read completed stuff but you I have followed all the way through eagerly awaiting the next chapter.  So even though I don't write I am a prolific reader and read any and all kinds of genre.  I'm a retired teacher and fan fic  has saved me a ton of money since I read sooo much.   Don't get discouraged just keep writing and forget about those who won't even identify themselves.  They are not worth getting upset about.  Just follow your heart and keep writing.