Reviews by LuvRPatz4ever
Summary: Past Featured Story

15 yr old Bella has a fairly normal life. That was until her mum's new boyfriend came on the scene. Will Bella survive her new life? Dark Themes, Cannon Pairings. GRAPHIC

Thanks mkystich for the amazing new banner... AGAIN!!! :)


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, I Whitlock's read , My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 89516 Read Count: 311074
[Report This] Published: 21 Jan 2010 Updated: 04 May 2011
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Salvation

OMG this is terrible.  But in all truth Rene was too eager to find another man.  She didn't know Phil from anything and she trusted her daughters life in his hands.  I feel so sad, Bella was broken.  I cant believe that she lasted  5 weeks.  I am glad you put a Felix POV I knew he did not enjoy doing that to her but I am so glad that he halped her to remember her name.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 : Rebirth

Wow Aro really think he is God doesn't he.  I just hope this man to be her husband is Edward. 

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - In My Hands

I knew that sick bastard was going to be the one to take her virginity.  He really is sick.  UUuuuggghhh I hate sick men.  Well hopefully Edward wont be like him.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Not Your Own

uuggg no its not getting crazy, it already IS crazy.  I hate ARo already.  lol.  Cant wait to read more.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - Embrace

Finally we meet Edward.  I still hate that Aro will plant the first seed.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 - Atonement

AAAhhh Edward, I love you already.  Yes he will be good for her.  I cant wait for him to have her.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 - Admonishment

Wow Edward took his punishment well and still had it in him to wink and smile at her.  That is wonderful.  It shows that he was a good heart.  I cant wait for more of this story to unravel.  I wonder though, how do they know that the first seed is really the one that got the woman pregnant?????  If the husband also sleeps with his wife, it could be that Edward is not even his son but is Carlise's son.  Yes I like this thought better.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 - Do Unto Others

well I think I am content in my first thought that maybe Edward is not Aro's child at all.  Hopefull he will not make a child with Bella either.  I hope Aro is sterile. LMAO  that would really be funny.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16 - Confession

Well it looks like Bella's mind is not completly lost.  BUt I hope that Esme can help her so they dont kill her too.  I cant wait for more of Edward.  I am sure his lemon will be wonderful.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - Discloser

Wow I dont know what to say. I liked the chapter but my comments are for your a/n's.  I dont know why people would write nasty things to you just because you write this story.  That is just mean.  They have to remember this is Fiction but on the other hand like you said I do believe that there are cults out there that do live like that.  So I think it is believable.  If these haters dont like what you are writing then they need to stop reading.  What they say cant not control others lives.  We happen to like reading and we like this story, even though we hate Aro. lol.  But there is a villan in every story so...... Dont worry about those haters.  The story is doing great.  I just wish there was more Edward.  But I am sure he will come we just have to wait.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 11 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 - Fear Not, For I Am With You

hhmmm I think maybe it was Felix chekcing on her.  THis place is crazy. Not only did they whip her but break her hand with a hammer?  That is sick. Well I think Aro is sick anyway wanting to take everyone's virginity. He thinks he is God. Asshole.  So you didn't explain or I missed it, what is reflection?  What is happening to Edward there?

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 24 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22: The Temple

wow this story is so intense.  I just hope that Carlisle does something so that Aro's seed is NOT FERTILE so that they do not have his biological child.  I just hope that Edward can calm her down to go through with it so she is not killed.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 05 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 - To Err Is Human, to Forgive....

Well I think the note said to forget his daughter or he would only die if he found her. This chapter was kind of short or maybe its just me but it seemed like it to me.  I am anxious to get back to Bella and Edward.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 07 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Free Will

Aro is a sick bastard. Well I hope that Edward is going to run into Charlie when he goes to town and he will see that Bella was actually kidnapped.

Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward over hears a very juicy secret regarding his younger sister, Alice.  The plot to blackmail Alice in order to get closer to her best friend, Bella, forms in his mind, but doesn't exactly pan out the way he wants it to.  Rated for Edward's foul mouth and the sprinkles of lemonade with the eventual lemon.

 

Big fat thanks to Selita for making me this AWESOME banner!!

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michelleab09 from ff.net made me this fantastic banner!!! 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Brooklyn - to read
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 119049 Read Count: 57009
[Report This] Published: 22 Jan 2010 Updated: 22 Jan 2010
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 05 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Ch5 - Remember your window, Juliet.

I really love this story.  I just came across it recently so I started to read it and I am really enjoying it.  I cant wait til the lemon.  As hot as they have foreplay I know the lemon will be phenomenal.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 05 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Ch7 - Oh no... no, no, no... not good.

I cant believe how Charlie and the Blacks are acting.  Its just inexcusable.  I think I would have run away by now.  Charlie is treating her as a maid.  She can only go out to get food.  She has to cook and clean for him.  Its just so wrong.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 05 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Ch8 - For the better or for worse?

Chalie doesn't give up.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 05 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Ch9 - Blood on the Highway: The Bella Swan Story

Its about time.

Summary: Past Featured Story

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Edward has given up ever finding a vampire mate. He's decided on a new strategy-he'll find a human to become his mate. Easier said than done when others are in the way of who he wants.

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Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read (Geddy), Misstoria's Stories to Read
Chapters: 36 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 109413 Read Count: 123486
[Report This] Published: 25 Jan 2010 Updated: 27 May 2014
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 06 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I am loving this story so much.  I just found it and I am really excited. Great chapter.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 06 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Sounds like she was getting a little help pushing Mike away. LOL  I love it.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 06 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Wow that was an exciting chapter.  I loved it.  Emmett and Jasper holding him back.  I was surprised that they were able to hold him off though.  I didn't think anything would have been able to stop him but then I guess his draw to her will only intensify once they are together so he will only get more possesive.  I love it.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 06 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

I love Emmett protecting his sister.  lol.  I am so excited, finally they are on a date.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I love Bella standing up to Emmett.  That was funny.  Oh and I love that she accepted Edward so fast.  That was awesome.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Gosh it doesn't seem like they are going to get a break huh?  Poor guys.  I hope the wolves aren't too much trouble.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're enjoying the story!

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Wow that was unexpected.  Charlie knows about them?  Ok now I am even more interested.



Author's Response:

I always had a problem with Charlie being so naive in the books. He's the chief of police, his best friend for years is Billy. There's no way he was that in the dark.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Wow what a story.  I love this thing.  I hope you plan on making this extremely long.



Author's Response:

Don't worry, it still has a ways to go.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18

I love that demanding growl that he does and calls to her.  I have never read that before.



Author's Response:

I wanted to try something new. I'm glad you liked it. It seemed to be well received by everyone.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 07 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

LOL now Bella can hear his mind but he cant hear hers. LOL  Well maybe he will be able to later.  gosh I cant wait for an update.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 23 Jul 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

First I didn't know that you have published any books.  Were they books that you posted here on TWCS?  If so, what were the titles here and what are the Published titles? 

I really enjoyed the chapter, there was a lot of suspence in this one.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the chapter. My published novels are Blind Faith and The Darkness of Perfection under Michael Schneider. They are both offered on twcs' publishing house. I hope you like them.

Summary: Past Featured Story

AH/AU, OOC Bella is a famous actress and Edward is a host of a late night talk show. What do they whisper to each other when they greet each other on stage?


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read, Love to drive's Stories to read, Stories Read by CNYBella
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 126443 Read Count: 90989
[Report This] Published: 27 Jan 2010 Updated: 20 Feb 2012
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 29 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow they are really big flirts huh? LOL  I love it already.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 30 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

I really like this story but I think the lemons are really rushed through.  I think there is not enough detail in them and there is NO detail on EPOv of what he is feeling during the lemon which I think is important too.

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

 

17 year old Bella is fascinated by the elusive and mysterious Edward Cullen. Will he be all she dreamed of? Or more than she bargained for? And will she still want him when one night changes everything? A/U Cannon pairings


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 74283 Read Count: 29128
[Report This] Published: 29 Jan 2010 Updated: 16 Jun 2010
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 29 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Preparation

This story sounds absolutely wonderful so far.  I cant wait to read more of it.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 29 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Possesion

wow that was a beautiful lemon. Well written.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 29 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Reflection

This seemed like a very short chapter.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 29 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Assumption

AAhhh poor Edward he wanted to give her a car and she didn't want it. But he did assume. LOL

Episode by BoydBlog Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 384]
Summary: Past Featured Story

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Bella Swan is a writer that is on a trip of a lifetime. Edward Cullen is a famous actor and musician, whose life is a blur of film-sets, hotels and screaming fans. A destined encounter and a battle of mind over matter erupt amongst sensual music and a shared longing.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Lilyellacullens want to read list!, Dumbi's Most Wanted, Misstoria's Stories to Read
Chapters: 55 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 304253 Read Count: 77002
[Report This] Published: 13 Feb 2010 Updated: 09 Aug 2021
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 15 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 38: Vivace

Yeah you will probably get a lot of yelling. lol.  I am getting a little bored with her insecurites.  I mean dont get me wrong she needs to stand up for herself and tell him she wont be his little secret.  Its just exhuasting to keep reading her self loathing. She needs to grow a back bone already.



Author's Response:

I didn't really get much yelling...I hope you pusj through the boredom and continue reading :)

 

Luv BBxx

Summary: Past Featured Story

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What if Edward finally found his mate, but she had a troubled past and wanted to kill herself? Could he help her? This story has DARK Themes and Rape discussion.

 

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Finished, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites
Chapters: 51 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 248279 Read Count: 76225
[Report This] Published: 15 Feb 2010 Updated: 14 Jun 2012
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 13 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 34 continued

Yeah I would love longer chapters BUT I dont want to have to wait a month to read it.  SOOOOO I would much rather have chapters like these.  Ok on to the story.  I think Jasper could help her but I think maybe Edward will eventually get jealous of that.  I am so anxious for them to start a more physical relationship.  They dont have to have sex to have pleasure.  I can understand Bella's fear but getting physical is the best part.  Is that going to grow anytime soon???? Also since you have mentioned that Edward is a Virgin, you haven't mentioned if or how he even knows what to do physically. 

Summary: Past Featured Story

Summary - Bella is kidnapped by a beautiful stranger that cannot kill her, but hates that a human can have power over him. Which road will he choose? When Jacob wants her, will that make his decision? Both men want to own Bella, however her heart only belongs to one. Which will have her in the end? Can Edward protect her from Jacob and his past, or will she eventually be consumed? 

 

 

 

Banner Created by the wonderful MsAmbrosia 

 

Vampires and Werewolves. OOC. Darkward. And every so often there shall be a sprinkle of the fluffy stuff. But mostly dark.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, Alternate Universe
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Action, Romance
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's Read Stories, My Favorite Stories
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 122877 Read Count: 76213
[Report This] Published: 16 Feb 2010 Updated: 29 May 2011
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 21 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 30: The Voluri

I think it was bella what happened in the throne room. She just doesn't know it. 



Author's Response:

hehe you may be onto something there :) xx

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 23 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 31: Mute

wow I was wondering if you were continuing this story. I can imagine that the monster is really going wild right now.  Hopfully they will figure something out.



Author's Response:

:) yeah I would never give up on this story, its my little baby. and he is furious, however he has to keep his calm xx

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 29 May 2011 Title: Chapter 35: Final Piece

I was a little dissapointed in the lemon.  There was no mention of Edward having a release or if he simply wanted to give her pleasure.  So yeah that was a little disspointing because it went so fast.  I am so glad that he finally has a plan though.

Summary: Past Featured Story

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A collab between Kitschisme and Rosette-cullen Isabella Swan has lived as a servant her entire life. She has come to expect cruelty from her masters, but will her luck change when she is purchased by the mysterious, brooding millionaire Edward Cullen?


Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Themslovebug90's read stories
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 58565 Read Count: 33358
[Report This] Published: 17 Feb 2010 Updated: 17 Feb 2010
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This story looks very interesting.  I am already depressed as I see you have already ended it.  I am already attached and its only the first chapter.  I was wondering if you plan on doing a sequel to it?



Author's Response:

Kitschisme and I have decided that the story should be left where it is. We both put our hearts and souls into this story, and while we had wanted to continue on with a few extras, real life has made that increasingly difficult. I do hope that you enjoy what we've done with the story, though.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Again I am really enjoying this story but the chapters are really short.  I did go and look at your other stories but I see that they are all just one shots.  I see this is the only one that really had several chapters and I truly love a LONG story so I am hoping that you will consider and do a sequel.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Well we finally meet Edward.  Too bad he is an ass. But at least he is not as bad as Rosalie.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

I can imagine how beautiful bella looked in that gown.  She sure couldn't really teach her everything in a few hours.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

My, My Edward has such a temper. lol.  I know R/L is hard believe me I know. Still we all need to have a geat away sometimes and I know for me, it is reading these stories. My life really sucks and this is my escape so when I ask for an author to do a sequel its not just because I enjoy reading its because it helps me. Kind of like my therapy. I know it sounds weird but it the truth.  I understand that you dont want to make one but I thought I would explain my reason too.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

hhmmm are they vapires in this story?  I didn't think so since their eyes are colored but who knows? 

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

WOw that massage was really getting hot huh? lol.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

well now were are getting somewhere. lol.  That was sneaky of him to have her give him a bath. lol.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

ok I was a little dissapointed in the lemon I could not even tell if either one of the came.  And she said she had never been touched by a man but you didn't write anything about him breaking her hymen so it was not as I expected.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Well I am glad she broke Jacobs nose.  I am sure all hell is going to break loose when Edward finds out about Rosalie. 

Summary: Past Featured Story

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What if a Vampire Singer was not about blood lust instead its involuntary, unpreventable and irrevesable form of true love. What would you do if you waited a century to find it? What would you do to keep it? ANYTHING! AU reg.pair. Re-writting earlier chapters.

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Categories: Twilight, Canon Pairings
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Stories Read by CNYBella
Chapters: 41 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 124314 Read Count: 67388
[Report This] Published: 17 Feb 2010 Updated: 07 Jun 2010
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 05 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

I am pretty sure I have read this story before but I cant find it anywhere on my computer so I guess I will re-read it  so that I can have it again. 

By the way I ordered you book Mocked by Faith they said it was shipped 2/29/12 but I haven't gotten it yet.  I would love to give you reviews on it maybe in a private message but TWCS has dissabled the PM feature.

I emailed them about this but they said they were getting a lot of spam so they disabled it.  You can still see the feature but once you click on it, it says its disabled due to abuse. :(

Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Taking place in 17th century Europe, Princess Isabella, only daughter of King Charles I of Spain, faces her fate as her arranged marriage to Prince Edward, future King of England, approaches.  The Prince is known for his indiscriminate cavorting with the ladies of his land, leading the Princess to fear that she will suffer the same fate as her mother and many other queens before and since, to be trapped in a loveless marriage to an unfaithful husband.  Will Princess Isabella ever find happiness while bound to the fate of her birth? AH/OC/Eventual Lemons

 

 

Warning: This will be an NC17 story for later chapters.



Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Ageise02's not read yet, Finished, I Whitlock's read , Amberina's Completed Favs List, Completed Stories, Edwards Paradox Completed Favourites, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, J's Read and Loved Stories, mamih's favorites, TBR
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 92977 Read Count: 373209
[Report This] Published: 20 Feb 2010 Updated: 20 Jun 2010
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 09 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 3: The Mind of A Prince

I am so excitted about this story.  I am absolutly loving it so far.  I love that Jacob is so fond of his sister and he asked Edward to have respect for her.  I have already figured out that Anthony indeed is Edward as he too had to hide who he was.  They are going to be so happy once they realize who each other are.  I am really excited to see how this story unfolds as it relates to kings and queens and Prince and Princess.  I know in that time they really did have no respect for women at all and I am curious as to what you come up with.

Edward's Clan by Greenaway Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1470]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

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**WARNING - THIS STORY CONTAINS VIOLENCE, SEXUAL MATERIAL, OFFENSIVE LANGUAGE AND OTHER CONTENT THAT MAY DISTURB SOME PEOPLE. YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED.**

Edward Cullen is the leader of The Clan, a fierce and deadly group of assassins for hire and he knows nothing besides violence and blood. When he meets Bella, he begins to imagine that there might be more for him out there.

A dark journey of love, power and death.


All Human, Cannon Pairings and TEAM EDWARD

Please be warned, this story gets pretty graphic later on.

 

A special thank you to evilangel813 for the awesome banner.


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight, All Human
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: None
Language: None
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: To Read (Geddy)
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 234131 Read Count: 195557
[Report This] Published: 23 Feb 2010 Updated: 11 Jun 2012
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 20: Silent Night

wow they are fucking crazy. Edward is going to have a field day when he gets his hands on them.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 09 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 1: First Impressions are Forever

Well for the first chapter I say this was pretty dam good. I am excited to read the rest of the story.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 09 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 7: Pixies, Porsches and Promises

wow well Edward sure fell in love fast with Bella. And I think Jacob got all he deserved for what he did to her and her parents.  I wonder though if Charlie really is dead.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 09 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Sin

Its about time he made love to her. I was really waiting for that but I understand why he kept waiting he was scared just like she said. Well I am glad they will be getting closer now and I am so glad that Alice if going to forgive him, after all he did it to protect her.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 17: I'll Always Come Home

I think its a set up to get Edward away from Bella and I think Esme is behind the information that Aro and his men knew about Jacob.  And what the heck was Jasper doing hugging her?

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 23: My December

Well I think when Bella finds out that Edward is there on a job she is going to be pissed. As for Charlie I think he has suffered a lot already. And I cant not even imagine any of the cullens suffering from Aro's men except maybe Carlise and Esme.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 10 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 24: I Would Die for You

Well at least Edward got out that he cant live withuot her. As for the Washing Machine, hhhmmm I think he is going to win but we will see I guess. I sure hope you update often. I have been reading this story for several days straight to get caught up. So now I have to wait for an update and I dont like it. But I understand it.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 26: Russian Tea Party in Tokyo

Well I have complained so far and I am loving this story. I am sure who ever hurts Bella will have to answer to Edward so I am not worried too much. Well maybe a little. Poor Charlie has really suffered.  I hope they dont do that to Bella.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 20 Apr 2011 Title: Chapter 33: Finding Purpose

I was really worried about Bella.  I didn't think she was going to let him back in.  I am so glad that he was there to help her nurse the baby and bring her back to reality.  Its been a long time since you updated and I hope you are feeling better.



Author's Response:

Getting there thanks. yeah a long time, I had a difficult time with this chapter, but ultimately, i am happy with it now. LOL. Thanks for reviewing and sticking with the story

 

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 27 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 27: The Difficult Choices We Make

Wow this was so lovely in the begining when Edward was confessing his undying love for her and making love to her and then it all went to shit.  I knew the Riley thing was a set up. What I dont understand is why Carlse is so evil to him. He is is dad that trained him to be who he is so why does he hate him so much?  I dont think anyone is prepared for the wrath that Edward is going to be bringing home.  I cant wait to get more updates.  I was starting to worry that you had stopped writing and i am so glad that I was wrong.



Author's Response:

Carlisle wants his son to be the best. He has high expectations of his son and Edward finding love was never among them. There is an outtake called 'My Prodigal Son' which is from Carlisle's POV if you are interested. thanks for reviewing and Im sorry this response was so late. The next chapter is up now too. :-)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 06 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Friends in Unlikely Places

OMG What a cliff hanger. That was so mean. Well at least he will find out where she is hopefully. And she is very pregnant. I cant believe he didn't think of his enemy right away. I mean that is logical. As for your stomach flu well join the crowd sweetie, its going around my house too. yuk.  I hope you feel better and I hope you dont keep us waiting too long for the next update.  I cant wait til Edward slauters the whole bunch of them for what they did to Bella.



Author's Response:

Im sorry to hear you have been hit with a stomach virus too. Evil bloody little things arent they? Next update should be this time next week and Edwards reasoning will become clear next chappie. LOL Thanks so much for the review and I hope your family gets better soon. take care. Greenaway. :-)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 11 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 29: The Rescue - Part One: Farewells

Excellent.  Its about time we get this show on the road.  I cant wait for the firworks to start.  I think Jasper and Edward are being a little hard on Bella.  She has not grown up in this life style and Esme convinced her that she could not call anyone and she had to leave with nothing for her fathers life.  Esme's letters were very heartfelt but I dont know if that will allow them to forgive her.  Or even if she will make it out alive of this.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 01 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 30: The Rescue: Part Two – Reunions

Wow that was an intense chapter. Absolutely wonderful. I expected for Esme to be killed but I did NOT expect EDwards reaction to Bella being pregnant. But..... I kind of understand it. I mean he will doom him or her to death unless he puts him through training like his father did to him. And that is torturing your own child and I know that will kill him to do but it must be done to save his life.  I just cant wait for the make up part.  I am sure he is going to be really pissed for awhile because she left him without a word and it hurt him a lot.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 25 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 31: – the Rescue: Part Three – Home is Where the Broken Hearts Lay

Wow that was a very heartfelt chapter. It was hard to read but I understand both of them.  Her because she just wanted to save her father but if it was me, I would not have left without speaking to Edward. And I understand Edward that he doesnt want to have to train his son like what he went through. He knows the pain and suffering will never leave his nightmarse.  I understand he has to leave to try to kill all that is left of the Volturi but I wish with everything that he could be there when Bella delivers his child.  That is a life changing experience that I think EVERY father should have.  I was worried because the updates are getting so far apart.  I hope all is well with your RL.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 24 Feb 2011 Title: Chapter 32: Finding Purpose

Wow that was a great chapter.  Its too bad that he missed his sons birth.  It was a long time coming and I really missed this story but I am so glad to hear that you are going to make a sequel in the future.  I will add you to my favorite author if your not already. 

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 11 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 35: Authors note

I am so happy to hear from you.  I really loved Edwards Clan but to hear that you are ending  it in the next chapter saddens me.  As I seen a lot of suffering from both Edward and Bella when she was captured then when he had to save her, then to find out he was going to be a father he treated her like shit.  So to say they have no time to get back to the way it was is just depressing.   I would never be happy with just one or two chapters to believe that they could be really happy again so even if you wrote it, I would not feel it in the reading.

As for your break in writing, well I think you should have told us this a long time ago instead of us thinking that you just didn't care, or maybe that is what you were trying to say.

Nevertheless, I will stick to the end of this as I will not abandon you because of your choices.  I truely do love the story.

PEOPLE LIKE US by justginger Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3989]
Summary: Past Featured Story

Edward Cullan is the hottest movie star. Bella Swan is an art grad, in Italy for the summer. Their worlds collide in the most unlikely way.  He unlocks what she has hidden for so long - a dark side...


Categories: Canon Pairings, Twilight
Characters: Bella/Edward
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Friendship, Historical, Horror, Humor, Hurt/Comfort,, Mystery, One-Shot, Parody/Crackfic, Poetry, Romance
Language: English
TWCS Romance Contest: None
Series: Domward's Dungeon, My To Read List, Ageise02's Read Stories, Bdsm stories only, Finished, Twilight - Read, Amberina's Completed Favs List, Kuu Faves, Stories Read by CNYBella, Stories I've Already read, Lilyellacullens want to read list!, My Favorite Stories, J's Read and Loved Stories, Stories I've read, Fav BDSM Fics, My favs past present and future , Read
Chapters: 81 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1339257 Read Count: 995714
[Report This] Published: 24 Feb 2010 Updated: 04 Dec 2011
Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 30 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48

I loved this chapter. Because it allowed Bella to cuss her ass off at Edward for the way he acted and she told Jasper off too which needed to be done and also Esme. Bella was totally right they shouldn't have acted that way.  She was trying to be loyal to her friend and she would not have let her get on the plane without telling Jasper.  But I also understand Edward that she should not have kept it from him. As for the fighting well...... I loved it.  I love that she slapped him and told him off and the slamming of the doors.  He needed that to realize that she is stronger now and he was wrong. So it is a wonderful chapter. I salute you.



Author's Response:

thank you so much - praise indeed! :)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 16 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57

Those are beautiful rings.  Poor Emmett I feel sorry for him, he is just.... funny.  But my husband thought that too so I guess all men are kind of dense in that area. lol.  I was really proud of Edward though, he was ready to kick his brothers ass if he had cheated on Rose. You get em Edward.  I loved that.  And strong Bella being able to calm everyone down was great.



Author's Response:

thank you so much for your review and comments - I enjoyed writing this chapter - Emmett is just such a great character to write. see you soon xoxo

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 20 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55

Wow that was a first for Edward to safeword RED.  But I think it was necessary.  Bella seems to be losing it lately.  I dont think she is going to handle it as well as she thinks.  I am anxious to read the out take with Carlisle and Esme.  Although I kind of feel like Edward and I dont want too much information. EWWW  LOL.  But I think Carlisle is a DOM and doesn't even know it.  I dont really like Riley coming into their home.  I dont trust him and I just dont want him to cause more trouble.   I too wish you both a very Merry Christmas and dont worry about updated every week.  If you cant you cant.  No big deal.  We will wait. 

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

OMG I love this story and so far this is my favorite chapter. LMAO this was hilarious.  I love it.  I love Dom Edward.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 08 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Well I think Bella's punishment was what was expected.  I think he hurt him just as much as her.  I think he did wonderful in after care and I am glad that he joined her in the bath tub.  I am also glad that he collared her and he bought the bracelets for both of them. To her it was important that he wore something as well and he realised that and accepted it so that was very loving of him.  I really love this story.  I have been reading since 7 am this morning from Chapter 1 and now it is 10:12pm so yeah I am really hooked. lol

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 09 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

I really love this story so much.  I am so glad that Bella told him about Jim.  Although he reacted just like I thought he would and he had all the reason to be upset with her for not telling him.  I thought it was pretty funny that she wanted to take over in the play room and she hurt herself with the flogger.  And he was laughing I loved that part. I like that he takes the collar off of her so she can be herself but I like the Dom in him too.  I love BDSM stories so much. Although I do not practice it. I have found an amazing interest in the stories. 



Author's Response:

thank you so much for your review

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 13 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28

Wow I love how these two can either make love, or fuck like crazy. Its always so sensual and just right.  I love all the positions Edward puts her in and he is finally giving her dicepline when she needs it.  I think that maybe her being Edwards girlfriend might interfere with her job or it will make Riley want her even more.  Now she had all those missed calls and Edward is going to be pissed I think but he has to remember she works too.  But knowing Edward he will react first and think later. lol. I am really worried about this James, now that the press have targeted Bella, james will want her more too.  I love this story and I am so anxious to see more.  Thanks for writing.



Author's Response:

thank yo for this great review!!

 

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TEASER FOR CHAPTER 29

“P-pardon?”  Bella felt faint.  This is bad! This is really, really bad!

Mona looked at her as if she was in awe, “Sit down Bella, you don’t look so well.’’

Bella groped her way to one of the chairs in front of Mona’s desk.

Riley cleared his throat, “Your face says it all. When I went outside to ask the photographers what they were doing here, one of the guys that I have become sort of friendly with informed me that they were not here for me, but for you.  It seems that your secret is out.” He raised an eyebrow.

Bella felt her stomach heave. She put a hand over her mouth and ran to the little bathroom adjacent to Mona’s office.

 She made it just in time as her stomach was emptied of it’s contents.   Bella sat sweating on the floor for a moment with her head leaning against the toilet bowl.

My secret is out? Oh my god! Do they know about what Edward and I are? Have I ruined his career? His life? 

Her jumbled thoughts were racing around in her head.

What had she done?

Her phone vibrated as she was rinsing out her mouth. She answered it with a shaking hand.

“y-yes?” she whispered.

“Bella?”

“Edward…” she closed her eyes as she heard his voice. She could feel the tears well up in her eyes and she felt the hot trail down her cheeks.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 20 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29

Well First i wonder if Bella is pregnant?  Ok second I am so glad that Edward hit his agent. He was so out of line numerous times even after Edward warned him. I am glad he fired him too. lol.  As for Bella well I can see why she feels like he will lose his career because of him, but that is his choice. But like they said it will be old news if they just give a few interviews and admit they are together.  I really wish Rob and Kristen would do that in real life.  I think things would really die down for them and they could be happier to live a better life.



Author's Response:

no, she's not pregnant, but sometime in the future...

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 26 Jun 2010 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30

I thought this chapter was amazing.  I love the reunion and they way Edward gives her multiple orgasms.  I love that he cares for her needs first, I think that is so important in a physical relationship.  I never dreamed of a toy like what Rose gave the girls. LMAO  I knew that Edward would find it.  I didn't think he was going to use it though.  That was awesome.  But I think he was jealous of it. LMAO.  Did he really throw it away?



Author's Response:

Bella will kill him if he threw it away. No he just convascated it...to be used at a later date....bastard!

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 19 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33

This was really good.  I love that he was painting her toe nails.  I love that he was in the playroom while she was under the bed and she didnt even hear him. LMAO.  Well that didn't turn out too good though.  But that wasn't his fault.  They had good make up sex though.



Author's Response: thank you for the great review :)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 03 Mar 2012 Title: Chapter 72: Chapter 72

I would really love to finish this story and I think this is where I left off but I see that ALL of your pictures are not working.  Can you fix this?  I would really love to see the pictures while I am reading.  Thank you so much.  Oh by the way I am really loving your new story Hope Springs.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 24 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34

I love the play scene they had in the house.  I love that he makes her cum so many times before him. and that he takes care to give her after care, that is so important.  I would feel bad too if I cooked all that to show how much I wanted to thank them and Esme cried, I would think that I over stepped my place.  Ok so dont leave us hanging for too long



Author's Response: I won't I promise - thanks for the review

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 31 Jul 2010 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35

Wow I loved the lemon.  I was shocked that Bella was found so easily though, I thought it would take at least til the next day. As for all those pictures she took well I am just waiting for her to see them and see that she has pictures of James and Jacob following them.  Thats just my thoughts maybe I am wrong but thats what I think is going to happen.  I loved the long chapter.



Author's Response:

Hey, I've got to have some secrets, okay?? Thanks for the review :)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 07 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36

Well I understand that BElla was being possesive but on the other hand I think Edward should have done something about the lady kissing his lips and the other one kneeling in front of him as if she was his sub and the three that was hanging around him at the bathroom. He sure as hell wouldn't want somone kissing Bella now would he?  He needs a dose of his own medicine I think.



Author's Response:

I totally agree with you :)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 13 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

ok I understand what Edward is saying about Bella submitting to him BUT.....Submitting and sharing are Two different things.  He said he wouldn't share and I think that should go for both of them I TOTALLY agree with Bella. He should NOT have let her kiss him or let the other girls touch him. It was a play party and he was obviously taken. Just like NO ONE is allowed to touch her, No One should be allowed to touch him.  I think Edward has NOT learned HIS lesson in this.  I love the BDSM stories and I love the idea of the dominant making her submit BUT I do not in any way tollerate sharing and kissing and touching is part of sharing. So with that said, I would really enjoy Edward getting a lesson to learn as well.



Author's Response:

Hi there,

wow strong feelings! This is a good thing, it's keeps us writers on our toes and our characters in check!

thanks for the review :)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 16 Aug 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Thank you so much for not taking offence. So many authors get so mad at me if my review is not all sunshine and rainbows and I dont think this is a bad review I just think that sharing is a hard limit for me a very hard limit and I really enjoy seeing Edward get his payback and realize that he is not perfect and he too makes bad decisions.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 28 Aug 2010 Title: PEOPLE LIKE US

Have a great week? Are you serious?  You give us all we need to set us up and then leave us hanging?  OMG I am going to cry. :'(  Well I know one thing for sure, Edward will never doubt hisself again.  I just hope one of them can get to the panic buttons and I think Rose is pregnant. Oh gosh how long are you going to make us wait??????? I am dying to know whats going to happen already. lol



Author's Response:

I really do love you and IF you are good, MAYBE my Domward will let me post early ...

:)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 02 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40

This was an AMAZING chapter. I think you nailed it. THere was just the right amount of suspence and terror and of course the undyling love in the end. I love that you included Carlisle and Esme in this.  I absolutly loved the determination you put into Carlisle and the knowledge to get the helicopter to his boys. I could list everything but I dont want to re write the chapter. Everything was wonderfully written. 



Author's Response:

thank you so much - I drove Fiorella crazy with all my re writes and self doubts!!

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 11 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41

THis was a wonderful chapter.  I knew Rose was pregnant.  I do wish there was more play in the playroom.  I miss it.  I wish Bella would have woke Edward up during the night when she had her freaking out time.  I think it would show a lot of how much he loves her that he would without a doubt get up and take her to the playroom to help her.  Maybe you can still work that in.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 18 Sep 2010 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42

Well I am glad that Edward let her take her walk by herself, sometimes we just need alone time.  I love what he did to her in the playroom and I think she loved it too. lol.  I still think it would be really nice to write in that she wake him up during the night and absolutly needing him to take her immediatly to the playroom to prevent her from a panic attack.  I dont know maybe a nightmare could bring it on.  I would really like to read something like that.  I think it would show how dedicated he is to her even though he already told her that there would be no more play until after the holidays.  Just a suggestion.



Author's Response:

hmmm - you've given me something to think about!!

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 25 Sep 2010 Title: PEOPLE LIKE US

This was an ok chapter, not much happened. Or maybe its just that I am so dam spoiled. LOL  I think its only logical that Bella would have hard feeling concerning Charlie. After all, because of how he acted when she was growing up, she had to grow up faster and be the adult so I can totally see her blowing up at him.  Anyway I am still waiting for the requested scene. Hopefully you can fit it in.



Author's Response:

thank you for the review - and as for the scene you requested, I am going to work it in - but you will probably only see in chapter 46 - that's the scene where she wakes him up from her nightmare and he 'helps' her?  I have got your back baby...they are going to have to get through Christmas first and then some bella/charlie time/drama first - so hang in there for me okay?

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 02 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 45

I loved this extra long chapter.  Wonderful!  As for the confrontation with Charlie, it was everthing that I thought it would be. You wrote it very well.  I knew Edward would have to be held back by someone cause I knew he would want to get to her right away.  You are so right about how parents mold their kids to what they become and someone else has to pick up the pieces, too bad for me there is no one here to pick up those pieces.  I am really looking forward to the next chapter and hopefully it will have the scene I requested but if not thats ok I will wait.  Thanks again for your lovely work.  It really makes my day to see your updates.



Author's Response:

thanks so much for your comments and review - patience my little friend :)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 09 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45

Christmas went well.  I loved the picture Bella gave to her dad.  The cuff links were wonderful too.  I am surprised that Charlie is taking the information on the lifestyle so well.  I would think he would be more frantic but I guess he knows he needs to accept her.  I cant wait til they get back home.



Author's Response:

thank you  - they go home next chapter

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 16 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46

I love the long chapter. Ok first I want to say that Alice is a little trouble maker. She knows that she is not allowed to keep secrets and she is always dragging bella into trouble with her. This secret that Alice is keeping from Jasper is just a sample.  She knows that Bella will get in trouble for keeping the secret and she still begs her not to tel AND wants to sneak away together for a drink. uggggg she makes me mad sometimes.  Ok as for the session, well it was ok.  I did NOT like the new things that you say Bella is finding out about herself.  I DO NOT like the idea of others watching her or watching her pleasure him or vise versa.  I think that is more into porn.  I am not trying to be disrespectful to you at all this is just my opinion and I would really not like if that story went that way.  I have been a faithful reader for a long time and to me that is just like sharing. To let others see what you are doing with your lover is not right.  I know that they go to Dom/SUb parties where they can watch others BUT the others are not in a committed relationship like Bella and Edward so I think there is a big difference.  I was shocked that Edward was arroused by her confessions as well since other men would be able to see her and what she does, it just doesn't sound right and I am sorry but this really bothered me alot.



Author's Response:

Alice is super impulsive, and honestly, she just doesn't think things through sometimes.  She is the eternal optimist, she always thinks that things will just 'somehow' work out!  Thanks for your comments about the session.  I think that sometimes, if we are really honest with ourselves, we will think of something or fantasize about doing something that we would never really do or partake in. Here, Bella is really exploring her 'dark' side - that little corner tucked away that is there, but most of us don't even realize or acknowledge.  Edward may be turned on by her admissions, but above all he respects her and is incredibly possessive as a lover and a boyfriend.  There are just some things that are meant to stay in the 'bedroom'.  And he knows that, but when Bella admitted what she had been feeling, she was really opening up to Edward and trusting him - he won't abuse that trust.

So, I hope that this makes sense to you, please don't be too concerned about it - trust me, okay?  I will not turn these two very special people into porn stars.

Take care,

Michele 

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 23 Oct 2010 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47

Ok I dont know what is wrong with your beta but I think this chapter was totally necessary.  I agree with Edward. She is more respectful to Alice it seems she cares more about Alice then Edward by keeping secrets from him.  I can totally understand how hurt he is. As for going to beat the shit out of Riley well..... he deserved it.  I think Edward and Jasper were right to leave without telling them too it gives the girls something to be affraid of and lets them see that, that is exactly how the girls make the men feel when they get into trouble or do stuff behind their back.  I totally agree with you on this chapter and I deffinitely give you a 10.



Author's Response:

thank you so much for your comments and review - hmmm - the next chapter will be interesting.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 06 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49

I am so glad the party went well.  I knew something was going to happen with some girls. I am proud of Bella for not reacting to them.  I loved the squealer that she used on Edward.  That was a first and it was fun.



Author's Response:

thanks - I think that E thought so too...

:)

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 13 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50

Well I dont have much to say. The chapter was wonderful but it always is. I am very dissapointed though. Twice you have told me that you would put my scene request in the story about her waking up from a nightmare and absolutly needing Edward to take her to the playroom. You told me that it would be in chapter 46 then you told me it would be in chapter 50. So....... if you didn't want to use it, all you had to do is say so. But leading me on was hurtful.



Author's Response:

I am sorry - but there was just to much else that had to happen first - but if you can see where this is going - I have just finished writing that sequence into chapter 51 (and I have thanked you for it in my a/n - because it is a great idea that worked so well as a result of the death of Jacob that sets B back to having nightmares.)  Sorry that it took so long, but timing is everything, LRL4E.

 

And here is my thank you note to you - thanks for being so faithful in reading and reviewing - I hope you like what I have written.

 

 

PEOPLE LIKE US - OUTTAKE # 6

OUTTAKE - CONVERSATION BETWEEN JASPER AND ALICE

"Guys, I've got to go - Jazz please give this some serious thought and Alice, you need to stop being so fucking stubborn. I love you, Squirt!"

Edward almost crushed her in a hug. He slapped Jasper on the shoulder as he ran out the door.

 

"So... you talk about the size of my schlong?"  Jasper said.

Alice looked up at him with mounting excitement, "Well, it's quite impressive..." she said huskily.

Jasper smiled at her.  "Can we talk? I mean really talk; I've missed you Tink..."

Alice smiled through her tears. "I've missed you too Jazzy...."

Jasper looked uncomfortable for a moment and it bothered Alice.  She was used to Jasper Whitlock being decisive and in control.  Seeing him looking ill at ease was new.  There had been many disagreements in the Whitlock/Cullen home since Alice had moved in with Jasper two year before.

She had never lived alone, besides when she had gone to college and even then, she had attended Berkley, so that she was close to her family and Jasper.

Although over the years, they had learned to deal with Jasper's travelling for work and Alice's part time job as Edward's PA which had taken her away from time to time, through everything, including Alice's training as a submissive, their lines of communication had always been open and honest.

Alice had grown up in a house hold that was opinionated and not scared of voicing their points of view.  Esme and Carlisle had encouraged their children to have their own opinions and to share them.  They had also taught them to stick to their guns.

This was one of the many things that had attracted Jasper to Alice in the first place.  Although she was much younger than him when they met; he had always found Alice to be interesting to talk to and inevitably to argue with.  She was a spirited and enthusiastic young woman, with a warmth and energy that seemed to draw him in from the first moment.

Jasper on the other hand had grown up in a large family with two parents that had stuck together over the years because there was no other alternative for either one of them.  They were hardened by life, worn down by reality and for a reason that Jasper had never been able to fathom; they had decided to have three children of which Jasper was the youngest.  Eventually Jasper's father had strayed and a few years later, when Jasper was about twelve, he had suddenly come back to the trailer park where they lived with three small children in tow!

He had told Jasper's mother that they were his dead sister's kids, but after awhile he had confessed that they were his.  Jasper felt sorry for the three youngest children and when he had begun to make money from modeling and small acting jobs, he had made a decision to see that they would have an opportunity to further their education, go to college and make a proper life for themselves.  Although none of the children were really close or affectionate with each other, Jasper had stuck to his word and the three younger children had gone on to college.

Jasper couldn't believe that Ricky, the youngest of his stepsiblings had taken advantage of Jasper's generosity the way that he had!  Jasper had never asked for any compensation or payment for the money that he had given to his siblings or parents over the years; the only stipulation he had for continuing to support his mother and father was that the house that he had purchased for them remain in his mother's name.  Jasper was not close to his father and the distance had only grown when the man had abandoned his young family, leaving his wife to work three jobs to feed and clothe their three children.

Jasper had always thought that he would never find anyone to settle down with.  He didn't ever want the life that his parents had; tired, sad, disillusioned and settling for something because there was no time or money for dreams of something or someone else.  Someone better.

So the first step that Jasper had taken at the age of sixteen was to have himself emancipated.  He had tried to live in Los Angeles and he had hated every moment of it but as he begun earning good money, he decided to take classes at the local community college.  The first one was on finances.  Jasper wanted to know how to look after his money and how to make it grow.

He trusted few people and although people liked his quiet charm and whit; Jasper had a way of standing to one side and observing people that he found made him a good judge of character.  Jasper had come to rely on that instinct over the years.

It was an instinct that he could no longer rely on.  He had never thought for a million years that his younger brother would ever turn out to be the low life, perverted bastard that he was!  Every time Jasper thought of what Ricky had done, how Richard had betrayed his own brother by lusting, perving, salivating over his Alice!  His Alice!  Jasper wanted to kill Rick with a cold fury that he had never felt before.

How he had touched her, fucking forced himself on her when Jasper had been careless enough to leave her alone with him... FUCK!

Alice gasped as Jasper jumped to his feet.  His face was a cold, furious mask.

"Jasper please!  If you want to talk to me, then you need to calm the fuck down!  I can't reach you when you are like this!  If you are angry with me then just say so and let's get it out there!  If you think that I did anything to encourage your brother..." Alice cringed away as Jasper was suddenly in front of her with his hand clasped over her lips.

"Never - NEVER, EVER call that fucking piece of low down shit my brother!  I will kill him if I ever see him anywhere near you again!"  Jasper spat out as he held her.

Alice whimpered and she closed her eyes.  "Jazzy, you are scaring me..." 

This wild man wasn't her Jasper...

Alice felt the tears running down her cheeks and over Jasper's fingers.

Suddenly she was free.

Alice pushed a fist into her mouth to keep the sobs as quiet as she could.  Her whole body was trembling.

"Alice... sweet Jesus, I'm sorry... I didn't mean to scare you... Ali..."  Jasper choked out as he sat crouched clear across the room from where Alice sat.

Alice could see the anguish clearly on Jasper's face and she felt even worse than she had in the past few days.

This was all her fault!

"Come to me..."  Alice said, but Jasper just shook his head.

Alice slid off the sofa onto her knees and she crawled slowly across to where Jasper had slumped down against the wall.

Jasper could feel the intensity of Alice's gaze as he watched her moving slowly towards him.

"Ali..." he said in a half pleading, half warning.

"No.  You've spoken and now it is my turn..." Alice said when she was inches away from his face.

Her eyes searched his intensely.  The remorse and sorrow that Alice saw gave her the courage to move closer until her lips met his.

Jasper's head jerked backwards, but with nowhere to go, he hit the wall.

He cursed and rubbed his head.

Alice grinned at him, "Maybe that'll knock some sense into your thick skull!"  She quipped as she arranged herself between his outstretched legs; her thighs straddled his open ones so that he could feel her heated core through her jeans.

Jasper shut his eyes tightly and moaned as he tried to adjust himself.  Alice giggled and winked at him.

"We can get to that later, but first let's please resolve this ‘thing' once and for all!"  She said with determination.

"Gladly, Darlin'."

"Okay, I'm going first.  I need to tell you why I didn't tell you about... what was happening in the first place, but you cannot freak out on me!  Do you promise?"

Jasper could see how anxious Alice was and once again he was filled with remorse at his earlier behavior.

"I promise."

Alice took a deep breath, "I know that this might sound crazy to you, but when it happened the first time; I tried to just shrug it off.  I thought that perhaps I had imagined it or misread his signals in some way.  The next time it happened, your... well your father was in the room.  He, Rick grabbed my ass as I walked passed him.  I turned around as saw them looking at each other and Rick just winked at me and they burst out laughing... Jasper... you promised..." Alice broke off as she watched Jasper's eyes become dark and wild again.

Jasper felt as if he was ready to explode!  That no good, low fucking, good for nothing... BASTARD!  I. will. Kill. Him.

Jasper felt Alice's tiny hand stroking his cheek and he refocused on her anxious face.

He kissed her quickly, "I'm okay, Ali, I promise.  I won't freak out on you again."

Alice nodded slowly, "He apologized to me later - your father, I mean.  The next day he told me that he had too much to drink and that he had made Rick promise never to touch me again.  He begged me not to tell you and then he said that... some girls just have an ‘air' about them..."

SON OF A BITCH!

Jasper opened his mouth to speak but Alice put her fingers over his lips.

She continued. "I know better than that, Jazz!  I know better!  I was raised to know better than that!  With all their bullshitting and nonsense, my brothers have never, ever treated any woman including me with anything than the utmost respect.  You have never treated me like a whore, but at that moment, I felt dirty.  And I felt like a two bit whore, who didn't deserve anything better.  Rick kept touching me, stupid little insignificant ‘slip-ups'.  Every time he was around me, sometimes you were in the next room or you had your back to us... He would graze my breasts by pushing past me in a doorway, or he would rub himself against me if he were standing behind us..." Alice shuddered in revulsion and Jasper couldn't take it any longer.

His arms wrapped Alice in a vice like grip. "Never, never, never..." He said over and over again against her neck as he pulled her closer.

"Jazz..."

"No - it's my turn now... never, ever again, Mary Alice Cullen.  Promise me that you will never let anyone ever make you feel like that again.  Especially not me!  God, Ali, I love you so much!  Just the thought of another man touching you... Fuck!  It's too much to even contemplate!  Do you know how I felt when I found out that Rick was... forcing himself on you?  When we forced Bella to tell us and we did force her - she didn't have a choice really, I wanted to fucking kill someone there and then!  As you know, I sat up all night just thinking about what could have happened to you!  And about how I was going to take care of you this time!  I couldn't help you last time, Darlin'.  I wasn't able to stop that animal putting his hands on you... but I was going to make sure that Rick never ever touched you again."

Alice brushed the tears of Jaspers cheeks.

"I love you so fucking much, Mary Alice Cullen-Whitlock.  You own me mind, body and soul.  If I lost you, my life would be so empty... please forgive me for hurting you and dragging this shit out.  Please, please don't ever put me through this again, Tink, my heart can't stand it."  Jasper whispered as they held each other's faces and gazed with longing into each other's eyes.

"I love you, Cowboy; you are my everything... my lover, my best friend, my Dom, my love.  I am sorry too.  No more secrets."

Their kiss was a relief.  For the first time in almost two weeks, their lips were soft and forgiving.  Lips touched, brushed, nibbled.  Tongues dueled and teased.  Eventually they couldn't take it any longer and Jasper held Alice to him as he tipped her onto the floor and loomed over her, his knees pushing her thighs apart.

Alice panted into his mouth.  "Can I get my clothes back?"

Jasper smiled against her lips, "yeah, especially the underwear..."

Alice giggled, "can I get my car back?"

Jasper shook his head, "sorry, you will be driven around for a while..."

Alice groaned, "but I can see my Bestie?"

Jasper rocked back on his knees as he looked at the bright twinkle in Alice's eyes. "Mary Alice..." He said with narrowed eyes.

Fuck! He is so sexy when he does that... now I need to change my panties! Damn Cowboy!

"Hmmm... take me upstairs Jazz... I've missed you..." Alice uttered the magic words.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

An hour later, Alice lay sprawled across Jasper's bare chest.  Her eyes were closed but she was humming as Jasper played with her hair.

"Alice?"

"Yeah?"

"Supervised visits only..."  Jasper kissed her forehead.

"I know - but that's only for now..." Alice smiled to herself.

She wondered what Kate, Bella and Rosalie were doing on Saturday after the therapy session?  She had heard that Gap was having a sale....

Everything was right with the world after all.

J&A****~~~~PLU~~~~****J&A

I hope that you liked it!

Love

Michele

 

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 20 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51

OMG OMG OMG thank you thank you thank you. Wow that was so much more than I even imagined. SEE I knew you would make it even more wonderful. It was great. I loved the dream, I loved the agressivness of Edward to make her respond and tell him what she needed. I loved it all. I even loved that after their shower he carried her back to bed like everything was fine. Wow I feel speechless even though I have said alot. YOu really out did yourself with this idea I gave you. I am so proud of what you did with it. Thanks again.

Author's Response:

Thank you for your great idea! It was my pleasure to work this into the story and it fitted in perfectly. I was worried that you would be dissapointed, but I am so glad that you liked it!

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 28 Nov 2010 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52

wow well I think that Bella really needed that punishment and now she knows that he has been so linient on her.  Hopefully Bella will learn from this. As for how long this story is going to be, WELL  I happen to love long stories so by all means please continue.



Author's Response:

thank you hon!

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 12 Dec 2010 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54

ok Esme WOW!  But I loved how you wrote Bella's response to it all.  I think she handled it well in quiting and telling Esme NO that she wouldn't keep it from Edward.  I love that Carlisle is just like Edward and seems very Dominant.  I think you brought something great to the story with what Esme did.  I would love to read what happened after they left.  I would also like to know what the boys are going to do to Riley.  Also is Riley going to be a problem now?  That could be interesting.  As for Bella losing focus, well I could see why Edward got so angry as she could not see and could have hit her self on his desk.  Now for doing scenes in front of people that is just not for me. To me that is still like sharing and I dont share, Period.  lol.  I was thining you were going to write Bella getting pregnant into this story.  It could be interesting.  As for your recomendations, Yeah I do not read stories where Bella is the Domme either.  I too can NOT imagine Edward/Rob being a Sub. NO WAY.  LOL.  Thanks for the update.

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 02 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 56: Chapter 56

Well I think the filler with Charlie, Sue and Seth was great and I am glad their is closure with Billy too.  As for Bella's punishment well I think Edward is giving her just the right amount.  He was hard on her but she neglected so much and its not the first time so he has to show her he means business.  I think I would have cracked though.  I think I would have safeworded on 30 Mr.Bristles. YIKES.  And to think she has two more days after the 30 double yikes.  That is going to be hard.  I am glad that he let her cum though.



Author's Response:

thank you for your comments and your review. The punishment while harsh - will sure gave Bella a lesson she won't forget again.  and as for her pleasure - Edward knows that it is her punishment is punishment enough and good ol' loving time will be just that - a chance for him to show her how much loving they deserve!

Reviewer: LetRobstenLuv4ever Signed
Date: 31 Jan 2011 Title: Chapter 58: Chapter 58

yes I loved the chapter.  I am glad that Edward made it there to see her show.  I loved how Carlisle is becoming dominant with Esme and he really looks out for Bella too.  I knew Bella would have a melt down but I thought it would be because Edward wasn't there.  I can totally understand her feelings with her paintings they are of her and Edward.  I think she needs to paint other people and she wont feel that way of letting them go as much.  Maybe she should keep the ones of Edward all to herself.  As far as a sequel is I am not sure what more you could do with this story.  I would be ALL IN if you do another DOM/Sub story with them though.  That would be amazing.



Author's Response:

Hey there,

thank you so much for your honest comments and your review. This won't be the last story that I write - I have the bug!  It is a ways off still, so I will tinker around and see what I come up with.

Thanks again.

Michele - outtake up this week - keep an eye open for it.